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sapana
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26th April 2009, 05:54 AM
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagiki jo kami thi ab pata hui.
basrneko to basar jayegi zindagi,
din-ratki ginati ab yaksa hui,
katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua,
ai ranj ab to thmb ja, kafi barakha hui.
jise samazte the tum chotisi bat,
mere liye voh baat do jaha hui.
ai mere khuda to khafa na hona,
tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui.
dilke damanpe hazaro paiband lage hai,
use bachaneki tarkebe jasata hui.
mautki dua karana CHHod diya hamne,
ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui.
sapana cHHod duniyake ranjogamko,
tere ek isharepe fir zinda hui.
Sapana
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anant
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26th April 2009, 02:13 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by sapana
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagiki jo kami thi ab pata hui.
basrneko to basar jayegi zindagi,
din-ratki ginati ab yaksa hui,
katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua,
ai ranj ab to thmb ja, kafi barakha hui.
jise samazte the tum chotisi bat,
mere liye voh baat do jaha hui.
ai mere khuda to khafa na hona,
tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui.
dilke damanpe hazaro paiband lage hai,
use bachaneki tarkebe jasata hui.
mautki dua karana CHHod diya hamne,
ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui.
sapana cHHod duniyake ranjogamko,
tere ek isharepe fir zinda hui.
Sapana
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sapana ji behad hi khusurat likha ha bas thora sa sudhar karne ka prayas
kiya galti ho jaye to ek bhai samajh maaf kar dena.
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagi ki jo kami thi ab pata hui.
gujarne ko to gujar jayegi zindagi,
din-rat ki ginati ab yaksa hui,
katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua,
ai ranj ab to tham ja, kafi barakha hui.
jise samazte the tum choti si bat,
mere liye voh baat do jaha hui.
ai mere khuda to khafa na hona,
tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui.
dil ke daman pe hazaro paiband lage hai,
use bachane ki tarkebe jasata hui.
maut ki dua karana CHHod diya hamne,
ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui.
sapana cHHod duniya ke ranjo gam ko,
tere ek ishare pe fir zinda hui.
Last edited by dayanand; 26th April 2009 at 02:18 PM..
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sapana
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26th April 2009, 07:53 PM
Thanks a lot for your reply. If you don't mind can I change it to Gujarne?
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Originally Posted by dayanand
sapana ji behad hi khusurat likha ha bas thora sa sudhar karne ka prayas
kiya galti ho jaye to ek bhai samajh maaf kar dena.
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagi ki jo kami thi ab pata hui.
gujarne ko to gujar jayegi zindagi,
din-rat ki ginati ab yaksa hui,
katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua,
ai ranj ab to tham ja, kafi barakha hui.
jise samazte the tum choti si bat,
mere liye voh baat do jaha hui.
ai mere khuda to khafa na hona,
tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui.
dil ke daman pe hazaro paiband lage hai,
use bachane ki tarkebe jasata hui.
maut ki dua karana CHHod diya hamne,
ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui.
sapana cHHod duniya ke ranjo gam ko,
tere ek ishare pe fir zinda hui.
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anant
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26th April 2009, 10:48 PM
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Originally Posted by sapana
Thanks a lot for your reply. If you don't mind can I change it to Gujarne?
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I DON'T MIND DIDI BECOUSE THIS IS YOUR CREATION & I AM YOUR LITTLE BROTHER...........
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sapana
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26th April 2009, 11:39 PM
thanks Anant. I will change it. It sounds better.
Sapana
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I DON'T MIND DIDI BECOUSE THIS IS YOUR CREATION & I AM YOUR LITTLE BROTHER...........
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The Lost Poet
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27th April 2009, 02:58 AM
bahut khub sapna ji, behad sunder likha hai apne.......... awesome piece of poetry. keep up the good work
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Originally Posted by sapana
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagiki jo kami thi ab pata hui.
basrneko to basar jayegi zindagi,
din-ratki ginati ab yaksa hui,
katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua,
ai ranj ab to thmb ja, kafi barakha hui.
jise samazte the tum chotisi bat,
mere liye voh baat do jaha hui.
ai mere khuda to khafa na hona,
tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui.
dilke damanpe hazaro paiband lage hai,
use bachaneki tarkebe jasata hui.
mautki dua karana CHHod diya hamne,
ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui.
sapana cHHod duniyake ranjogamko,
tere ek isharepe fir zinda hui.
Sapana
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Nalin
Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe,
Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe,
Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka,
woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe
Please Honor me and my creative writing by visitng my website @ www.nalin-mehra.blogspot.com
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sapana
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27th April 2009, 06:01 PM
Dear Nalin Mehra,
Thanks so much for the comment.Shukriya!
Sapana
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bahut khub sapna ji, behad sunder likha hai apne.......... awesome piece of poetry. keep up the good work
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anant
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30th April 2009, 05:40 PM
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thanks Anant. I will change it. It sounds better.
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sapana didi keep writing more & more for us....................
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5th May 2009, 03:57 PM
wah kya khoob likha hai apne,magar ye language jara samjh maai nahi aye.........maf kijjeyega,
wo mohbbat thi gum,gum-e-mohobbat mai mohobbat mai tha,
ki ab to sukr mana mujh jese maikhano ka........
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