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School Janay Ka Phir Wakt Aya (Part I) - 16th March 2006, 06:36 PM

Piary bacho (apny ami Aboo kay)

Kafi arsay say kohih kar raha tha k kuch bacho kay liye likho
magar har dafa naakam raha..
is martaba aupar waly nay yaka-yak(ek dam say)
20 min may he necahy di hui Nazam sujha(samjha di, bata di) di
bachi kay liye hay isi liye bhoot he asan alfaz istamal huy hay,

===========================================

School janay ka phir waqt aya,
Sooraj _tu __nay _q _jagaya ?

Mithi neend kuch sonay day-ta
Ek din _chothi _hoo nay day-ta

Lo ami nay sab Kharrdkia kholi
Naam _mira _lay _K _yeh _boli

Autho _Aankhy _kholo _betay
Bistar _chordho _q _ho laytay

Nashta maiz pay tayar parda hay
Saath-badami doodh rakaha hay

Ami _gai _istari _kar _nay wardi
Ankhy _miny _phir _band _kar-le

Bus _ka _wat _nazdeek _jo _aya
Kambal phenka, nashata dabaya

Phonchi _bus dar _par _jo _miray
baki _kuch _kaam rhay gay miray

Ami ko salam kar na may bhoola
Phir _Din _acha, _Q hoo ta pura

Girta _pardh ta, _bus may phoncha
Jaib may moza, tha haat may joota

Dost nay _khisak kay jaga banai
Betha jo _saans may _saans Aii


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baat kuch lag ta hay k agay bardhni chi hay
soch ta hoo is ka dosra part bhi likhoo ga
magar kitni jaldi likhoo ga ya nahi pata

ap ko kay si lagi,
aur is kay bary may ya is kay 2nd part kay bary may koi sujahoo(Idea),,
hoo tw zaroor bataye ga

Correct me if i am wrong at any place

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16th March 2006, 06:44 PM

School janay ka phir waqt aya,
Sooraj _tu __nay _q _jagaya ?

Mithi neend kuch sonay day-ta
Ek din _chothi _hoo nay day-ta

Lo ami nay sab Kharrdkia kholi
Naam _mira _lay _K _yeh _boli

Autho _Aankhy _kholo _betay
Bistar _chordho _q _ho laytay


Janaabb....

Kya baat kahi hai...aap bacchon ki baat karte ho... mere to aaj bhi yehi haal hain... office jaana hota hai... maa awaaz lagaati hain... betaa uthha jaa.....main kehta hooo maa... 10 min aur sone do...Lol....

Bahut hi pyaari nazm likhi hai aapne...mujhe bahut pasand aayi...Likhte rahiye aise hi


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16th March 2006, 07:15 PM

Nice guy ....

huh ... akhir maine padh hi li .. ek baat kehni hai par... likha to bohat accha hai .. par yakeen manoge poore 10 min lage padhne maiN ..! pata hai kyuN ??? tumhari mis spell ki wajah se ... yaar please hindi dhang se likho ... kitni pyari nazm ka maza kharaab kar diya tha tumne ... par padh liya jab bohat acchi lagi ....

bata deta huN kaisi mis spell

jaise:-

School janay ka phir waqt aya,
Sooraj _tu __nay _q _jagaya ?


isme JANAY likha hai ... ye JANE ya JANEY ho sakta hai..
aise hi TU__NAY... ki jaGah TUNE ya TOONE hota hai ...


aise hi aage bhi bohat jagah hai ,.,... jaise KHARRDKIA... its KHIRDKIYAN...

& MIRA tht was MERA....

so improve in this field .. aur aise hi pyara pyara likhte raho ... accha lagta hai ...

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16th March 2006, 07:21 PM

Pulkit_gupta je,

Aap nay bilkul theek farmaya..
kay aj bhi bhoot say logo ki ya he rooteen hay,

dil jooi kay liye.. shukria..
jee may puri kohih karo ga kay ainda bhi
bacho kay liye likho..
q k in ko hum shair aksar bhool ja tay hay


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duboya mujhko hone ne, na hota maiN to kya hota ?
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Fiqray farda na karo, Mahy-e-ghamy-e-dosh raho

Naly Bul Bul K suno aur hamatan Gosh Raho
Hum-nawa may bhi koi gul ho k khamosh raho ?
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16th March 2006, 07:26 PM

sacccha_pyar je,

Aap nay 100% theek kaha.. kay mira likha pardh na
joo-e-sheer (sher ka doodh) lanay kay bara bar hay

aksar mujh say logo ki ya he shekayat rahi hay
isi liye soch ta hoo post kar nay say phely ap jisay
senior logo say correction kar wa lia karo,
magar phir mari waja say ap ka kitna time kharab hoo ga
ya hi soch kar.. jaysi bhi hoo te hay post kar day ta hoo

agar ap mujh ko apna thora sa demkh khanay ke ijazat day
tw ya joo-e-sheer wala masla aur logo ko darpaish nahi aye ga.

Thank you for indicating my mistake..
i will shurely over come it as much as i can


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Na tha kuchch to KHuda tha, kuchch na hota to KHuda hota
duboya mujhko hone ne, na hota maiN to kya hota ?
(Mirza Ghalib)

Q Zia-Kar Bano, Sooday Faramosh Raho ?
Fiqray farda na karo, Mahy-e-ghamy-e-dosh raho

Naly Bul Bul K suno aur hamatan Gosh Raho
Hum-nawa may bhi koi gul ho k khamosh raho ?
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16th March 2006, 08:05 PM

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bahut pyari nazm likkhi hai aapne.. sacch padhkar bahut accha laga isko


"Mithi neend kuch sonay day-ta
Ek din _chothi _hoo nay day-ta"

aaj bhi college jane ke liye jab subah mein uthti hoon to yahi sochti hoon kaash aaj chutti hoti

aise hi likhte rahiye



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kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan
wo kalaam shayraana hota hai

jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai...


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16th March 2006, 10:33 PM

wow! mr. nice guy....this is juss fabulous...hehe...had me laughing...cuz it happens to me evryday....jus tht...mom drops me off, cuz the bus comes too early....but even then, i have the socks in my hands, the coat carelessly put on, a mouthful of cereal tht im chewing on, and my shoes...hehehe,...and everyday, my mom has to wake me up a million times before i look at the time, see tht its getting late, and strt rushing!

seriously...uve described the morning acts of ALL high schoolers here...we're all lazy...and proud of it

well...nicely written
take care
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jinab nice ji
waqahi parh key bohot mazaa aaya, aap ne kitni yaadain taaza kar di hain, baharhaal merey liye bus wait nahi karti thi khud jaana parta tha, aur agar late ho gaye to naa poochiye!
subha subha sardi mai late ho jaaney ki wajah sey jab haaton par dandey partey hain to un kaa apna hi maza hota hai...... lols
baharhaal apney spellings theek karo, mera hi sar khaa liya karo
apna khayal rakhna
ALLAH hafiz


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Re: School Janay Ka Phir Wakt Aya (Part I) - 18th March 2006, 02:18 PM

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School jaane ka phir waqt aaya,
Soraj _tu __ne _q _jagaya ?

Mithi neend kucch sonee deta
Ek din _chootti _hone deta

Lo ammii ne sab Khidkiyaana kholi
Naam _mera _lee _K _yeh _boli

utho _Aankhe _kholo _bete
Bistar _chordo _q _ho letee

Nashta maiz pay tayaar pada hai
Saath-badami doodh rakhaa hai

Ammii _gaii _isstiri _kar _ne wardi
Ankhe _maine_phir _band _kar-lii

Bus _ka _waqt _nazdeek _jo _aaya
Kambal phenka, nashata dabaya

Pahonchi _bus dar _par _jo _mere
baki _kucch _kaam reh gaye mere

Ammi ko salam kar na main bhoola
Phir _Din _achcha, _Q hoo ta pura

Girta _padta ta, _bus may pahonchaa
Jaib main moza, tha haath main joota

Dost ne _khisak kee jagah banaii
Bethaa jo _saans main _saans Aii


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test tha jo yaad nahie tha--
yadd kia jo woo bhool gaya tha--
ab too maira haal bora tha--
math ka teacher sakht bara tha--
khial main moola bakhsh khara tha---
salam jo maa`n ko ---na kia tha--
tab hi desk per ---woo khada tha--


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nice guy!
app nay kaha is poetry per kuch send karien too-------- is liye main nay koshish ki app ki poetry ko agy barhany ki---
ab app ki bari hay-----
good luck


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23rd March 2006, 09:52 AM

janab

hum kya kahen ab hume to pata hai nahi tha ki koi itna achha bhi likh sakta hai jane kaise ye hamari aankho se aojhal rahi par aayi to dil ke kaii taar jhanjhana kar gayi hai

aaj bhi hamari yahi halat hai na jagao suraj hume hume sone ki chahat hai
roj subhe lagta hai kyu tum jaldi aate ho kitne pyari nindiya hai kitni chandni raat hai
hume to sunder sapno mai khone ki aadat hai sunraj tum hume kyu jagate ho

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Re: School Janay Ka Phir Wakt Aya (Part I) - 23rd March 2006, 09:54 AM

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Originally posted by nice_4m_heart
Piary bacho (apny ami Aboo kay)

Kafi arsay say kohih kar raha tha k kuch bacho kay liye likho
magar har dafa naakam raha..
is martaba aupar waly nay yaka-yak(ek dam say)
20 min may he necahy di hui Nazam sujha(samjha di, bata di) di
bachi kay liye hay isi liye bhoot he asan alfaz istamal huy hay,

===========================================

School janay ka phir waqt aya,
Sooraj _tu __nay _q _jagaya ?

Mithi neend kuch sonay day-ta
Ek din _chothi _hoo nay day-ta

Lo ami nay sab Kharrdkia kholi
Naam _mira _lay _K _yeh _boli

Autho _Aankhy _kholo _betay
Bistar _chordho _q _ho laytay

Nashta maiz pay tayar parda hay
Saath-badami doodh rakaha hay

Ami _gai _istari _kar _nay wardi
Ankhy _miny _phir _band _kar-le

Bus _ka _wat _nazdeek _jo _aya
Kambal phenka, nashata dabaya

Phonchi _bus dar _par _jo _miray
baki _kuch _kaam rhay gay miray

Ami ko salam kar na may bhoola
Phir _Din _acha, _Q hoo ta pura

Girta _pardh ta, _bus may phoncha
Jaib may moza, tha haat may joota

Dost nay _khisak kay jaga banai
Betha jo _saans may _saans Aii


=============================================

baat kuch lag ta hay k agay bardhni chi hay
soch ta hoo is ka dosra part bhi likhoo ga
magar kitni jaldi likhoo ga ya nahi pata

ap ko kay si lagi,
aur is kay bary may ya is kay 2nd part kay bary may koi sujahoo(Idea),,
hoo tw zaroor bataye ga

Correct me if i am wrong at any place

Do comment it only cost u a Min. (It help in improving)
very good bro its very beautifully expressed


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Re: School Janay Ka Phir Wakt Aya (Part I) - 13th April 2006, 10:45 PM

wow its really excellent.................those were days.........

keep sharing such beutiful poetries.
bye and take care
passionate............

i like to share a beutiful thoughts related to school,hope u like it........

Gone are the days, ...........but not the memories

Gone are the days
When the school reopened in June,
And we settled in our new desks and benches.

Gone are the days
When we queued up in book depot,
And got our new books and notes.

Gone are the days
When we wanted two Sundays and no Mondays, yet
Managed to line up daily for the morning prayers.

Gone are the days
We learnt writing with slates and pencils, and
progressed
To fountain pens and ball pens and then micro tips.

Gone are the days
We began drawing with crayons and evolved to
Colour pencils and finally sketch pens.

Gone are the days
We started calculating first with tables and then
with
Clarkes tables and advanced to calculators and
computers.

Gone are the days
When we chased one another in the corridors in
Intervals,
And returned to the classrooms drenched in sweat.

Gone are the days
When we had lunch in classrooms, corridors,
Playgrounds, under the trees and even in cycle sheds.


Gone are the days
When all the colours in the world,
Decorated the campus on the Second Saturdays.

Gone are the days
When a single P.T. period in the week's Time Table,
Was awaited more eagerly than the monsoons.

Gone are the days
When cricket was played with writing pads as bats,
And Neckties and socks rolled into balls.

Gone are the days
When few played "kabadi" and "Co-Co" in scorching
sun,
While others simply played "book cricket" in the
confines of
classroom.

Gone are the days
Of fights but no conspiracies,
Of Competitions but seldom jealousy.

Gone are the days
When we used to watch Live Cricket telecast,
In the opposite house in Intervals and Lunch breaks.

Gone are the days
When few rushed at 3:45 to
"Conquer" window seats in our School bus.

Gone are the days
While few others had "Big Fun", "pulippu muttai",
"gulfi ice", "seeval ice !" and "pepsi !" at 4o
Clock.

Gone are the days
Of Sports Day, and the annual School Day ,
And the one-month long preparations for them.

Gone are the days
Of the stressful Quarterly, Half Yearly and Annual
Exams,
And the most enjoyed holidays after them.

Gone are the days
Of tenth and twelfth standards, when we
Spent almost the whole year writing revision tests.

Gone are the days
We learnt, we enjoyed, we played, we won, we lost,
We laughed, we cried, we fought, we thought.

Gone are the days
With so much fun in them, so many friends,
So much experience, all this and more.

Gone are the days
But not the memories, which will be
Lingering in our hearts for ever and ever and
Ever and ever and
Ever


chand ho pari ho ya koi afshara
pyar kare jo hume sone sa khara
jiski ankhon me ho pyar hi pyar bhara
me uska "veer" wo meri "zarra"

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14th April 2006, 12:30 AM

ismail ji,
sach main school ke wo din yaad gaye....school aur bahar ki dunya main jo ek imp cheez missin hain wo hain innocence...
aur aapki ye post innocence se bhari hain.shukria ise post karne ka...



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ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare


jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare


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ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare


duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko
duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare



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