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24th June 2015, 03:12 PM
Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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24th June 2015, 03:25 PM
wah wah Sarika jee kamaal ki kavita hai itne pyaare ehsaas
anand aa gaya padhkar
yeh do lines to dil ko chhoo gayeen
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
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24th June 2015, 03:35 PM
waahh kya baat hai sarika jee.....
behad hi haseen aur naazuk sa kalam aapne bazm ko pesh kiyaa hai......
dil se niklee daad qubool karen... aur aise hi acha achaa likhtee rahen....
Shaad....
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24th June 2015, 04:16 PM
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Originally Posted by masti
Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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Arry waaaaaaaaaahhhhh.....
Sarika jee..
Kaafi arse baad meHfil e ishQ ka rukh kiya to aap ky kalaam ko saamne paaya..
kia kahooN... be-panah haseeN kalaam hy ... sir ta paa jaadu hy ....
kisi aik sher ky liye kehna muskhil... tamaam ashaar hi lajwaab haiN ...
bheege hue aur barish meiN nahaaye hue....
sach kahoN to dil chu gaye aap ke alfaaz ...
aaj yahan bhi baarish hui hy ...
so phaDhne ka lutf dobaala ho gaya ...
kahiN phisal na jaaoN tere khayaaloN meiN chalte chalte!
apni yaadoN ko roko ke mere shehar meiN baarish aayi hai ...
beshumaar daad qabool kejiye ..
likhte rahiye ..
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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24th June 2015, 05:10 PM
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Originally Posted by ISHK EK IBADAT
wah wah Sarika jee kamaal ki kavita hai itne pyaare ehsaas
anand aa gaya padhkar
yeh do lines to dil ko chhoo gayeen
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
likhti rahen
duaon ke saath
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Mujhe bohut khushi hai ki apko mera likha pasand aaya. aage bhi koshish karungi ki aapki ummeedon par puri utroon.
Raadhe Raadhe.
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24th June 2015, 05:12 PM
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Originally Posted by sameer'shaad'
waahh kya baat hai sarika jee.....
behad hi haseen aur naazuk sa kalam aapne bazm ko pesh kiyaa hai......
dil se niklee daad qubool karen... aur aise hi acha achaa likhtee rahen....
Shaad....
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Shukriya ji. yahan SDC par kuch log hain jo jab tak mere likhe par kuch comment na karen kuch aduura sa lagta hai.
acha laga aapko pasand aayi.
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24th June 2015, 11:27 PM
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Arry waaaaaaaaaahhhhh.....
Sarika jee..
Kaafi arse baad meHfil e ishQ ka rukh kiya to aap ky kalaam ko saamne paaya..
kia kahooN... be-panah haseeN kalaam hy ... sir ta paa jaadu hy ....
kisi aik sher ky liye kehna muskhil... tamaam ashaar hi lajwaab haiN ...
bheege hue aur barish meiN nahaaye hue....
sach kahoN to dil chu gaye aap ke alfaaz ...
aaj yahan bhi baarish hui hy ...
so phaDhne ka lutf dobaala ho gaya ...
kahiN phisal na jaaoN tere khayaaloN meiN chalte chalte!
apni yaadoN ko roko ke mere shehar meiN baarish aayi hai ...
beshumaar daad qabool kejiye ..
likhte rahiye ..
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Hassan ji itni tareef na karen ki khud par guruur aa jaye.
Shukriya.
Waise apka sher bhi kamaal ka hai. jaise pehli ball par six.
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25th June 2015, 07:04 AM
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Originally Posted by masti
Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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yeh muasam ka asar hai ya ishq ki khumaari
kyun ruk ke dhadhkano mien yeh aag si lagi hai
Bahut khoob Bahut khoob...aankhen band kari aur kuch jhalkiyaan de gayi band aakhon se yeh kavita mujhko...
Yunhi likhti raho
Qasid
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क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ
रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है
'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें
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25th June 2015, 10:12 AM
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Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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Dear Sarika.....bahuttttttttt hi khoobsurat likha hai aapne, bade saade se lafzon meiN apni baat kahi hai aapne, lafz aur bayaani dono kamaal ke rhe. yeh aik sher muje apne dil ke bahut kareeb lga:
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
yu hi likhti rho...khush rho
bahut saare pyar ke saath
diii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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25th June 2015, 03:11 PM
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Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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Wah Sarika ji, kya chulbula kalaam pesh kiya hai.. Kitne rang bhare haiN issmeiN..!
Sirf waah waah nikal rahi hai.
Bohot khuub. yuNhi likhte rahiye.
Sagar Aashna
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25th June 2015, 03:55 PM
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Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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maine pahle bhi kaha awwesome aur ab bhi kahoongi...beautiifullll...kitne pyaar se sajaya hai aapne is kavita ko jaise kisi ne bageeche ke tarah tarah ke phool chunkar ek sath rakh diye hon..aur utna hee nazuk.sach meiN barish ki roomaniyat aur muhabbat samayi hai isme..
bahut khoob...
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अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी
आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे
madhu..
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29th June 2015, 11:21 PM
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yeh muasam ka asar hai ya ishq ki khumaari
kyun ruk ke dhadhkano mien yeh aag si lagi hai
Bahut khoob Bahut khoob...aankhen band kari aur kuch jhalkiyaan de gayi band aakhon se yeh kavita mujhko...
Yunhi likhti raho
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Bas tumhara saath hi to chahiye...........
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29th June 2015, 11:23 PM
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Dear Sarika.....bahuttttttttt hi khoobsurat likha hai aapne, bade saade se lafzon meiN apni baat kahi hai aapne, lafz aur bayaani dono kamaal ke rhe. yeh aik sher muje apne dil ke bahut kareeb lga:
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
yu hi likhti rho...khush rho
bahut saare pyar ke saath
diii
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Thank you didi............
aapko jo panktiyaan pasand aayi woh meri bhi pasandida hain.
Isi tarah housla badhaate rahein.
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29th June 2015, 11:24 PM
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Wah Sarika ji, kya chulbula kalaam pesh kiya hai.. Kitne rang bhare haiN issmeiN..!
Sirf waah waah nikal rahi hai.
Bohot khuub. yuNhi likhte rahiye.
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Shukriya saagar ji housla afzaayi ke liye.
yunhi aate rahiye....
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29th June 2015, 11:25 PM
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maine pahle bhi kaha awwesome aur ab bhi kahoongi...beautiifullll...kitne pyaar se sajaya hai aapne is kavita ko jaise kisi ne bageeche ke tarah tarah ke phool chunkar ek sath rakh diye hon..aur utna hee nazuk.sach meiN barish ki roomaniyat aur muhabbat samayi hai isme..
bahut khoob...
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Ohho itni tareef na karo madam ki main pahaad par chad jaun aur utarna mushkilho................
Shukriya pasndagi ke liye.
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30th June 2015, 07:05 AM
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Ek Kavita- Meri pyari saheli baarish ke naam
Bol ri baarish, bol na tu... bol kahan se aayi hai?
Kyun? cham cham cham kar ke tuune dil mein aag lagaayi hai
jhoolon par udate rehna aur pee ka dena peeng mujhe
mere soye armaanon ne aaj to lee angdaayi hai
bol ri baarish.........................
Dil ka dard, piya ki yaadein, garm chaai ki ye chuski
ye sab jaane kahan se tu phir apne saath le aayi hai
bol ri baarish............
baadal ka aanchal odhe lagti hai mujhko tu dulhan
itnaa tu jo roti hai kya aaj teri bidaayi hai?
bol ri baarish....................
sakhi ri teri boondon mein dikhta hai mujhko aks apna
kya tere piya ne bhi tujhko koi chubhti baat sunaayi hai?
bol ri baarish...............
chod de ab tu laaj sharam aur odh le aanchal masti ka
keh de saagar se jaaker gar ussey milne aayi hai
bol ri baarish .......................
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Simply beautiful bhabhi!!!! Loved it, how beautifully you have written those feelings.. Dil se dheron daad
Naam batao jisne chhubti baat sunaai, arzi lagate hain supreme court me : D
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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1st July 2015, 05:57 PM
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Simply beautiful bhabhi!!!! Loved it, how beautifully you have written those feelings.. Dil se dheron daad
Naam batao jisne chhubti baat sunaai, arzi lagate hain supreme court me : D
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Chill Devar ji
aapko to pata hai bhabhi aapki jhansi ki raani hai to koi usey chubhti baat kaise sunayega?...................
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