*~HuM hO gAyE uSi Ke Jo Na Ho SaKa HuMaRa*~*

Taish · *~HuM hO gAyE uSi Ke Jo Na Ho SaKa HuMaRa*~* - 26th May 2006, 06:12 PM

Sabhi aashiqon ko ek baar fir se is nacheez aashiq ka salaam.ek baar fir se pesh hun ki ishq me dooba kalaam lekar.umeed hai ki aapko pasand aayega ye kalaam.

To pesh hai ek aur ghayal kalaam………….

Is mare hue hue aashiq ko aur kya barbaad karoge,,ek din tum v yun khuda se fariyaad karoge,,jis din tootega dil tera kabhi ishq me,,eh bewafa us din tum meri wafa ko yaad karoge,,sabhi kaafir hain yahaan ishq ki mazhab me “ghayal”,,kis-kis se ladoge,kis-kis se zehaad karoge……………

Haan kis-kis se zehaad karoge…………..

Hum usi ke ho gaye jo na ho saka humara,
Usi ne kiya hume fanaa* jise humne sanwara.

*barbaad.

Ishq ke talatum* me fansi hui zindagi humari,
jinhe jist** thi pyari unhe mil gaya kinara.

*toofan **zindagi.

Kuch na bole,chupaye humse dil ki baaten,
Par koi bataye use,hum sajhe unka har ishara.

Is kadar jo aaj tune choda hume tanha akela,
Tumhi bataao kaise jiye ye aashiq tumhara.

Tere sung to har samay rahega bismil* ka saya,
Par aakhir ab kaun banega is ghayal ka sahara.

*ghayal.

Ye dekho “ghayal” ke junoon ki intehan yaaro,
Hum usi ke ho gaye jo na ho saka humara.

aapki_anamika · **nice.... -** 27th May 2006, 11:21 AM

mr.ghayal shayar ji(sorry aapka naam nahi jaanti mai)
well this one is very nice keep posting...

hv a nice time

shweta(anu)

bindaas_ashi · **well -** 27th May 2006, 11:32 AM

once again nice poetry
well i just want to say as u mention in ur poetry she didnt tell u wt she think u know. how come u know . may be wt she want to tell u r taking it wrong way
keep on writing
tc

cute_ashu · 27th May 2006, 04:07 PM

simply ... awesome ...

bahut khub likha hai aapne ..
yun hi likhte rahiye ,,,

sameer'shaad' · 28th May 2006, 10:26 AM

janab ghayal sahab aadaab.hope u r fine.janab is baar vaada humne poora kar liya.kaha tha aaenge aur aaj aakhir waqt nikaal kar aa gaye.par aane ka ek maksad tha aur wo poora ho gaya ,agar main aaj nahi aata to is behtareen nazm se mukhatib nahi ho paata.
by the way thanks jo aapne na likhne ka khayal dil se nikal diya aur is ummda khayalaat ke saath pesh hue.
chalte chalte itna hi kahenge bas likhte rahiega
aapka shaad

sweet_capricorn · 28th May 2006, 06:46 PM

wow lucky

its gr8 yaar

its awesome

keep writing

tak care

sonia

Taish · **Re: nice.... -** 31st May 2006, 03:25 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by aapki_anamika
mr.ghayal shayar ji(sorry aapka naam nahi jaanti mai)
well this one is very nice keep posting...

hv a nice time

shweta(anu)

anamika ji bahut bahut shukriya ise pasand karne ka.bas guzarish yahi hai ki aap aage v hume yunhi padhti rahen.

ISHIQA AGGARWAL · **Re: *~HuM hO gAyE uSi Ke Jo Na Ho SaKa HuMaRa*~* -** 31st May 2006, 04:37 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by ghayal_shayar
Sabhi aashiqon ko ek baar fir se is nacheez aashiq ka salaam.ek baar fir se pesh hun ki ishq me dooba kalaam lekar.umeed hai ki aapko pasand aayega ye kalaam.

To pesh hai ek aur ghayal kalaam………….

Is mare hue hue aashiq ko aur kya barbaad karoge,,ek din tum v yun khuda se fariyaad karoge,,jis din tootega dil tera kabhi ishq me,,eh bewafa us din tum meri wafa ko yaad karoge,,sabhi kaafir hain yahaan ishq ki mazhab me “ghayal”,,kis-kis se ladoge,kis-kis se zehaad karoge……………

Haan kis-kis se zehaad karoge…………..

Hum usi ke ho gaye jo na ho saka humara,
Usi ne kiya hume fanaa* jise humne sanwara.

*barbaad.

Ishq ke talatum* me fansi hui zindagi humari,
jinhe jist** thi pyari unhe mil gaya kinara.

*toofan **zindagi.

Kuch na bole,chupaye humse dil ki baaten,
Par koi bataye use,hum sajhe unka har ishara.

Is kadar jo aaj tune choda hume tanha akela,
Tumhi bataao kaise jiye ye aashiq tumhara.

Tere sung to har samay rahega bismil* ka saya,
Par aakhir ab kaun banega is ghayal ka sahara.

*ghayal.

Ye dekho “ghayal” ke junoon ki intehan yaaro,
Hum usi ke ho gaye jo na ho saka humara.

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bahut hi khoob likha hai aapne,,,,,
humesha ki tarah dil ko choo gayi aapki rachna,,,
aese hi aage bhi likhte rahiye....

bye and take care....

red_ruchika · 31st May 2006, 09:11 PM

bahot hi badhiya hai...dil ko choone wala

Is kadar jo aaj tune choda hume tanha akela,
Tumhi bataao kaise jiye ye aashiq tumhara

bohat khoob...

par ...pehli line is not written by you!

hum ho gaye usi ke jo ho na saka hamara.

maaf kijiye,par yeh toheen hai hamare hi jazbaton ki.yeh kisi aur ne likha tha kabhi.hame nahin pata aap agree karenge ya nahin par hum kuuch bhi galat nahin bardashat karte.isliye,sorry bhi,aapko bura nahin lagwana chahte ham,sach main.
par i had to reply,coz this is true n u know it!

Taish · **Re: well -** 4th June 2006, 05:46 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by bindaas_ashi
once again nice poetry
well i just want to say as u mention in ur poetry she didnt tell u wt she think u know. how come u know . may be wt she want to tell u r taking it wrong way
keep on writing
tc

shukriya hume padhne ka.umeed karte hain ki aap aage v hume yunhi padhti rahengi.

Taish · 4th June 2006, 05:47 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by cute_ashu
simply ... awesome ...

bahut khub likha hai aapne ..
yun hi likhte rahiye ,,,

shukriya ashu bhai.bas aage v yunhi padhte raho hume aap.

Taish · 4th June 2006, 05:48 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by sameer'shaad'
janab ghayal sahab aadaab.hope u r fine.janab is baar vaada humne poora kar liya.kaha tha aaenge aur aaj aakhir waqt nikaal kar aa gaye.par aane ka ek maksad tha aur wo poora ho gaya ,agar main aaj nahi aata to is behtareen nazm se mukhatib nahi ho paata.
by the way thanks jo aapne na likhne ka khayal dil se nikal diya aur is ummda khayalaat ke saath pesh hue.
chalte chalte itna hi kahenge bas likhte rahiega
aapka shaad

shaad bhai aur kuch na kahunga aapko.kyunki pata hain aapke ehshaas hume.bas guzarish yahi rahegi ki aap hume yunhi pahdte rahiye.

Taish · 4th June 2006, 05:52 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by sweet_capricorn
wow lucky

its gr8 yaar

its awesome

keep writing

tak care

sonia

pasand karne ka shukriya sonia ji.aur bas guzarish yahi hai humari aapse ki humare saath yunhi rahiyega aap.

Taish

Quote:

Originally posted by ISHIQA AGGARWAL
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bahut hi khoob likha hai aapne,,,,,
humesha ki tarah dil ko choo gayi aapki rachna,,,
aese hi aage bhi likhte rahiye....

bye and take care....

shukriya ishiqa ji.humari mehfil me shirkat karne ke liye.umeed karte hain ki aap aage v yunhi aati rahiyega.

Taish · 4th June 2006, 06:02 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by red_ruchika
bahot hi badhiya hai...dil ko choone wala

Is kadar jo aaj tune choda hume tanha akela,
Tumhi bataao kaise jiye ye aashiq tumhara

bohat khoob...

par ...pehli line is not written by you!

hum ho gaye usi ke jo ho na saka hamara.

maaf kijiye,par yeh toheen hai hamare hi jazbaton ki.yeh kisi aur ne likha tha kabhi.hame nahin pata aap agree karenge ya nahin par hum kuuch bhi galat nahin bardashat karte.isliye,sorry bhi,aapko bura nahin lagwana chahte ham,sach main.
par i had to reply,coz this is true n u know it!

ruchika ji isme bura maan.ne wali koi baat nahi.pehli baat ye line main darzano shayriyon me padhi hai.ZAFAR ji ki 2 ghazalon me.aur doosri baat koi ek line utha lena chori nahi hoti ghazalon me.aur is line ko kayi bade shayron ne v use kiya hai.maine v kiya.ab agar isme aapko kuch bura lage to main maafi ka talabdaar hun.par hume khushi hui ki aapne apni doubt clear kar li.aage v yunhi humari mehfilon me aati rahiyega aap.

red_ruchika · 4th June 2006, 08:11 PM

oh accha...theek hai
maine sirf aik hi jagah padhi thi aur woh bhi kaafi mayne rakhti thi
,isliye aikdum se accha nahin laga
par aapne yeh bata diya ki,kisi aik line ka lena chori nahin hoti ,uske liye shukriya.aur main aage se dhyan rakhungi,thanku.

Taish · 5th June 2006, 05:08 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by red_ruchika
oh accha...theek hai
maine sirf aik hi jagah padhi thi aur woh bhi kaafi mayne rakhti thi
,isliye aikdum se accha nahin laga
par aapne yeh bata diya ki,kisi aik line ka lena chori nahin hoti ,uske liye shukriya.aur main aage se dhyan rakhungi,thanku.

ruchika ji,ye humara farz tha.waise agar aapko humara tareeka ya humare shabd bure lage hon to main aapse maafi ka talabdaar hun.bas yunhi aage aa kar apni baat rakha kijiye hume bahut khushi hogi.