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Love Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana - 12th March 2009, 06:36 PM

YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!

DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..





Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana


Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana


~*~Kaash Dil ki aawaz mein aisa asar ho jaaye
Jise Hum Yaad karte hai use Khabar ho jaaye ~*~

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12th March 2009, 06:55 PM

Beshak ye ek behtreen ghazal hai purvi jee, hmm...very romantic too...is khOobsurat ghazal per dil de daad qubool kijiye hamari aur se..yuhi likhti rahiye aur mehfil ko roshan karti rahiye

small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,

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YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!

DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..





Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana


Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana


PURVI diiiiiiiiii................awesome.....bahut hi zayada romantic ghazal hai...i loved it....keep writing diiii


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13th March 2009, 09:34 AM

cooool dr....its mindblowing.......
too romantic.....hmmmm
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YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!

DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..





Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana


Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
   
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namaste!!

aapki koShiSh bahot hi achchee rahee.. YuuNhi liKhate raheN aage bhee.. maShq zaaree raKheN !! daad!

KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

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bahot khooob...... purvi ji......... really awesome.....!
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Meri ghazal pasand karne ke liye bahot bahot shukriya

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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana


Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga

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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana
aise kaise chali jaungi

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana

mohabbat ek bar karke chor dete ho aap

Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana

kabhi to Oil lagake choti bandha karo


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana

main nahin jane wali...................


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana

Hontho se pilaoge to Hungama ho jayega


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana

iske baad to bilkul nahin .irada badal diya maine


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa

yeh hui na baat.....................


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana

Itna kuchh karne ke baad koun zalim bardast karega

aur aap kahte ho chale jana


Itni achhi ghazal
kya kahoon main ..................
ab jiju bhi ho jayenge ghayal

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Beshak ye ek behtreen ghazal hai purvi jee, hmm...very romantic too...is khOobsurat ghazal per dil de daad qubool kijiye hamari aur se..yuhi likhti rahiye aur mehfil ko roshan karti rahiye

small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,

duaon ke saath

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Zainyjee,

Bahot bahot shukriya.... Ghazal par aap ki comment se ghazal ki raounak aur badh jaati hai..Hausla afzayee ke liye aap ki tah-e-dil se sukra guzaar hoon..


Jaise ki aap ne kaha hai....
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small note:shayed doosre sher me kaafiye theek nahi baitha, but its ok, ehsaas behad khoobsurat hain,
ghazal likh kar jab use padhi tab is ghazal mein kuch aisi kho gayi thi mei.N ke muje is baat par dhyan hee nahi gaya....

aage se har ek cheez ko dhyan se dekhungi.... bahot bahot shukariya

aage bhi yunhi padhte rahiyega aur apni raa'ye dete rahiyega.

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PURVI diiiiiiiiii................awesome.....bahut hi zayada romantic ghazal hai...i loved it....keep writing diiii
Shukriya Lamha,

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Yunhi apna saath deti rahna..

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KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN

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Housla afzayee ki liye tah-e-dil se Shukriya

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AAp ko meri yeh koshish pasand aayi yeh jankar bahot khushi mili. AAp jaise dosto.N ki raa'ye se housla badhta hai to aage bhee yunhi saath dete rahiyega.....

Housla afzayee ki liye tah-e-dil se Shukriya

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Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga

Uske gulabi ruksaron par, pasine ki woh bunde
Kasamse shabnam bi sharma jaye use dekhkar
AAdab Janab,

Ghazal pasand karne ke liye shukriya..

AAge bhi aise hee padhte rahiyega

Khush rahiye

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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana

Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana

Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana

Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana

Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana

Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa

Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
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hmmm......kya romantic shayri hai.......PURVI Jiiiii.....bahut khoob likha hai aapne, sabhi sher pyar se sarabore karne wale haiN....ek baat samaj nahi aaye....ki ek taraf aap usko pyar se madhosh kar rahi ho aur doosri taraf kah rahi ho ki chale jana.....ma'am koi paagal hi hoga jo etna pyar pane ke baad jayega.....main to kabhi na jauN


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Amazing Gazal so cute so romantic, Dilse daad de raha hun kubul kijiyenga

Uske gulabi ruksaron par, pasine ki woh bunde
Kasamse shabnam bi sharma jaye use dekhkar
AAdab Janab,

Meri ghazal padhne aur pasand karne ke liye aapka bahot bahot shukriya.

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aise kaise chali jaungi

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ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana

mohabbat ek bar karke chor dete ho aap

Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana

kabhi to Oil lagake choti bandha karo


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Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana

main nahin jane wali...................


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana

Hontho se pilaoge to Hungama ho jayega


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iske baad to bilkul nahin .irada badal diya maine


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa

yeh hui na baat.....................


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana

Itna kuchh karne ke baad koun zalim bardast karega

aur aap kahte ho chale jana


Itni achhi ghazal
kya kahoon main ..................
ab jiju bhi ho jayenge ghayal

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Pyaari Diya..........

Tumko yeh ghazal pasand aayi, yeh jankar muje bahot accha laga....
Aur tum to dur jaane ka socho hee mat...

Rahi baat tumhare jiju ki to unhe ghayal karne ke liye muje ghazal likhne ki zarurat nahi hai.................

aage bhi aise hee padhti rahna, aur housala afzaayee karti rahna

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Maine pehli baar aapki itni khuli romantic ghazal padhi hai...............wakai mei bht khoobsurat hai aapki har ghazal ki tarah...........yunhi likhte rahiye........
   
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kya kahna .........

aur jiske liye hai unka bhi kya kahna
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hmmm......kya romantic shayri hai.......PURVI Jiiiii.....bahut khoob likha hai aapne, sabhi sher pyar se sarabore karne wale haiN....
Shukriya sunitaji... meri chhoti si koshish ko sarhane ke liye..........

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ek baat samaj nahi aaye....ki ek taraf aap usko pyar se madhosh kar rahi ho aur doosri taraf kah rahi ho ki chale jana.....ma'am koi paagal hi hoga jo etna pyar pane ke baad jayega.....main to kabhi na jauN
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jee koshish karungi ke aisee galti na ho.... aur aap ki raa'ye
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Maine pehli baar aapki itni khuli romantic ghazal padhi hai...............wakai mei bht khoobsurat hai aapki har ghazal ki tarah...........yunhi likhte rahiye........
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Meri yeh romentic ghazal tumhen acchi lagi, yeh jankar muje bahot khushi huwi...

Aage bhi aise hee padhti rahna aur apni raa'ye se meri ghazal sajati rahna

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Aur aap ki is comments ko kya samja jaye........

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DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

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Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
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Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
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kia baat hai ghazal ji bhut khoobsrat ghaal....................................very nice
   
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kia baat hai ghazal ji bhut khoobsrat ghazal....................................very nice


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UNHE KISSA-E-GAM SUNATE SUNATE
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KAHI BUJH NA JAYE CHIRAAG-E-TAMANNA
CHIRAAG-E-MOHABBAT JALAATE JALAATE


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KAHI BUJH NA JAYE CHIRAAG-E-TAMANNA
CHIRAAG-E-MOHABBAT JALAATE JALAATE


KISSI KO KHABAR HI NAHI LUT GAYAA HU
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KEHDE KOI UNSE…..

WO KHUD BAAZ AAYE APNE SITAM SE
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.... thxxxxx ji....
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Acchi lines thi to ....

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Aap loog yu hi aashirwad dete rahiye.. Hum Kosis karange aap logo ko hamesh kuch achaa sunani ki..

Aap kuch sikha sake to.. achaa lagega.. M glad to hav ur tips if u want to give abt anything...

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Take Care..

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DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..





Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
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bahot khoob purvi ji

Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana

yeh sher bhi behad pasand aaya...

Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana

is sher ke donoen misre saath mein rakhe to koi rabt mujhe nahin nazar aaya..aap se request hai ki aap kuch roshani daale ispe...

Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana

waahhh

Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa

bahot khoob kaha hai...

Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
all in all a very good attempt...loved d flow...tk cr..god bless u

yours,
Pradhyuman


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kaise hainaap? aapko mohabaat per likhte hue aacha laga ....

ehsaas aur unko pesh karne ka andaaz dil ko chu gaya hain


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YaaraaN-e-bazm ko mera adaab!

DostoN, Chand roz pahle Mohd' Rafi Sahab ka gaya huwa ek gana sunaa tha "Theheriye hosh mein aa loon to chale jayiyega". Yeh mere pasandida gano mein se hai... Use sun ne ke baad socha ke kyun na aisi koi ghazal likhi jaaye..... aur fir apni soch aur kalam ke saath se yeh ghazal likhi.........

toh leejiye, pesh kar rahi hoon maiN phir ek nayii ghazal ...gaur farmaaiyega ..





Haal-e-dil apna suna loon to chale jaana
Tumko humraaz bana loon to chale jaana

Kab talak chupaa .unga apni Ulfaat tumse
ikraar –e-mohabat jo kar loon to chale jaana


Sharm-o-haya se rukh par jaise bikhri zulfe.N
Un.ko rukh par mei.N saja loon to chale jaana


Tere Husn par fidaa hai yahan deewane kayi.
Tum ko Nazaro.N mein chupa loon to chale jaana


Jaam bahot peeye teri qaatil nazaro.N se mei.Ne
ek jaam tuje hootho.N se pila loon to chale jaana


Ek muddat se pyaasa hoo.N mein teri chahat ka
Tuj ko ek bar seene se laga loon to chale jaana


Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
Jaadu yeh ishq ka chalaa loon to chale jaanaa


Tum ko dil me.n basaa kar likhi hai yeh “Ghazal”
Dhire se usko gun-gunaa loon to chale jaana
main iss khusurat ceration ki kaha se taarif shuru karu...bas itna keh sakta hu....bahut khubsurat Ghazal hai aapki...daad kabul farmaaye.....




YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...

Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...


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Tum mujh ko hi chaaho aur duniya bhulaa do
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Thanks for reading Shaan..............

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