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Love mann karta hai.............. - 20th May 2009, 08:06 PM
Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai
   
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21st May 2009, 10:04 AM
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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai
Khanak Ji ! aapke khubsurat ehsaasat padhkar bahut acha laga....mann ko chhu gaye shabdh....aise hi likhte rahiyega.....

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Khanak Ji ! aapke khubsurat ehsaasat padhkar bahut acha laga....mann ko chhu gaye shabdh....aise hi likhte rahiyega.....
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Hi Khanak, bht hi khoobsurat ghazal hai bas kaafiya mei thodi technical fault hai........



Highlighted kaafiya ek dusre se thik tarahse rhyme nhi karte.......

Waise aapke feelings bht achche hain lekin technically correct ghazal in feelings aur thoughts ko aur nikhaar dega........KEEP IMPROVING
ji nazneen................. aap logo ka saath hi improve karegaa
   
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21st May 2009, 03:30 PM
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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai

nice efforts khanak jee...............!!
keep writing..
khush rahiye
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nice efforts khanak jee...............!!
keep writing..
khush rahiye
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thanks rituji.................aapne isse padha aur pasand kiya..... bohat bohat shukriya and plzz call me khanak........... only KHANAK... mujhe achcha lagega......... aapki khanak
   
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thanks rituji.................aapne isse padha aur pasand kiya..... bohat bohat shukriya and plzz call me khanak........... only KHANAK... mujhe achcha lagega......... aapki khanak
its completely my pleasure khanak...................
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Superb Feelings Khanak Jii,

Behad khubsoorat Ahsaas likhe hai aapne, it's so cute
Mind blowing expression and flow of feelings are so good...

Keep writting like this....

But Naaz kii bataon per gour kariye aur Improve karte rahiye..

keep smiling

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Superb Feelings Khanak Jii,

Behad khubsoorat Ahsaas likhe hai aapne, it's so cute
Mind blowing expression and flow of feelings are so good...

Keep writting like this....

But Naaz kii bataon per gour kariye aur Improve karte rahiye..

keep smiling

God bless you..
thankss dear............. and plz na .... y r u all calling me khanak jiiiii.... plzz call me khanak......... aapki 1 choti si stupid si dost........ "ji" and all jaise words se mujhe darr sa lagta hai..........
anyways thankss once again....... with lots and lots of loveeeeeee..... urs khanak
   
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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai
Mann karta hai ke aap yuhi likthe rahe
shabdo ko yuhi sajaathe rahe
dil ke jazbaat agar nikle na kalam se
woh shayar hi kya woh shayri hi kya.

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Mann karta hai ke aap yuhi likthe rahe
shabdo ko yuhi sajaathe rahe
dil ke jazbaat agar nikle na kalam se
woh shayar hi kya woh shayri hi kya.

Excellent. bahut accha likha hai. keep it up
thanku afrooz............ its good k aapko pasand aaya..... hope hardum u hi pasand aaye........ aapki khanak
   
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21st May 2009, 11:34 PM
..Kya bat hai khanak ji..
diL khus kar diya... bahut badiya hai..lajawab hai...
Hume yeh 3 sher bahut pasand aaye.. kisi ke diL ka bayan karne ko yeh theen sher kafi hai.. hahhaa

bahut khoob.. yuh hi mehfiL sajate rahiye..

-- OMi

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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
   
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..Kya bat hai khanak ji..
diL khus kar diya... bahut badiya hai..lajawab hai...
Hume yeh 3 sher bahut pasand aaye.. kisi ke diL ka bayan karne ko yeh theen sher kafi hai.. hahhaa

bahut khoob.. yuh hi mehfiL sajate rahiye..

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22nd May 2009, 11:34 AM
Hey...
do not call me Guruji...
coz m not.. m still learning... aur waise bhi.. yeh word... kisi bade insaan pe suit karta hai.. not me..

Simply call me OMi... dat single word... speakzz alot abt me ..

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kyaa baat hai guruji.......... aapko hamari baatei pasand aayi......... subeh subeh khushi mil gayi........

Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
   
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Hey...
do not call me Guruji...
coz m not.. m still learning... aur waise bhi.. yeh word... kisi bade insaan pe suit karta hai.. not me..

Simply call me OMi... dat single word... speakzz alot abt me ..
ab hamare liye toh aap guruji hi ban gaye hai........ plzz mujhe daily lessons diya kariye...... i'll luv it
   
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22nd May 2009, 02:54 PM
Dear Khanak,
bahot achha tahreer likha hai tumne .....isse padh kar mujhe kuchh fasaane yaad aagaye ..........waqt ke saath saath insaan ke soch bhi kaise badal jate hai.........jab SDC join ki thi tab yeh ishQ forum mera fav tha ......main bhi kuchh apna feelings ko adhuri jubaan deti thi .........

aaj tumhare tahreer dekh kar yaad tazaa ho gaya
bahot achha ehesaas hai dear
youN likhte raho khus raho

Dua.oN ke saath

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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai

aaila....kitta solid likha hai dr.....sacchi me mast likha hai...
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hey khank ji..

Mujhe aaisa kyu lag raha haiN.. kii aap meri kuch jayda hi tareef kar rahi haiN..

Ji iss nacheez ko.. yuh hi rahane dijiyee.. Hamari dosti kaaNtooN se hai.. phoolOoN se hamara koi wasta nahiN haiN..

Haa agar bina tarif kiye koi help chaiyee, to m always der 4u..

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ab hamare liye toh aap guruji hi ban gaye hai........ plzz mujhe daily lessons diya kariye...... i'll luv it

Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
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Dear Khanak,
bahot achha tahreer likha hai tumne .....isse padh kar mujhe kuchh fasaane yaad aagaye ..........waqt ke saath saath insaan ke soch bhi kaise badal jate hai.........jab SDC join ki thi tab yeh ishQ forum mera fav tha ......main bhi kuchh apna feelings ko adhuri jubaan deti thi .........

aaj tumhare tahreer dekh kar yaad tazaa ho gaya
bahot achha ehesaas hai dear
youN likhte raho khus raho

Dua.oN ke saath

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hey khank ji..

Mujhe aaisa kyu lag raha haiN.. kii aap meri kuch jayda hi tareef kar rahi haiN..

Ji iss nacheez ko.. yuh hi rahane dijiyee.. Hamari dosti kaaNtooN se hai.. phoolOoN se hamara koi wasta nahiN haiN..

Haa agar bina tarif kiye koi help chaiyee, to m always der 4u..

-- OMi
Omi........... jhoot bolna pasand nahi mujhe and so jhooti tarefo se door door tak koi rista ya lena dena nahi............. aap pasand hi nahi bohat zaada pasand aaye.......... u r superb........... bina tareef kiye help chahiye to aap ho...... and tareef k saath chahiye toh????............ well aisa kuch nahi........ mai naa selfish hoo na hi banna chahti hu.......... aap mann ko bhaye so aapko bata diya......
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salaam muhtarma, maafi chahuNga kyuNki aapke naam se waakif nahiN huN, kaafi pyara likha hai aapne, padh kar ahcha laga, bas ek mashwara dena chahuNga, "mann karta hai" ki jagah aap "dil karta hai" de ke dekhiye, kalaam me aur bhi jyada nikhaar aa jaayega. Umeed karta hun aapse aage v yuNhi mukhatib hota rahuNga....!!
bohat bohat shukriya ghayal....... mai khanak......... pehle dil karta hai hi socha tha... phir dil chahta hai bhi socha par annt mei ispe rehi....ye sahi laga...... well thanks a lot
   
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Daastaan is dil ki batane ko, mann karta hai,
Har pal teri baaho mei rehne ko, mann karta hai

Meri her saans teri saanso mei simat jaaye,
us hadd tak tera ho jaane ko, mann karta hai

Tere chehre pe woh ek muskaan laane ke liye,
Us khuda se bhi ruth jaane ko, mann karta hai

Jo udaas ho tu ek pal ke liye bhi,
Saari duniya se ladd jaane ko, mann karta hai
Dil kyaa cheez hai, ye rooh jiske naam kar doo,
Itna khaas tujhe banana ko, mann karta hai

Apni aakhon ke taro mei chupa loo aaj tujhe,
Utna tujhe khud mei utarne ko, mann karta hai
bahut khoob likha hai aapne khanak je ...bas jo faults aapko nazneen jee ne bataye hain use sahi karne kee koshish karein ...
anyways ur feelings are supperb....


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wakai khanak.....!!
tumhari likhai khoob hai.tumhare naam ki tareh......!
khanakti hui........!!!

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bahut khoob likha hai aapne khanak je ...bas jo faults aapko nazneen jee ne bataye hain use sahi karne kee koshish karein ...
anyways ur feelings are supperb....
hi aru.......... thanks dear.... and ya i will take care of it.........thanks again
   
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wakai khanak.....!!
tumhari likhai khoob hai.tumhare naam ki tareh......!
khanakti hui........!!!

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