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21st May 2010, 05:36 PM
Apni Zindagi Se Na Kar Juda Mujhe
Ya Fir Zindagi Bhar So Jaane Ki Sja De De
Tumhari Yaado Se Door Jaana Hai Mushkil Ab
Mujhe Bhi Gero Ki Panaaho Me Jaane Ki Wajah De De
Kabhi To Hogi Kisi Ki Inaayat Mujh Par Bhi
Ae Bewafa Jhooti Wafa Jataane Ki Ada De De
Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Gar Mumkin Ho Ske, To Do Pal Ka Sath Hi De
Aur Kuch Pal Zindagi Jeene Ki Rja De De
KAVITA NEGI
Hame ehbab ki lambi qataron sy nahi matlab..........!!
Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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21st May 2010, 05:43 PM
Kavita jee:
namaste!
koShiSh bahot achChhi hay.. yuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee! mehfil ko rauShan karte rahiye!
daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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21st May 2010, 05:48 PM
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Kavita jee:
namaste!
koShiSh bahot achChhi hay.. yuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee! mehfil ko rauShan karte rahiye!
daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
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Shukriya Dhaval ji........................................
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21st May 2010, 05:49 PM
Kavita Ji.....Aapki tehreer ke ehsaas acche lage mujhe.....kuch lines badi ho gai...kahi kahi qaafiye me gadbad bhi lagi mujhe....woh sab ab likhte likhte aur samajhte samajhte theek ho jayega....koshish acchi ki hai aapne....aage aur behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen....khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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21st May 2010, 06:04 PM
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Originally Posted by naresh_mehra110
Kavita Ji.....Aapki tehreer ke ehsaas acche lage mujhe.....kuch lines badi ho gai...kahi kahi qaafiye me gadbad bhi lagi mujhe....woh sab ab likhte likhte aur samajhte samajhte theek ho jayega....koshish acchi ki hai aapne....aage aur behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen....khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
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Shukriya Naresh ji,,
Mai dhyan rakhungi aage se... aur behtar likhne ki koshish karungi.....
bs... aap sab mera sath isi trah dete rehna........
Regards,
Kavita
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21st May 2010, 06:23 PM
Kavita jee,,
Na jane kyuN mujhe to aapki shayri acchi lagi .. haalaNki kamiya hai .. aur likha bhi kaccha pakka sa hai .. par kahin na kahin is post pe masoomiyat jyuN ki tyuN hai ... mujhe acchi lagi aapki peshkash .. umeed karunga aap Shayri ke qaide seekhne ki koshish karte hue bohat accha likheNgi...
Kunaal
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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21st May 2010, 08:10 PM
Pata nahi kya baat hai jo batein mere dimag me chal rahi hoti hai woh hubahoo lafzo ki shakl me Kunaal saheb ki zubaa.N se ada ho jati hai..........main bas Kunaal saheb ki bato me itna sa addition karuga ke 2nd sher pasandida raha.
Aur Kavita jee aapse guzarish hai ke aap aur mehnat kijiye......jaisa Kunaal saheb ne kaha yaqeenan aapki shayri me aur nikhaar aayega.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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22nd May 2010, 10:08 AM
Kunaal nd Sajid Ghayel ji,
aap dono ko bahut bahut dhanyawad...........
koshish abhi jaari hai aur mai behater likhne ki puri koshish karungi......
bas aap log mera sath dete rahiye.... meri kamiya mujhe btaate rahiye.. taki mai usme sudhar la sku.........
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22nd May 2010, 10:31 AM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Apni Zindagi Se Na Kar Juda Mujhe
Ya Fir Zindagi Bhar So Jaane Ki Sja De De
Tumhari Yaado Se Door Jaana Hai Mushkil Ab
Mujhe Bhi Gero Ki Panaaho Me Jaane Ki Wajah De De
Kabhi To Hogi Kisi Ki Inaayat Mujh Par Bhi
Ae Bewafa Jhooti Wafa Jataane Ki Ada De De
Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Gar Mumkin Ho Ske, To Do Pal Ka Sath Hi De
Aur Kuch Pal Zindagi Jeene Ki Rja De De
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Kavita jee,
namaskkar,
bus itna hi kahuNgi ke:
"gar tujhe pasaNd nahi,mera tere thread per repyly karna,
Tu likhna mat chhoD,bus mujhe reply na karne ki vajah de de.."
bahut bahut khoob.
Yeh Shuruwat hai.....to aage to aap bahut accha likhenGi. Aisa mujhe vishvas hai.
duao.n ke sath,
Apki Dost
Ritu
"Life laughs at you when you are unhappy...
Life smiles at you when you are happy..
But,
Life salutes you when you make others happy!!"
# Feel The Difference #
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22nd May 2010, 11:11 AM
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Originally Posted by Kavita Negi
Apni Zindagi Se Na Kar Juda Mujhe
Ya Fir Zindagi Bhar So Jaane Ki Sja De De
Tumhari Yaado Se Door Jaana Hai Mushkil Ab
Mujhe Bhi Gero Ki Panaaho Me Jaane Ki Wajah De De
Kabhi To Hogi Kisi Ki Inaayat Mujh Par Bhi
Ae Bewafa Jhooti Wafa Jataane Ki Ada De De
Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Gar Mumkin Ho Ske, To Do Pal Ka Sath Hi De
Aur Kuch Pal Zindagi Jeene Ki Rja De De
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bhout khoob kavita ji .........achci koshish hai ..aisay hi likhti rahiyega .....god bless u ........aapka vichitra
Yeh manjilen yeh rastay mushkilo bhari yeh dager.....
Tu nahin hai mere sath to mushkilo ka hai safer......
Tham lay tu mera daman meri khushiyan nahi hai koi.....
Na meri manjil na mera karwaan na humsafer hai koi............
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22nd May 2010, 11:20 AM
Ritu ji,
Aapka dil se shukriya ki aap yaha aai.... aur reply kiya......... mujhe pasand hai jab koi mujhe aur acha likhne ke liye prerit karta hai......... aur mujhe bilkul b bura nahi lgta........smjhane ki liye hi sahi... itna to hai aap sab mujhe par dhyaan to de rhe ho...... Aap sab ka pyar aur sath isi trah milta rhe to mai jarur acha likhungi......
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22nd May 2010, 11:29 AM
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bhout khoob kavita ji .........achci koshish hai ..aisay hi likhti rahiyega .....god bless u ........aapka vichitra
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Vichitra ji,
Bahut bahut shukriya................
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27th May 2010, 12:17 AM
kavita ji,
aapke ehsaas achhe lage, byaN karne ka tariqa bhi achha laga...
likhti rahiye, jo kuchh khamiyaN nazar aa rahi haiN....vo sirf likhne se hi jayeNgi...
aapke paas sochne ki zameen hai, alfaaz bhi haiN...koshish zari rakhiyega....
meri daad qubuul kijiyega...
aapka dost,
vikram....
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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27th May 2010, 12:58 PM
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kavita ji,
aapke ehsaas achhe lage, byaN karne ka tariqa bhi achha laga...
likhti rahiye, jo kuchh khamiyaN nazar aa rahi haiN....vo sirf likhne se hi jayeNgi...
aapke paas sochne ki zameen hai, alfaaz bhi haiN...koshish zari rakhiyega....
meri daad qubuul kijiyega...
aapka dost,
vikram....
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Vikram ji,
Aapki daad dil se qubool hai ji.......... koshish zari rahegi.....!!!
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27th May 2010, 09:06 PM
kavita ji kese hai app?
apki gazal aaj pehli baar padhi aur dil me utar gayi.
kyu ki me itni achi gazal likh nahi sakta magar kisi ko ache se padh sakta hu.
apki ye line muje bahut hi pasnad aayi hai.
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
khush rahiye hamesha dua ke sath
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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28th May 2010, 10:45 AM
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kavita ji kese hai app?
apki gazal aaj pehli baar padhi aur dil me utar gayi.
kyu ki me itni achi gazal likh nahi sakta magar kisi ko ache se padh sakta hu.
apki ye line muje bahut hi pasnad aayi hai.
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
khush rahiye hamesha dua ke sath
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m fine dinesh ji......
aapne mujhe padha aur saraaha,,,,, iske liye dil se shukriya.....
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28th May 2010, 10:53 AM
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Apni Zindagi Se Na Kar Juda Mujhe
Ya Fir Zindagi Bhar So Jaane Ki Sja De De
Tumhari Yaado Se Door Jaana Hai Mushkil Ab
Mujhe Bhi Gero Ki Panaaho Me Jaane Ki Wajah De De
Kabhi To Hogi Kisi Ki Inaayat Mujh Par Bhi
Ae Bewafa Jhooti Wafa Jataane Ki Ada De De
Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Gar Mumkin Ho Ske, To Do Pal Ka Sath Hi De
Aur Kuch Pal Zindagi Jeene Ki Rja De De
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kavitajee
radhe radhe
bade sundar ahsaas hain.......dil se daad.........yun hi likhti rahen sudhaar apne aap aa jaayega........prem ke dard ko vyakt karna aasaan nahi hai
duaon ke saath
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28th May 2010, 10:58 AM
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kavitajee
radhe radhe
bade sundar ahsaas hain.......dil se daad.........yun hi likhti rahen sudhaar apne aap aa jaayega........prem ke dard ko vyakt karna aasaan nahi hai
duaon ke saath
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Shukriya Ishq ji.........
Mai bahut khush hu ki aapne mujhe padha aur saraaha...... mujhe aapki sabhi najam pasand hai....jo ab tak maine padhi hai yaha.....
Dil se shukriya....
Kavita
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29th May 2010, 02:55 PM
Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Ehsaas acche haiN Kavita ji.............
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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29th May 2010, 03:25 PM
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Mai Yaad Me Teri Tadpu Na Raat Bhar
Tu Mujhe Bhool Jaane Ki Khata De De
Tu Mjhse Door Jaane Ki Koshish Na Kar
Bas Mujhe Paas Na Aane Ki Wajah De De
Ehsaas acche haiN Kavita ji.............
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Dhanyawaad Zainy ji,,,,,
aapko yaha dekh kar khushi hui......
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31st May 2010, 08:15 AM
Kavita jee,
Ek aur bahut hi aachi ghazal ....
likhtii rahe...
take care
duaaon ke saath
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mandeep
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31st May 2010, 10:21 AM
Shukriya Mann ji............................
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8th September 2010, 07:11 PM
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Kabhi To Hogi Kisi Ki Inaayat Mujh Par Bhi
Ae Bewafa Jhooti Wafa Jataane Ki Ada De De
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hmmmm....Kavita mujhe to yakeen hi nahi ho raha hai k ye tumne likha hai...phri wo kavita koon hai jise main janta hoon...
waise tumhe dekh kar esa lagta to nahi hai k tum itni dil-jali ho
mujhe ye sher bahut pasand aaya hai....
shayri-e-dard se bahar nikal kar bhi kuch likho...
a ur haan....taliyaaN tap..tap...tap...specially tumhare liye tumhe bahut pasand hai na
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9th September 2010, 02:16 PM
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Thanx secret ji, Tap tap taaliyoo ke liye Aise hi tap tap krte rahiye...
Shayri-e-dard se bahar bhi likhungi.. abhi w8 kro...
KAVITA NEGI
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Jo dil sy hamara ho hame wo ik shaksh kaafi he......!!
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