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25th September 2005, 01:51 PM
vanita ko milne ki chah bhi thi or kuch mahilao ko wada kar ke aayi thi ke ab ke oonhe milne jaldi jaldi aaya karungi. isi khayal ke sath chalte fir ek baar mai mahila aashram ja pahunchi.
dophar ke teen baj chuke the. sabhi mahilaye baahar baramde mai baithi hui thi. jo mahilaye bimaar hoti hai wo kamre mai hi apne bister par soyi ya baithi hoti hai . muje dekh kar aaj vanita khamosh hi rahi . ooski aankh mai aaj koi sawaal nahi tha par afsos ke ab aankh mai chamak bhi nahi thi. shayed oosne haalat ko samaj kar swikaar liya tha ke ab yahi iska jivan hai. sabke saath baat kar ke mai ander kamre mai gayi jaha par bimaar mahilaye thi. oonse baate karte huae mai aage badhti gayi or achanak mai ek jagah aa kar thham si gayi... yah bachi yaha kaha aa gayi? ek kareeb 14 saal ki ladki thi. goal matol chehra, salwaar kamiij pahne huae or baalo ko do choti mai ghunthe huae.. umr ka ek aisa daur jaha har ladki ka saundray khila khila nazar aata hai... bade laad se maine oos ke sar par hath fera ... wo kali mushkura oothi.. khilkhila kar.. dheere se maine oose pucha, : 'tum yaha kaise aa gayi ?' ek khilkhilati nritya karti hui aawaj kamre mai thirak gayi..., ' muje yaha mere maa-papa chhod gaye hai. mai bahut bimaar thi na is liye. ab thik ho jaaungi tab muje wapas aa kar le jaayenge.' ek samay se mai yaha aaya jaya karti hu. in aashram ke haalat se kaafi jaanti hu.. yaha aa kar koi kaha waapas jata hai..par mai bhi to koi badlaav nahi la paati... ek asmarth insaan ... meri bhavna ko jyada bahne bhi to nahi deti... ek khayal ki deewar jo bana li hai is bahaav ko rokne ke liye - agar mai in ke dard se ro padi to inke paas fir kabhi n laut kar aa paaungi... or na hi inhe waqt de paaungi. par aaj jaise meri bhavna ka bandh toot sa gaya tha. mai jor se chikh oothi chilla oothi... ' tum apne bachpane se ab baahar aa jaao... tumhe lene ke liye ab koi nahi aane wala ... ab tumhe yahi sadna hai yahi tumhara jivan hai.. tum bimaar thi is liye nahi par tum kisi kaam ki nahi is liye tumhe yaha chhod kar gaye hai...' - par meri aawaj ko kya huaa? aawaj baahar hi nahi aayi . balki jitna jor se chillayi thi ootni hi teji se mere bheeter or bheeter yah aawaj dab gayi... jo aawaj baahar aayi wo is prakaar thi... ' tumhara naam kya hai beta? ' doosre hi pal... fir ek baar kamre mai mithi aawaj ki gunj bahne lagi... 'lakshmi' lakshmi.... n jaane kyun mai is aawaj ko sah n paayi... oose pyaar se sahlate huae waha se chali aayi ................................. |
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25th September 2005, 07:56 PM
meena didi...
its wonderful...i read both the parts...its really very touchin keep writin ahead too take care Chaandni mere pyaar ki kyun uspar na rang laayi Kyun bas kami hi meri ibaadat me usko nazar aayi Thaa laakh bura sahi main. sacchi meri chaahat thi Kyun meri bhaavnaon ko woh samajh nahi paayi... Dekhna chahta hun.. Tere tasveer ko khwab banake dekhna chahta hun Aur us khwab mein apne aap ko khona chahta hun I envy the words, which took the form of my emotions I love my poetry… Which has turned the tears of pain in to the pearls of love… |
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25th September 2005, 11:31 PM
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karthik, shukria... tumne ise padha.... di |
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26th September 2005, 08:30 AM
Lakshmi hi hai....
Coffee mitr... Lakshmi naam hai uska... jiske yahan jaayegi... lakshmi ka roop hogi... nishchint rahe... usse lene zaroor koi aayega... Apna khayal rakhein Rohin |
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26th September 2005, 08:48 AM
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rohin, haan ... bilkul.. pata hai... kal hi muje kisi ne sawaal puchaa tha.. ke jin bachho ko adpot kar ke le jate hai kya we bachhe khush honge waha? maine oonhe yahi jawaab diya ke... mai kabhi bhi is mamle mai -ve nahi sochti. 2 vajah hai ... ek to jo mai nahi kar paati hu.. wo yah log kar rahe hai ke bacho ko ghar mil raha hai.. or doosri baat jo in bachoo ko khud ke maa baap ne anath kar ke yah haalat diye ab is se badh kar oonke kya haalat bigdenge ? or sath hi +ve sochna chaiye hi ke kuch log bahut achhe hai jo yah kaam kar rahe hai... tumhari kahi baat sahi ho jaaye... yahi chahti hu. kuch lamho ke liye aakrand aur aakrosh ki bhavna bah gayi thi.. shukria... tumhari coffee mitr |
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26th September 2005, 04:36 PM
meena dost
aap ki donon tehreerein behad pur asr aur dil ko dehla deni waali hain. bohat hassaas topic chuna hai aap ne. yeh ek lamha-e-fikriya hai, saare samaj ke liye, hem sab ke liye. bohat khoob meena aisa pur asr likhna aap hi ker sakti ho. aap ka behad shukriyaa aisa hem se share kerne ka. meri dua hai aap hamesha khush rahein, aabaad rahein. musharrafhusain |
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26th September 2005, 08:19 PM
Maa story ke drishti se ye dono parts bahoot achhe hai...
lekin bhaaw ke liye kuchh kahate nahi ban paa raha hai.. aapki meri baat to in par chalati rehati hai.. aapka pyaara bacha |
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26th September 2005, 11:07 PM
Dearest meena di,
ab kya kahu tumhe... tum bahut achha karti hun. vanita aur lakshmi ki baat bataane ka bahut shukriya... tumhare bhav inn shabdon mein dikh rahe hai... jab bhi milo unhe to mera pranaam kehna... sadaa khush rehna! take care!  |
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27th September 2005, 09:04 AM
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mere mushi dost, in haalat ko jina ... kisi bhi umr mai.. fir woh umr ka koi bhi daur ho.. bada mushkil hai... aapne muje padha... samja... aapka tahe dil se shukria aapki dost meena |
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27th September 2005, 09:08 AM
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kuch kahne ki nahi par kuch karne ka bhav aana chahiye... hum sabhi mai... mera is tarah ka likhne ka bhav yahi hota hai ke jo bhi ise padhe.. jivan mai kabhi n kabhi in haalat ke sudhaar mai apna waqt de.. maa |
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27th September 2005, 09:09 AM
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priy parul, jaroor... jab bhi miloongi oonhe, tum bhi sath hogi mere... di |
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27th September 2005, 09:32 AM
meena ji...
mere paas shabd nahin meri bhavnaaon ko vyakt karne ke liye...bus chup hoon aapki bhi vyathaa dekh kar...wakai aap kaise apne bhaav unko dikha sakti hain...unke saamne muskurana bhi kitna asahniye hota hoga...soch ke dil dehal jaata hai...phir bhi aap jis raah lagi hain...kam s kam unko yeh tasalli tau hai ki koyi unko milne aayega... gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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27th September 2005, 11:59 AM
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haan paras..... aaj itna to kar pa rahi hu... shayed bhagwaan kare or kal ko mai kuch or bhi kar paau in logo ke liye.... aap sab ka sath bhi mere liye mulyawaan hai. tumhari meena |
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27th September 2005, 12:15 PM
Didi..apne sach kaha kuch log yaha bahot achhe hain, wajah chahe jo bhi rahi ho...vo kam s kam kisi ko ek chat toh de rahe hain jinhe voh Ghar" pukaar sakeN ...ab chat kaisi hain ye dusri baat hai...par chhat hai toh ghar ki..kisi aashram ki nahi!....bahot vichlieeet ho jata hai mann...esi zindagiyan dekh kar aur...apni zindagi se shikayateN meet jati hain!....
thanks di 4 sharing such a thing..really inspiring! tc komal |
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27th September 2005, 12:56 PM
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priy komal, haan komal... jab tak yah achhe log hai... anath kaha koi... ek chhat bahut kuch hoti hai jivan mai... kabhi kabhi jivan se badh kar bhi ... di |
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27th September 2005, 09:14 PM
Apne apne ghamoN ke saath ...khud hi guzar karna hai...
Ab kya sochta hai Jara 'Muskura' ey dil...KyoNki ? Ye safar har haal me tujhko, tanha hi tay karna hai.... Chaand Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN. - Chaand |
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27th September 2005, 09:30 PM
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maine har haal mai jine ki kasam khai hai aashmaan bata ab tera irada kya hai... [ film - swayam] |
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12th February 2006, 08:09 AM
meena ji
aap waha jaakr sabko sunti hai ye jaankar achha laga mujhe viswas hai ki un baccho ko lene koi jarur aayega kitne hi couple yaha ek aulad k liye taras jate hai aur jinko bhagwan ye dulat deta hai wo keese isko tukra pate hai pata nahi par ise hum sab k saath sher karne k liye sukiriya in sab bachhon ko unka ashiyana mile isi dua k saath shrdh 
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21st February 2006, 12:08 PM
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