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11th March 2006, 12:36 PM
old poem with corrections..................(phir bhi kutch kami si hai )
1...........old one.........
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh dekh loon aapko aankho se
Gam-e-getii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh choo loo aapko haatho se
Gam-e-hastii bas itni si hai
Ek baar tum bhi kaho ki pyaar hai mujh se
Gam-e-hayaat bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh aap bhi dekho mujhe pyaar se
Gam-e-jahaan bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh milne aao apni khushi se
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itni si hai
Kutch pal toh aapka mile aapke zindagi se
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pukaaro mujhko apne jubaan se
Gardish-e-dauran bas itni si hai
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2........new one ..............
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh dekh loon aapko______apne ___ _aankho se
Gam-e-getii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh choo loo aapko______apne ______haatho se
Gam-e-hastii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pyaar hai kehdo_____apne _____hontho se
Gam-e-hayaat bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pyaar se dekho__ ____apne______nayno se
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh mujhko pukaaro __ ___apne _____jubaan se
Gam-e-jahaan bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh milne aao ___________apni _____khushi se
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itni si hai
Kutch pal toh mile MUJHKO __ ___aapki ____ zindagi se
Gardish-e-dauran bas itni si hai
kab lout ke aaoge_____________apni _____mehfil se
Urdu: Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam
English: Sorrow Of Everyday Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-getii
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-hastii
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-hayaat
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-jahaan
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-roz-gaar
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-zamaanaa
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gardish-e-dauran
English: Ups And Downs Of Life
Hindi: .
(sikhne ki chaah ..............ek koshish ........or kutch nahi .........)
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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11th March 2006, 01:06 PM
1.........OLD ONE .............
Hai sab-kucch zindagi me par kucch kami si haii
Rukaa rukaa sa mera din, aur raat thhami si haii==NM
Bewajeh gham ko paalein aisi to aadat nahi
aarzoo teri jo utari, aankhon mein nami si haii==NM
zindagi TERE bin adhoori hin nahi
aasoon bhi AANKHO MAIN kutchH rukii sii hai
Qismat se lad sakkoo itna aasAan bhi nahi
khuda ne ki mere sang kutch dillagi sii haii
zindagi tere binn kat bhi jaati magar
aankho main _tere khwaab ki roshni sii haii
TUJHE PAANE KI CHAAH NE ITNA RULAAYA HAII
TANHA HOON AUR ZINDAGI KUTCH PHEEKII SII HAI
HAI NIYAM KE KHILAAF TERA NAAM LENA BHII
YE NIYAM BHI MERE LIYE ZULMII SII HAII
TUM na ho paaye mere toh kya
TUMSE milna bhii _ Maal-e-bandagii SII HAII
.2.........NEW ONE.....................
Hai sab-kucch jeevan main par kucch kamii sii haii
Rukee rukee se mere din, aur raat thamii sii haii==NM
Hai roshni meri jeevan main par kucch albelii sii haii
Sooni sooni sii meri aankhain, aur aansoo jamii sii haii
Hai uska saath jeevan main par kucch dilllagii sii haii
Bujha bujha saa uska pyaar, aur nafrat gulaamii sii hai
Hai kitne rang jeevan main par kucch phikii sii haii
Sehmii sehmii sii merii khushiyan, aur qismat bedamii sii haii
Hai kitne rishte jeevan main par kucch aznabii sii haii
Tanha tanha sii meri zindagi, aur mout berahamii sii haii
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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11th March 2006, 01:52 PM
1...old one.......
Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib bas nazar bhar dekhne ki
Ek wo hain jo aankhe churaaya karte hain
Lamhaat e-yaad e-yaar yaad bahut aata hai
Ek wo hain jo khwaabon se bhi katraate hain
Mere nas nas main wo aise samaaye hain
Ek wo hain jo naam lene se bhi ghbraate hain
Meri zindagi unse hin shuru unpe hin khtam hoti hai
Ek wo hain jo sangdili ka rukh apnaate hain
Ek hin vaade pe toh meri khushiyono ki buniyaad thi
Ek wo hain jo uss vade ko todne ki baat kehte hain
Zindagi kat hin jaati bas ek unke naam ke sahaare
Ek wo hain jo naam bhool jaane ka vaada lete hain
2......new one ...
Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib bas nazar bhar dekhne ki
Ek wo hain jo aankhe churaaya karte hain
Lamhaat e-yaad e-yaar yaad bahut aata hai
Ek wo hain jo khwaabon se bhi katraate hain
Raahat-e-jaan bankar Mere nas nas main wo samaaye hain
Ek wo hain jo naam lene se bhi ghbraate hain
Afasaanaa-e-hastii unse hin shuru unpe hin khtam hoti hai
Ek wo hain jo sangdili ka rukh apnaate hain
Ek hin vaade pe toh meri Irtiqaa-e-zindagii ki buniyaad thi
Ek wo hain jo vade ko todne ki baat kehte hain
Fursat-e-hastee kat hin jaati ek unke naam ke sahaare
Ek wo hain jo bhool jaane ka vaada lete hain
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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11th March 2006, 11:29 PM
agar aapki ijaazat ho to kya mai kuch aise cheezen likh sakta hun jo mujhe kamiyon jaisi lagi.maine aapse ijaazat isliye maangi kyunki kai baar kuch likhi baatein dil ke itna karib hoti hai ke hum unme kuch bhi badalna nahi chahte.
aapke jawaab ke intzaar mei
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12th March 2006, 09:08 AM
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agar aapki ijaazat ho to kya mai kuch aise cheezen likh sakta hun jo mujhe kamiyon jaisi lagi.maine aapse ijaazat isliye maangi kyunki kai baar kuch likhi baatein dil ke itna karib hoti hai ke hum unme kuch bhi badalna nahi chahte.
aapke jawaab ke intzaar mei
GKS
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v true ...kaii baar likhne waala jo soch kar shabdon ko baandhta hai usske peeche kooi na kooi wazah hoti hai .............
par yahan par mere dono edited poem se bhi mujhe kaii jagah aisa lag raha ki nahi yahan pe aisa nahi waisa hona chaahiye ........
u most welcome ..............aapko jahan bhi lage aap edit kijiye
ho sakta hai aapka edit kiya huaa mujhe pasand aaye yaa na bhi aaye phir .bhi..........ek dusre ko tips dena kooi buri baat nahi .........
or issi tarah baaki log bhi apne poems likhte waqt kaii baaton ka khyaal rakh paayegain ...................coz jarori hai kooi aapko do shabd pyaar ke saath aapko or aage jaane ke liye aapke galtiyouno ko pyaar se bata jaaye na ki ..................galat way main aapko aisa chot de ki aap likhna hin band kar do ...........
coz sabhi yahan sikh hin rahe hain kooi perfect nahi hai...........
or ek sabse badi baat ki mujhe urdu nahi aati maine abhi shuruaat hin ki hai toh shayad urdu words ko use karna mujhe nahi aaya ho ...........maine toh bas dictionary se words meaning dekh usse use kiya hai .......................or abhi keval sikh hin rahi hoon toh jyaada se jyaada words use kar urdu words ko pehchaanne ke liye aisa kar rahi hoon ..................abhi toh target yahi hai ki urdu words ko jaanu aur poems ke rules ko follow karoon ..............................
.................................................. .............u most wellcome........
.................................................. ..........................................thanksss !
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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14th March 2006, 07:40 PM
hello Chaand ji,
jaisa ke maine kahaa tha mujhe jo kamiyaan lagegi unhe mai aapko bataoonga to aaj mai haazir hun.
aapki pehli kavita mein aapne ek taraff to urdu ke chuninda shabdon ka prayog kiya hai par unhi sheron ke ant mein aapne hindi ke shabdo ka prayog karke acha nahi kiya,agar aap urdu ke hi lafzo ka prayog karti to achaa rehta. jaise aankhon ki jagah nazaron,pyaar ki jagah mohabbat,hontho ki jagah labon etc etc.par haan gum ki itni variety hoti hai yeh humein aapne bataaya.bahut bahut dhanyavaad
2nd one
Hai sab-kucch jeevan main par "kahin"kucch kamii sii haii
Rukee rukee se mere din, aur raat thamii sii haii==N
"kahin" maine add kiya hai aur is sher mein contrast hai "sab kuch " and kamii mein par doosre aur teesre sheron mein kahin yeh element nazar nahi aaya
jaise
Hai roshni meri jeevan main par kucch albelii sii haii
ab ise mai kuch is tarah byaan karta
Hai "roshni" meri jeevan main par kahin kuch "andhera" saa hai
haalanki aapka rhyme "sii hai" chahta hai to iske baare mein aap khud sochiye.
aansu jamii si hai yeh baat kuch jamii nahi
agar aansu jamein se hai tab to thik lagta par aansu jamii sii hai lag raha hai jabardasti lagaaya gayaa hairhyme karne ke liye.
3rd one)iske liye bhi mai wahi advice doonga ke aapne urdu ke shabdon ke saath hindi ke shabdon ka prayog kiya hai jabki aap yahan par urdu ke shabd istemaal kar sakti hai
abhi ke liye itna hi kar raha hun,mujhe darr hai kahin aap khafaa na ho .agar kabhi kuch aur mujhe dikha to zaroor bataoonga.
aur waise bhi abhi tabiyat kuch nasaaz hai
AAKHIR MEIN EK REQUEST
apni rachnaon ko bright colours mein na likhe padhne mein bahut dikkat hoti hai aur acha bhi nahi lagta.
Aag ab bhi wahi hai
Dard ab bhi wahi hai
Waqt shayad badal gaya hai
Meri shakhshiyat ab bhi wahi hai.
GKS
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16th March 2006, 11:57 PM
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hello Chandsi ji,
jaisa ke maine kahaa tha mujhe jo kamiyaan
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agegi unhe mai aapko bataoonga to aaj mai haazir hun.
aapki pehli kavita mein aapne ek taraff to urdu ke chuninda
shabdon ka prayog kiya hai par unhi sheron ke ant mein aapne
hindi ke shabdo ka prayog karke acha nahi kiya,agar aap urdu ke
hi lafzo ka prayog karti to achaa rehta. jaise aankhon ki jagah
nazaron,pyaar ki jagah mohabbat,hontho ki jagah labon etc
etc.par haan gum ki itni variety hoti hai yeh humein aapne bataaya.bahut bahut dhanyavaad
hmmmmmmmm...........thanks ...iss tips ke liye ......
par ye kisne keh diyaa apko ki ye saare shabd ..........urdu main nahi use hote ..............
Urdu: Aankh
English: Eye, Optic
Hindi: .
Urdu: Aankheyn
English: Eyes
Hindi: .
Urdu: Pyaar
English: Amour, Kiss, Love
Hindi: .
etc.......................
2nd one
Hai sab-kucch jeevan main par "kahin"kucch kamii sii haii
Rukee rukee se mere din, aur raat thamii sii haii==N
"kahin" maine add kiya hai aur is sher mein contrast hai "sab kuch " and kamii mein par doosre aur teesre sheron mein kahin yeh element nazar nahi aaya
jaise
Hai roshni meri jeevan main par kucch albelii sii hai=== albeli si
hai matlab ye ki .............kutch ajeeb si hai ====kutch baaton ko
deeply sochiye ===trak vitark kijiye ===shabdon ka sahi matlab
dhoondhiye .............
ab ise mai kuch is tarah byaan karta
Hai "roshni" meri jeevan main par kahin kuch "andhera" saa hai
haalanki aapka rhyme "sii hai" chahta hai to iske baare mein aap khud sochiye.
aansu jamii si hai yeh baat kuch jamii nahi====yahan main
shayd galat ho sakti hoon par mera yahan jamii ka matlab yahan ye
tha ki ===jamm jaana .........sookh jaana ............aasoon sookh
gaye hain yaa jamm gaye hain===
agar aansu jamein se hai tab to thik lagta par aansu jamii sii hai lag raha hai jabardasti lagaaya gayaa hairhyme karne ke liye.
3rd one)iske liye bhi mai wahi advice doonga ke aapne urdu ke shabdon ke saath hindi ke shabdon ka prayog kiya hai jabki aap yahan par urdu ke shabd istemaal kar sakti hai
==hmmmm................urdu or hindi words .............bahut saare urdu words hain jo hindi main aam shabd ki tarah use hota hai ................khair its ok ...........aapne mujhe padha itna hin mere liye kaafi hai ..................
abhi ke liye itna hi kar raha hun,mujhe darr hai kahin aap khafaa na ho .agar kabhi kuch aur mujhe dikha to zaroor bataoonga.===do one thing aap mujhe mail hin kiya karo meri galtiyaana bataane ke liye coz yahan pe aise itne notes padhne main ajeeb se lagte hain ..............jahan bhi aapka diyaa tips mujhe sahi laga main aapke naam ke saath apna poem edit karoongi ................pure khushi ke saath .........
aur waise bhi abhi tabiyat kuch nasaaz hai
AAKHIR MEIN EK REQUEST =====but i love to use colurfull fonts =======agar main khush hoon or bas enjoy karti hoon apne shabdoon ko likhne main toh ...........main aksar colourful fonts use karti hoon ...........jab udaas ya susht huui tabhi .....simple way hota hai .......
........poem ka swaad uske chupee bhaavon main hota hai ..........deep deep jaa kar padhiye .............agar kahin lage ki ye kya likh diyaa likhne waale ne ...........toh usse baar baar padhiye ...........batoon ko das roop dijiye ...........tab jaakar sahi meaning samjh aayega .
..................kehte hian jisko pasand ho songs soonna toh wo har gaane ko pyaar se sunta hai warna kisi ko wahi gaana ek SHOR ke alaawa kutch bhi nahi lagta ..........................
apni rachnaon ko bright colours mein na likhe padhne mein bahut dikkat hoti hai aur acha bhi nahi lagta.
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thanks for coming .................or aab ki baar mail kijiyega .........
..................................thanks a lot for everything .......................
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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24th March 2006, 09:13 AM
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1.........OLD ONE .............
Hai sab-kucch zindagi me par kucch kami si haii
Rukaa rukaa sa mera din, aur raat thhami si haii==NM
Bewajeh gham ko paalein aisi to aadat nahi
aarzoo teri jo utari, aankhon mein nami si haii==NM
zindagi TERE bin adhoori hin nahi
aasoon bhi AANKHO MAIN kutchH rukii sii hai
Qismat se lad sakkoo itna aasAan bhi nahi
khuda ne ki mere sang kutch dillagi sii haii
zindagi tere binn kat bhi jaati magar
aankho main _tere khwaab ki roshni sii haii
TUJHE PAANE KI CHAAH NE ITNA RULAAYA HAII
TANHA HOON AUR ZINDAGI KUTCH PHEEKII SII HAI
HAI NIYAM KE KHILAAF TERA NAAM LENA BHII
YE NIYAM BHI MERE LIYE ZULMII SII HAII
TUM na ho paaye mere toh kya
TUMSE milna bhii _ Maal-e-bandagii SII HAII
.2.........NEW ONE.....................
Hai sab-kucch jeevan main par kucch kamii sii haii
Rukee rukee se mere din, aur raat thamii sii haii==NM
Hai roshni meri jeevan main par kucch albelii sii haii
Sooni sooni sii meri aankhain, aur aansoo jamii sii haii
Hai uska saath jeevan main par kucch dilllagii sii haii
Bujha bujha saa uska pyaar, aur nafrat gulaamii sii hai
Hai kitne rang jeevan main par kucch phikii sii haii
Sehmii sehmii sii merii khushiyan, aur qismat bedamii sii haii
Hai kitne rishte jeevan main par kucch aznabii sii haii
Tanha tanha sii meri zindagi, aur mout berahamii sii haii
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har Khushii me.n koii kamii sii hai
.................................................. ................Javed Akhtar
.har Khushii me.n koii kamii sii hai
ha.Nsatii aa.Nkho.n me.n bhii namii sii hai
din bhii chup chaap sar jhukaaye thaa
raat kii nafz bhii thamii sii hai
kisako samajhaaye.N kisakii baat nahii.n
zahan aur dil me.n phir Thanii sii hai
Khvaab thaa yaa Gubaar thaa koii
gard in palako.n pe jamii sii hai
kah gae ham kisase dil kii baat
shahar me.n ek sanasanii sii hai
hasarate.n raakh ho gaii.n lekin
aag ab bhii kahii.n dabii sii hai
bholo raam ne do line likh kar meri neende udaa di thi ..............kaash pehle main iss poem ko padhi hoti tho .........kafiya main thoda sa help mil hin jaata ...........khair ..............................................achc ha hin huaa coz wahin se maine apni galtiyouno pe dhyaandena denashuru kiya ....................thanks bholo raam ..............just kidding ......
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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27th March 2006, 01:57 AM
are to ab humaara naam bhi badal diyaa,bholu raam.
khair koi baat nahi aap badhi hai ,haq banta hai aapka(dialogue courtesy from kabhi khushi kabhi gum)
kuch din tak mai naaraaz tha aapki baat se par aaj nahi hun isliye yahan likh rahaa hun aaj.kuch wakt lagta hai gusse se jeet paane mein , jise jitna kam wakt lage wo utna hi akalmand. mai itna akalmand nahi isilye kuch wakt lagaa.
abhi chalta hun kuch aur khaas kehne ko nahi.baad mein milte hai
GKS
woh log ab milte nahi jo raah-ae- wafaa pe nikale the khushi dhoondne
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28th March 2006, 10:22 AM
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are to ab humaara naam bhi badal diyaa,bholu raam.
khair koi baat nahi aap badhi hai ,haq banta hai aapka(dialogue courtesy from kabhi khushi kabhi gum)
kuch din tak mai naaraaz tha aapki baat se par aaj nahi hun isliye yahan likh rahaa hun aaj.kuch wakt lagta hai gusse se jeet paane mein , jise jitna kam wakt lage wo utna hi akalmand. mai itna akalmand nahi isilye kuch wakt lagaa.
abhi chalta hun kuch aur khaas kehne ko nahi.baad mein milte hai
GKS
woh log ab milte nahi jo raah-ae- wafaa pe nikale the khushi dhoondne
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bholo raam ==means ==bhola bhala insaan .............
aapki naraazgi door huii .............ye jaankar khushi huii ..............
aapse pm main jitna baat huii uss se pata chala ki aap ek suljhe huye insaan ho..............achcha laga aapko jaan kar .........
kaii baar aisa hota hai ..........ki aap kehna kutch chaahte ho log sajh kutch aur jaate hain ..................abb issmain kehne waali ki kooi galti nahi agar aapne usse thik se nahi samjha ...........issliye usse pooch lena jyaada achcha hota hai ki aap kehna kya chahte the ..........aisa karne se ek dusre ke baaton ko hum samjh paate hain ......................
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abb aap dhyaan se padhna iss poem ko ...............isse javed ji ne likha hai ......................
har Khushii me.n koii kamii sii hai
.................................................. ................Javed Akhtar
.har Khushii me.n koii kamii sii hai
ha.Nsatii aa.Nkho.n me.n bhii namii sii hai
din bhii chup chaap sar jhukaaye thaa
raat kii nafz bhii thamii sii hai
kisako samajhaaye.N kisakii baat nahii.n
zahan aur dil me.n phir Thanii sii hai
Khvaab thaa yaa Gubaar thaa koii
gard in palako.n pe jamii sii hai
kah gae ham kisase dil kii baat
shahar me.n ek sanasanii sii hai
hasarate.n raakh ho gaii.n lekin
aag ab bhii kahii.n dabii sii hai
abb baataiye ki yahan jamii ka matlab kya hai ...........sach kahoon likhte waqt main bhi yahi sochi thi kahin log isse jameen na samjh baithain................................
so=== jamii and jameen/jamiin main ===farq hai .hai na ?
jaise kitaabo ke upar kitni dhool jamm gayi hai .....jamii huii hai
bas aapko reply dene ke liye hin aai thi .......................
.............................................aab phir kutch poochna ya kehna ho pm kijiyega ....................main yahan likhi taaki wo TOPIC clear ho ..............jamii or jameen waali baat ...............
...................................BYE AND TC ........................................
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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Re: KUCCH KAMI SI HAI..par kyaa or kahan?? -
28th March 2006, 04:34 PM
kaha kami si hai aap hi bata dijiye
main to khud bachha hu kya jaanu kami kaha hai
Hindi urdu ka bohat acha prayog aapki in rachano mein dekhar khushi hui
mehfil sajati rahiye
Diggaj
Quote:
Originally posted by chandsi
old poem with corrections..................(phir bhi kutch kami si hai )
1...........old one.........
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh dekh loon aapko aankho se
Gam-e-getii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh choo loo aapko haatho se
Gam-e-hastii bas itni si hai
Ek baar tum bhi kaho ki pyaar hai mujh se
Gam-e-hayaat bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh aap bhi dekho mujhe pyaar se
Gam-e-jahaan bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh milne aao apni khushi se
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itni si hai
Kutch pal toh aapka mile aapke zindagi se
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pukaaro mujhko apne jubaan se
Gardish-e-dauran bas itni si hai
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2........new one ..............
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh dekh loon aapko______apne ___ _aankho se
Gam-e-getii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh choo loo aapko______apne ______haatho se
Gam-e-hastii bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pyaar hai kehdo_____apne _____hontho se
Gam-e-hayaat bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh pyaar se dekho__ ____apne______nayno se
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh mujhko pukaaro __ ___apne _____jubaan se
Gam-e-jahaan bas itni si hai
Ek baar toh milne aao ___________apni _____khushi se
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itni si hai
Kutch pal toh mile MUJHKO __ ___aapki ____ zindagi se
Gardish-e-dauran bas itni si hai
kab lout ke aaoge_____________apni _____mehfil se
Urdu: Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam
English: Sorrow Of Everyday Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-getii
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-hastii
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-hayaat
English: Sorrows Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-jahaan
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-roz-gaar
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gam-e-zamaanaa
English: Sorrow Of Life
Hindi: .
Urdu: Gardish-e-dauran
English: Ups And Downs Of Life
Hindi: .
(sikhne ki chaah ..............ek koshish ........or kutch nahi .........)
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Navard-e-ishq mein kya hua kya bataye hum
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha
Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne
K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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Re: Re: KUCCH KAMI SI HAI..par kyaa or kahan?? -
29th March 2006, 12:37 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by Diggaj_Dave
kaha kami si hai aap hi bata dijiye
main to khud bachha hu kya jaanu kami kaha hai
Hindi urdu ka bohat acha prayog aapki in rachano mein dekhar khushi hui
mehfil sajati rahiye
Diggaj
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Diggaj ji and GKS JI ............................
...........................................KYA AAB YE POEM THIK HO GAYI HAI ?
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa toh deed karoon _apne aankhoN see
Gam-e-getii bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa choo loo aapko _apne haathoN see
Gam-e-hastii bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa ilfat hai kaho _ apne labooN see
Gam-e-hayaat bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa laag se dekho _ apne naynoN see
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa sada do mujhko_ apne lughatoN see
Gam-e-jahaan bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa mulaaqaat karo _apne be-gamoN see
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itnii sii haii
ek mousam toh mile mujko _aapke ayyaamoN see
Gardish-e-dauran bas itnii sii haii
ek dafa toh aao _apnii bazm-e-kushaaoN see
..........................THIK KIJIYE JAHAN BHI GALTI HUII HAI ....IF U CAN ...............
.....................................BYE AND TC .....................
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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Re: Re: Re: KUCCH KAMI SI HAI..par kyaa or kahan?? -
29th March 2006, 08:06 PM
Quote:
Originally posted by chandsi
Diggaj ji and GKS JI ............................
...........................................KYA AAB YE POEM THIK HO GAYI HAI ?
Gam-e-gardish-e-ayyaam bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa toh deed karoon _apne aankhoN see
Gam-e-getii bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa choo loo aapko _apne yadooN //oakooN see
Gam-e-hastii bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa ilfat hai kaho _ apne labooN see
Gam-e-hayaat bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa laag se dekho _ apne naynoN see
Gam-e-zamaanaa bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa sada do mujhko_ apne lughatoN see
Gam-e-jahaan bas itnii sii haii
Ek dafaa mulaaqaat karo _apne be-gamoN see
Gam-e-roz-gaar bas itnii sii haii
ek mousam toh mile mujko _aapke ayyaamoN see
Gardish-e-dauran bas itnii sii haii
ek dafa toh aao _apnii bazm-e-kushaaoN see
Urdu: Yad
English: Hand, Power, Authority, Protection, Succor
Urdu: Oak
English: Palm Of The Hand Contracted So As To Hold Water
..........................THIK KIJIYE JAHAN BHI GALTI HUII HAI ....IF U CAN ...............
.....................................BYE AND TC .....................
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Bada hua to kya hua jaisay paid khajoor,
Panthi ko chhaya nahin, phal laagen ati door.
Nahaye dhoye kya bhala jo man ka mail na jaay
Meen sada jal mein rahe par tan ki baas na jaay
Akath Kahani Prem Ki, Kutch Kahi Na Jaye
Goonge Keri Sarkara, Baithe Muskae
.................................bye and tc ..................
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