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khwahishoN ke fansale
KhwahishoN ke faansale bhi ajeeb hote haiN,
Puri ho hasrateiN jinki khushnaseeb hote haiN ChahtoN ke sang jab bhi shareek hote haiN , Dil ke dharkon ke vo bilkul kareeb hote haiN Chahne wale hi tau sab ke habeeb hote haiN, Door kitne bhi rahein Dil ke kareeb hote haiN Lut gaya pyar jinka vo badnaseeb hote haiN , Zamane ke shah bhi dil ke faqeer hote haiN. Waqt pe jo sath nibhaye kitne azeez hote haiN, Wada kar ke mukar jayeiN raqueeb hote haiN. Tere saath jo guzre vo lamhe haseen hote haiN, Bin tere zinagee ke mayne betaseer hote haiN |
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waaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh kyaa baat hai Sanjay saahab....... ummdah adaakaarii ka namunaa peesh kiyaa hai aapne..... bahot anchue se lage aapke ye ehsaaas, bilkul oven fresh.......... :) bahot si Daad aur mubaarakbaad aapko.... likhte rahiyegaa last aur third last sher me qaafiyaa sudhaaar len....... Shaad.... |
Kya baat hai jenaab.
Behadd khoobsurat peshkash. Likhte raheiN |
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kamaal ki rahi aapki se khubsoorat peshkash. simply loved it..........:) isi tarah likhte rahiye... |
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do.asharoN meiN , mujhe galti maalum thi likte hue , per kya karun koi theek shabs soojha nahiN ..Aap ka tahe dil se mashkoor hoon ki aap itni bareeki se her ashar ko perte haiM aur errors point karte haiN. Regds Sanjay Sehgal |
Sanjay ji
Namaste Shaad ji ka sujhav pada maine. Halanki bohut kam janti hun main aap sab ke muqabley. Magar khud bhi seekne ki chah mein ek sujhaav dene ki jurrat kar rahi hun. Kyun na 4 sher mein aap fakeer aur badnaseeb ko inter change kar dekhein? Aur last wale mein 'ajeeb' ja sakta hai kya? Koi gustakhi ho gayi ho to choti behn samajh kar maaf kar dena. |
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Bhai Choti behn ne sujhav diya hai tau gaur karna parega:) Last line mein tau ajeeb chal jayega , Per sher no 4 mein adla badli faqeer aur badnaseev se qafiya tau durust ho jayega , per sher ke sahi mayne convey nahin ho payeinge.... Regds Sanjay Sehgal |
wahhh boahat khoob aik aik sher bht acha likha hai
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Waaah....
Bahut khoob sanjay jee.bahut gahare ehsaas liye huye ye kalaam bahut pasand aaya hamein... |
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Sannjay saahab... aadaab.... aapka khat padhaa aur sarikhaa ji ka khat bhii padhaa....
bahot khushi huiii ye dekh kar ke bazm me aap log jaise saada dil insaan bhii hain jo seekhne sikhaane ki chaha rakhte hain....... jee haan aapne ssahii kaha ke main bahot bareekii se padhtaa hoon, har kavitaa ko har koshihs ko magar point out sirf unhe hi karta hoon jo seekhne ki chaah rakhte hon, jinke uupar mujhe bharosa hai ke wo merii baaton ko anyathaa na lete hue.. un bareeki aur choti choti mmistakes ko door karen, jiski wajah se nishaandehii paidaa ho.... Ghazal likhne me kai shaayr mahiino tak ka waqt lete they, isliye ke koi nuqtaa baraabar ki galtiii ki gunjaaish paiaa na ho.... halaki ham sab bahot jaldi me likhaa karte hain, lekin koshish ye karna chahiye ke baareeekiyon ko door kar ekdam perfect kalaam jab taiyaar ho jaae shaayr ki nazar me, to pesh kar de........ Sarika ji ka bhi main behad shukrguzaar hoon jo aapne apne sujhaav diye jo kaafii had tak durust hain qaafiya ke lihaaz se, magar shaayar ko aazaadii hai ke wo inhe kaise istemal karta hai...... ya nahii bhii..... koi baat nagawaara guzaree ho to muaazrat chahungaa.... aapka chota bhai Shaad..... |
Sameer bhai ..pehle tau aap ka shukriya jo.aap humei guide karte haiN.
Mujhe yaqeenan bahut khushi hoti hai is baat se ki aap apna keemti samay nikal ke humhe samjhate haiN .. Aap ka sujhav ki ghazal pesh karne se pehle use khoob ghis lo , refine karo, galtiyan check.karo aur tab post.karo , main is cheez ka bilkul khayal rakhunga. Thanks once again . Sanjay Sehgal |
sanjay jee ehsaas bahut acche lage muje....par sshoiab jee ka kehna sahi hai....
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WAH HAMDAM SAHAB AAP KA TO JAWAB NAHI,, WAHhhhhhhhhhhh
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YuN hi haunsala badate raheiN . Sanjay Sehgal |
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Kya likhte hain aap Sehgal Sahab....waaaaah...aaj bohot dino baad aana hua SDC par aur aap ke es kalam ne dil khush kar diya....
Bohot bohot mubarak aur dheroon daad Aapka apna Bhushan |
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Shukriya .. Main kuch dino se aapko yaad ker raha tha ki aaj kal Bhushan nazar nahiN aa raha aur Jagdish ji(Sagar Asthana) bhi kum dikhte hain yahan.. Bhai aap jaise naujwan kuch chehalkadmiN karte rahenge tau mehfil meiN raunak berkaraar rahegi. Sanjay Sehgal |
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