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hamein kya pataa tha - 31st December 2013, 09:36 AM

हमें क्या पता था कभी तुम मिलोगे
इसी राह-ए-ग़म पे कहीं तुम मिलोगे

नहीं थी जो बातें कभी तुमसे कहनी
पता था वो सुनने को फिर तुम मिलोगे

हमें आरज़ू जब नहीं एक नज़र की
महोब्बत की राह में तभी तुम मिलोगे

जहां मौत की राह देखा करेंगे
निजात-ए-ग़म देने वहीं तुम मिलोगे


English transliteration:
hamein kya pataa tha kabhee tum miloge
isee raah-e-gham pe kaheen tum miloge

nahin thee jo baaten kabhee tumse kehnee
pataa tha wo sunneko phir tum miloge

hamein aarzoo jab nahin ek nazar kee
mahobbat kee raah me tabhee tum miloge

jahaan maut kee raah dekha karenge
nijaat-e-gham dene waheen tum miloge


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31st December 2013, 10:31 AM

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Bahot Hi Umada Niccccccccccccccc Niccccccccccccc Likhte Rahiye..............
Shukriya Masoom ji..........................
Aapko Adil ka salaam.......



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Adil Sahab i don't wana discourage but personally don't liked it much it can be lot better, and ur same Qafiya in all.
though keep up the good work.

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Adil Sahab i don't wana discourage but personally don't liked it much it can be lot better, and ur same Qafiya in all.
though keep up the good work.
Vazir saab..........
Main aapka shukriya kahunga................
Ye discouragement nahi samajhta main, balke ye mere liye ek sikh rahengee agar aap iss tarah hamein tokenge......
I would like it if people would guide me to write better.

Aate rahiye aur hamein isee tarah guide karte rahiye.............

Adil ka salaam.



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..........., and ur same Qafiya in all.
though keep up the good work.
Vazeer saab,
Same kaafiya? Sorry, I missed this comment first time

"tum miloge" radeef hai janaab.
aur uske pehle kaafiye to badalte rahe hain?
Agar isme kuch khaamee hai to wo bhee farmaiyega.

Thanks once again.
Adil



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