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Sitam Dhaaya hai Abhi Abhi ! -
26th June 2006, 04:17 AM
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Ufaan Samandar me aaya hai abhi abhi ! Rukh se Parda usne hataya hai abhi abhi !! Gham ho bhi to q, mujhe kisi bhi dard ka ! Aab-e-Hayaat ban vo aaya hai abhi abhi !! Pilata hi reh, Aaj ki Raat tu Saaqi ! Baad Muddat hosh aaya hai abhi abhi !! Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N ! Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! Theher kuchh pal, ey shab-e-shokh tu ! Khumaar-e-Ishk chhaaya hai abhi abhi !! Sehla lene do in hasee.N Zakhmo.N ko ! Mehboob ne sitam dhaya hai abhi abhi !! ***** ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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26th June 2006, 06:36 AM
Pilata hi reh, Aaj ki Raat tu Saaqi !
Baad Muddat hosh aaya hai abhi abhi !! mara ho ek do ko tau uthaaye koyi awaaz 'Pal' kitnon ko maar giraaya hai abhi abhi! Lol...Pallo...kya baat hai...hosh udhaane chali ho kya...abhi abhi nap se uthi tau tumhara yeh kalaam sitam dhata sa nazar aaya...laga ki tumne khud pe hi sab likh daala hai...kya masti hai...kya khumaari hai...!! gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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26th June 2006, 10:05 AM
wah wah bhut khub pallavi ji.......appki har poetry parhi hai maine kasam say tareef kay liye alfaaz nahi hai mere paas....bass itna he kehta hoon ki app kamaal ho........
chand jab badlon say ghira ho, or poonam ki raat ho, to tum bhee niklna raat main, kiyonki tab tumko chaand ki nazar na lagaygi, haan khud ko ghunghat main zaror chhupa lena, kiyonki meri do aankhain tumko, dekhnay ki gustakhi karaingi, shayad tumko dil main bharnay ki koshish karaingi, tum raat ka daman orrh lena, kahin is deewanay ki nazar na lag jaye tumko, yeh nazam aapkay naam........raj......... ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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26th June 2006, 09:12 PM
Ufaan Samandar me aaya hai abhi abhi !
Rukh se Parda usne hataya hai abhi abhi !! Hello Pallavi Nice one kuch khas likha hay tumney abhi abhi....yeh khoobsurat rachna padhi hamne abhi abhi......Samandar ne tughey bulaya abhi abhi......inn Shabdon ne phuulon ko mehkaya abhi abhi....keep writing Take care |
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Re: Sitam Dhaaya hai Abhi Abhi ! -
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aaj bade din baad aaya par pahli nazar pallo aap ke is kalaam par padhi aur hamesha ki tarah dil ke dabe jazbaat ubhar aaye, aur aage likhne ki gustaakhi kar baitha Mere aangan mai arso se barsaat hui hai Mere dardo ko usne sahlaya hai abhi abhi Ashq saare falak par sitaare ban jaayenge Mujhe sanam ne gale lagaaya hai abhi abhi Na khushi ki chahat na zannat ki tamanaa teri baaho mai jo arsh* paaya hai abhi abhi Gham-e-ulfat se ham has ke ubhar aayenge Aasmaan teri yaado ka chhaya hai abhi abhi Arsh*= according to islamic relogion there is a 8th paradise where god resides or lives. tumne bahut hi khoobsurat likha hai pallo , shayad meri add ki hui lines tumhe pasand aaye. aise hi likhte raho ham padhte rahenge. regards take care manu |
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27th June 2006, 10:10 AM
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bahut hi khushnuma rachna likhi he apne padh kar dil ko achha laga keep writing take care bye Zindagi ko tumne mohbbat bana diya |
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27th June 2006, 05:19 PM
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 lol.. kya baat karte ho sachhi aap ! sharam aa gayi mujhe by god ki kasam  hehehhee... aur kitni hi der tak main hansi ne sambhaal paayi aapke dilfenk sher ko dekh kar hehehe... sho shwweeett of u... aapke sabse pehle jo dekha yahann .thanxx a lottt..... ahmm ahmm.. Khumari lol... shayad ho bhi... apna khayaal rakhna di  ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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27th June 2006, 05:25 PM
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thanx a lot itni pyaari poem humme dene ke liye aur main kamaal... hehehe.. aji ye to jaada ho gaya.. main ek adna si shayaraa.. kya kamaal.. lol.. aap aaye yahaan yahi bahut badi baat hai apna dhyaan rakhieyga ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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29th June 2006, 12:55 PM
hello sukanya dii.. kaisi hai aap....
thanx dii jo aap yahaan aayi aur aapko achhi lagi ye koshish to iska matlab kuchh to achha likhne lagi hu mai bass aap log yu hi saath rahiye .. apna khayaal rakhna dii ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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Re: Sitam Dhaaya hai Abhi Abhi ! -
29th June 2006, 01:11 PM
Ufaan Samandar me aaya hai abhi abhi !
Rukh se Parda usne hataya hai abhi abhi !! Pilata hi reh, Aaj ki Raat tu Saaqi ! Baad Muddat hosh aaya hai abhi abhi !! KYA BAAT HAI...!!! WAH..WAH... KAMAAL KI SOCH HAI....!!! Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N ! Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! KYA BAAT HAI...!!! YEH SHER HAI KE JAAM????? Theher kuchh pal, ey shab-e-shokh tu ! Khumaar-e-Ishk chhaaya hai abhi abhi !! Sehla lene do in hasee.N Zakhmo.N ko ! Mehboob ne sitam dhaya hai abhi abhi !! UFF...GAZAB...!!! kya baat hai....u r the best....!!!! har sher ek jaam hai...shayri ki sharaab ka chalakta hua paimaana...jisne pee ka khumaar taari hua hai mujh par abhi abhi...!!!aapki kalam ab kalam nahin ek shamsheer hai,, bahoot umda gazal...aaj ka din safal ho gaya mera...gar itna khubsurat kalaam nazron se guzre... take care -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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1st July 2006, 03:03 PM
Ufaan Samandar me aaya hai abhi abhi !
Rukh se Parda usne hataya hai abhi abhi !! Gham ho bhi to q, mujhe kisi bhi dard ka ! Aab-e-Hayaat ban vo aaya hai abhi abhi !! oye hoye... kya baat hai.... Pilata hi reh, Aaj ki Raat tu Saaqi ! Baad Muddat hosh aaya hai abhi abhi !! hehehehe... zyada mat peena  Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N ! Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! Theher kuchh pal, ey shab-e-shokh tu ! Khumaar-e-Ishk chhaaya hai abhi abhi !! ufff... kya baat hai huzoor... bahut khoob.... Sehla lene do in hasee.N Zakhmo.N ko ! Mehboob ne sitam dhaya hai abhi abhi !! hmmmmmm.... nice expression here.... Hi Partner, As always a very exressive and beautiful creation... kucch sher to bass aise hain ke dil se waah hi niklati hai... really liked this one... Likhti raho... Do TC Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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Re: Re: Sitam Dhaaya hai Abhi Abhi ! -
3rd July 2006, 12:44 PM
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thanx for making it more beautiful.. as if this is completed nw.... tumhari additions sach me bahut loving hai take care...n thanx for coming here ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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aapko yahaan dekh kar sachhi bahut achha laga.. shayad aap pehli baar mere qalaam per aayi hain m,ain aapka yahaan aane ke liye aur mujhe saraahne ke liye, tahe dil se shukriya ada karti hu apna khayaaal rakhieyga ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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Dear Pallo................aapki kalam jab bhi likhti hai kamaal ka likhti hai...accha lagta hai aapko padna. god bless u .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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1st September 2011, 12:41 AM
Pilata hi reh, Aaj ki Raat tu Saaqi !
Baad Muddat hosh aaya hai abhi abhi !! Very Nice ........... Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N ! Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! Very Romantic ......... Matlaa Bhi Khoob Likhaa Hai Pallavi Ji ....... Umdaa Ghazal Kahee Hai Aapne .. ! Dilee Daad Aur Mubaaraqbaad Qubuul KareN ....... Aaindaa Bhi Aati RaheN Aur Likhti RaheN Aage Bhi .... ! DuaaoN Ke Saath ... !  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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1st September 2011, 08:42 AM
Thank you guys. When I am reading my own written stuff after years, I am not finding very pleasing and impressive except few shers. Probably, thoughts are matured and polished now to sense what's good and what's not.
I'd be more into reading others rather than writing here.. Thanks again for sharing your opinion and comments Quote:
Thanks.. ummm Vikas? I see new pens around. Good to know you... Quote:
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Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N ! Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! Theher kuchh pal, ey shab-e-shokh tu ! Khumaar-e-Ishk chhaaya hai abhi abhi !! Sehla lene do in hasee.N Zakhmo.N ko ! Mehboob ne sitam dhaya hai abhi abhi !! Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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daad kubul karen duaon ke saath radhe radhe Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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Very nice of you And me??? AnjAAn!!! _____________________________________
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Tukbandi ka daur is ghazal ke likhne se pehle hi rukhsat ho chuka tha
lekin aaj jab main fir se padhti hu apni ghazalo ko, to sirf kuchh hi sher pasand aa paate hain.. bahut bahut kamiyaan nazar aati hain.. Siwaaye ek baat ko chhod ke ki jo likhti thi dil se likhti thi, apne liye likhti thi aur sach likhne ki koshish karti thi. Thanks for coming on this post Quote:
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Nazar na lagao ,O Nadaa.N Taaro.N !
Sanam pe mere Noor aaya hai abhi abhi !! Theher kuchh pal, ey shab-e-shokh tu ! Khumaar-e-Ishk chhaaya hai abhi abhi !! WAH!!...Bohat khoob...Quite romantic... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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