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9th March 2009, 10:01 AM

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bahut umda...!! ek kahaani ki tarah ghazal aage badhi hai, pehle mohabbat fir bewafaai aur fir mohabbat, kya baat hai..!! maqta bhi kaafi ahcha tha. matla thoda kamjor laga mujhe par wo waqt ke saath nikharta chala jaayega. bas matle me jo aapne 'dhadkano ko' likha hai use 'dhadkano se' kar dijiye kyuNki guzarish humesha kisi se ki jaati hai kisi ko nahiN. aur saare sher ahcha the, padh kar wakaai mazaa aaya...!! yuNhi mehfil sajaati rahiye....!!
Housla Afzaayii ke liye bahot bahot shukriya.

Abhi to koshish jaari hai aur bahetar likh saku... kabhi kabhi ehsaas hote hai aur alfaas nahi milte.. uperse meri urdu to bahot hee kamzor hai to Waqt to zaroor lagega.

AAp jaise doto.N ki duwa saath rahi to woh bhi ho jayega

AAge bhi meri kalam par aapni raa'ye dete rahiye...Khush rahiye

Purvi


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