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10th July 2006, 01:44 PM
aah kiije magar latiif-tariin
lab tak aa kar dhuaa.N na ho jaaye --Jigar Moradabaadi Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li Khush dekh kar tujhe pyaar aaya thaa bahut Beikhtiyaari mein humne jashn-e-raat kar li Aarzoo-e-jahaan bus mile tujhko Raat ki raat mein Rab se bhi baat kar li Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Sulgaakar mujhe sard aag se tuune Ik ik zakhm se mere, mulakaat kar li Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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10th July 2006, 02:03 PM
Khush dekh kar tujhe pyaar aaya thaa bahut Beikhtiyaari mein humne jashn-e-raat kar li Aarzoo-e-jahaan bus mile tujhko Raat ki raat mein Rab se bhi baat kar li Wah............bohat khoob Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li VEry very nice.........kuch jayada hi ache lage ye sher Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li maqtaa dumdaar ho to poori ghazal apne aap dumdaar ho hi jati haiN Paras jee ek behad khoobsurat ghazal aapne likhi haiN.Har sher dil ko chhu raha haiN..saath hi saath dard sr bhare ehsaas bhi bohat pyaare haiN... shukriyah itna acha likhne k liye kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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10th July 2006, 02:17 PM
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Namaskar ..! bahut acchi gazal likhi hai appney. Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li bahut khoob! Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li u r great..........! etne badiya shayri ke liye meri aur se mubarakbaad kbool kijiye.  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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10th July 2006, 02:38 PM
Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu
Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Bohot acche.... kya baat hai madame.. yeh sher accha lagaa... yunn lagaa jaise ek premikaa apne sang-dil sanam se keh rahi hai.. ho sakta hai peRh ke niche..ya deewaar se tekaa liye hue dono baiThe ho.. ya rote rote khat likhte hue....lekin aakhein DubDubaayee huee... Likhte rahiye... Talib. |
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10th July 2006, 03:04 PM
Hai paras ji....lot of love - hope u will fine.
paras ji aapke kalaam to bas kya kahe dil cheer kar rakh dete hai...itni tez dhaar hai aapke aashaaro me ki dil ka dard mano saamne aaker bichh jata hai aur ankho ko nam kar deta hai...aapke kalaam to hame bhi kuchh likhne ko mazboor kar dete hai...aur ham b sochte hai ki ham b kya apne gam ko is tareh se shabdo me dhaal kar khud ko sakoon nahi pahucha sakte...fir koshish kiye bina hi ham aapke kalaam ko padh kar apne man ko samjhate hai ki yahi to hm b kehna chahte hai...so lol mano ham keh rahe hai..aur yahi keh kar hi sakoon pane ki koshish karte rehte hai...such me aapke shabdo ki talwaar hamare gamo ko chhed jati hai.... Lol paras ji aapka kalaam padh kar aapki lines per milti julti guftgu hamne b kar di hai....hope u wil like it...aur bura lage to pls. maaf karna... Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li - ARMAAN MILA DIYE KHUD K HI KADMO TALE.. AB TO JAANE-JANA HAM SE BAAT KAR LO.. Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li - HAM MAR NA JAAYE TADAF TADAF KAR U HI.. AB TO APNI JUBA SE BAS EK BAAR IKRAR KAR LO... Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li - MUJHE KHAAK ME MILA KAR KYA MILEGA TUMHE.. APNE AGOSH ME CHHUPAR BS EK BAR HAME PYAR KAR LO Sulgaakar mujhe sard aag se tuune Ik ik zakhm se mere, mulakaat kar li - SULGAO NA...AAZMAAO NA MUJE IS KADER APNE PYAR ME.. ZAKHM ROTE HAI...KABR ME JANE SE PEHLE MULAKAT KAR LO.. Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li - LUTA CHUKE HAI TERE PEHLOO ME TAMAAM KAAYNAAT.. HAME EK BAAR MAAF KAR DO...YA IS ZINDGI SE RAVAANA KAR DO... Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li - LO TAMANNAO KI LAASH LIYE CHAL DI HAI ZINDGI... BHASM KAR LIYA KHUD KO..AB TO MUJ SUHAGAN KA SHRINGAR KAR DO... always urs... |
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10th July 2006, 04:09 PM
Namaskaar Paras Ji
Aapki is khubsoorat peshkash ko fir se parhkar bahaut accha laga. Ab isse aapne likha hai tow laazmi hai asardaar hogi. Isi tarah likhtey rahiyega. 
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10th July 2006, 07:48 PM
Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch
Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li Namaskar Paras Ji Aapki har post par aa kar ek bahut khoobsurat rachna dekhney ko milti hay....It brings a smile ....This one too is beautiful.......Beautiful words Safer mein dhuup to hogi....isliye tere yaad sath kar li.....really touching words...hamare daad kabul kijeyega..Keep writing take care |
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11th July 2006, 08:18 PM
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ek sher mere taraf se bhee ummeed hai aap ko pasand aayeGa.. Adam-e-maujuudgi-e-ekhlaas-e-parastaar meiN, ziinat-e-charkh-e-Hayaat,aalam-e-aaKhirat kar li.. Adam-e-maujuudgi: Gair haazirii Ekhlaas: Muhabbat Parastaar: Lover Ziinat: khoobsuurati Charkh e hayaat: Jeevan Chakr Aalaam e aakhirat: zahannum saa -Mayank |
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12th July 2006, 01:56 AM
Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne
Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li paras dd. Bahut achha likha hain, daad kubul karna. keep writting. take care! |
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12th July 2006, 06:31 AM
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sabhi sher bhaut khoob the ye do apni hi baat kahte lage aapko padhna bhauta achha lagata raha hai aaj bhi wahi hai aapki shrdh 
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12th July 2006, 10:54 AM
meri behna
Sulgaakar mujhe sard aag se tuune Ik ik zakhm se mere, mulakaat kar li Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li is tarah ke ashaar jab koee kehne lage to "koee batlaayo ke hem batlaayein kyaa" behad khoobsurat andaaz mein nihaayet takleef de kaifiyet ko bayaan kerna ek kohna mashq shayer isi tarah kerta hai. meri bharpoor daad qubool karo. bas na jaane bhai hone ke naate dil pareshaan ho jaataa hai jab behan is tarah ke ashaar kehti hai. meri dua hai ke tum hamesha khush raho, aabaad raho aur her fikr aur pareshaani se duur raho. musharrafhusain |
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12th July 2006, 04:40 PM
bahut achhe paras di aise hi likhte rahiye
bahut saari daaaaaaaaaaaaad haazir hai aap ke is khubsurat kalaam par regards manu |
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13th July 2006, 11:56 AM
Pae Lagu my Everluvly Guru Ji,
U r n will always b the ultimate. I've read so many of u're works n am always left in utter amazement at the beauty n depth with which u write this one being no exception. Do keep blessing us with more so. Salim If there are no tears in the eyes, there will be no rainbow in the soul Happiness is a butterfly, which, when pursued, is always just beyond your grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly, may alight upon you. We come to love not by finding a perfect person but by learning to see an imperfect person perfectly |
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13th July 2006, 04:05 PM
Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li
Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li KYA BAAT HAI SAHIBA...!!! WAH...!!! Khush dekh kar tujhe pyaar aaya thaa bahut Beikhtiyaari mein humne jashn-e-raat kar li AAAHEEYEEEE...KAMAAL HAI..!!! Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li WAH...>!!! Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li KIS KIS SHER KI TAAREEF KARUN?????? Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Sulgaakar mujhe sard aag se tuune Ik ik zakhm se mere, mulakaat kar li OHHHHH NO !!! Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li UFFF...YEH DIL HAI KI DIYASILAI ??? SORRRY SIS Darsal tum itna gamgeen likhi ho ki mujhe tumhare gam ke dariya ko paar karne ke liye majaak ki kishti par majbooran sawaar hona pada...khair....magar ek baat kahunga...aaj beshaq aap Jigar saheb ki jamin par apni gazal ki imaarat taamir karti hai,,,kal dekhiyega kitne log aapke sheron ki jamin par apne gharondein banane ki hasrat mein koshishein karte milenge.... meri daad kubool kariye....khush rhaiye...waise aap ka andaaj e bayaan kaafi kuch gam-e-lashkar saahiba jaisa hone laga hai...kahin in dono lashkaron ki jung ka maidaan yeh shayri site na ban jaye.......nahin to bahoot khoon-kharaba hoga...itna gam kaise sambhalegi yeh site??? -MANOJ karte hai jo "kureel" se gila karte rahein. |
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14th July 2006, 07:09 AM
Dosto...
mujhe lagta hai main apne ghamgeen sheron se aap logon ka dil hee dukhaati hoon...gar zindagi ko chupke se bahaar chuu jaaye...tau meri bhi kalam dagmaga kar, kuchh khushi mein, kuchh be-sudh ho kar...apne aap likhne lagegi...lekin wo samaa kab aayega...uska intezzaar karoongi...tabhi kalam uthaaongi...aur aapse milne aa jaaongi...aap sab yoonhi iss shayri com ki raunak banaaye rakhiye...haan aapke kalaam padhoongi zaroor... mujhe behad pyaar aur izzat mili hai yahan...bhooloongi nahin...luv you all...cheers! gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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28th July 2006, 03:24 PM
Ik qatre ki suurat kaayenaat kar li
Ik lamhe mein humne basar hayaat kar li Khush dekh kar tujhe pyaar aaya thaa bahut Beikhtiyaari mein humne jashn-e-raat kar li Kyaa baat hai.... Aarzoo-e-jahaan bus mile tujhko Raat ki raat mein Rab se bhi baat kar li Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li wellll said... Safar mein dhuup na ho yeh soch Shajar-e-saayadaar teri yaad saath kar li Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li Waaaaaaaah... this one is tooo good... Sulgaakar mujhe sard aag se tuune Ik ik zakhm se mere, mulakaat kar li Luta kar tere pehloo mein sab apna Tere teeron ki seene pe saugaat kar li ufff...kya baat kahi hai... Lau hasraton ki bujh gayi jab ‘paras’ Jalaayaa dil apna, chaandni raat kar li waaahhh... Dearest Guruji, Der se aaya is ghazal par tumhari ghazal mere aaye bin kahan poori hoti... Bahut hi khoobsurat ghazal hai yeh.... really beautiful expression.... Dard pe thhi but i really liked it... Meri daad kubool karna... ab jaldi se nayi ghazal likho koi... bahut din ho gaye... Do take care of urself too... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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28th July 2006, 07:22 PM
paras ji,
kya kehne aapke.bahut acha lagta hai aapka likha padhne ko.badi der se nazar padi aapki gazal par.jazbaaton ko alfaaz dena koi aap se seekhe. yeh sher bahut ache lage mujhe,choo gaye dil ko. Aarzoo-e-jahaan bus mile tujhko Raat ki raat mein Rab se bhi baat kar li Hasraton se phir munh pher liya humne Naam apne veeraani-e-khwaahishaat kar li Mujhe khaak karke hansta raha tuu Dil khol ke humne bhi barsaat kar li is mehfil mai sada yunhin jagmagaate rahiye. gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi?? --akelijaan-- |
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