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Praneeta Ji....aapne is Ghazal mai Zindgi ka saara dard Utaar diya....aisa laga mujhe padhkar......par main chaahata hu.....in lafzo jaisa aapke jeevan mai kabhi na ho...aap hamesha khush rahe....

Ghazal ki rachna aapne bahut khub ki hai......har ashaar dil ko rula ke jaa raha hai....very nice creation........superB........

har ashaar ko dil se daad....hazeer hai....

aise hi likhte rahiey...
khush rahiye.....
apna khayal rakhiyega....
duaaon ke saath....
Naresh ji....................namaste

kaise hai aap?
sach farmaya aap ne
main apne dard ko hamesha apni ghazalon mein utaarne ki koshish karti raheti hun, kabhi safal hoti hun toh kabhi nahi
aap ki comments se malum padta hai ki iss baar safal hui hun, kam se kam aap tak toh pahuchi meri dard
mujhe khushi hai ki aap ko meri ye poetry pasand aayi
shukriya dost
mehafil mein aate rahe
humari himmat badhate rahe

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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi

Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi
Hi Praneeta...hw r u?....logged in after a long time today...read ur poem...wohi dard hai aaj bhi jo pehle hua karta tha....bahot khoob...keep it up dear & be happy..

Ye sher dil ke sabse kareeb laga

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi


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Har sher naya sa lagta hai .. andaaz pasand aaya mujhe.. maqte maiN koi dum nahi hai .. na alfaazi na khyaali... baaki ghazal khoob hui hai .. mujhe jo quote kiya .. bohat pasand aaya ...

Kunaal

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ye ghazal sochi samjhi hui nahi hai
bas mere kuch ehsaas hai
aap ko padhne layak lagi yahi kaafi hai mere liya

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Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

badi zor .............. its beauty
bahut achy se use kiya hia ye word ,... mai kabhi nahi kar sakta tha

magar ..

awaaz aate nahi .... ye sahi nahi hai ....... awaaz aati nahi .. agar awaz ka plural likhna ho to aawzen aati nahi hoga
but awaz ate nahi... it is not correct ...........

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka . bahut confusing hai
ruh tak pake dhokhaa ... vyakaran(grammar) ke hisaab se sahi nahi lag raha .... but i m mont 100% sure .. i m 90% sure


Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

it very nice line ..

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

koe mehrbaan .....milte hian .. plural hai to koe mehrbaan nahi kayee mehrbaan hoga

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

tumhre ke jagah humare karti to aur acha hota waise yeh bhi acha misra hai ...

hope u dont mind waise maien bade gusse wale mood mai padhi hai to shayed aise copmment kiya hai
achy mood mai fir se zaroor padhunga

sorry haan

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Aur haan .... tumko gender ki knowledge nahi hai .. bahut weak ho isme
ise sudharo....

ye to bahut zaroori hai

tumne naresh bhayee ko reply kiya hia usme likha hai ...

meri dard .............. mera dard hota hai ... plz ise theek karo as soon as u can ....

by take care
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bohut hi pyari ghazal likhi hai aapne thanks for sharing
yuhi likhte rahiye
shukriya dost

aap ki comments padh kar mujhe khushi hui
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Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi



Bohat khoobsurat peshkash Pareenita jee, dad kabool kare.

Mere khayaal se makhte me koi meharbaa.N ki jagah kaiee meharbaa.N hona

chahiye.

Hello Sajid ji

sahi farmaya aap ne.....'koi' nahi waha 'kayi' shabd hona chahiyen. typing error hai dost....shukriya ussay sudhaarne ke liye
ghazal ki dusri line mein bhi spelling mistake hai 'dukhanse' nahi 'dukhane' hona chahiyen....extra s
shukriya padhne ke liye aur pasand karne ke liye

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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

Bahut khub praneeta jee
apki rachna behad pasand aayi mujhe


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Hi Praneeta...hw r u?....logged in after a long time today...read ur poem...wohi dard hai aaj bhi jo pehle hua karta tha....bahot khoob...keep it up dear & be happy..

Ye sher dil ke sabse kareeb laga

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard

Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi
hello dear friend......how r u?
long time!!!

thnx 4 ur response....haa dost hum bhi wahi hai aur dard bhi wahi hai par aap hi kahi gum ho...mahefil mein aate rahe dost

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Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

badi zor .............. its beauty
bahut achy se use kiya hia ye word ,... mai kabhi nahi kar sakta tha

magar ..

awaaz aate nahi .... ye sahi nahi hai ....... awaaz aati nahi .. agar awaz ka plural likhna ho to aawzen aati nahi hoga
but awaz ate nahi... it is not correct ...........

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka . bahut confusing hai
ruh tak pake dhokhaa ... vyakaran(grammar) ke hisaab se sahi nahi lag raha .... but i m mont 100% sure .. i m 90% sure


Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

it very nice line ..

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

koe mehrbaan .....milte hian .. plural hai to koe mehrbaan nahi kayee mehrbaan hoga

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

tumhre ke jagah humare karti to aur acha hota waise yeh bhi acha misra hai ...

hope u dont mind waise maien bade gusse wale mood mai padhi hai to shayed aise copmment kiya hai
achy mood mai fir se zaroor padhunga

sorry haan

keep writing

janumanu ji.........namaste

aap ki comments ko main seriously zarur leti hun par apni improvemnet ke liye. mujhe khushi hoti hai ki meri posts ko itni bariki se padhte hai aur mujhe meri khamiyan batate hai. shukriya janab.
meri koshish yahi raheti hai aur aage bhi rahegi ki main apni galtiyan na dahorau. aap ka ssath isi tarah raha toh jo bhi meri khamiyan hai vo jald hi dur ho jayengi mujhe vishwaas hai
please yuhi saath dete rahiyen
dil se shukriya ada karti hun aap ka
ek baat zarur kahungi ki yeh unfair hai ki aap gusse mood hai aur meri ghazal bechari aap ki rahemon karam par hai
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Aur haan .... tumko gender ki knowledge nahi hai .. bahut weak ho isme
ise sudharo....

ye to bahut zaroori hai

tumne naresh bhayee ko reply kiya hia usme likha hai ...

meri dard .............. mera dard hota hai ... plz ise theek karo as soon as u can ....

by take care
happy always

hmm....ye baat toh bilkul thik kaha aap ne.
sach mein aur main ye baat kayi baar khud kah chuki hun ki meri language bahot weak hai....chahe gender kaho, grammer kaho, spelling etc etc, sao baat ki ek baat, meri language buri hai.
par mujhe khushi hai ki language problem hote hue bhi main apni ghazalon ke zariyen se apne dil ki baat aap doston tak pahucha paati hun....
haa!! par koshish zari hai language sudhaarne ki
aap zarur saath dijiyenga

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achcha laga mujhe aap ko yaha dekh kar
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Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

badi zor .............. its beauty
bahut achy se use kiya hia ye word ,... mai kabhi nahi kar sakta tha

magar ..

awaaz aate nahi .... ye sahi nahi hai ....... awaaz aati nahi .. agar awaz ka plural likhna ho to aawzen aati nahi hoga
but awaz ate nahi... it is not correct ...........

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka . bahut confusing hai
ruh tak pake dhokhaa ... vyakaran(grammar) ke hisaab se sahi nahi lag raha .... but i m mont 100% sure .. i m 90% sure


Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

it very nice line ..

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba

koe mehrbaan .....milte hian .. plural hai to koe mehrbaan nahi kayee mehrbaan hoga

Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

tumhre ke jagah humare karti to aur acha hota waise yeh bhi acha misra hai ...

hope u dont mind waise maien bade gusse wale mood mai padhi hai to shayed aise copmment kiya hai
achy mood mai fir se zaroor padhunga

sorry haan

keep writing

Vikas ji...its almost an year now!!
aap ka mood abhi bhi achcha nahi hua meri poetry ko fir se padhne ke liye
its really very unfair
pliz help me 2 improve

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Iss dil ko samajh uss dil ke raaz aate nahi
Aur vo hai dil dukhanse se baaz aate nahi

Socha lelu intaqaam deke unhe gahera dard
Bebas hun ki dil todne ke andaaz aate nahi

Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi

Hai zhakhmi ruh tak paake waafon mein dhoka
Par khilaaf unke hoothon pe alfaaz aate nahi

Yu toh milte hain har kadam par koi maherba
Tahumr saath chale jo 'pari' ke dil nawaaz aate nahi

praneeta jee
radhe radhe

bahut khoob likhti hain aapke dard ko bayaan karne ka tareeka bahut achha laga lagta hai jaise dil me dard hi dard bhara ho
par khuda naa kare ki aisa ho
duaon ke saath


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HameiN bhi aapki yaha shaayri behad pasand aayi, Pari Betiya...!

Har ek sher taareef-e-kaabil hai...!

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Tute sheeshon ki khanak gunjti hai badi zor
Khwahish tute toh kambkat aawaz aate nahi



Quoted couplet is my favourite...!

Thanks for sharing and keep it up, ok...?

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praneeta jee
radhe radhe

bahut khoob likhti hain aapke dard ko bayaan karne ka tareeka bahut achha laga lagta hai jaise dil me dard hi dard bhara ho
par khuda naa kare ki aisa ho
duaon ke saath

Ishk sahab
radhe radhe

sahi farmaya aap ne...dil mein sirf dard hi dard hai
par ab koi farq nahi padhta dukh dard se
jiye ja rahe hai hum
thnx 4 reading

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