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30th July 2008, 08:53 PM
sabhi dosto ko raj ka salaam.....ek arse ke baad aapki bazam mein shirkat farmah hoon.....hazirii kabool kijiyega.....raj.....
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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30th July 2008, 09:18 PM
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Originally Posted by rajveeer
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
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Raj saheb , maine app ko kuch zyada nahi perha , per ajj perh ker maiN dil hi dil meiN pachta raha hoN ke ab tak is nageene per meri nazer kiyoN na gai ... behad kamal likhi hai ghazal appne .
Mind Blowing ,
appki zubaani maloom huwa keh app arse ke baad mehfil meiN aaey haiN to janab app se guzarish ker raha hoN keh apne ander chupi salahitoN ko hamare saath bhi share kiya kerieN takeh hum bhi seekh sakieN , mehfil meiN aane se na sirf app keh ahsaas share hote haiN balkeh mujh jese nalaiq ko bhi bahut kuch seekhne ko milta hai
Khush rahieN
duago
Mujeeb
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30th July 2008, 11:56 PM
big B :
pranaam!!
kaise haiN aap? pehle to maiN aapkaa be-Had ShuraGuzaar huuN kii aapne merii KhaahiSh ko pooraa kiYaa.. aur wo bhee itani umdaah Ghazal keh ke.. dil KhuSh ho gayaa... Ghazal ke aSh'aar beHteriN raheN.. sab se zeyaadaah mujhe Ghazal kaa maq'taa pasaNd aayaa... mere dil se niklii hu'ii DheroN saarii daad qabUl keejiyeNgaa... yuuNhi liKhate rahiye... bazm ko rauShan karte rahiye...!
apnaa Khayaal raKheN... KhuSh raheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapkaa
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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31st July 2008, 01:07 AM
[quote=rajveeer;298683]sabhi dosto ko raj ka salaam.....ek arse ke baad aapki bazam mein shirkat farmah hoon.....hazirii kabool kijiyega.....raj.....
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
its too heart touching,marvelous,
tk cr,
jass
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31st July 2008, 11:11 AM
Namaskaar Rajveer g......abhi abhi aapki haziri lagi dekhi mahfil meiN...dil garden garden ho gaya sabse phele to aap yeh bataye ki aap etna waqt kaise SDC se door rah paye....mujhe to na-mumkin lagta hai etna waqt door rahna aur aap jaise member ke liye to aur bhi mushkil hai kyuNki aapka kahna hai "Shayri is my Life" so apni life se etni be-rukhi kahe ko janab
ab aap aa gaye ho to hum ab aapko phir se jane na deNge
aapki gazal hamaesha ki tarah umda....aapki shayri kisi tareef ki mohtaz nahi hai, bas etna hi kahna chahti hoon ek baar phir ki hum sabko aapki shayri se bahut kuch seekhna hai....so mahfil mein aate raha kijiye.
god bless u
aapki dost
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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31st July 2008, 02:20 PM
raj saheb har sher gajab tha bahut khuub wayaa kiya he aapne dard ko aur dard ki us kasmakash ko,pls share karte rahen
ibadat bhi khuda hai,bagavat bhi khuda hai
khuda baagi kahi hai,kahi baagi khuda hai.
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1st August 2008, 01:54 PM
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Originally Posted by rajveeer
sabhi dosto ko raj ka salaam.....ek arse ke baad aapki bazam mein shirkat farmah hoon.....hazirii kabool kijiyega.....raj.....
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
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aap ke sare nagme ek se badh kar ek ..........hum to aap ke fan hain
Kahani Ban Ke Jiye Hai Woh Dil Ke Ashiane Mien
Lagegi Humko Bhi Sadyon Unhe Bhulane Mien
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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1st August 2008, 10:26 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by rajveeer
sabhi dosto ko raj ka salaam.....ek arse ke baad aapki bazam mein shirkat farmah hoon.....hazirii kabool kijiyega.....raj.....
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
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veer bohat arse baad aap tashreef laye aapki ye ghazal parrhi parrhil agi mujhe.....bohat achi hai humesha ki tarah aate rahiyega khush rahain
Waqt ke jisam ki kharash hoon main
apne ander se pash pash hoon main
zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin
ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin
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2nd August 2008, 02:53 AM
Rajveer saaheb
sat shri akaal aur adaab tasleem farmaa'iiye
aapka taKhayyul har lihaaz se qaabil-e-ga'ur-o-daad hai !!!
sha'iirii har ek ke bas ki baat nahiiN, ek sha'iir aur ek mussavvir meiN zyadaa farq nahiiN hota, an art is an art in any form, donoN ziNdagii aur ziNdagi ke tajir'baat ko apne fann meiN alag-alag suuratoN meiN numaayaaN karte haiN.
meri aapse guzaarish hai ke aap bahuur ki jaanib thoDi si tavvajo aur dijiye!
rab raakha
maikash
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10th August 2008, 12:13 PM
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Originally Posted by rajveeer
sabhi dosto ko raj ka salaam.....ek arse ke baad aapki bazam mein shirkat farmah hoon.....hazirii kabool kijiyega.....raj.....
tere labbo.n pe ab mera naam na aiyega
ab nazar ko nazar ka salaam na aiyega
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
bewafa huye jaate hain dekho lafaz sabhi
teri bazam mein ab mera kalaam na aiyega
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
isay bhii begaanepan ki inteha hii samjho
ki ab tere apno.n mein mera naam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
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Rajveer ji namaskaar!!!
Ek arse ke baad aapko padne ka mouka mila hai... shikayat nahi kar sakta kyun ki main khud yahan lambe samay ke baad aaya hoon.... aapki is gazal ka to bus poochiye hi mat. kya kahne.... ek ek sher pe mano jaan nikal di ho....
behad hi pyaari dard se sarabor gazal hai....
daad hazir hai kabool farmaiyega
aur haan ek baat aur......... yunh hi mahfil ki shan badate rahiyega
shukriyaa
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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8th October 2008, 08:33 PM
Aadaab rajveer ji kese hain aap ?
Aapka likha hamesha hi kamaal hota hai yeh gazal bhi lajawaab ban padi hai aate raha kijiye aap jese likhne walo ko padne ka lutf hi alag hai daadf kubool kijiye
"Do Pal Ruka Khushio.n ka Karwan"
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko,
wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain.
Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif''
Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.
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9th October 2008, 01:03 AM
janaab rahveer sahib !
daad dene ko haazir to huN par laa jawaab huN !
beshaQ aapko ye ghazal kahe kuch waQt ho gaya ho par iss ki mahak abhi tak fizaa meiN mauzood hai !
aapka kalaam yakiinan behad sukhanwar ,aur hurf baa hurf apne juzbaat ke liye imaandaar hai !
mujhe chand ashaar aat behad dil azeez lage !
huye dusman mere, qasid tere sehar ke
ab tere sehar se koii paigaam na aiyega
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
paimana tu saqii bhii tu maikhana bhii tera
'raj' ke liye ab koii ulfat ka jaam na aiyega....
baki ..
malik aapka ye Qaif barQaraar rakhe !
tareef Qabool ki jaaye
apnaa khyaal rakhiye !
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21st October 2014, 10:51 AM
Sabhi dosto ko Raj ka pyar bhara adaab pounche...aap sabhi ne apni besh keemti raye se nawaaza hai so mai teh e dil se aapka shukarguzaar hoon...Raj...
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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21st October 2014, 11:18 AM
bahot khoob raj saahab.... mazaa aa gayaa aapko padh kar.... dil khush kar diyaa janaab....
likhte rahiyegaa
Shaad....
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24th October 2014, 11:23 AM
Sameer bhai ko raj kaa adaab pounche....janaab housla afzaii ke liye bhut bhut shukria isii tarha saath dete rahiye...RAJ..
un se kar liya kinara unki khushi ki khatir
ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj)
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31st October 2014, 07:07 PM
rajveer jee.....is khoobsurat see ghazal ke.liye aapko dher sari badhaai........
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था
चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था
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1st November 2014, 03:09 AM
Dost! Bahut Bahut acha Likha. Dil ko choo Gaya.
God bless you.
लब पे मुस्कान को लिए ऐ दोस्त, काँधों पे लाश अपनी ढोते हैं,
इस भरे शहर में हम Dard-e-Sush, जो न पाया उसे भी खोते हैं!
lab pe muskaan ko liye ae dost, kandhon pe laash apni dhote hein
is bhare sheher me ham dard-e-sush, jo na paaya use bhi khote hein
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2nd November 2014, 01:30 AM
Simply suuperb.
Bohut khoob........
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2nd November 2014, 07:49 AM
Raj ji congratulations ek bahut umda Gazal k liay.sab k sab shair apne aap meiN ek dam mukammal heiN.Lekin yeh Shair bahut khas laga.
hai qaid is qadar wo rasmo.n ke qafas mein
wo samne to aiyega magar sar-e-aam na aiyega
wah wah kya baat hai.
Rajinder seep
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2nd November 2014, 03:19 PM
Rajveer ji ,
Apka ka kalam bahut pasand aye . lekin ye sher bahut acha laga ..
mara hai mujhe teri berukhi ne sitamgar
magar sar tere koii bhii ilzaam na aiyega
regds
Sanjay Sehgal
khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar ,
Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar.
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