Kuch sher's by karan.q

[karan q]

Poetrys of my heart

Teri muhobbat ko her saans jiya kerta houn
Butkade me baithker tujhe yaad kiya kerta houn
Khuli aankho se akser dekhta houn tere khwaab
Khud ko haseen dhokha her raat diya kerta houn,

Butkada;-mandir

Tere gesu ki khlaaon se nikalta hoga
Chaand bebaak ghtaaon se nikalta hoga
Dasht me ik sadak mere khwaabon me bani hai
Chaand her raat in raahon se nikalta hoga,

Khlaayen:-antriksh
Dasht:-jangle

Bade bade toofano me meri hasti nahi doobi,
Shabh bhar panaah de mujhko mai tere jism me doobonga
Umr bhar kaati hai tere khwaabon ke saaye me
Tere husn ka kaayal houn,tere husn me doobonga,

shabh :-raat

Meri hasrat mere khyaal kuch maang rahe shabh se
Badi aasaan si baat thee,keh paaye nahi labh se,
Meri jaan,meri ruh mere jajbaat machal utthe
Teri nazar ne meri nazar ko choom liya jab se,

Teri ruh utarti hai meri ruh me to utar jaane de,
Ye zindgi tera kayaash hai,isse marr jaane de,
Tu jo hai,wo tu nahi,sirf tera gumaan hai,
Tera jism ek ehsaas hai,meri baahon me bikhar jaane de

Kayaash:-anumaan,guess

Mehsoos kerta houn to tero or khincha aata houn,
Mere nastar chubohne wala ,tera til he hai shayad
Tere khubsurat seene me ik chor chupa baithaa hai,
Wo chor tere seene me chupa mera dil he hai shayad,

Badnaam galiyon ka gumnaam shayar,
Tere husn ke muhalle me jiye ja raha houn,

Khushiyon ke khzaane pal bhar me he loot liye tumne
Yahaan to maut bhee humko sanam’kishto me milti hai

Karan.q

[$hivani]

hello karanji!!!!!!!

each of the stanzaas in ur composition is excellent!!!!!!!!!! i simply adored ur poem.....and thanx for letting us know the meanings of the difficult words it really makes easy for us to understand....please keep writing...bye 4 now!!!!!!take care!!!!!

[nihharikaa]

nice..................

[karan q]

Got your replly..
These are quite old sher's of mine
I wrote these way back in year 2001.. I wrote sevreal sher's fallowing this pattern but now days since last one year .. i do write nazms and ghazals mostly carrying 5-6 sher's in it
so i left writing 4 line sher's but still i wanted to share these old ones ... Thankx for reading and repllying
aate rahiye .. mehfil sajate rahiye

[devdaas]

karan bhai

kaise ho

dil khush kar diya yaar...
wakai mein bahut acha likha hai aapne...

khaas tor par aapki post ki hui ek thread thi :

"bhoolna ho tujhe aur hum khuda ko bhoolein"

ye to ab bhi mujhe yaad hai.

bahut acha likhte ho...

Keep it up...

take care

Devdaas..


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Hum jaise barbaad dilon ka
jeena kya aur marna kya
aaj teri mehfil se chale hain
kal duniya se chale jayenge...

[karan q]

meri mehfil ko shayri ka maykada keh do ....
darkaar fakat devdaas ki he thee
Na jaane kiss paaro ke gum me chala aaya hai...
Magar itna kafi hai ke wo aaya hai

bhoolna ho tujhe or hum khuda ko bhoolen
ab wo baat nahi hai tujhe bhulane me
qatl ker do magar ye vaada karo
baad qatal tum dafan karoge maykhane me'
accha yaad rakha mere dost
Aate rehna mehfil sajate rehna
izzajat
karan.q

[Rohin]

Bahut khub karan

acha likha hai apne...Yeh jankar ki yeh kafi pehle likhe gaye the mana padega kafi unda shayri hai...

Viase ek baat batayein Gazal aur nazm kaise likh sakte hain aur kya kya dhyan mein rakhna padta hai likhne ke liye...

Pata nahi mein utna likh paoonga ki nahi magar agar jaankari ho to appreciate jyaada kar paaonga.. So please give me some article or somethign where i can learn to write a gazal aur nazm..

Thanks
Rohin

[karan q]

Rohin ..
I wrote a new post.. as rule's of poerty which i've posted in Shayri-e-ustaad... firstly i wrote it here but Then i realize that there must me many more people who may be intrested as well ...
still i m not good enough in giving explination but still atleast you can get some hints .
After reading those.. if you do understand or find something in It you can ask for more:-
izzajat
karan.q