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12th March 2009, 06:36 PM
YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~
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12th March 2009, 06:37 PM
bahot khooob...... purvi ji......... really awesome.....!
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12th March 2009, 06:55 PM
Beshak ye ek behtreen ghazal hai purvi jee, hmm...very romantic too...is khOobsurat ghazal per dil de daad qubool kijiye hamari aur se..yuhi likhti rahiye aur mehfil ko roshan karti rahiye
small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,
duaon ke saath
zainy
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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12th March 2009, 07:34 PM
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YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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PURVI diiiiiiiiii................awesome.....bahut hi zayada romantic ghazal hai...i loved it....keep writing diiii
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa ,
ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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13th March 2009, 09:34 AM
cooool dr....its mindblowing.......
too romantic.....hmmmm;-
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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13th March 2009, 10:12 AM
Purvi jee:
namaste!!
aapki koShiSh bahot hi achchee rahee.. YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee.. maShq zaaree raKheN !! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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13th March 2009, 01:25 PM
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bahot khooob...... purvi ji......... really awesome.....!
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Shukriya shaan
Meri ghazal pasand karne ke liye bahot bahot shukriya
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Shukriya shaan
Meri ghazal pasand karne ke liye bahot bahot shukriya
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13th March 2009, 04:47 PM
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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga
Uske gulabi ruksaron par, pasine ki woh bunde
Kasamse shabnam bi sharma jaye use dekhkar
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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
aise kaise chali jaungi
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
mohabbat ek bar karke chor dete ho aap
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
kabhi to Oil lagake choti bandha karo
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
main nahin jane wali...................
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Hontho se pilaoge to Hungama ho jayega
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
iske baad to bilkul nahin .irada badal diya maine
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
yeh hui na baat.....................
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
Itna kuchh karne ke baad koun zalim bardast karega
aur aap kahte ho chale jana
Itni achhi ghazal
kya kahoon main ..................
ab jiju bhi ho jayenge ghayal
with love
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Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
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14th March 2009, 01:38 AM
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Beshak ye ek behtreen ghazal hai purvi jee, hmm...very romantic too...is khOobsurat ghazal per dil de daad qubool kijiye hamari aur se..yuhi likhti rahiye aur mehfil ko roshan karti rahiye
small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,
duaon ke saath
zainy
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Zainyjee,
Bahot bahot shukriya.... Ghazal par aap ki comment se ghazal ki raounak aur badh jaati hai..Hausla afzayee ke liye aap ki tah-e-dil se sukra guzaar hoon..
Jaise ki aap ne kaha hai....
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small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,
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ghazal likh kar jab use padhi tab is ghazal mein kuch aisi kho gayi thi mei.N ke muje is baat par dhyan hee nahi gaya....
aage se har ek cheez ko dhyan se dekhungi.... bahot bahot shukariya
aage bhi yunhi padhte rahiyega aur apni raa'ye dete rahiyega.
khush rahiye
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PURVI diiiiiiiiii................awesome.....bahut hi zayada romantic ghazal hai...i loved it....keep writing diiii
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Shukriya Lamha,
Yunhi padhte rahena aur apni raa'ye deti rahena
khush raho.
purvi
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Shukriya Dost......
Yunhi apna saath deti rahna..
Khush raho
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Purvi jee:
namaste!!
aapki koShiSh bahot hi achchee rahee.. YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee.. maShq zaaree raKheN !! daad!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
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Dhaval
Jay shree krishna
AAp ko meri yeh koshish pasand aayi yeh jankar bahot khushi mili. AAp jaise dosto.N ki raa'ye se housla badhta hai to aage bhee yunhi saath dete rahiyega.....
Housla afzayee ki liye tah-e-dil se Shukriya
Purvi
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16th March 2009, 02:33 PM
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Dhaval
Jay shree krishna
AAp ko meri yeh koshish pasand aayi yeh jankar bahot khushi mili. AAp jaise dosto.N ki raa'ye se housla badhta hai to aage bhee yunhi saath dete rahiyega.....
Housla afzayee ki liye tah-e-dil se Shukriya
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Waah bahut khoob
itne khoobsrat khyaal ........
kya kahna .........
aur jiske liye hai unka bhi kya kahna
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18th March 2009, 02:46 PM
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Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga
Uske gulabi ruksaron par, pasine ki woh bunde
Kasamse shabnam bi sharma jaye use dekhkar
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AAdab Janab,
Ghazal pasand karne ke liye shukriya..
AAge bhi aise hee padhte rahiyega
Khush rahiye
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18th March 2009, 04:50 PM
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana[/QUOTE]
hmmm......kya romantic shayri hai.......PURVI Jiiiii.....bahut khoob likha hai aapne, sabhi sher pyar se sarabore karne wale haiN....ek baat samaj nahi aaye....ki ek taraf aap usko pyar se madhosh kar rahi ho aur doosri taraf kah rahi ho ki chale jana.....ma'am koi paagal hi hoga jo etna pyar pane ke baad jayega.....main to kabhi na jauN
zainy ne sahi point out kiya hai.....! aapko ek salaah dena chahuNgi ki jab aap kuch likhti haiN to likhne ke baad usko 3-4 khud jaroor padiye...es se aapko apni kai chotti chotti galtiyaN mil jayeNgi aur aapki shayri ki chamak aur bad jayegi....umeed hai aap mere klahne ka sahi matlab samjeNgi....agar kuch galat kah diya ho to muaafi ki haqdaar hoon.
khoobsurat shayri par hamari taraf se daad hazir hai....reps ++ added
aapki dost
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22nd March 2009, 09:33 AM
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Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga
Uske gulabi ruksaron par, pasine ki woh bunde
Kasamse shabnam bi sharma jaye use dekhkar
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AAdab Janab,
Meri ghazal padhne aur pasand karne ke liye aapka bahot bahot shukriya.
Khush rahiye
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22nd March 2009, 12:10 PM
Pyaari Diya..........
Tumko yeh ghazal pasand aayi, yeh jankar muje bahot accha laga....
Aur tum to dur jaane ka socho hee mat...
Rahi baat tumhare jiju ki to unhe ghayal karne ke liye muje ghazal likhne ki zarurat nahi hai.................
aage bhi aise hee padhti rahna, aur housala afzaayee karti rahna
tumhari Di
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Hi Purvi,
Maine pehli baar aapki itni khuli romantic ghazal padhi hai...............wakai mei bht khoobsurat hai aapki har ghazal ki tarah...........yunhi likhte rahiye........
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Waah bahut khoob
itne khoobsrat khyaal ........
kya kahna .........
aur jiske liye hai unka bhi kya kahna
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Janumanuji,
Meri ghazal Padhne aur pasand karne ke liye aap ka bahot bahot shukriya
AAge bhi aise hee padhte rahiyega
Khush rahiye
Purvi
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25th March 2009, 09:48 AM
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KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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25th March 2009, 09:56 AM
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hmmm......kya romantic shayri hai.......PURVI Jiiiii.....bahut khoob likha hai aapne, sabhi sher pyar se sarabore karne wale haiN....
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Shukriya sunitaji... meri chhoti si koshish ko sarhane ke liye..........
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ek baat samaj nahi aaye....ki ek taraf aap usko pyar se madhosh kar rahi ho aur doosri taraf kah rahi ho ki chale jana.....ma'am koi paagal hi hoga jo etna pyar pane ke baad jayega.....main to kabhi na jauN
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Sunitaji mere heesab se to pyaar karnewala har insaan thoda-bahot pagal hota hee hai.....
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zainy ne sahi point out kiya hai.....! aapko ek salaah dena chahuNgi ki jab aap kuch likhti haiN to likhne ke baad usko 3-4 khud jaroor padiye...es se aapko apni kai chotti chotti galtiyaN mil jayeNgi aur aapki shayri ki chamak aur bad jayegi....umeed hai aap mere klahne ka sahi matlab samjeNgi....agar kuch galat kah diya ho to muaafi ki haqdaar hoon.
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jee koshish karungi ke aisee galti na ho.... aur aap ki raa'ye
se housla badhta hai to please muaafi ki baate.N na kare.N...... aage bhee aise hee padhte rahiye.
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khoobsurat shayri par hamari taraf se daad hazir hai....reps ++ addedaapki dost
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Bahot Bahot shukriya.....
Apna saath dete rahiyega
khush rahiye
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28th March 2009, 11:22 AM
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Hi Purvi,
Maine pehli baar aapki itni khuli romantic ghazal padhi hai...............wakai mei bht khoobsurat hai aapki har ghazal ki tarah...........yunhi likhte rahiye........
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Dear Nazz,
Meri yeh romentic ghazal tumhen acchi lagi, yeh jankar muje bahot khushi huwi...
Aage bhi aise hee padhti rahna aur apni raa'ye se meri ghazal sajati rahna
khush raho
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29th March 2009, 06:48 PM
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Kunalji,
Ghazal par apni nazar karne ke liye shukriya.....
Aur aap ki is comments ko kya samja jaye........
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Kamse kam kuch to aisa likhte jo mein samaj saku...........
Khair fir ek baar aap ki shukraguzaar hoon jo is ghazal ko padha...
Aage bhi aise hee padhte rahiye
Khush rahiye
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29th March 2009, 08:57 PM
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YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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kia baat hai ghazal ji bhut khoobsrat ghaal....................................very nice
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30th March 2009, 04:04 PM
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kia baat hai ghazal ji bhut khoobsrat ghazal....................................very nice
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Shukriya Janab,
Aap ko meri ghazal acchi lagi yeh jankar accha laga
Apna saath aage bhi aise hee dete rahiyega
Khush rahiye
Purvi
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6th April 2009, 01:27 AM
UNHE KISSA-E-GAM SUNATE SUNATE
KATI RAATEIN AANSU BAHATE BAHATE
KAHI BUJH NA JAYE CHIRAAG-E-TAMANNA
CHIRAAG-E-MOHABBAT JALAATE JALAATE
KISSI KO KHABAR HI NAHI LUT GAYAA HU
MOHABBAT KI DUNIYA BASATE BASAATE
KEHDE KOI UNSE…..
WO KHUD BAAZ AAYE APNE SITAM SE
HUM THAK GAYE HAIN MANATE MANATE..
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7th April 2009, 03:09 PM
Wah wah...............
Maza aa gaya padhkar...
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7th April 2009, 06:53 PM
Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
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8th April 2009, 11:29 AM
Acchi lines thi to ....
Yunhi likhte rahiye
Khush rahiye
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10th April 2009, 12:33 PM
Ek InteZaar si ban gayi hai Zindagi,
Har pal tere aane ki Aash mein.......
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5th May 2009, 12:12 PM
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5th May 2009, 01:47 PM
bahut hi khoobsoort likha hai aapne.... aage bhi aisi khoobsoorat rachnaao ka intzaar rahega.
Take Care..
~Priya
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Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."
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7th May 2009, 12:48 AM
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bahut hi khoobsoort likha hai aapne.... aage bhi aisi khoobsoorat rachnaao ka intzaar rahega.
Take Care..
~Priya
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Priyajee.. meri yeh koshish aap ko acchi lagi yeh jankar khushi huwi..
aage bhi aise hee saath dete rahiyega...
apna khayal rakhiye... khush rahiye
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28th May 2009, 12:22 PM
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Save me from the safety of my SILENCE
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28th May 2009, 01:47 PM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
bahot khoob purvi ji
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
yeh sher bhi behad pasand aaya...
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
is sher ke donoen misre saath mein rakhe to koi rabt mujhe nahin nazar aaya..aap se request hai ki aap kuch roshani daale ispe...
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
waahhh
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
bahot khoob kaha hai...
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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all in all a very good attempt...loved d flow...tk cr..god bless u
yours,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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29th May 2009, 09:43 AM
purvi ji
kaise hainaap? aapko mohabaat per likhte hue aacha laga ....
ehsaas aur unko pesh karne ka andaaz dil ko chu gaya hain
yu hi likhte rahye
takke good care
milte hain
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30th May 2009, 11:59 AM
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Originally Posted by Ek Ghazal
YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!
DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........
toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..
Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana
Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana
Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana
Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana
Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana
Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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main iss khusurat ceration ki kaha se taarif shuru karu...bas itna keh sakta hu....bahut khubsurat Ghazal hai aapki...daad kabul farmaaye.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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31st May 2009, 09:48 AM
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Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa
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Thanks for reading Shaan..............
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