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Ghazal: har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii...! -
19th November 2008, 01:54 AM
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
namaskaaR aur aadaab!!
baRe dinoN baad bazm meiN apnii taazaah Ghazal ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... waise liKhane ki koShiSh kii thee par dil aur ehsaas donoN ne saath nahiiN diyaa thaa... par aaj baiThaa thaa to donoN kaa saath mil gayaa.. aur kalam ko chalaa hi diyaa.. aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabhee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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19th November 2008, 09:43 AM
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Originally Posted by dhavalrami4you
Mere Pyaare dostoN:
namaskaaR aur aadaab!!
baRe dinoN baad bazm meiN apnii taazaah Ghazal ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... waise liKhane ki koShiSh kii thee par dil aur ehsaas donoN ne saath nahiiN diyaa thaa... par aaj baiThaa thaa to donoN kaa saath mil gayaa.. aur kalam ko chalaa hi diyaa.. aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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hmmmm...........chottu bahut derr baad tumhari shayri padne ko milli hai, bahat accha laga tumhare ahsaas padkar.
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
yeh sher padkar to mujhe bhi beete kal ki bahut sarri baateN yaad aa gaye.
par bhai aaj mein jeena chahiye.......hai na.
sabhi sher acche lage.....last wala sher dil ke khaas kareeb raha,
khoosurat gazal par daad aur reps. ++++
kush raho
Ashirwaad ke saath
tumhari sister
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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19th November 2008, 03:23 PM
dhaval saahib !
aapki taza ghazal khasa pasand aayi !
badi khoobsoorati se aapne apne juzbaat ko zubaan dee hai !
mujhe sabhi ashaar dil ke behad Qareeb lage !
DaaD Qabool farmaaeiN
likhte rahiye
apnaa khyaal rakhiye !
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19th November 2008, 10:04 PM
Aik lambe arse baad tumne kuch likha hai dhaval aur humesha ki tarah ahsasaat is baar bhi numayan hain magar aik baat kahoongi beete kal ko yaad mat kia karo meri dili dua hai Allah tumhain agay itni khushiyan dain ke her dukh bhool jao Ameen ab aate hain shayri ki taraf to dhaval ye ashaar dil ke qareeb lage ............
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
humesha khush raho likhte raho lekin ayenda dukhi nahi pehle ki tarah likhna
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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19th November 2008, 11:11 PM
dhaval...
bhaut khub likha...
sabhi ke andaer shayar hai bas rasta dikhana hai bahar ka....
kais e ho
apna khyaal rachna
sakhi
कुछ ऐसे पल जिनको संजोना है ,
शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे
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20th November 2008, 10:48 AM
namaste Dhaval!!
tumhaaraa huqm huaa so chalaa aayaa. tumharee koshish qaabil e taareef hai jisme tumhaaree mehnat saaf jhalaktee hai.
har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
mujhe rawaanee kuchh kamzor lag rahee hai. sher ko dheere dheere paRhte waqt kaheeN pe aTakanaa naheeN chaahiye. iskaa dhyaan rakho to behtar hai. ik soorat maiN likh kar rahaa huN, tum chaaho to aur soch sakte hoN.
har dil meN kalamkaar chhipaa hotaa hai,
dunyaa se milaa dard bharaa hotaa hai!
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
pehle misre meN sudhaar kee gunjaa'ish hai. jahaaN tak mumkin hoN radeef ko aagey ke sheroN meN pehle misre meN nah istemaal kiyaa karo. aik soorat yeh dekho.
kyaa kyaa nah jaane ish'q sitam kartaa hai!
aashiq kaa haal kitnaa buraa hotaa hai!
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
pehle misre meN "kehte haiN" likhne par doosre misre meN "tuu" kaa istemaal naheeN ho sakta. ise shuturgurb'ah kahte hai jo sher kaa aik nuks hai.
woh poochhtaa hai ham meN raabtaa kyaa hai,
maiN kahtaa huN tuu meraa khudaa hotaa hai!
raabtaa : relationship
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
yeh khayaal behad puraanaa hai aur koee khaas asar naheeN chhoRtaa. wazn se bhee khaarij hai. so chaaho to ise nikaal do.
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
yeh sher tum pe chhoRaa. thoRee aur mehnat kee zarurat hai so homework
mashq jaaree rakhnaa.
dheer
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20th November 2008, 04:59 PM
janab dhaval sahab ko aadab
bhaii badi pyari gazal likhii hai aur kafi dino baad bhii likhii hai
main technicaly to kuch nahi kah sakta per haan thodii sii rawangii ki kami lag rahi hai... banii ehsas to tumhaare hamesha hi jandar hote hain
merii to duaa hai hamesha ese hi likhte raha karo....
shukriya dost
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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22nd November 2008, 01:47 AM
Jai Shri krishna Dhaval Bhaiya
Bahut dino baad aapko Padha
bahut accha laga...humesha ki tarah aapko padhkar bahut hi aacha laga...Aishe hi likhte rahiya.....Daada Hajir Hai Kubul Kijiya
Aapki Choti Behan
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22nd November 2008, 01:44 PM
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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bahut khoob dhaval ji......bahut accha likha hai aapne.......keep writing.....
zainy
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24th November 2008, 10:03 AM
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hmmmm...........chottu bahut derr baad tumhari shayri padne ko milli hai, bahat accha laga tumhare ahsaas padkar.
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
yeh sher padkar to mujhe bhi beete kal ki bahut sarri baateN yaad aa gaye.
par bhai aaj mein jeena chahiye.......hai na.
sabhi sher acche lage.....last wala sher dil ke khaas kareeb raha,
khoosurat gazal par daad aur reps. ++++
kush raho
Ashirwaad ke saath
tumhari sister
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sister:
Pranaam!!
har koShiSh par aapkaa saath milaa haii mujhe.. isiliye aaj yahaaN tak pahuNchaa huuN maiN... aur kyaa kahuN bas haMeShaa YuuNhi saath dete rahiyeNgaa to aage bhee liKhane kii himmat juTaa paauNgaa....!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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24th November 2008, 10:18 AM
Dhaval ji. . . . . .
Mere liye shayad ye pehli baar hai jab main aapki ghazal padh rahi hoon. . .
Sach me.n jab ehsaas pighalte hain aur shabdo.n ka sahara lete hain to bar-bus dil keh utha-ta hai "kya baat hai!! "
yun hi likhte rahiye. . .
Take care
"Life laughs at you when you are unhappy...
Life smiles at you when you are happy..
But,
Life salutes you when you make others happy!!"
# Feel The Difference #
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24th November 2008, 09:21 PM
MaiN bas ek baat kahunga mere bhai dhaval
Saaf aur saada .. accha aur saccha .. yahi tumhara kalaam hai mere liye..
likhte raho
dua go
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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24th November 2008, 10:47 PM
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
namaskaaR aur aadaab!!
baRe dinoN baad bazm meiN apnii taazaah Ghazal ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... waise liKhane ki koShiSh kii thee par dil aur ehsaas donoN ne saath nahiiN diyaa thaa... par aaj baiThaa thaa to donoN kaa saath mil gayaa.. aur kalam ko chalaa hi diyaa.. aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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bahut khoob dhaval, behad umda ghaal likhi hai dost tumne.
mujhe khas kar ye do line behad pasand aayii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
aise hee likhate raho
aur khoob tarakki karo
regards
manu
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24th November 2008, 11:07 PM
har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
Dhaval ji
bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne ....
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
yeh linc hume jyada pasand aayi.........
...aise hi likhte rahiye ..aapko padhne ka mouka hume dete rahiye
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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26th November 2008, 12:16 AM
Waah dhaval saheb bahoot hi achhi peshkash hai janaaab aapki......der se aaye per achi ghazal laaye......meri janib se daad qubool kareiN.... Khuda tumeh apni parchhhaioN me rakhe.......
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28th November 2008, 02:37 PM
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dhaval saahib !
aapki taza ghazal khasa pasand aayi !
badi khoobsoorati se aapne apne juzbaat ko zubaan dee hai !
mujhe sabhi ashaar dil ke behad Qareeb lage !
DaaD Qabool farmaaeiN
likhte rahiye
apnaa khyaal rakhiye !
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Kshiriz bhaa'ii:
aadaab!!
Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liye maiN aapka be-Had mamnuun huuN... aapkaa saath milaa bahot hi KhuShii hu'ii... YuuNhi saath dete raheN aage bhee...! daad dil se qabUl haii....!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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28th November 2008, 03:10 PM
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
very nice...................
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
bahut khub...!
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
impressive..........
meri aur se is acchi si ghazal pe dhero daad!!!!yunhi mehfil sajate rahon..par jis kaam ke liye waha gaye ho use bhi yaad rakha karo.........warna main to huhi..tumhe yaad dilane ke liye.........
tumhari di...
mausam
Jaane kya samjha woh mujhe
Jaane kya samjhi main useN
Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se
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30th November 2008, 10:32 PM
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Aik lambe arse baad tumne kuch likha hai dhaval aur humesha ki tarah ahsasaat is baar bhi numayan hain magar aik baat kahoongi beete kal ko yaad mat kia karo meri dili dua hai Allah tumhain agay itni khushiyan dain ke her dukh bhool jao Ameen ab aate hain shayri ki taraf to dhaval ye ashaar dil ke qareeb lage ............
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
humesha khush raho likhte raho lekin ayenda dukhi nahi pehle ki tarah likhna
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Maanii didi:
aadaab!
didi aap sab kaa saath aur duaaeN hai jo maiN itanaa kuch liKh paataa huuN... baateN kal meiN jeenaa to kab kaa chhoR diyaa haii maiNe... pehle ki tarah liKhane ki koShiSh zaruur karuNgaa didi...!aap YuuNhi saath dete rahiyeNgaa... Ghazal ko pasaNd kiYaa baRii hi KhuShii hu'ii..!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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4th December 2008, 11:11 AM
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dhaval...
bhaut khub likha...
sabhi ke andaer shayar hai bas rasta dikhana hai bahar ka....
kais e ho
apna khyaal rachna
sakhi
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saKhi jee:
namaste!!
Ghazal ko pasaNd karne ke liYe bahot bahot ShuKriyaaH..!
maiN ek dam Theek huN... ummid kartaa huuN bahot jald baat hoNgee hamaaree...
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal rakheN
jSk
aapka
~ Dhaval
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4th December 2008, 11:18 AM
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namaste Dhaval!!
tumhaaraa huqm huaa so chalaa aayaa. tumharee koshish qaabil e taareef hai jisme tumhaaree mehnat saaf jhalaktee hai.
har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
mujhe rawaanee kuchh kamzor lag rahee hai. sher ko dheere dheere paRhte waqt kaheeN pe aTakanaa naheeN chaahiye. iskaa dhyaan rakho to behtar hai. ik soorat maiN likh kar rahaa huN, tum chaaho to aur soch sakte hoN.
har dil meN kalamkaar chhipaa hotaa hai,
dunyaa se milaa dard bharaa hotaa hai!
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
pehle misre meN sudhaar kee gunjaa'ish hai. jahaaN tak mumkin hoN radeef ko aagey ke sheroN meN pehle misre meN nah istemaal kiyaa karo. aik soorat yeh dekho.
kyaa kyaa nah jaane ish'q sitam kartaa hai!
aashiq kaa haal kitnaa buraa hotaa hai!
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
pehle misre meN "kehte haiN" likhne par doosre misre meN "tuu" kaa istemaal naheeN ho sakta. ise shuturgurb'ah kahte hai jo sher kaa aik nuks hai.
woh poochhtaa hai ham meN raabtaa kyaa hai,
maiN kahtaa huN tuu meraa khudaa hotaa hai!
raabtaa : relationship
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
yeh khayaal behad puraanaa hai aur koee khaas asar naheeN chhoRtaa. wazn se bhee khaarij hai. so chaaho to ise nikaal do.
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
yeh sher tum pe chhoRaa. thoRee aur mehnat kee zarurat hai so homework
mashq jaaree rakhnaa.
dheer
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Dheer bhaiya:
namaste!!
maiN aapkaa be-had mamnuun huuN kii aapne merii Ghazal ko apnaa qeemtee waQt diyaa aur ees par apnii raa'ey zaahir kii... merii GhaltiyoN ko samjhaane ke liYe bahot bahot SHuKriyaaH.., koShSh karuNgaa ki haMeShaa ki tarah aage bhee maiN apnii GhaltiyoN se seeKhataa rahuuN... YuuNhi saath dete raheN aage bhee..!! Ghazal ko pasaNd karne ke liYe ShuKraGuzaar huuN aapka..!
apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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15th December 2008, 06:16 PM
Carissimo Dhaval,
come stai....hahaha kuch samajh nahi aaya...dimmaag mat patko....
sadiiiiiiiyo baad aapki shaayri padhi...wah ji wah...kya andaaz-e-bayaan ha ji aapka....mast likha hai...chalo isi baat pe aapko daad detu hu...unhi likhte rahiye...or bas likhte hi rahiye....
Agle kalaam ke intazaar ke saath ijaazat!!
Grazie
Pooja
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17th December 2008, 10:00 PM
Bahut hi achhi ghazal likhi hai aapne Dhaval ji; Dheer ji ka raply padkar sirf aap hi ko nahi hum jaise talib-e-kalam ko bhi bahut madad pahunch hai.
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
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Aadaab !
kiase haiN dhaval bhai ??? app ka andaaz-e-bayaan beHad acha laga , ghazal bhi bahut achi rahi yeh do sher jazbaatoN se bhey huwe haiN ... naa jaane aise khayaal kahaN se laate ho app ... bahut khoob daad Haazir hai , Haan jaate huwe aik baat poochna chahta hoN , jo opper maiN ne neele rang maiN bhi zaahir kiyaa hai is lafZ ko maiN ne : chupaa : ki Soorat maiN perHaa hai , yeh bhi ho sakta hai shayad mujhse peRhne maiN koi ghlti ho gai ho ager app bura na maanieN to kiyaa app is baat ki taSdeeQ ker sakte haiN app aur mere donoN ke elm maiN izaafa bhi ho jaaey ga
gustaakhi ke liye maazrat chahta hoN
ijaazat
reps +++
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namaste Dhaval!!
tumhaaraa huqm huaa so chalaa aayaa. tumharee koshish qaabil e taareef hai jisme tumhaaree mehnat saaf jhalaktee hai.
har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
mujhe rawaanee kuchh kamzor lag rahee hai. sher ko dheere dheere paRhte waqt kaheeN pe aTakanaa naheeN chaahiye. iskaa dhyaan rakho to behtar hai. ik soorat maiN likh kar rahaa huN, tum chaaho to aur soch sakte hoN.
har dil meN kalamkaar chhipaa hotaa hai,
dunyaa se milaa dard bharaa hotaa hai!
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Namaste Dheer bhai ...
janab seekhne seekhane ka marHala chal raha hai to maiN ne soocha kiyoN na maiN bhi bhaag lay looN , ager buraa na maanieN to sirf aik baat poochni thi ...
dheer bhai sawal yeh poochna tha keh , aik shaks maiN shayar chupaa hota hai aisa dhaval bhai ne kaha ,
aisa ager micaal dii jaaey keh her insaan ke ander aik fankaar (actor) chupa hota hai aik kalaa chupi hoti hai bus zaroorat hoti hai use ujaagar kerne ki ...
jis TaraH acting kerna aik kalaa hai Theek usi TaraH shayri bhi kalaa hai ... mager fankaar aur shayar donoN hi apna wajood rakhte haiN ... yeh baat mujhe smajh aa gai mager poochna yeh tha keh app ne farmaaya keh
har dil meN kalamkaar chhipaa hotaa hai,
dunyaa se milaa dard bharaa hotaa hai!
ab sawal yeh uThta hai keh dil maiN to bhawnaaieN ho sakti haiN piyaar ho sakta hai dhaRkanieN ho sakti haiN jazbaat ho sakte haiN waghera waghera ... Jin sabka koi wajood nahi hota use dil maiN to chupaaya jaa sakta hai mager shayar ka to wajood hai use dil maiN kaise chupaaya jaa sakta hai ???
gustaakhii ke liye mazraat chahta hoN
ijaazat dijiye
jawab ka intezaar rahe ga
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Namaste Dheer bhai ...
janab seekhne seekhane ka marHala chal raha hai to maiN ne soocha kiyoN na maiN bhi bhaag lay looN , ager buraa na maanieN to sirf aik baat poochni thi ...
dheer bhai sawal yeh poochna tha keh , aik shaks maiN shayar chupaa hota hai aisa dhaval bhai ne kaha ,
aisa ager micaal dii jaaey keh her insaan ke ander aik fankaar (actor) chupa hota hai aik kalaa chupi hoti hai bus zaroorat hoti hai use ujaagar kerne ki ...
jis TaraH acting kerna aik kalaa hai Theek usi TaraH shayri bhi kalaa hai ... mager fankaar aur shayar donoN hi apna wajood rakhte haiN ... yeh baat mujhe smajh aa gai mager poochna yeh tha keh app ne farmaaya keh
har dil meN kalamkaar chhipaa hotaa hai,
dunyaa se milaa dard bharaa hotaa hai!
ab sawal yeh uThta hai keh dil maiN to bhawnaaieN ho sakti haiN piyaar ho sakta hai dhaRkanieN ho sakti haiN jazbaat ho sakte haiN waghera waghera ... Jin sabka koi wajood nahi hota use dil maiN to chupaaya jaa sakta hai mager shayar ka to wajood hai use dil maiN kaise chupaaya jaa sakta hai ???
gustaakhii ke liye mazraat chahta hoN
ijaazat dijiye
jawab ka intezaar rahe ga
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aadaab arz Mujeeb saHeb!!
ittefaakan hee nazar paRee so chalaa aayaa. aik guzaarish hai keh agar koee post kuchh puraanee ho jaaye aur us se juRaa koee sawaal aapke zeh'n meN hoN to post pe likhne ke saath saath PM bhee kar diyaa kare. shukriyaa!!
aapke sawaal kaa jawaab seedhaa saa hai. shaa'iree meN baat ishaaro se kee jaatee hai. dil meN kalamkaar kaa chhipaa honaa yaane keh aadamee kaa ahsaas kee daulat se bharpoor honaa. jahaaN tak wajood kee baat hai to is tarah kee misaale aam hai jaise keh,
dil meN mehboob basaa honaa---
dil meN khudaa kaa honaa--
dil meN shaitaan honaa---
dil meN insaan honaa-----
wagehraa wagehraa.... mere khayaal se baat aik dum saf ho gayee hai. so shaa'iree aur aam bolchaal meN is tarah se ishaaro meN baat kahee jaa saktee hai.
apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa.
dua go
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29th December 2008, 04:50 AM
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
Kya baat hai janaab
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30th December 2008, 05:35 PM
Bahut pasand aaya aapka likha hua Dhaval Ji.
Yhunhi hi likhtey rahiyega.
aabhaar
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janab dhaval sahab ko aadab
bhaii badi pyari gazal likhii hai aur kafi dino baad bhii likhii hai
main technicaly to kuch nahi kah sakta per haan thodii sii rawangii ki kami lag rahi hai... banii ehsas to tumhaare hamesha hi jandar hote hain
merii to duaa hai hamesha ese hi likhte raha karo....
shukriya dost
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Dilip bhaa'ii:
namaste!!
kaise hoN aap? KhuShii hotee hai ab aap hum dostoN ke liye waQt DhooNDh lete haiN..
Ghazal kii pasaNdagee ke liye maiN aapka be-had ShuKraGuzaar huuN.. rawaanagee kam lagne ke liye aapse mwaafii bhee maaNgtaa huuN ,,, koShiSh karuuNgaa kii aage se aapko Shikaayat kaa mauqaa na duuN.. aage aur bhee mehnat karuuNgaa..! bas aap YuNhi saath dete rahiYeNgaa haMeShaa ki tarah!!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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5th February 2009, 10:27 PM
hmm tusi chaa rahe ho janab..well done bahut acchi lagi yeh gazal..keep riting..
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
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9th February 2009, 09:46 PM
saare ashaars khoobsoorat hain......
keep writing..............!
Mera daman jalega tau jalogai tum bhi yeh samajhte ho,phir aag lagate kyu ho
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Jai Shri krishna Dhaval Bhaiya
Bahut dino baad aapko Padha
bahut accha laga...humesha ki tarah aapko padhkar bahut hi aacha laga...Aishe hi likhte rahiya.....Daada Hajir Hai Kubul Kijiya
Aapki Choti Behan
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chhoTi behnaa:
jSk!
KhuShii hu'ii tumhe yahaaN deKh kar.. merii koShiSh pasaNd aayiiN jaan.K bahot achchhaa lagaa! YuuNhi saath detee rehanaa.. bazm meiN YuuNhi aatee raho jab bhee waQt mile tou!
KhuSh raho.. apnaa Khayaal raKhanaa
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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bahut khoob dhaval ji......bahut accha likha hai aapne.......keep writing.....
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zainy jee:
namaste!
maiN aapka be-Had mamnuun huuN... yuuNhi paRhte raheN aage bhee!
KhuSh raheN,,, apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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20th June 2009, 12:18 AM
bahut khub DHAVAL ji aap ki is gazal ne mere dil ko chu liya he aap aishe hi likha te rahiye jsk
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
namaskaaR aur aadaab!!
baRe dinoN baad bazm meiN apnii taazaah Ghazal ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... waise liKhane ki koShiSh kii thee par dil aur ehsaas donoN ne saath nahiiN diyaa thaa... par aaj baiThaa thaa to donoN kaa saath mil gayaa.. aur kalam ko chalaa hi diyaa.. aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
Dhaval ji,,
aakhri sher to dil mein utar gaya..meri daad kabool kijiye.
Thanks & Regards
Aapka
Tanha _dil
Duniya mein dard-e-dil ki dawa hoti to pee gaye hote
Zindagi itni aasaan hoti .....to jee gaye hote.
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Dhaval ji. . . . . .
Mere liye shayad ye pehli baar hai jab main aapki ghazal padh rahi hoon. . .
Sach me.n jab ehsaas pighalte hain aur shabdo.n ka sahara lete hain to bar-bus dil keh utha-ta hai "kya baat hai!! "
yun hi likhte rahiye. . .
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Ritu jee:
namaskaar!
aapne merii koShiSh ko apnaa qeemtee waQt diyaa.. baRii hi KhuShii hu'ii.. Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h! saath dete rahiYeNgaa aage bhee!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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24th October 2009, 08:34 AM
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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Dhaval Ji...Namashkaar !...Arse baad aaj Meri nazar...aapki is Ghazal par padhi....toh bas padhta hi chala gaya....matle se maqte tak....har sher mujhe khaas laga...bahut khub likha hai aapne....sabhi sher taarif ke kaabil bane hai....
Itna khoobsurat likhne ke liye...
dil se daad....kabul kijiye....
khush rahiye...
apna khayal rakhiyega...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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29th October 2009, 08:35 AM
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MaiN bas ek baat kahunga mere bhai dhaval
Saaf aur saada .. accha aur saccha .. yahi tumhara kalaam hai mere liye..
likhte raho
dua go
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Kunaal bhaa'ii:
namaste!
kaise hai.n aap? koShiSh ko pasaNd karne ke liye maiN aaplka be-Had ShuKraGuzaar huuN...ummid yahee hai kii aage bhee aap paRhte raheNge! ShuKriyaa'h!
Khush rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
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Mere Pyaare dostoN:
namaskaaR aur aadaab!!
baRe dinoN baad bazm meiN apnii taazaah Ghazal ke saath haaZir ho rahaa huuN... waise liKhane ki koShiSh kii thee par dil aur ehsaas donoN ne saath nahiiN diyaa thaa... par aaj baiThaa thaa to donoN kaa saath mil gayaa.. aur kalam ko chalaa hi diyaa.. aapki qeemtee raa'ey aur sujhaavo kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa... mulaa'iizaa famaayeN...!
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
bahr: darya ,samaNdar
kyaa kyaa naa jaane iShq meiN hotaa haii
haal aaShiqoN ka bahot buraa hotaa haii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
jab yaad "Dhaval" ko aati beeteN kal kii
kabhi iShq ,kabee Khud se Khafaa hotaa haii
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bhai dhaval ji ko aadaab
bhout hi umda aur dil khush gazal likhi hai aapnay bhout hi pyaray ehsaas hai aapkay dil say dadd daita hoon kabool kijyega...
aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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bahut khoob dhaval, behad umda ghaal likhi hai dost tumne.
mujhe khas kar ye do line behad pasand aayii
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
maulaa mere !! yeh iShq bhee kyaa Khuub haii
haNs ke ko_ii kaisey fanaa hotaa hai
aise hee likhate raho
aur khoob tarakki karo
regards
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Manu bhaa'ii:
Kem chho?
aap yahaaN aaye.n bahot hi KhuShii huii .. aage bhee saath dete rahiye..!
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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har Shaks meiN ik Shaayar chhipaa hotaa haii
jazbaat-e-bahr dil meiN dabaa hotaa haii
Dhaval ji
bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne ....
wo kehte haiiN hum kyaa hai tuMhaare
maiNe kahaa ki tu mi'raa Khudaa hotaa hai
yeh linc hume jyada pasand aayi.........
...aise hi likhte rahiye ..aapko padhne ka mouka hume dete rahiye
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Diya jee:
namaste!
Ghazal ko pasand karne ke liye bahot bahot ShuKriyaa'h.. aage bhee saath dete rahe.n!
KhuSh rahe.n... apnaa Khayaal raKhe.n
duaao.n ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
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