~.... Baba ...........!!

janumanu · 10:51 AM

मेरा सब बिखरा है तुम सहेज दो बाबा
खुद नही तो अम्मा को भेज दो बाबा

Mera sab bikhra hai tum sahej do baba
khud nahi to Amma ko bhej do baba

बारिस हूँ तेरा सो तुझसे माँग रहा हूँ
हाथ की शिफा माथे का तेज दो बाबा

waris hun tera so tujhse mang raha hun
hath ki shifa, mathey ka tej do baba

जर्द हरा करे जो मुरझाए पेड़ो का
धरती को इक ऐसा रंगरेज दो बाबा

zard hara kare ko murjhaye pedon ka
dharti ko aisa rang-rej do baba

‘अम्मा की बलियाँ’ कहा था तूने
अब बहू को उसका दहेज दो बाबा

'Amma ki baliyaan' kaha tha tune
ab bahu ko uska dahej do baba

ग़रीबो को दिला उनकी रोज़ी रोटी
अमीरो को थोड़ा परहेज दो बाबा

Gareebo ko dila unki roji roti
ameero ko thoda parhej do baba

मैं भी क्यू तेरा कोई काम करू
खुद आके चिड़ियों को नेज दो बाबा

main bhi tera koe kam karu
khud ake chidion ko nej* do baba

*nej .... marne ke baad us insan ke liye khane se pahle alag se khana rakha jata hai .. jise fir chidion ko khila diya jata hai .. ya use jo khud khana na bana sakta ho

Purvi · 28th March 2009, 11:31 AM

Janumanuji,

aap ki har ghazal mein kuch na kuch naya andaaz dekhne milta hai....

bahot khoob

yunhi likhte rahiye aur mahefil roushan karte rahiye

khush rahiye

purvi

sunita thakur · 28th March 2009, 04:47 PM

gr8 work...............................!

reps added

Praneeta · 28th March 2009, 05:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by janumanu

मेरा सब बिखरा है तुम सहेज दो बाबा
खुद नही तो अम्मा को भेज दो बाबा

Mera sab bikhra hai tum sahej do baba
khud nahi to Amma ko bhej do baba

बारिस हूँ तेरा सो तुझसे माँग रहा हूँ
हाथ की शिफा माथे का तेज दो बाबा

waris hun tera so tujhse mang raha hun
hath ki shifa, mathey ka tej do baba

जर्द हरा करे जो मुरझाए पेड़ो का
धरती को इक ऐसा रंगरेज दो बाबा

zard hara kare ko murjhaye pedon ka
dharti ko aisa rang-rej do baba

‘अम्मा की बलियाँ’ कहा था तूने
अब बहू को उसका दहेज दो बाबा

'Amma ki baliyaan' kaha tha tune
ab bahu ko uska dahej do baba

ग़रीबो को दिला उनकी रोज़ी रोटी
अमीरो को थोड़ा परहेज दो बाबा

Gareebo ko dila unki roji roti
ameero ko thoda parhej do baba

मैं भी क्यू तेरा कोई काम करू
खुद आके चिड़ियों को नेज दो बाबा

main bhi tera koe kam karu
khud ake chidion ko nej* do baba

*nej .... marne ke baad us insan ke liye khane se pahle alag se khana rakha jata hai .. jise fir chidion ko khila diya jata hai .. ya use jo khud khana na bana sakta ho

mindblowing..............keep up

Regards
Praneeta

janumanu · 30th March 2009, 04:38 PM

Sunitaji , purvi ji , parineeta ji

Appka bahut shukriya jo aapne padha aur saraha ...........

This is more then i deserve

N@zneen · 30th March 2009, 04:47 PM

Hi,

ur work is always great.........bht gehrai hai aapki soch mei phir bhi itna simple ki use samajhne me koi dikkat pesh nhi aati...........KEEP IT UP

Baqtiar · 30th March 2009, 06:04 PM

But am not sure... Who is the 'BABA' Referred in here..... 'Is it the almighty'???

Chaand · 31st March 2009, 04:01 PM

Bahut hi khoobsoorat likha hai aapne.

Parhkar bahut achchha laga.

Shukriya aapki is post ke liye.

Chaand

KunaaL · 1st April 2009, 02:58 AM

MaiN bas itna kahuNga ..

Ki maiN samajh sakta huN iska ek ek alfaz...

Kunaal

janumanu · 2nd April 2009, 03:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by N@zneen

Hi,

ur work is always great.........bht gehrai hai aapki soch mei phir bhi itna simple ki use samajhne me koi dikkat pesh nhi aati...........KEEP IT UP

ji shukriyaa mai jo likhu .. woh samjh aye aur samjhne walo ko zara sa to kahi na kahi chu le .. bas itne se maksad se likhta hun

shayed thoda bahut poora hua ho kabhi

janumanu · 03:17 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Baqtiar

But am not sure... Who is the 'BABA' Referred in here..... 'Is it the almighty'???

Well its for both ... ye aapke nazariye pe hai ... aap kiss se sambodhit hote hai..
waise

bhagwaan bhi aasmaan mai .. aur baba bhi ...

Aur .... mere dada (baba) known as "Mahatma" .. at my hometown ..

when anybody of there age or younger too ..come to know that i m his grandson ... they give me respect as i m an elder to them

isse badi virasat shayed hi koe chhod ke jaata ho

So there is no difference for me ...... baba or almighty ....!!

one who gave me vision a way to think .. a way to walk toward life
........!!

Thanx for comment

janumanu · 2nd April 2009, 03:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sacccha_pyar

MaiN bas itna kahuNga ..

Ki maiN samajh sakta huN iska ek ek alfaz...

Kunaal

shurkiyaa bhayee ........

samjh agye barna jayaa hi ho jata sab

Mujeeb · 6th April 2009, 01:02 PM

Aadaab !

Janumannu (Vikas) jee sab se pehle to aik achi koshish per meri daad Qabool fermaaieN ,

Mera sab bikhra hai tum sahej do baba
khud nahi to Amma ko bhej do baba

Quote:

waris hun tera so tujhse mang raha hun
hath ki shifa, mathey ka tej do baba

iski thoRi se wizaHat fermaa daiN to shayad baat waaziH ho jaaey mujh naaQis taalib elm ke liye

Quote:

zard hara kare ko murjhaye pedon ka
dharti ko aisa rang-rej do baba

pehla misra smajh se bilkul QaaSir hai

Quote:

'Amma ki baliyaan' kaha tha tune
ab bahu ko uska dahej do baba

jahaN tak meri naaQiS e'lmi hai to jahaiz to beTi ko diyaa jaata bahu to apne ghar se laati hai

Gareebo ko dila unki roji roti
ameero ko thoda parhej do baba

Quote:

main bhi tera koe kam karu
khud ake chidion ko nej* do baba

jaisa ke aapp ne pehle miSra' meN kaha app unka koi kaam kerna chahte haiN dosre maiN kaha keh khud aa ker chiRyoN ko nej do ... kuch smajh meN nahi aaya keh app kon sa kaam kerne chahte haiN phir ?

iski bhi wizaHat ho jaaey to beHad shuker guzaar rahoN ga .

janumanu · 6th April 2009, 01:18 PM

waris hun tera so tujhse mang raha hun
hath ki shifa, mathey ka tej do baba

........
well isme maine ... baba ke haath ka asar aur unke mathey ka tej manga hai ...

"agar ek pita apne bete ko jaydaad se be-dakhl bhi kar de to bhi .. unka pota uska warish mana jata hai ...... "

isliye maine baba se unka warish hone ke nate unki shifa aur tej manga hai .....

if still not cleared my be i m not able to convey my message .. my fault

janumanu · 6th April 2009, 01:23 PM

zard hara kare ko murjhaye pedon ka
dharti ko aisa rang-rej do baba

Qasir ka matlab nahi pata mujhe ... shayad aapko clear nahi hua hai ... ye misra ...

murjhaye ped .... se matlab jinke patte zard ho jate ho .. peele pad jate ho .....

rang-rej jo rang karta hai ....

janumanu · 6th April 2009, 01:29 PM

'Amma ki baliyaan' kaha tha tune
ab bahu ko uska dahej do baba

aapki abhut mehrbani ki aapne is sher ko padha ........barna mai to samjha tha ki yeh yun hi jaaya ho gaya

dahej dena ... ek riwaj hai ... universal truth nahi ... ki hum her-fair na kar sake is riwaaj mai ........

aur riwaaj badlne hi chahiye thats why i wrote ...

mai bachpan mai jab daadi ki god mai sota tha .. tu unki balyaan pakad liya karta tha .... woh mere liye us woqt sabse khoobsurat cheez hoti thi ..

dada bolte they ye teri bahu ke liye hai .........

unke baad un baliyon ko unke sath hi ganga mai baha diya ........

isliye ye khyaal chubhta raha barso ...

aur meri bibi apne sath dahej nahi layee ....
mai is riwaaj ko nahi manta ..
haan lekin agar ...

dahej kuch is tarah diya jaye to yakeenan manunga

i m really very much thanx

janumanu · 6th April 2009, 01:33 PM

मैं भी क्यू तेरा कोई काम करू
खुद आके चिड़ियों को नेज दो बाबा

main bhi KYUN tera koe kam karu
khud ake chidion ko nej* do baba

Well its just typing mistake ..... in roman
maine hindi mai sahi likha hai lekin shayed .... aapne dhyaan nahi diya ........

Shukriyaa .....aapka
umeed hai aap isi tarah apna khaas dhyaan denge mujhpe ..

I m Really honored

Regards:

Janumanu

Mujeeb · 7th April 2009, 11:13 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by janumanu

waris hun tera so tujhse mang raha hun
hath ki shifa, mathey ka tej do baba
........
well isme maine ... baba ke haath ka asar aur unke mathey ka tej manga hai ...

"agar ek pita apne bete ko jaydaad se be-dakhl bhi kar de to bhi .. unka pota uska warish mana jata hai ...... "

isliye maine baba se unka warish hone ke nate unki shifa aur tej manga hai .....

if still not cleared my be i m not able to convey my message .. my fault

Aadaab !

well meri smajh meN sirf haath ki shifaa nahi aa raha tha ... khair

thanx

Quote:

Originally Posted by janumanu

zard hara kare ko murjhaye pedon ka
dharti ko aisa rang-rej do baba

Qasir ka matlab nahi pata mujhe ... shayad aapko clear nahi hua hai ... ye misra ...

murjhaye ped .... se matlab jinke patte zard ho jate ho .. peele pad jate ho .....

rang-rej jo rang karta hai ....

QaSir : "not able"

pehla miSra' smajh meN nahi aa raha , app ghaur fermaaieN keh woh saHeeH hai ya sirf maiN hi smajhne se QaaSir hoN

Quote:

Originally Posted by janumanu

'Amma ki baliyaan' kaha tha tune
ab bahu ko uska dahej do baba

aapki abhut mehrbani ki aapne is sher ko padha ........barna mai to samjha tha ki yeh yun hi jaaya ho gaya

dahej dena ... ek riwaj hai ... universal truth nahi ... ki hum her-fair na kar sake is riwaaj mai ........

aur riwaaj badlne hi chahiye thats why i wrote ...

aur meri bibi apne sath dahej nahi layee ....
mai is riwaaj ko nahi manta ..
haan lekin agar ...

dahej kuch is tarah diya jaye to yakeenan manunga

i m really very much thanx

mere azeez dost is meN mehbaani kahey ki ? hum ne to poori ghazal peRhi

mager shukriyaH sirf si sher ke liye , kiyaa baat hai ? app ki baatoN se lag raha hai jaise app ki ghazal peRh ker maiN koi jurm ker diyaa hai

aur baat rahi Jazhaiz ki to app ki baat 12 aane Theek hai mager jahaiz ke lughvi maa'ni hi woh saaman hai jo maaN baap ke ghar se leRki ko milta hai

Jahaiz :the paraphernalia of a bride, vestments and furniture of every kind which a bride brings to her husband's house; bride's portion, a dowry

mere khayal se rasm-o-riwaaj to badle jaa sakte haiN per unke naam nahieN , baaqi app khud ahl-e-i'lm haiN behter jaante haiN

Quote:

Originally Posted by janumanu

मैं भी क्यू तेरा कोई काम करू
खुद आके चिड़ियों को नेज दो बाबा

main bhi KYUN tera koe kam karu
khud ake chidion ko nej* do baba

Well its just typing mistake ..... in roman
maine hindi mai sahi likha hai lekin shayed .... aapne dhyaan nahi diya ........

Shukriyaa .....aapka
umeed hai aap isi tarah apna khaas dhyaan denge mujhpe ..

I m Really honored

Regards:

Janumanu

app ka shukriyah app ne darusti fermaai ,

maiN pakistan se hoN aur pakistan maiN Hindi script nahi peRhaai jaati wahaN urdu peRhaai jaati hai is liye mujhe hindi bilkul bhi nahi peRH sakta, so , dhyaan na daine ka sawal hi paida nahi hoota

mere comments shayad app ko bure lage mazrat chahta hoN aainda aisi gustakhi nahi bertoN ga app ke saath ,

mujhse koi aur gustaakhi huwi ho to shamma chahta hoN

Mujeeb

janumanu · 7th April 2009, 11:31 AM

are maine to aapki kisi baat ka bura nahi mana ..........

ab mai jabaab aise hi de sakta tha . to aise hi diya ....

yaha pe poem isliye post karta hun taki uspe baat ho ......... barna kisi ki wah wah se mere bhala hona hota to kabka ho gaya hota .........

ab agar koe mere mai nuks nikale to ... mai iska bura maan lu .. aisa karen laga to shayed mai din bhar khafa hi rahunga .....

aisa bilkul bhi nahi hai ........ mera yakeen kijiye

aur rahi aapki hindi na padhne ki .... hmm u r right ... ye baat maine bhi sochi thi ....

aur dahej ki baat to main.... jo sochta hun likhta hun ...... aur mai soch badnle ki sochta hun

aap issse itfaaq nahi rakhte ye aapki soch hai .... aur bahut logo ki bhi hogi .....

mai to aisa hi dahej manta hun ..

aur aap jab chahe jitne chahe nuks nikaal sakte hai ...
main aise hi seekhta hun ......