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bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal -
29th April 2006, 08:36 PM
dostoN ki shikayat thi ke maikash miyaaN aap kuch post nahiiN karte to ek taaza Ghazal mehfil ki nazar kar raha huuN, ummiid hai ke kam se kam paras aur pulkit saahab ko ab koi gilaa na rahega
mulaii'zaa farmaayeN :- matla pesh-e-khidmat hai :- 1. reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab *tam'aam shab = saari raat 2. kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab 3. aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab 4. hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab 5. raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !! kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab 6. zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab 7. voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab 8. kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab ab maqta haazir hai :- 9. "maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab apni aara se zaruur nawaazeN rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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29th April 2006, 08:58 PM
maikash ji bhaut hi umda gazal hai padh kar bhaut achha laga tmamam shab
har ek sher apne aap mai gazab hai aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab piyaar ki umeeden bhaut achhe se jatayi hai umeed hai aapko padhne ka mouka milta rahega shrdh 
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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal -
30th April 2006, 03:45 AM
Maikash sahab,
Beautifully written... and yes we will now not complain so often... but we would like to see you around more often... tc Rohin |
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30th April 2006, 07:33 AM
Vaise kam hi padhne ko milta hai aapka par jab bhi milta hai ....padhne mein maza aa jata hai
"voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab" Ye sher kuch jayada hi acha laga.... vaise sabhi sher bohat ache hai lekin jaha naye khayal dikhte hai mujhe waha kincha chala jata hu.....ye sher alag laga.... Aur ishe padhkar Meri Fav. Abida jee ki gazal yaad aa gayi vaise aapki gazal kaafi alag lekin "tamaam shab" dekhar vaisi lagi "Aapki yaad aati rahi raat bhar Chandni dil dukhti rahi raat bhar "  Yahi umeed hai hamein aapka likha jalad hi aur padhne ko milega Shukriyah Quote:
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj" |
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30th April 2006, 10:14 AM
reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab
mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab Bahut khoob bhai.... aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab nice expression... raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !! kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab zaalim hai teri tara'h, terii yaad bhi jaanaaN ashkoN ka zehar mujhko pilaaye tam'aam shab Waaaahh... I love the way u address jaanaa... voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab kaise maiN maan luuN ke buri hai sharaab, yeh marham mere zaKhmoN pe lagaaye tam'aam shab waaaaahhh... yahaan sharaab ke baad 'yeh' me thehraav accha laga... aur pehla sher bhi khoob hai... "maikash" likhi gayi nahiiN hai yuuN hi yeh Ghazal kaGhaz pe baDe ashk bahaaye tam'aam shab kahut khooob.... Dear Maiksash bhai, Its good to see your post here... bahut hi khoobsurat andaaz me haal-e-dil bayana kiya hai aapne... Sabhi sehr bahut pasand aaye mujhe...meri dil se daad kubool kijiyega... Likhte rahiye yun hi aur sahre bhi kate rahiye yahaan.... apna khayal rakhiyega... Ab itni khoobsurat ghazalon se mehroom rehna padhe to complaints to hongi hi naa.... Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai |
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30th April 2006, 12:59 PM
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho
hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab Namaskar Maikash ji Ek bahut khoobsurat nazm hay.......Hamare daad kabul kijeyega....Asha kartey hain aap aagey bhi apney khoobsurat qalam parhney ka mauqa daingey ki hum bhi kuch seekh sakein aapse... Regards |
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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal -
30th April 2006, 04:46 PM
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bahut khubsurat likha hai maikshbhiya aap ne har ek share khud mai bahtareen hai take care wid regards manu |
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1st May 2006, 05:21 AM
shrdh sahiba
aapne Ghazal pasaNd farmaayi aur daad bhi ataa ki bohat shukriya jee aapka...ummiid hai aap aa'iiNdaa bhi yuuN hi hausla badhaati raheNgii khair aNdesh maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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1st May 2006, 05:27 AM
Rohin saahab
i'm well aware of the fact that u r a busy man and i sincerely appreciate ur time ... i've been around quite regularly recently but only tending to my admin duties and i sure will try my best to share some of my work as often as possible regards maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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1st May 2006, 10:03 AM
Arre Waah! Maikash Mian aapki kalam tau qahar dhaati hai dilon par...jee hamein koyi gila nahin...infact hamara keyboard ek gustakhi kar gaya aapke inn dil lazeez ashaaron par...gar ijazzat ho tau....
milein na kyun phir kisi bahane se tumko jaanaa rahe jhuuthe waadon se dil ko behlaaye tamaam shab jo jhaanke koyi khayalon mein hongi badi ruswaayiaan ki aake shokh adaaon se wo humko sataaye tamaam shab khush rahiye...yeh silsila jaari rakhiye gayi ruton ka sulagataa sa intezaar bhii ho mere khuloos kaa andaaz ye bhii sachhaa hai rakhuun na rabt magar dostii shumaar bhii ho --Sayyidaa Fatimaa Hasan |
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1st May 2006, 10:40 AM
hoti rahi barsaat aaNsuuyoN ki saari raat
baadal GhamoN ke dil pe the chhaye tam'aam shab bahut khub........... raatoN ko jaagne ka mujhe shauq to nahiiN !! kambakht dil ka zaKhm sataaye tam'aam shab pehali baar aapko pada ...bahut khubsurat likha hai aapne..... pad ke bahut accha laga......... with best wishes ranju |
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1st May 2006, 05:24 PM
kya kahen maikash ji,aaj pehli baar aapko padha hai aur padhte hi aapki shayri ke dewaane hogaye.bahut acha likha aapne.khas kar yeh sher to behad pasand aaya hamein,
aisii bhi ko'ii raat muqaddar meiN kaash ho hum rooTh jaayeN ko'ii manaaye tam'aam shab. isi tarah likhte rahiye aur is mehfil ki shaan badhaaye. akelijaan. |
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1st May 2006, 08:12 PM
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namaste miyaaN aapne to lajawaab kar diyaa....!! aapko ek she'r khasuusan pasaNd aaya, dil ko tassalli ho gayi ke mehnat zaya na gayi........aapki muhabbat ka maskoor-o-mamnuun huuN saahab..... jis Ghazal ka matla aapne arz kiya usii zamiin meN maine bhi ek GHazal kahi hai kabhi post karuNgaa..... shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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Re: bohat yaad voh aaye......ek nayi Ghazal -
2nd May 2006, 08:27 AM
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Mere maikash, dard ko shabd mai sahaj pirona... n raah nazar aati hai na manjil... jaha tak nazar pahunch paaye .. dard bichha nazar aata hai .. Meena |
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2nd May 2006, 05:08 PM
khoob kahi ye Ghazal bhi Maikash sahab..
kabhi waqt mile to aapse iski beher ke mu'tallik baat hogi khyaal rakhiyega Varinder chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai... |
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2nd May 2006, 05:35 PM
maikashji,
bahut khuubsurti ke saath apne ehsaasat ko aapne kagaz pe uutara hai, "kaise main maan luun ke buri hai sharaab,yeh "marham mere zakhmon pe lagaaye tammam shab" aapko padhne ke mauke jaldi diya kijiye....shukriyaa zarra.... |
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2nd May 2006, 06:20 PM
maikash saheb
ek au rkhoobsurat ghazel takhleeq ki hai aap ne. nihaayet mauzoon alfaaz se aaraasta yeh ek shahkaar ghazel hai. aap ke bare mein akser saathiyon se kehta hoon ke is forum per ager kisi ko achchi shayri parhna hai to maikash saheb ko parhe. her shayr ek mukammil daastaan hai soaz o gudaash ki, pyaar ki , khushbu ki. bohat pasand aayee aap ki yeh ghazel. meri bharpoor daad qabool karein. |
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2nd May 2006, 06:38 PM
Pulkit saahab
Ghazal ki pazi'raii ke liye behadd shukurguzaar huuN aapka......janaab koshish karta rahuNga ke gaahe-ba-gaahe kuch na kuch post karta rahuN ...ummiid hai aa'iiNda aapko shikayat ka mauqa na milega rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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2nd May 2006, 07:43 PM
Wow...
Maikash ji, Itne dinon baad phir se aap ko parh ke bahut achha laga, what can say about this creation, it's fantastic, an amazing... reh reh ke bohat yaad voh aaye tam'aam shab mar mar ke maine lamhe bitaaye tam'aam shab kam ho saka na dard-e-juda'ii ka aNdhera humne charaaGh-e-ashk jalaaye tam'aam shab voh khwaab ki duniya meN thi,baiThaa tha maiN yahaaN palkoN ko raaste pe bichhaye tam'aam shab I like this sher a lot... keep writting & keep coming. take care! |
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3rd May 2006, 06:40 AM
sukanya jee
namaste aapne Ghazal ke chaNd ash'aar pasaNd farmaaye bohat shukriya, ummiid hai aap yuuN hi hausla badhaati raheNgi rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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3rd May 2006, 04:30 PM
Adaab Maikash ji
Ek zamaane ke baad yahan ek behtareen ghazal ko padney ka lutf uthaya. Daad qubul kijiyega janaab. Saathi |
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24th May 2006, 04:24 AM
manu sahab
namaste bhai aap jis tarha daad ataa farmaate hai khud pe guruur hone lagta hai  bohat shukriya miyaaN khair aNdesh maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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29th May 2006, 07:50 AM
paras sahiba
namaskaar pehle to aapke khat ka jawaab dene meiN hui ta'khiir ke liye mazrat chahta huuN,rozi-roti ke mas'alley ne is qadar baaNdhaa hua hai ke puuchiye mat....khair....daad ke liye shukriya aur mohtarma lafz-e-gustaakhi aapne fazuul meiN kharch kiya, jo dil meN kehna chahiye aur wahi aapne kiya maiN mamnoon huuN aapka aati jaati raha kareiN khair aNdesh maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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apna khayaaal rakhiyega ****** Your attitude towards life decides Life's attitude towards you... |
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30th May 2006, 06:04 AM
ranju saahab
namaste bhai shukr hai aapne padha to sahi vagarna aise ehbaab bhi haiN jo kambakht padhte bhi nahiiN aapko kaavish pasaNd aayi, meri khushnasiibi, ummiid hai aayiiNda bhi yuuN hi aap hausla badhaate raheNge shukriya maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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