[Pradhyuman]

Hi Lamha,

how r u? hope u r doin good..pls find my comments below..gar kuch galat keh dun to mauf kar dena..

ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..

good one..d feelings r clearly visible..

ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..

i dnt see a link between d first stanza nd d second one..

koi ilzaam? kaun se ilzaam ki baat karr rahe ho aap?

ek sirf tujko hi to ta-umr tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere bikhre dil ko tune thukraaya naa hota..

aap fark dekhiye.

use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..

use nahi aap ko maalum tha magar phir bhi....den it makes sense


mujhe maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko maine khaak banaya naa hota..

teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..


lagi hai is present tense..dubaaya naa hota is past tense...lagi thi is more apt...

mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..

first line is beautiful..again i see no link betwn d lines..."bewafai ka yakeen" -> means what?


mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, har pal saath jeene ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..

uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..

good one..

mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..

bahot khoob..

ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..

"usse uske haal ke baad"..i did nt understand..can u let me knw wht it means?

andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..

very good.awesome..

sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..

hmmm...aapne yeh likha tab aappe kya guzri hogi yeh to saaf ho raha hai aapki ghazal se..khush rahiye..likhte rahiye..god bless..

aapka dost,
Pradhyuman