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badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai.....Ghazal -
11th May 2007, 09:29 AM
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
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ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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11th May 2007, 09:46 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
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ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
rab raakha
maikash
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maikash ji namaskaar
kaise hai.n aap, aapne jo "Batalvi Ji" ke liye do sher kahey hai.n dil ko chu gaye....unko padna mujhe bhi bahut accha lagta hai....unhoney ne jo bhi likha hai dil se likha hai.....!
aapki gazal padi, aapke ahsaaso.n ko mahsoos kiya, bahut khoob likha hai...dard to aapke har sher mein be-shumaar milta hai....kaash kisi din aap dard ko bhool kar koi kushi ka geet likhey to mujhe bahut accha lageyga.
har lafaz har sher bahut umda likha hai....par yeh sher dil ko bahut udhas kar gaya.
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
sadha kush raho, har dard aapse door rahey
duao.n ke saath
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यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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11th May 2007, 09:52 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
maikashji punjabi vich v bhut khub likhiya tusee..........dono ashaar bhut wadhiya ne........
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ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
wah janaab bhut wadhia shuruwaat..........bilkul sach kaha aapne......
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
bhut khub jo phoolon ka saudagar ho usko kaanto se kyaa garz...
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
bhut acha khyaal hai......yahi pyaar hai.......
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
wah janaab is share par to bhut bhut saari daad peh hai.....mere khyaal mein ye khyaal hasil-e-gazal raha........bhut khub......
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
maikash ji gazab dhaa rahe ho.......seedha dil mein uttar gyaa,......
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
janaab sandhu sahib nu raj dii sat sri akaal.......kamaal kar chhadiya tusee te bhut umdaa khyaal pesh kite ne......subha subha rouh khush ho gayii........rab kare tusee isay tarha likhde raho........kush meri taraf se....
zakham to diya par nishan bhi nahi hai
ki aadaon mein teri bari saadgii hai
samander mein rehke bhi pyase rahe ham
ki kismat mein apni bass tishnagi hai
rab raakha
maikash
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11th May 2007, 02:29 PM
Dear maikaSh bhaaii,
kaise haiN aap aur tabiyat kaisi hai??? duaa hai kii sab kuchh Theek Thaak ho...
Aap kii ess Ghazal ke baare meiN kya kahuuN bhaaii, lakKt, lakHt jigar kii jhalak saaf nazar aa rahii hai, aur paRhne waale kaa dil ko bhii lakHt lakHt kiye jaa rahii hai... aur ek baat dil se kahta huuN, aap kii yeh Ghazal mujhe aap ke pahle kii ghazaloN par bohat bhaari lagii hai... to aap kii ess behtariiN Ghazal par mera salaam...
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badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
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Kamaal ka matla hai.. daad!
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apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
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kya baat hai bhaaii, khuub ehsaas hai.... phool aur kaaNtoN ka rabt bhii khuub hai..
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yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
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muhabbat ki misaal qaayam kar rahe ho huzuur...daad!
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khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
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kyaa baat hai huzuur.. ek Sher meiN bhi arz karta huuN, aap ke naam yeh,
muhabbat ka ham ko mila falsafaa yeh,
kii,aag-e-dozakh ab muqaddar huaa hai..
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jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
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waah! waah!
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kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
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kya baat hai, ehsaas aur bayaan ke kya kahne, huzuur dil meiN churiyaaN chala rahii hai aap ki Ghazal.
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heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
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mizaaj-e-sitamgar kuchhh aise hii hota hai janaab, verna woh sitamgar bhii kya sitamgar hai jo har pal mizaaj badal le....
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suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
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bhaaaii, ess Sher ne kalejaa noch liya hai.. kahuuNga yehii ki lag jaaye hamaare umr bhii aap ko, aur aap khuub jiyeN, mast raheN hameshaa.. aur yeH ghazal aakhirii nahiiN ek aaghaaz ho naye daur kaa...
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"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
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huzuur, ebb baar to aap ne qayaamat hii le aaye mehfil meiN... jitni taariif kee jaaye kam hai... ess Sher ke Khayaal se ek Sher aay adil meiN.. arz hai aap ke naam...
aalam-e-maikashi meiN bhii kuch sujhaaii nahiiN deta
jaam meiN bhii 'woh' chehra tera dikhaaii nahiiN deta
ess tarah kiya ulfat ne tabah aur dar-ba-dar mujh ko
bajuz-e-maut,raah-e-nijaat-e-gham sujhaaii nahiiN detaa
MaikaSh bhaaii..ek baat bataaaiye, aap kii ess Ghazal ko mayank kii Ghazal kahne ke liye kyaa karna paRegaa.. jee kar raha hai takhallus badalluuN miyaaN.. Bohat hiii pyaari Ghazal hai.. jitni daad dii jaaye kam hai.. yuuN hii mehfil meiN raunaq banaaye rakhiye.... itni khuubsuurat ghazal aap ne mehfil ko nawaaza aur mehfil kiii raunaq afzaayi kee ess ke liye tah-e- dil Shukriyah!... apna Khayaal raKhiye...
Mayank
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11th May 2007, 06:28 PM
maikasH bhaiyaa SSA:
bhaiyaa jab bhii aapkii koYii Ghazal deKHtaa huN to mujHe baRi hii khuShi hoti hai kyuNkii aapke jaZbaatoN aur khayaaloN se ru-b-ru hone kaa maukaa jo miltaa hai ..
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suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
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bhaiyaa ess sher ki jitni bhi taarif karuN kam hai mujHe be-had pasaNd aaYa yeH sher..
ess mukammal aur dilkaSh Ghazal ke liYe meri taraf se dheroN saari mubaarakbaad qabool farmaaYeN.
bhaiyaa ab kaisii hai aapki sehat ..apni sehat kaa khayaal rakhiYeNgaa aur huZ^oor aaraam Z^aroor kareN ..meri duaeN haMeShaa aapkeY saath hai..
apnaa khayaal raKheN aur khuSh raheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
jai shree krishna
aapka
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11th May 2007, 09:17 PM
Bhaaji....
Dil khush kitta ji tussi..
Shiv ji.. ohh taan har punjabi de dil di dhadkan ne.. Apne ghama.n nuu unha ne shabdaan 'ch piro ke amar banaa ditta. Us fankaar nuu mera vii bahut bahut salaam.
Rahi baat aapki ghazal ki, bhai uske tau ham shuru se hi deewane hain.
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
Wah.. kya kahaa hai, matle mein bebasi ka zikr aur yahaan uska saboot
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
Badia hai, isse thodi hassi bhi aayi, kayi baar kismat apne aap par thoda shaq paida kar deti hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
Achha hai.. achaa hai, khayaal bahut pasand aaya
Maqta bhi khoob kaha..
Sabko hi ye ghazal bahut pasand aayi, aise hi ye nazraane pesh karte rahiye
Varinder
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chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai...
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12th May 2007, 01:38 AM
Maikash ji, ssk...
Aaj bade dino baad apki koi gazal padhi. Padha to har sher laa'javaab laga. Bahot hi sundar likha hai apne.
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
Ye do sher! kya kahane inke to. Daad kabuul kijiyega. Likhte rahiye.
Grazie
Pooja
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12th May 2007, 09:12 AM
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kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
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Ustaad aapki kalam ki dhaar aisi hai ki dil ke aar paar ho jaati hai...ek pur-asar nazm aur us par yeh suhaavna sher dil mein ghar kar gaye....
yunhi hum sab par meharbaan rahiYeGaa..
aapka apnaa
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13th May 2007, 01:06 AM
maikash g,
namaskar,
aapki nazm padi, pehle to kuch pal samaj hi nahi aaya, kahan se surwat karun. dard ko is tarah bayan ki hai, k bas dil udaas ho gaya padkar. har lafz ka dard main mehsuus kar sakta hun. padte padte hum, aapke likhe khwaalon mein khi gaye. bahut khub janab.
daad hajir hai, kabul kijiye.
god bless u
manish
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13th May 2007, 07:51 AM
Quote:
Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
.................................................. ....
ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
rab raakha
maikash
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janab maikas sahab
namaskar or ssa
janab kin shwadon main is poori gazal ki tarif karoon samajhiye is prakar ke umda kalam badi mushkil se padne ko milte hian. har ek sher apne aap main mukkmal or jindgii ka falsafa sa bayaa.n karta lagta hai.
poori gazal gunguna ke dekhii bahut pyarii lagii......................
hazaro.n duaao.n ke sath daad hazir hai
shukriyaa
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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14th May 2007, 04:53 AM
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maikash ji namaskaar
kaise hai.n aap, aapne jo "Batalvi Ji" ke liye do sher kahey hai.n dil ko chu gaye....unko padna mujhe bhi bahut accha lagta hai....unhoney ne jo bhi likha hai dil se likha hai.....!
Shiv ki shayad hi aisi koii kavita,Ghazal,geet ya nazm hogi jise padh kar dil reza-reza na hua ho, itna dard,itne se dil meiN dabaa ke rakhna har kisi ke bas ki baat nahiiN, maiN har saal Shiv ki barsi ke din ek punjabi Ghazal ya nazm Shiv ko samarpit karta huuN
aapki gazal padi, aapke ahsaaso.n ko mahsoos kiya, bahut khoob likha hai...dard to aapke har sher mein be-shumaar milta hai....kaash kisi din aap dard ko bhool kar koi kushi ka geet likhey to mujhe bahut accha lageyga.
aapko Ghazal achchii lagi aur aapne mere jazbaat ko izzat bakhshi uske liye shukurguzaar huuN aapka, aur aapke aakhiri misre ke jawaab meiN Javed Akhtar saheb ke do misre aapki nazr:
talkhiyaaN kaise na hoN ash'aar meiN
mujhpe jo guzri, mujhe hai yaad sab!
har lafaz har sher bahut umda likha hai....par yeh sher dil ko bahut udhas kar gaya.
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
daad ka phir se shukriya, aji ismeiN udaas hone waali kaun si baat hai, aana-jaana to laga rehta hai, is baat par bhi ustaad zauq ka ek matla yaad aa gaya , mula'iiza farmaaiye :
laayii hayaat aaye,kazaa le chali, chale
apni khushi se aaye,na apni khushi chale
kamaal ka she'r hai mujhe behadd pasaNd hai
sadha kush raho, har dard aapse door rahey
duao.n ke saath
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duaaoN ka alag se shukriya qabuul kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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15th May 2007, 07:27 PM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
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ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
rab raakha
maikash
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adab maikash ji bahut khubsurat gazal lagi.esi aur bhi gazal ka hume intezar raheyga.unhi likhterahey
khush rahey hamesha
aap ka dost
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18th May 2007, 02:35 PM
Rajveer Sahab Sat Sri Akaal
kamaal taaN tuhaada hai janaab jo is nimaani jehi Ghazal nu tusiiN aapna qeemati waqt kharch karke saraaheya te meri hauNsla-afza'ii keeti.
tuhaadiyaaN mohabbataN da karzdaar haaN
mehr'baani
fateh
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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18th May 2007, 03:18 PM
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Originally Posted by Mayank
Dear maikaSh bhaaii,
kaise haiN aap aur tabiyat kaisi hai??? duaa hai kii sab kuchh Theek Thaak ho...
tabiyat bilkul theek-thaak hai saahab, bohat shukriya
Aap kii ess Ghazal ke baare meiN kya kahuuN bhaaii, lakKt, lakHt jigar kii jhalak saaf nazar aa rahii hai, aur paRhne waale kaa dil ko bhii lakHt lakHt kiye jaa rahii hai... aur ek baat dil se kahta huuN, aap kii yeh Ghazal mujhe aap ke pahle kii ghazaloN par bohat bhaari lagii hai... to aap kii ess behtariiN Ghazal par mera salaam...
ye to badi khushi ki baat hai bhai jo aapko Ghazal is qadar pasaNd aayi, mera kaleja do'gunaa ho gaya sun kar
Kamaal ka matla hai.. daad!
tasleem
kya baat hai bhaaii, khuub ehsaas hai.... phool aur kaaNtoN ka rabt bhii khuub hai..
bottal nayi hai lekin sharaab puraani hi hai miyaaN
muhabbat ki misaal qaayam kar rahe ho huzuur...daad!
daad qubuul hazrat
kyaa baat hai huzuur.. ek Sher meiN bhi arz karta huuN, aap ke naam yeh,
muhabbat ka ham ko mila falsafaa yeh,
kii,aag-e-dozakh ab muqaddar huaa hai..
achcha she'r ataa kiya hai bhai, bohat shukriya
waah! waah!
shukriya!
kya baat hai, ehsaas aur bayaan ke kya kahne, huzuur dil meiN churiyaaN chala rahii hai aap ki Ghazal
duaa hai aapki miyaaN, shukriya
mizaaj-e-sitamgar kuchhh aise hii hota hai janaab, verna woh sitamgar bhii kya sitamgar hai jo har pal mizaaj badal le....
aapki baat bhi theek hai bhai lekin ab socheN zaraa sab kuch luTaane ke baad thodi to narm-mizaaji ki ummiid ghar kar hi jaati hai dil ke kise kone'y meiN, insaan haiN aakhir
bhaaaii, ess Sher ne kalejaa noch liya hai.. kahuuNga yehii ki lag jaaye hamaare umr bhii aap ko, aur aap khuub jiyeN, mast raheN hameshaa.. aur yeH ghazal aakhirii nahiiN ek aaghaaz ho naye daur kaa...
bhai mere apni umr mere kisi kaam ki nahiiN aap apni bhi zaaya hi kareNge mujhe de kar aur mast to chhoTe miyaaN maiN waise bhi rehta huuN, aap fikr mat kijiye. majaaz ka ek she'r suniye :
royeN na abhii ahl-e-nazar haal pe mere
honaa hai abhii mujh ko Kharaab aur zyaadaa
huzuur, ebb baar to aap ne qayaamat hii le aaye mehfil meiN... jitni taariif kee jaaye kam hai... ess Sher ke Khayaal se ek Sher aay adil meiN.. arz hai aap ke naam..
aalam-e-maikashi meiN bhii kuch sujhaaii nahiiN deta
jaam meiN bhii 'woh' chehra tera dikhaaii nahiiN deta
ess tarah kiya ulfat ne tabah aur dar-ba-dar mujh ko
bajuz-e-maut,raah-e-nijaat-e-gham sujhaaii nahiiN detaa
aapki daad mere liye khaas ma'iney rakhti hai, shukurguzaar huuN aapki murravat ka aur aapne jo baNd darj kya hai voh bhi khoob pasaNd aaya
MaikaSh bhaaii..ek baat bataaaiye, aap kii ess Ghazal ko mayank kii Ghazal kahne ke liye kyaa karna paRegaa.. jee kar raha hai takhallus badalluuN miyaaN.. Bohat hiii pyaari Ghazal hai.. jitni daad dii jaaye kam hai.. yuuN hii mehfil meiN raunaq banaaye rakhiye.... itni khuubsuurat ghazal aap ne mehfil ko nawaaza aur mehfil kiii raunaq afzaayi kee ess ke liye tah-e- dil Shukriyah!... apna Khayaal raKhiye...
arrey bhai itni mohabbat se to ko jaan bhi maaNge to maiN inkaar na karuuN is haqeer si Ghazal ki to auqaat hi kya, samajhiye ye Ghazal aapki hui aur dekhiye maqte'y meiN maikash ki jagah "Ghafil" khap bhi khoob raha hai
Mayank
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miyaaN aapki mohabbatoN aur duaaoN ke liye karzdaar rahuuNga aapka
ummiid hai jald mulaqaat hogi
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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11th June 2007, 05:01 AM
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Originally Posted by dhavalrami4you
maikasH bhaiyaa SSA:
bhaiyaa jab bhii aapkii koYii Ghazal deKHtaa huN to mujHe baRi hii khuShi hoti hai kyuNkii aapke jaZbaatoN aur khayaaloN se ru-b-ru hone kaa maukaa jo miltaa hai ..
bhaiyaa ess sher ki jitni bhi taarif karuN kam hai mujHe be-had pasaNd aaYa yeH sher..
ess mukammal aur dilkaSh Ghazal ke liYe meri taraf se dheroN saari mubaarakbaad qabool farmaaYeN.
bhaiyaa ab kaisii hai aapki sehat ..apni sehat kaa khayaal rakhiYeNgaa aur huZ^oor aaraam Z^aroor kareN ..meri duaeN haMeShaa aapkeY saath hai..
apnaa khayaal raKheN aur khuSh raheN
duaoN ke saath ijaazaT
jai shree krishna
aapka
dhaval
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Dhaval miyaaN
namaste
bhai aapki duaa'oN aur mohabbatoN ka ehsaanmaNd huuN
aapne hamesha ki tarah is dafaa bhi dil khol kar hausla afzaa'ii ki so shukriya qabuul kareiN
tabiyat achchi hai,shukriya
aapka PM mila hai uska jawaab kal haazir karuuNga
jai shree krishna
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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22nd June 2007, 09:16 PM
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Originally Posted by ghayalparwana
Bhaaji....
Dil khush kitta ji tussi..
Shiv ji.. ohh taan har punjabi de dil di dhadkan ne.. Apne ghama.n nuu unha ne shabdaan 'ch piro ke amar banaa ditta. Us fankaar nuu mera vii bahut bahut salaam.
Rahi baat aapki ghazal ki, bhai uske tau ham shuru se hi deewane hain.
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
Wah.. kya kahaa hai, matle mein bebasi ka zikr aur yahaan uska saboot
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
Badia hai, isse thodi hassi bhi aayi, kayi baar kismat apne aap par thoda shaq paida kar deti hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
Achha hai.. achaa hai, khayaal bahut pasand aaya
Maqta bhi khoob kaha..
Sabko hi ye ghazal bahut pasand aayi, aise hi ye nazraane pesh karte rahiye
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Sat Sri Akaal bai ji
janaab ek muddat ke baad aapke darshan naseeb hue haiN, khair aaye to haiN yahi bohat badi baat hai
aapne Ghazal pasaNd farmaayi hai uske liye mera shukriya qabuul kareiN aur aapke khat ka jawaab dene meiN hui ta'kheer ke liye muaaf kar dijiyega
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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22nd June 2007, 09:23 PM
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Originally Posted by maikasH
aadaab aur SSA dosto
7 may ko punjabi ke mere mehboob shayar "Shiv Kumar Batalvi" ki barsi thi.
ek punjabi Ghazal likhi hai , uske do she'r Shiv ke naam :
tu hi saeN ik dil da mehram haniya
koyi na puchdaa tere biimaar di
chal manaa uTh kar tayaari vekh taaN
maut boohe 'choN aawaajaaN maardi
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ab urdu Ghazal ki baari, mula'iizaa farmaayeN :
badi khaahisheiN haiN, badi bebasi hai
yahi ziNdagii hai to kya ziNdagi hai
apne to daaman meiN kaaNTe hi kaaNTe
ti'raa shauq phooloN ki saudaagari hai
yahi soch kar Gham uThaate rahe hum
hamaare ye aaNsoo kisi ki khushi hai
khataa ham se kuch to hui hai yaqeenan
jo aise sazaa par sazaa mil rahi hai
jho'lee failaa ke jo maaNgi kisi se
aisi mohabbat bhi kis kaam ki hai
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
rab raakha
maikash
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Bahut Khubsurat!
Dunya ke sitam ka koi hisaab nahi, Lekin meri houslo ka bhi jawaab nahi...
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24th June 2007, 06:36 PM
kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
adaab maikash ji,
aapko padhna to har kisi ki khuwaahish hai,bahut zabardast likhte hain aap.yeh ashaar bahut pasand aaye.yunhin likhte rahen
yun bin bulaaye milne chala aata hai,
gham ko mujh se yeh unsiyat kaisi??
--akelijaan--
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19th September 2007, 06:32 PM
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Maikash ji, ssk...
Aaj bade dino baad apki koi gazal padhi. Padha to har sher laa'javaab laga. Bahot hi sundar likha hai apne.
suno meherbaaN yeh Ghazal akhiri hai
ke saaNsoN ki rehmat ghaRi do ghaRi hai
"maikash" kahaaN aur apna thikaanaa
ya maikadaa hai ya unki gali hai
Ye do sher! kya kahane inke to. Daad kabuul kijiyega. Likhte rahiye.
Grazie
Pooja
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namaste Pooja jee
pehel to aapke khat ka jawaab dene meiN huii ta'khiir ke liye muaafi chahta huuN
baat dar-asl yeh hai jab mera thread forum meiN bohat peeche chala jaata hai to reply karne ka koii fa'iidaa nazar nahiiN aata lekin ab ta'y kiya hai ke dostoN ki muhabbat ka ehteraam karna zaroori hai isliye aa'iiNda mujhse yeh bhool dobara nahiiN hogi
aapne do-ek ash'aar pasaNd farmaaye haiN unke liye ,era shukriya tasleem kijiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:33 PM
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Ustaad aapki kalam ki dhaar aisi hai ki dil ke aar paar ho jaati hai...ek pur-asar nazm aur us par yeh suhaavna sher dil mein ghar kar gaye....
yunhi hum sab par meharbaan rahiYeGaa..
aapka apnaa
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bhai meher'baani to aap jaise dostoN ki hai jo mujh jaise naa'laayiq ko saat'veN aasmaan par biThaa ke rakhte haiN, bohat shukriya
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:36 PM
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maikash g,
namaskar,
aapki nazm padi, pehle to kuch pal samaj hi nahi aaya, kahan se surwat karun. dard ko is tarah bayan ki hai, k bas dil udaas ho gaya padkar. har lafz ka dard main mehsuus kar sakta hun. padte padte hum, aapke likhe khwaalon mein khi gaye. bahut khub janab.
daad hajir hai, kabul kijiye.
god bless u
manish
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musafir saahab
aadaab
go Ghazal ka maqsad to dard-e-dil ko numaayaaN karna hi tha lekin mujhse yeh kehte nahiiN ban raha ke "mujhe khushii huyi" kyoNke 'kisi ki udaasi kisi ka khushii' waala karobaar maiN apne jimme'y nahiiN lena chahta
Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke liye shukriya qabuul farmaaiiye
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:38 PM
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janab maikas sahab
namaskar or ssa
janab kin shwadon main is poori gazal ki tarif karoon samajhiye is prakar ke umda kalam badi mushkil se padne ko milte hian. har ek sher apne aap main mukkmal or jindgii ka falsafa sa bayaa.n karta lagta hai.
poori gazal gunguna ke dekhii bahut pyarii lagii......................
hazaro.n duaao.n ke sath daad hazir hai
shukriyaa
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namaste dilip saahab
bhai ye to aapki dariya-dilii hai jo meri in haqeer Ghazliiyaat ko kisi qaabil samajhte haiN vagarnaa ba'kaul iqbaal :
kahaaN maiN aur kahaaN naKht-e-gul
Ghazal pe apni pasaNdiidagi ki mohar lagaane ke liye shurkurguzaar huuN aapka
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:40 PM
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adab maikash ji bahut khubsurat gazal lagi.esi aur bhi gazal ka hume intezar raheyga.unhi likhterahey
khush rahey hamesha
aap ka dost
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Kashif saahab aadaab
daad aur duaaoN ke liye mashkoor-o-mamnuun huuN aapka
bohat shukriya
rab raakha
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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19th September 2007, 06:41 PM
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Bahut Khubsurat!
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bohat shukriya
maikash
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
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19th September 2007, 06:45 PM
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kahaaN ek dil tha, kahaaN itne Tukde!
tere sadqe, seene meiN raunak badi hai
heere the, patthar baraabar hue haiN
mizaaj-e-sitamgar vahi ka vahi hai
adaab maikash ji,
aapko padhna to har kisi ki khuwaahish hai,bahut zabardast likhte hain aap.yeh ashaar bahut pasand aaye.yunhin likhte rahen
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aapne Ghazal pasaNd ki mujhe khushii hai ke maiN aapki ummiidoN par kharaa utraa huuN, aage bhi yahi kohshish rahegii
pazi'raii ke liye shukurguzaar huuN aapka
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is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai
goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai
maikash
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