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~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ -
3rd September 2006, 11:25 AM
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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3rd September 2006, 11:34 AM
hello dost kaise ho aap?
aapne jo likha hai uske bare me main aapsse kya kahu bas itna hi kahuga k dost dil me bas gaya aapka likha hua
bahot hi badhiya lkikha hai aapne
aur khas kar ke ye line mujhe bahot hi pasand aayi
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
aapka dost dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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3rd September 2006, 01:58 PM
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
waaaah manu ji,bahut khoob.bahut acha likha aapne,yeh do ashaar to behad pasand aaye.likhte rahiye yunhin.
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
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3rd September 2006, 04:41 PM
waah waah
bahut khoob likha hai
keep it up
aap ka dost
anuj
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hi -
4th September 2006, 12:02 AM
dhaval thanx yaar 4 coming
tame aavya mane bahu saaru laagyu
keep coming dear
basically credit of this poetry goes to my two frieinds "Mayank" and "Parul"whose name i have forgotten to mention, they suggested and inspire me to write something simple and short and i accepted their suggetion
,and created this ghazal after long thinking
i m happy that u like d same
keep coming dear
regards
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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ -
4th September 2006, 09:02 AM
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Originally posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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very nice manu ji
aapka likha ek ek word dil ko choo lene wala hai
bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne
keep writing
dil se daad kabool karo
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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hi -
4th September 2006, 10:58 AM
akelijaan ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaa,jo aap ne mujhe samay nikaal kar padhaa aur pasand kiyaa
aise hi aate rahiyega
regards
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4th September 2006, 11:10 AM
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
wah janab manu ji kaya aagaaz hai bhut pyara....
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
bhut khub alfaaz nahi hai mere paas......
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
yeh dono share to dil main bass gaye.....
manu ji appki har rachna bhut umda hoti hai or mujhe appki ki post ka bari besabri se intzaar rehta hai appko parhkar dil ko sakoon milta hai.....yu hee aate rahitye or apna khyaal rakhiye......raj......
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ -
4th September 2006, 01:00 PM
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Originally posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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[color=royal blue]Manu,
kam LafzoN meiN liKhane kee koShiSh hai, Jis meiN tumHaari mehnat bhee nazar aa rahi hai.. dhire dhire likhte rahoge to GhaltiyaaN bhee kam hone lagegii.. raadiif meiN aib hai...
Aaap ne raadiif istemaal kiya hai "raKhate hai" ab yeh batao kee 'Rakhate' ke baad 'Hai' kaise istemaal hoga.. "rakhate haiN" hota hai.. usi tarah jaise ham kahte haiN "aap haiN" aise to nahee kahte na kee 'aap hai" Ok? aur Rakhate haiN, ess raadif ko nibhaana itna aasaan nahee haiN.. Phir bhee koShish kee hai yeH bohat baRi baat hai.. mere taraf se daad-mubaarak baad qubool karo.. .
liKhate raho..
-Mayank[/color]
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5th September 2006, 04:02 AM
manu,
bahot khoob. ab yeh shayri kuch samjh me aati hai. achha laga tumhe parh ke aur iss se bhi achha likhna. meri daad kubul karna, aur shubh-kaamna tumhare saath hi hai. take care!
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6th September 2006, 01:14 AM
Manu,
Bahut khubsurat ghazal likhi hain aapne.....Beher ko chota rakhne ki koshish rang laayi hainn..
My fav sher
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Keep posting.
Bye.
marane kii duaaye.n kyuu.N maa.Nguu.N jiine kii tamaannaa kaun kare
ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare
jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare
jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii
ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare
duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko
duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare
-Moen Ahsan Jazbi
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Re: ~*~ Ehsaas ~*~ -
6th September 2006, 10:09 AM
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Originally posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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manu ji namaskar
bahut accha lagga appko padkar, har share dil dil ko chu gaya.
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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hi -
6th September 2006, 05:54 PM
anu tumara bahut bahut shukriyaaH
aise hi ate rahna
manu
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7th September 2006, 02:05 PM
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very nice manu ji
aapka likha ek ek word dil ko choo lene wala hai
bahut hi pyara likha hai aapne
keep writing
dil se daad kabool karo
dilip
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Dilip ji aap jaise dost hai tab tak likhane ka hossala miltaa rahegaa,aap ko mera likha hua pasand aya ye jan kar behad hi khushi hui, i m thankful 2 u for words of appreciation,yunhi aate rahoge dost yahi ummid hai tumse
take care
aap ka dost manu
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7th September 2006, 02:10 PM
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Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
wah janab manu ji kaya aagaaz hai bhut pyara....
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
bhut khub alfaaz nahi hai mere paas......
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
yeh dono share to dil main bass gaye.....
manu ji appki har rachna bhut umda hoti hai or mujhe appki ki post ka bari besabri se intzaar rehta hai appko parhkar dil ko sakoon milta hai.....yu hee aate rahitye or apna khyaal rakhiye......raj......
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raaj ji ye to aap ka badappan hai jo ap mere jaise adnaa shayar ko padhana pasand karate hai,agar mujhe padh kar ap ko shukoon miltaa hai to ye mere liye khushi ki baat hogi ,chalo kisi ke kuchh to kaam aaya mai,
jald hi aap ke intzaar khatma hoga
take care
regards
manu
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7th September 2006, 02:18 PM
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[color=royal blue]Manu,
kam LafzoN meiN liKhane kee koShiSh hai, Jis meiN tumHaari mehnat bhee nazar aa rahi hai.. dhire dhire likhte rahoge to GhaltiyaaN bhee kam hone lagegii.. raadiif meiN aib hai...
Aaap ne raadiif istemaal kiya hai "raKhate hai" ab yeh batao kee 'Rakhate' ke baad 'Hai' kaise istemaal hoga.. "rakhate haiN" hota hai.. usi tarah jaise ham kahte haiN "aap haiN" aise to nahee kahte na kee 'aap hai" Ok? aur Rakhate haiN, ess raadif ko nibhaana itna aasaan nahee haiN.. Phir bhee koShish kee hai yeH bohat baRi baat hai.. mere taraf se daad-mubaarak baad qubool karo.. .
liKhate raho..
-Mayank[/color]
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dear Mayank janaab aap ko kafii dino baad meri post par dekh kar fakr hotaa hai aur khushi bhi, sab aap ka hi shikhaya hai janaab, aap ne is mai jo sujhaav diya hai us par bhi mai gaur karoonga,vaise yaha kuchh comment karnaa aap ki shaaN mai gustaakhi hogi behtar hai online miley tab guftagoo kare, ummid hai aap aise hi shikhaate rahoge ham jaise dostoN ko.
koi bhool hui ho to maaufii chahta hoon
apna khayaal rakhiyega
aur ho sake to is naachiz ki post par aate rahiyega
aap ka behad shukriyaa ada kartaa hoo
regards
manu
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7th September 2006, 02:26 PM
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manu,
bahot khoob. ab yeh shayri kuch samjh me aati hai. achha laga tumhe parh ke aur iss se bhi achha likhna. meri daad kubul karna, aur shubh-kaamna tumhare saath hi hai. take care!
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dear parul ,what to say i have written this becos of u as u suggested to write something that people can easily understand and grasp, ur suggetion lift me up.
and thanx a lot for ur best wishes that is always with me that i know very well. becos i know a true friend is always besides me,with me.
take care
manu
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8th September 2006, 01:54 PM
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Hello Manu
Achii lage tumhare yeh rachna...waise ek baat kahun the red font colour that u use in most of the poetries...I don't like that red font...please don't mind just a suggestion...this poetry had a font colour other than red...that's good...now coming to the poetry....the first sher is the best....aur ek baat aur kahungi...jab hum jyada sochtey hain koi bhi poetry likhney ke liye that whether it is fine or not we don't give our 100%..iss liye let the thoughts fly with words....and I am sure u will give ur 100% next time...
Take care
Di
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12th September 2006, 04:05 PM
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Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Hello Manu
Achii lage tumhare yeh rachna...waise ek baat kahun the red font colour that u use in most of the poetries...I don't like that red font...please don't mind just a suggestion...this poetry had a font colour other than red...that's good...now coming to the poetry....the first sher is the best....aur ek baat aur kahungi...jab hum jyada sochtey hain koi bhi poetry likhney ke liye that whether it is fine or not we don't give our 100%..iss liye let the thoughts fly with words....and I am sure u will give ur 100% next time...
Take care
Di
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Respected suknyaa ji
aap meri post par aayi ise padha aur psand kiya aur apane sujhaav diya us ke lie mai aap ka aabhaari hu,
mai aap ki suggetion ki kdra kartaa hu,aur mujhe bhi red color jyada pasan nahi hai,par aise hi likh deta hu kuchh sujhta nahi to
par ab se dhyaan rakhunga
manu
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hi -
15th September 2006, 12:16 AM
hi akeli jaan ji aap ka bahut bahut shukriya mujhe padhane ke liye aur pasand karne ke liye ,yunhi aati rahiyega
regards
manu
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16th September 2006, 05:12 PM
deepu thanx 4 being wid me yaar
keep coming
regards
manu
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18th September 2006, 03:41 PM
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Originally posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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namaste maanu jii.... kese hain aap.....kaafi waqt baad aapko reply kar rahi hun,,, humesha ki tarah is baar bhi bahut accha likha hai aapne.....
"Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai"
ye lines bahut pyari lagi.....
aese hi likhte rahiyega........
bye n take care.............
Is se pehle ki dilo me nafrat jaage,
aao ek shaam mohabbat me bita di jaaye....
Karke kuch 'ISHQ' ki baatein,
Is shaam ki masti badha di jaye.......!!!!
ISHQ..
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18th September 2006, 08:44 PM
wah! bahgut khoob! Manu
bahut pasand aaya mujhe tumhara ye kalaam...
daad qabool karna
Aaina mujhse meri pehli si surat maange
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hi -
26th September 2006, 12:35 PM
thanx ishikaa ji kaisi hai aap
itne din baad aayi aur aap ne yaad rakh kar mujhe padhaa ye mere liye bahut hi khushi ki baat hai, yunhi aati rahiyega,apna khayaal rakhiyega, shukriyaa aap ka
regards
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26th September 2006, 02:12 PM
hi manu
kafi din bad apko padhne ka moka mila
apki puri ghazal bahut hi shandar aur dil ko lubha lene wali he
iska her ek sher apne apmain mukammal he
bahut khoooooooooooooob
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
wonderful
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
i mean really AMAIZING,ZABARDAST
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
bravoo i will try too
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
manu bahut khoobsurat peshkash he apki padh kar man khush ho gaya thanx for wondrful creation
keep writing
take care
bye
Mangi thi mene tumse mohbbat ki zindagi
Zindagi ko tumne mohbbat bana diya
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30th September 2006, 01:25 AM
wafaa kaisi hai aap?
aap ko itne din baad meri post par dekh kar achha laga,
shukriyaa aap ka
yunhi saath dete rahoge yahi ummid hai
manu
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2nd October 2006, 09:18 AM
hi rubi how are u?
u come after a long time and u still remember me and read me also praise me dats so sweet of u, i m really very much thankful to u for ur words of praise and appreciation ,
abhi mere exams hai to jyaada a nahi paata
bas apna khayaal rakhna
take care
manu
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3rd October 2006, 05:07 AM
"Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai"
bahut hi badhiya likha hai aapne.
best regards
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Bahut achcha likhte ho..ur frnd Aman khan
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"Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai"
bahut hi badhiya likha hai aapne.
best regards
aarya
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aarya jee aap ka bahut bahut shukriyaa ghazal ko padhane ke liye aur pasand karne ke liye
regards
manu
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28th December 2007, 01:30 AM
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Originally Posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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wah manu mere dost bahut hi achha ehsaas likha hai mujhe bahut hi pasand aaya bas aage bhi aise hi likhte rahena
aapka dost krenil
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29th December 2007, 10:05 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hain
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaqif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hain
wah wah manu ji bohat khoob uper wale ashaar bohat ache lage yunhi likhte rahiye khush rahiye
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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31st December 2007, 08:22 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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salaam Manu ji Aap ka to har kalaam dil ko chu leta hai yeh hi unhi mein se ek nagina hai jiska asar gehra raha mujhpe aur yeh padha to padhta hi raha bhai ese hi likhtey rahiye khush rahiye meri daad aapke kalaam ke liye
"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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24th January 2008, 09:38 AM
manu ji
its simply beautifulll.... aapne bahut hi aacha likha hai ....mujhe aapki yeh likhe hue har ek shayr behaat pasand aayee.. aur yu hi likhte rahayye....and take care
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30th January 2008, 11:13 AM
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Originally Posted by krenil
wah manu mere dost bahut hi achha ehsaas likha hai mujhe bahut hi pasand aaya bas aage bhi aise hi likhte rahena
aapka dost krenil
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krenil shukriyaah dost mujhe padhane ke liye aur itna ahcha sa reply karne ke liye,tum aaye achalaga mujhe.yunhee aate rehna dost,
regards
manu
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20th January 2010, 12:04 PM
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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10th December 2015, 01:26 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by acharya_mj
hello friends ,Try to write something short and simple,hope u all like it
" The credit of this ghazal goes to my 2 friends Parul and Mayank who inspire me to write some thing simple and short , thanks to both of them"
Door ho kar bhi tumhe paas rakhte hai
Tere hone ka jo ham Ehsaas rakhte hai
Bin tere yaaadoN mai jiya karte hai
Har shaam ham ab udaas rakhte hai
Tujhe ilm hi nahi meri mahobbat ka
Har chahere mai teri pyaas rakhte hai
Vo rakeeb hai mera yakin hai mujhko
Fir bhi dostoN mai use khaas rakhte hai
Waqt ki meharbaniyoN se hai waaquif
HaadsoN ko apne aaspass rakhte hai
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Waah bahut khoob ghazal huyi hai...acharya_mj ji..
Achha laga apko padhna..
Aage bhi aapke kalam ka intzaar rahega..
Aate raha kijiye...
Takecare.
Madhu.
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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