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Kavita Negi 27th August 2010 12:04 PM

Kahi Kuch Kami Hai Tere Bager :(
 
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

ISHK EK IBADAT 27th August 2010 12:25 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kavita Negi (Post 407547)
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

kavita jee
radhe radhe'

bahut khoob.......sundar ehsaason ke liye dil se daad
likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath

zidd 27th August 2010 12:29 PM

pahle apko pada hi hoga magar shayad itna kabhi mutaasir nahi hua hu mai jo aaj hua...

is baar magar aapne kamaal kar diya...
aisa laga jaise shayri apne zabaan se kuch bol rahi ho.........
aapne metaphors bahut acche istemaal kiye hai

on the whole ek bahut hi acchi koshish....
format bhi apka kabile taareef hai is baar

is kalaam ke liye dher saari daad haazir hai

regards

shayari 27th August 2010 01:26 PM

kavita ji bhot sunder peshkesh hai.N aapki

pawan(shayari)

Kavita Negi 27th August 2010 02:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ISHK EK IBADAT (Post 407550)
kavita jee
radhe radhe'

bahut khoob.......sundar ehsaason ke liye dil se daad
likhti rahiye
duaon ke saath


Aapka bahut bahut dhanyawaad ishq ji

sajid_ghayel 27th August 2010 03:02 PM

Khoobsurat peshkash Kavita jee.....

shipra 27th August 2010 05:09 PM

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi

Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

good one kavita ji..
keep writin..

take care..

Kavita Negi 27th August 2010 05:46 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by zidd (Post 407552)
pahle apko pada hi hoga magar shayad itna kabhi mutaasir nahi hua hu mai jo aaj hua...

is baar magar aapne kamaal kar diya...
aisa laga jaise shayri apne zabaan se kuch bol rahi ho.........
aapne metaphors bahut acche istemaal kiye hai

on the whole ek bahut hi acchi koshish....
format bhi apka kabile taareef hai is baar

is kalaam ke liye dher saari daad haazir hai

regards


Shukriya Zidd Ji,,

Aapko yahan dekh kar bahut khushi hui....!!! Dil se shukriya....:)

vikramjethi 27th August 2010 11:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kavita Negi (Post 407547)
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

kavita ji,

bahut sundar likha hai aapne...ehsaas behad achhe lage mujhe...
aapke is qalaam pe daad haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...:)

naresh_mehra110 28th August 2010 06:56 AM

Kavita Ji ... Ab tak ki sab se umdaa peshkash lagi mujhe ... bahut hi khoobsurati se aapne ehsaasoN ko prastut kiya hai...dil ko chhuune me kaamiyaab rahi ... aapki rachna .... bahut khoob .... Very Impressive Indeed... ! SuperB Creation...dil se daad hazir hai... yunhi likhi rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...

reps++++

duaaon ke saath....

Kavita Negi 28th August 2010 11:56 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by shayari (Post 407568)
kavita ji bhot sunder peshkesh hai.N aapki

pawan(shayari)

Aapko teh dil se shukriya Pawan ji.... :)

noor_noor 28th August 2010 05:47 PM

bhut khoob likha hai aapne ek acha andaaz e bayaaN jo ki muta'assir karta hai yuN hi likhti rahiye daad hazir hai qubool keejiye


aslam

Kavita Negi 30th August 2010 01:00 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sajid_ghayel (Post 407579)
Khoobsurat peshkash Kavita jee.....



Dhanyawad Sajid ji................. :)

Kavita Negi 30th August 2010 01:01 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by shipra (Post 407601)
Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

good one kavita ji..
keep writin..

take care..


Thanx a lot Shipra ji............... :)

Kavita Negi 30th August 2010 01:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by vikramjethi (Post 407637)
kavita ji,

bahut sundar likha hai aapne...ehsaas behad achhe lage mujhe...
aapke is qalaam pe daad haazir hai, qubuul kijiyega...:)


Shukriya Vikram ji,
Daad dil se qubool hai Vikram ji,, Teh dil se shukriya......:)

Kavita Negi 30th August 2010 01:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110 (Post 407663)
Kavita Ji ... Ab tak ki sab se umdaa peshkash lagi mujhe ... bahut hi khoobsurati se aapne ehsaasoN ko prastut kiya hai...dil ko chhuune me kaamiyaab rahi ... aapki rachna .... bahut khoob .... Very Impressive Indeed... ! SuperB Creation...dil se daad hazir hai... yunhi likhi rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen...

reps++++

duaaon ke saath....

Namaskaar Naresh Ji,

Baht bahot dhanyawad meri koshish ko pasand karne ke liye....Teh dil se dhanyawaad ji....:)

Kavita Negi 31st August 2010 10:29 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by noor_noor (Post 407692)
bhut khoob likha hai aapne ek acha andaaz e bayaaN jo ki muta'assir karta hai yuN hi likhti rahiye daad hazir hai qubool keejiye


aslam

Aslam ji
Bahut bahut shukriya.. aapki daad dil se qubool hai Aslam ji.......... :)

Amanush... 2nd September 2010 12:03 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kavita Negi (Post 407547)
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

A very nice creation indeed...! My compliments, Kavita Ji...!

Reminds me of a song by late Rafi Ji :

Kaise kategi zindagi tere bagair tere bagair
PaaouNga har shay kami tere bagair tere bagair

Keep penning and take care, ok...?

:)

Kavita Negi 2nd September 2010 11:55 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mushkil (Post 408120)
A very nice creation indeed...! My compliments, Kavita Ji...!

Reminds me of a song by late Rafi Ji :

Kaise kategi zindagi tere bagair tere bagair
PaaouNga har shay kami tere bagair tere bagair

Keep penning and take care, ok...?

:)

Shukriya Mushkil ji........

aise hi sath dete rahiyega...... :)

Regards,

Kavita

secret admirer 3rd September 2010 08:23 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Kavita Negi (Post 407547)
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kavita....mere paas in shabd nahi hain kuch kahne ko shayad is liye kyun ki main bhi aaj kal kuch issi daur se guzar raha hoon....:(
Bahut accha likhti ho.......keep writing !!!

aapka.

Kavita Negi 3rd September 2010 03:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by secret admirer (Post 408330)
Kavita....mere paas in shabd nahi hain kuch kahne ko shayad is liye kyun ki main bhi aaj kal kuch issi daur se guzar raha hoon....:(
Bahut accha likhti ho.......keep writing !!!

aapka.

Shukriya Secret ji,

Ishwar na karen...Aise daur se koi gujre....!!! Aur shabdo ki jarurat nahi.. aap yaha aaye yahi bahut hai.....!!! Aise hi sath dete rahiyega....!!!


Regards

Kavita

heart_killer 3rd September 2010 03:23 PM

Kavitaa jii,

Bahut hii sundar ehsaas.. aur utana si sundar bayaan.. dil se daad qabool kare..

duwao ke sath..
Omi


Quote:

Originally Posted by Kavita Negi (Post 407547)
Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...
Na rang hai na roshni hai tere bager...

Maousam bhi karvat ab badal raha hai
Waqt apni raftaar se chal raha hai
Bas dhadkan meri thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Ho gye kathin ab mere liye raste
Ujaale hi ujaale hai duniya ke vaste
Low mere jivan ki thami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Milta nahi mujhse parwaana ab mera
Khushiyo ko bhi dikhta nahi thikaana ab mera
Mere hi ghar me gami hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...

Chu kar mujhe hawa bhi kehti kuch nahi
Sath mera mout bhi deti ab nahi
Jeene ki aas bhi nahi hai tere bager

Kahi kuch kami hai tere bager...


LAMHA 3rd September 2010 06:40 PM

Kavita ji,

bahut khoob .... ehsaas bahut sunder hai aur unki bayani kaafi asardaar... dil se daad hazir hai... yuhi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye...:):):)
rep+++++++++++++++ added :)

Kavita Negi 4th September 2010 11:01 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by heart_killer (Post 408384)
Kavitaa jii,

Bahut hii sundar ehsaas.. aur utana si sundar bayaan.. dil se daad qabool kare..

duwao ke sath..
Omi


shukriya Omi ji

Daad dil se qabool hai Omi JI,,,,,

parveen komal 4th September 2010 12:56 PM

dil me gahra suraakh kar gai aapki nazam . kiu.n likhte hai.n aap itna badhia +++raps:)

Harash Mahajan 4th September 2010 04:03 PM

Ek sunder kavish aapki negi ji....bahoot hi achha likhte haiN aap isi tarah aage bhi likhterahiyega...


Harash

Kavita Negi 9th September 2010 06:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by parveen komal (Post 408495)
dil me gahra suraakh kar gai aapki nazam . kiu.n likhte hai.n aap itna badhia +++raps:)

Shukriya Parveen ji,,,

Dil me gehra suraakh kr gai meri nazam :D bhot bhot shukriya :)

Kavita Negi 9th September 2010 06:10 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan (Post 408521)
Ek sunder kavish aapki negi ji....bahoot hi achha likhte haiN aap isi tarah aage bhi likhterahiyega...


Harash

Aapka teh dil se shukriya Harash Ji,
Aise hi sath dete rahiyega :)

aasefa_4u 9th September 2010 06:37 PM

Hey kavita mujhe ye apki koshish bht hi achi lagi.....apka har lafz aur har soch beshaq kabil e tareef hai....apka har ehsas bht hi pyara aur khubsurat hai.....ese hi likhte rahiye aur SDC ko sajate rahiye.....

Kavita Negi 11th September 2010 01:32 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by aasefa_4u (Post 409133)
Hey kavita mujhe ye apki koshish bht hi achi lagi.....apka har lafz aur har soch beshaq kabil e tareef hai....apka har ehsas bht hi pyara aur khubsurat hai.....ese hi likhte rahiye aur SDC ko sajate rahiye.....


Aasefa ji,
Mujhe padhne aur sarhaane k liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya.....Aise hi sath dete rahiyega.....


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