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Thumbs up Ghazal: ees Qadar tumse judaa hum ho gaye haii...! - 17th April 2021, 11:21 AM

Mere Pyaare dostoN Namskaar aur Aadaab..!

aik lambe arse baad mehfil meiN haazir huaa huuN apni ek koShiSh ke saath.. Shayri.com pariwaar ki sab se Khoobsoorat see baat yehi hai ki chaahe waQt kitnaa bhee beet jaayeN ees jaGah ki ehmiyat kabhee kam nahiiN hotee jahaaN hum sab ne apne ka'ii ehsaasoN ko ek doosre ke saath baaNTaa haii.. ummid kartaa huuN aap sab ko meri yeh koShiSh pasaNd aayengee , aap sab kaa pyaar aur saath hameShaa ki taraH ees baar bhee mujee muilengaa.. mulaA'iizaa farmaa'iiye..!



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ees Qadar tumse judaa hum ho gaye haii
Khud hi Khud ke Khudaa hum ho gaye haii

Wo safar kitnaa suhaanaa thaa hamaaraa !!
soch kar fir Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye haii

hum yahaaN aur tum wahaaN donoN alag haiN
dooriyoN meiN laapataa hum ho gaye haii

in lakeeroN meiN liKheN haiN Ghum hazaaroN
muskuraahaT se Khafaa hum ho gaye haii

Pyaar meiN jo bhee milaa maNzoor mujh ko
dard kaa ik Qaafilaa hum ho gaye haii

KhwaahisheN merii adhooree reh gaii kuChh
keh raheN sab bad-duaa se hum ho gaye haii

har janam meiN tum milo ye aarazoo haii
ees janam se to rihaa hum ho gaye haii

"JOSH" ki har ik duaa meiN tum rahogee
KhuSh raho tum ab vidaa hum ho gaye haii



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17th April 2021, 08:37 PM

Dhaval ji,
Bahut hi achha likha hai aapne. Bakhubi bayan kiya hai dard.

har janam meiN tum milo ye aarazoo haii
ees janam se to rihaa hum ho gaye haii

Janam se to rihaee ho sakti hai per Isqk ke zazbaaton se rihaee mumkin hi nahi.

Aapki dost,
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18th April 2021, 02:21 PM

Dear dhaval,

aapki likhi ghazal bahut khub lagi... pahale padhana aur ab aapko padhana.. bahut parivartan aaya hai.. matureness jhalakane lagi hai.. shabdo ke chayan me barikiya aa gayi hai.... ummide kerta hu .. jald hi duseri peshkash aapki padhane ko milegi...keep writting..God bless you..

shubhkamnao sahit
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23rd April 2021, 12:21 PM

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Mere Pyaare dostoN Namskaar aur Aadaab..!

aik lambe arse baad mehfil meiN haazir huaa huuN apni ek koShiSh ke saath.. Shayri.com pariwaar ki sab se Khoobsoorat see baat yehi hai ki chaahe waQt kitnaa bhee beet jaayeN ees jaGah ki ehmiyat kabhee kam nahiiN hotee jahaaN hum sab ne apne ka'ii ehsaasoN ko ek doosre ke saath baaNTaa haii.. ummid kartaa huuN aap sab ko meri yeh koShiSh pasaNd aayengee , aap sab kaa pyaar aur saath hameShaa ki taraH ees baar bhee mujee muilengaa.. mulaA'iizaa farmaa'iiye..!



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ees Qadar tumse judaa hum ho gaye haii
Khud hi Khud ke Khudaa hum ho gaye haii

Wo safar kitnaa suhaanaa thaa hamaaraa !!
soch kar fir Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye haii

hum yahaaN aur tum wahaaN donoN alag haiN
dooriyoN meiN laapataa hum ho gaye haii

in lakeeroN meiN liKheN haiN Ghum hazaaroN
muskuraahaT se Khafaa hum ho gaye haii

Pyaar meiN jo bhee milaa maNzoor mujh ko
dard kaa ik Qaafilaa hum ho gaye haii

KhwaahisheN merii adhooree reh gaii kuChh
keh raheN sab bad-duaa se hum ho gaye haii

har janam meiN tum milo ye aarazoo haii
ees janam se to rihaa hum ho gaye haii

"JOSH" ki har ik duaa meiN tum rahogee
KhuSh raho tum ab vidaa hum ho gaye haii



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इस क़दर तुम से जुदा हम हो गए हैं
खुद ही खुद के खुदा हम हो गए है

वो सफर कितना सुहाना था हमारा
सोच कर फिर ग़मज़दा हम हो गए है

हम यहां और तुम वहाँ दोनों अलग है
दूरियों में लापता हम हो गए है

इन लकीरों में लिखे हैं ग़म हज़ारों
मुस्कराहट से खफा हम हो गए है

प्यार में जो भी मिला मंज़ूर मुझ को
दर्द का इक क़ाफ़िला हम हो गए है

ख्वाहिशें मेरी अधूरी रह गई कुछ
कह रहें सब बद्दुआ से हम हो गए है

हर जनम में तुम मिलो ये आरज़ू है
इस जनम से तो रिहा हम हो गए है

"जोश" की हर इक दुआ में तुम रहोगी
खुश रहो तुम अब विदा हम हो गए है



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udhasi mat likha kar....tuj par pyar mohabat wali shayri hi acchi lagti hai.

pyar aur duaon ke saath
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Waahh ... kya khoob gazal kahi janaab .... jazbaat se labrez kalaam


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Hi Dhaval,

Aapne bahaut achha likha hai..padh ke achha bhi laga aur sad bhi laga.

Koi ek sher pick nahi kar paaye..poori gazhal bahaut achhi thee

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Dhaval, aapse kuch poochna tha but private messaging nahi kar paa rahe hain aapko..aapka inbox full hai. Can you please clear it?
   
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Dhaval ji, phir se padha aapka likha hua. Socha iss baar phir se padhke shayad koi ek sher sabse achha lagega but choose nahi kar paaye..poori gazhal bahaut achhi thee. Bahaut dil se likhi aapne aur humne bahaut dil se padhi.

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Mere Pyaare dostoN Namskaar aur Aadaab..!

aik lambe arse baad mehfil meiN haazir huaa huuN apni ek koShiSh ke saath.. Shayri.com pariwaar ki sab se Khoobsoorat see baat yehi hai ki chaahe waQt kitnaa bhee beet jaayeN ees jaGah ki ehmiyat kabhee kam nahiiN hotee jahaaN hum sab ne apne ka'ii ehsaasoN ko ek doosre ke saath baaNTaa haii.. ummid kartaa huuN aap sab ko meri yeh koShiSh pasaNd aayengee , aap sab kaa pyaar aur saath hameShaa ki taraH ees baar bhee mujee muilengaa.. mulaA'iizaa farmaa'iiye..!



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ees Qadar tumse judaa hum ho gaye haii
Khud hi Khud ke Khudaa hum ho gaye haii

Wo safar kitnaa suhaanaa thaa hamaaraa !!
soch kar fir Ghumzadaa hum ho gaye haii

hum yahaaN aur tum wahaaN donoN alag haiN
dooriyoN meiN laapataa hum ho gaye haii

in lakeeroN meiN liKheN haiN Ghum hazaaroN
muskuraahaT se Khafaa hum ho gaye haii

Pyaar meiN jo bhee milaa maNzoor mujh ko
dard kaa ik Qaafilaa hum ho gaye haii

KhwaahisheN merii adhooree reh gaii kuChh
keh raheN sab bad-duaa se hum ho gaye haii

har janam meiN tum milo ye aarazoo haii
ees janam se to rihaa hum ho gaye haii

"JOSH" ki har ik duaa meiN tum rahogee
KhuSh raho tum ab vidaa hum ho gaye haii



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इस क़दर तुम से जुदा हम हो गए हैं
खुद ही खुद के खुदा हम हो गए है

वो सफर कितना सुहाना था हमारा
सोच कर फिर ग़मज़दा हम हो गए है

हम यहां और तुम वहाँ दोनों अलग है
दूरियों में लापता हम हो गए है

इन लकीरों में लिखे हैं ग़म हज़ारों
मुस्कराहट से खफा हम हो गए है

प्यार में जो भी मिला मंज़ूर मुझ को
दर्द का इक क़ाफ़िला हम हो गए है

ख्वाहिशें मेरी अधूरी रह गई कुछ
कह रहें सब बद्दुआ से हम हो गए है

हर जनम में तुम मिलो ये आरज़ू है
इस जनम से तो रिहा हम हो गए है

"जोश" की हर इक दुआ में तुम रहोगी
खुश रहो तुम अब विदा हम हो गए है



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kyaa khoobsurat bayaani ki hai dhaval saahab.... bahot shaandaar kalaam dard se labrez.. aate rahen likhte rahen..

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29th February 2024, 06:37 AM

Dhaval

Phir se padha aaj aapka yeh likha..bahaut achha laga padhke kuch ek do lines kuch jyada dil mai ghar kar gayin…

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