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31st October 2009, 07:13 PM
Ishq....Pyar....Mohabbat....Ulfat.....Chahat....
Sun kar ik meetha sa ehsaas charoN taraf phail jata hai,, Ik ajeeb si khushi hoti hai yeh naam le kar... Apni haseen ankhon mein chupa loh mujhko Mohabbat agar karti ho to chura loh mujhko .....Is ghazal ko le kar main ne inspiration li, aur mann kiya k is baarey, main bhi kuch likhoN.... Bas qalam khud hi chal para..... aur yeh mohabbat bhari tehreer samnay aayi:- Apni jheel si aankhon meiN samaa lo mujh ko Tujhe be-had chah.ta hoN, apnaa lo mujh ko Bicher na jaaon tujh se, dunia k meelay mein Dil k kisi tareek koney mein, chupaa lo mujh ko Umer bhar saath nibhane ka waada rahaa Tum chaho to be- shak azmaa lo mujh ko Tum dukh dekho, mujhe hargiz nahi manzoor Tum apne jism ka ik hissa banaa lo mujh ko Ae jan -e- 'hsN'! main ab akelaa nahi reh sakta! Sada k liye, bahoon ka haar pehnaa do mujh ko tareek = dark sada = always tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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31st October 2009, 07:40 PM
Hassan Ji.....Ek khubsurat ehsaas ka manzar pesh karti.....aapki ghazal ki adaayegi mujhe bahut pasand aai.....bahut acha likha hai aapne.....har ashaar mai mohabbat ki mehak ko mehasus kiya ja sakta hai....likhte rahiye...khush rahiye....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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31st October 2009, 08:30 PM
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ishk pe likhoge or mujhe ghazal pasand na aaye aisa ho hi sakta aapki ghazal me pyar hi pyar najar aata hai.. saare sher mujhe pasand aaye bus aakhri sher me mujhe kuch technical problem najar aayi.. Ae jan -e- 'hsN'! main ab akelaa nahi reh sakta! Sada k liye, bahoon ka haar pehnaa do mujh ko is ahsaar me bhi aapko "do" ki jagah "lo" istemaal karna chahiye tha kyunki isse pehle ke sare ashaar me aap "lo" word ka istemal kar rahe ho baki sab ashar mujhe be jhijhak pasand aaye ummid aap meri raaye se sehmat honge khush rahiye duaaon ke sath rabb raakha  |
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31st October 2009, 08:52 PM
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Chote MiyaaN Salaam, Aapke kalaam pe haazir huuN apni chawannii ki rai lekar. Awwal to aap ke aashar acche lage, laa-jawwab nahiiN, kyuN ke khayaal meiN taazgi nahii hai. Magar isme maayuusi ki koi baat nahii kyuNki puraane khayaaloN ya zamiin ko bhi nayaa andaaz diyaa ja sakta hai agar aap ki bayaani sab se juda ho. Ye aap par cho.Dta huuN. Aap khud pa.Dhkar batayeN ki bayaani meiN nayapan hai ya nahiiN. Duusre aap ke matle ke mutaabiq aap ka radiif hai “lo mujh ko”, magar maqte meiN aap ga.Dba.Da gaye.  Chautha sher kuch saaf nahi hai. Shayad aap kehna chahte thay ke tumhey jismaani taqliif naa ho isliiye mujhey apne jism ka hissa bana lo (bataur bakhtar key ya fir dard maiN hi jheluuN tum nahi) Agar ye aapka khayal nahii that to mazrat. Aakhiir meiN yehi kahuNga ke aap khayaal aur mazmuun ke samandar ki gehraai ke gotakhor haiN, wahiiN duube rahiye. Moti chichle paani meiN waise bhi kam hi milte haiN! Aap se ba.Dii ummiideN vaabasta haiN. Agar merii bebaak baateN aapko naagawaar guzreN to muafi ka talabgaar huuN. Khush rahiye, DuaaoN ke saath, Allah Hafez. HumeN gunah bhi karne ko zindagi kam hai." -Anand Narayan Mulla. वो कौन है जिन्हें तौबा की मिल गई फुरसत, हमें गुनाह भी करने को ज़िंदगी कम है. -आनंद नारायण मुल्ला |
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31st October 2009, 09:16 PM
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Rasheed saheb, Adaab! Iss baar bhi aapne kamaal kiya hai Deewangi ke had ko bemisaal kiya hai.... Bahut khoob, likhte rahiye...... Khuda aapki kalam ko nazakat bakshe... Aapka dost, Vikram Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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1st November 2009, 02:41 PM
Apni jheel si aankhon meiN samaa lo mujh ko
Tujhe be-had chah.ta hoN, apnaa lo mujh ko Bicher na jaaon tujh se, dunia k meelay mein Dil k kisi tareek koney mein, chupaa lo mujh ko Umer bhar saath nibhane ka waada rahaa Tum chaho to be- shak azmaa lo mujh ko Tum dukh dekho, mujhe hargiz nahi manzoor Tum apne jism ka ik hissa banaa lo mujh ko Ae jan -e- 'hsN'! main ab akelaa nahi reh sakta! Sada k liye, bahoon ka haar pehnaa do mujh ko achi ghazal hai lekin khayal purane bhi hai aur misro mai raabta bhi kam nazar aata hai .. do mujh ko . ye radeef galat ho gaya hai ... kuch naya socha karo..... jab bhi likho to ye socho ki wo likhna hai jo likha na gaya ho ........ hope u dont mind |
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2nd November 2009, 02:18 PM
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keep writing ishq ki mahefil kya khub sajayi hai aap ne daad qabul kare Regards _______________________________________________ PRANEETA
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2nd November 2009, 02:25 PM
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4th November 2009, 07:55 PM
HassaN sahab Aadaab...........
Behad khoob lagi aapki yeh tehreer, wakai sabhi sher achche lage...... Aashqui e Izhaar ki yeh tehreer yakinan kai aashikoN ka sahara banengii......... Yeh sher behad khoob lage, Kuch apne dil ke khayaloN ki tarha........ Umer bhar saath nibhane ka waada rahaa Tum chaho to be- shak azmaa lo mujh ko Tum dukh dekho, mujhe hargiz nahi manzoor Tum apne jism ka ik hissa banaa lo mujh ko Fourth sher behad khoob hai gehra khayal hai........ bus is mein thora " SIRF " word use karte to khayal ek dum saaf ho jata....... Ke aapke kehne ka matlab kya hai...... But aise bhi khayal khoob laga daad......... Likhate rahiey.. Khush rahiye.... Khuda hafez.... 
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