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Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... ! -
13th January 2011, 10:37 AM
Dard-E-Dil Chhupaa Ke Dekh Lo Har Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Jise Dekh Ke Phir Nahi Dekhaa Khwaab Thaa Sulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Kaise Khule Intezaar Ke Darwaaze Zaraa Hausle Hawaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Jo Nahi Hai Kismat MeN "Naresh" Chaahe Haath Dikhaa Ke Dekh Lo ...  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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13th January 2011, 10:40 AM
Bahot khoob likha hai Naresh bhai, is baar bilkul naye ehsaason ke saath aap tashreef laaye hain.. behad accha laga aapka ye kalam.. daad haazir hai..
Dard-E-Dil Chhupaa Ke Dekh Lo Har Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Jise Dekh Ke Phir Nahi Dekhaa Khwaab Thaa Sulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... In do sheron ke liye meri khaas daad.. likhte rahen shaad... |
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13th January 2011, 12:15 PM
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ji nice creation...........................  Dard-E-Dil Chhupaa Ke Dekh Lo Har Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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13th January 2011, 06:16 PM
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duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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13th January 2011, 06:40 PM
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aadaab bahot khoob mehraa saahab jawaab nahi aalaa ghazal hai seedhe dil pe waar kartee hai lagtaa hai ki baagheeche me qadam rakh diyaa ho aor tarah tarah ke phool nazar aa rahe hon Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... ye dono hisher fikr ki parwaaz ki nishaan dehi karte hain masood hassaas |
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14th January 2011, 10:47 PM
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DuaaoN ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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15th January 2011, 05:43 PM
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Bahut khoob likha hai aapne......!!! Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Behad khubsurat lage ye sher....!!! Dher saari daad hazir hai ....!!! Aise hi likhte rahiye....!!! khush rahiyee....!!!! Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!! Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!! |
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16th January 2011, 12:32 PM
Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se
Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... excellent thoughts naresh ji...... daad kubul keejiye.. |
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16th January 2011, 02:28 PM
Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum
Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... Bohat khoob Naresh ji.............................. Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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17th January 2011, 08:59 AM
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aapki hauslaa afzaai aur ijazat afzaai ka dil se shukriya ... khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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17th January 2011, 10:12 AM
Naresh ji apke kahe mutabik aapki gahzal ko behr mai lane ki koshish ki hai, aapki behr hai ab is gahzal mai ( 2122 12 12 22 " tumko dekha to ye khyaal aaya, ya shaam se aaNkh mai nami si hai") jaha tak khyaal wahi rakhne ki koshish ki hai, bas radeef change kiya hai woh bhi behr ki zaroorat ke hisaab se , kafiyee same hai ek sher chhod diyaa hai... baaki aap batayeN , iske alawaa kya sevaa ki jaye Dard-E-Dil Chhupaa Ke Dekh Lokoe galti ho to maaf kareN ....!! Har Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... derd-e-dil ko chupaa ke dekho na aainaa aajmaa ke dekho na Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... tum khafa zindgi se ho to fir aap hi muskuraa ke dekho na Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... hum bahut yad aagenge tumko ik dafa to bhulaa ke dekho na Jise Dekh Ke Phir Nahi Dekhaa Khwaab Thaa Sulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... ye mujhe bilkul hi samjh nahi ayaa.. isliye ise chhod diyaa Kaise Khule Intezaar Ke Darwaaze Zaraa Hausle Hawaa Ke Dekh Lo ... kholegi baapsi ke darwaje hosle tum hawaa ke dekho na Jo Nahi Hai Kismat MeN "Naresh" Chaahe Haath Dikhaa Ke Dekh Lo ... aapka takhalus berh mai aa pa raha tha, jyda koshish bhi ki nahi maine, bas kuch is tarah ban payaa.. ek sher aapka sahi nahi kiyaa hai.... uske badle aap maktaa likh leN, ho sake to tkhalus change kar leN .... jo likha hi nahi milega kyuN hath chahe dikhaa ke dekho na waise ek naam mere zahan mai aayaa hai, aap romantic hi likhtee haiN.... nihayati romantic ...... isliye aapko " sajan" ka thakhalus de raha huN .... isko use karte huee last sher ko yuN kar deta hun kya likha tha kya mila tumheN akhir hath Sajan dikhaa ke dekho na aap sajan apne liye aur mahboob dono ke liye use kar sakte haiN lekin aakhiri aapki hi marzi hogi _________________________________ So aapki gahzal finally yuN ban padi hai meri aur se derd-e-dil ko chupaa ke dekho na aainaa aajmaa ke dekho na tum khafa zindgi se ho to fir aap hi muskuraa ke dekho na hum bahut yad aagenge tumko ik dafa to bhulaa ke dekho na kholegi baapsi ke darwaje hosle tum hawaa ke dekho na kya likha tha kya mila tumheN akhir hath Sajan dikhaa ke dekho na |
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17th January 2011, 11:51 AM
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hath Sajan dikhaa ke dekho na isme Thaa .. word hata ke padhyeN plzz.. |
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17th January 2011, 06:08 PM
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Khair ..... aapne meri koshish ko apne tarike se behr me prastut karke acchaa udharan diya ... par radeef behr ke hiisaab se set zaroor aapne kar diya .. pata nahi mujhe utnaa jamaa nahi ... in khayaalon ke saath ... jitna "dekh lo" khiil raha thaa ... lekin mujhe toh seekhna hai ... isliye ki aage acchaa likhna hai ... behas me nahi jaaunga ... bahut accha laga ...... aapne jis tarha ghazal ko sawaaraa aur bataaya ... ek baar phir se bahut bahut shukriya ... main aapse next ghazal banaate waqt zaroor islaah karunga ... thakhalus par .. phir se vichaar karnaa chaahunga ... yeh nahi ... khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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18th January 2011, 08:30 AM
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duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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19th January 2011, 08:47 AM
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khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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19th January 2011, 12:03 PM
FikR Ji ... aapne mere liye itni mehnat ki aur kimti waqt lagaya ... iske liye aapka bahut bahut shukrguzaar hoon ... kuch samajh aaya ... kuch abhi adhura hai ... woh main aapse puchhtaa rahunga ... jab next ghazal banaaunga ... koshish karunga behr me rakhne ki ...
are isme kaun si mehnat kaun sa woqt, itna to bantaa hi hai aapke liye ... bas koshish bekaar na jaye yahi chahtaa huN Khair ..... aapne meri koshish ko apne tarike se behr me prastut karke acchaa udharan diya ... par radeef behr ke hiisaab se set zaroor aapne kar diya .. pata nahi mujhe utnaa jamaa nahi ... in khayaalon ke saath ... jitna "dekh lo" khiil raha thaa ... lekin mujhe toh seekhna hai ... isliye ki aage acchaa likhna hai ... behas me nahi jaaunga ... hmm ji koe bat nahi agar aapko nahi jamaa to, fir se koshish karengee , jab tak na jame .......... doosri behr mai try kartaa hun, aapke radeef aur kafiye ko na badlte hue ... maine socha tha aapko maine jo behr batayee thi pahle usko dhyaan mai likhaa hoga, isliye usi behr mai try kiya.... ab doosri behr mai try kartaa huN . bahut accha laga ...... aapne jis tarha ghazal ko sawaaraa aur bataaya ... ek baar phir se bahut bahut shukriya ... main aapse next ghazal banaate waqt zaroor islaah karunga ... thakhalus par .. phir se vichaar karnaa chaahunga ... yeh nahi ... khush rahen ... ! aapka pyaar hai, barnaa aapki ghazal meri se behtr hi thi........ behr ko dhyaan mai na rakheN to... _________ is baar aapki behr hogi .. 2122 2122 212 .. dil ke armaan aaNsuo mai bah gaye ......... aapke khayal 98% nahi badle haiN maine, kuch behr ki bajah se badle kuch , adaa ho sake achi taarh uski bajah se .... Dard-E-Dil Chhupaa Ke Dekh Lo Har Aaiinaa Aazmaa Ke Dekh Lo ... dard-e-dil ko tum chupaa ke dekh lo aainaa bhi aazmaa ke dekh lo Gar Naaraaz Ho Zindagi Se Kisi Din Muskuraa Ke Dekh Lo ... ho khafa tum zindgi se kisliye saath mere muskuraa ke dekh lo Phir Bahut Yaad Aayenge Hum Jis Tarah Bhi Bhuulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... hum bahut yaad aayenge fir baad maiN jo agar chaho bhulaa ke dekh lo (or) hum bahut yaad aayenge tum dekhna tum jo chahe to bhulaa ke dekh lo Jise Dekh Ke Phir Nahi Dekhaa Khwaab Thaa Sulaa Ke Dekh Lo ... ye mujhe ab bhi samjh nahi aayaa, aap samjh dete thoda to shayed ise bhi behr mai le aata khair.. Kaise Khule Intezaar Ke Darwaaze Zaraa Hausle Hawaa Ke Dekh Lo ... khol degi baapsi ke dar sabhi honsle tum is hawa ke dekh lo Jo Nahi Hai Kismat MeN "Naresh" Chaahe Haath Dikhaa Ke Dekh Lo ... jo nahi likha hai kismat mai naresh hath chahe tum dikhaa ke dekh lo ab agar aapkaa takhluss ad kare to sher adaa nahi ho pa raha hai behr mai aane ke babjood isliye bina iske hi rakheN to adaa ho jayega... jo nahi takdeer mai kya fir mile hath chahe tum dikhaa ke dekh lo __ ab ek sath ghazal post kartaa hun sabhi sher ..... jahaN aapko kami lage zaroor baatyeN, fir koshish karungaa .........!! dard-e-dil ko tum chupaa ke dekh lo aainaa bhi aazmaa ke dekh lo jo khafa ho zindgi tum agar saath mere muskuraa ke dekh lo hum bahut yaad aayenge tum dekhnaa jo agar chaho bhulaa ke dekh lo khol degi baapsi ke dar sabhi honsle tum is hawa ke dekh lo jo nahi takdeer mai kya fir mile hath chahe tum dikhaa ke dekh lo acha buraa jo lage be-jhijhak bataiyega abhi bhi bahut gunzaish hai, ek sher aaur same behr mai aur tarah se likhaa ja saktaa hai ...... Muklish Fikr .......... |
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23rd January 2011, 10:01 AM
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Bahut bahut shukriya ... Zainy Ji ! aapke saraahane aur saath nibhaane kaa ! khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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25th January 2011, 08:54 AM
FikR Ji .. Aadaab !
aapne behr me ghazal ko durust karke jaise samjhaya ... main usse bahut mutaacir hua hoon .. koshish karunga ... kabhi aisa likh paauN ... aapne jo kimti waqt mujhe diya ... uska bahut shukrguzaar hoon ... aise hi saath nibhaate rahiyega ... khush rahen ... ! duaaon ke saath ... ! YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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26th January 2011, 02:42 PM
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Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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