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aaj zakh main khoon ka katra nahee hai - 27th June 2006, 11:21 PM
aaj zakh main khoon ka katra nahee hai
ab jaan ko koyee khatra nahee hai

taron main rah ke samjhta hai kya kya
dhartee pe ye chand utra nahee hai

badalne lageen roop abhee se lakeeren
abhee haath usne ye pakara nahee hai

tum hee nahee to kaho kya main gayun
mere geet ka koyee mukhra nahee hai

wasl ke baad yahee sochta raha main
ek pal bhee maine kyon pakara nahee hai

gira per khayalon ka yaden hain bakee
gira hai jaron se to ukhra nahee hai

kaisa laga kya kahen tum ko chhoo ke
kabhee chand ko maine pakra nahee hai

pyar se khauf hai to jayo abhee se
abhee khel zyada bhee bigra nahee hai
tum kahan pahunchee fikr choro us ka
dil main ye masoom to utara naee hai

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28th June 2006, 07:08 PM
tum hee nahee to kaho kya main gayun
mere geet ka koyee mukhra nahee hai

wasl ke baad yahee sochta raha main
ek pal bhee maine kyon pakara nahee hai

bahut khoob anil ji,bahut hi behtareen rachna.yeh sher pasand aaye mujhe
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bahut bahut shukriya akeli jan - 29th June 2006, 07:40 PM
bahut bahut shukriya akelee jaan achha laga ke aap ne parha ise pasand bhee aya aap ko
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4th July 2006, 01:00 PM

aaj zakh main khoon ka katra nahee hai
ab jaan ko koyee khatra nahee hai

taron main rah ke samjhta hai kya kya
dhartee pe ye chand utra nahee hai

waaah... kya baat kahi hai....


badalne lageen roop abhee se lakeeren
abhee haath usne ye pakara nahee hai

tum hee nahee to kaho kya main gayun
mere geet ka koyee mukhra nahee hai

very welll said... second sher is really well expressed....


wasl ke baad yahee sochta raha main
ek pal bhee maine kyon pakara nahee hai

gira per khayalon ka yaden hain bakee
gira hai jaron se to ukhra nahee hai

nice words....


kaisa laga kya kahen tum ko chhoo ke
kabhee chand ko maine pakra nahee hai

pyar se khauf hai to jayo abhee se
abhee khel zyada bhee bigra nahee hai

uff... too good... yeh do sher bahut hi acche thhe...


tum kahan pahunchee fikr choro us ka
dil main ye masoom to utara naee hai

kya baat hai... well said again...

Hi Anil,

Kaafi dinon baad padha aapko... bahut hi khoobsurat ghazal hai yeh... ghazalein aap kam hi likhte hain... yeh bahut hi acchi lagi mujhe... really very well expressed.... meri daad kubool kijiyega is subdar ghazal par... likhte raha kijiiye yun hi... apna khayal bhi rakhiyega

Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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hi - 4th July 2006, 04:03 PM
bahut khoob anil bhaiya ek mukammal kalaam hamesha ki tarah
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4th July 2006, 04:27 PM
hello masoom ji

wasl ke baad yahee sochta raha main
ek pal bhee maine kyon pakara nahee hai

appki puri gazal bahut acchi hai.
par appka yeh shayer mujhe behad pasand aaya. sach mai dil ko chu gaya.

mubarakbaad kabool kijiye.

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5th July 2006, 03:31 PM
adab anil ji

aaj kafi din bad is site pr ana hua apka kalam padha hamesha ki tarah lajawab shayad maine time ki kami ki wajah se apka kafi kalam miss kiya uske liye sharminda hoon lakin maine apka jo bhi kalam padhti hoon dil se padhti hoon aur usmain kuch kho si jati hoon
apki rachna zayada taweel hone ki wajah se tamam rachnayen nahi padh payi magar jab ap book publish karayenge tab sari aur itminan se padhungi

hamesha ki tarah chand sher dil ko chu lene wale
"badalne lageen roop abhee se lakeeren
abhee haath usne ye pakara nahee hai"
s ghazal ka ye sher mujhe ghayal kar gaya really tooooooooo goooooooooood

tum hee nahee to kaho kya main gayun
mere geet ka koyee mukhra nahee hai

pyar se khauf hai to jayo abhee se
abhee khel zyada bhee bigra nahee hai
tum kahan pahunchee fikr choro us ka
dil main ye masoom to utara naee hai

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masroofiyat - 5th July 2006, 04:50 PM
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rubeena shukriya - 5th July 2006, 04:54 PM
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