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Thumbs up Ghazal: hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke.....! - 19th November 2007, 01:37 PM

Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."




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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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19th November 2007, 01:45 PM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."


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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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Smile fantastic dhaval - 19th November 2007, 01:55 PM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."


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waah wah dhaval bahoot hee qeemati baat kehdi tumne is sher men, kitna dard hai is sher men ke shayad lagta hai tumhara jigar jakhmo se bhar gaya hai, is dard ko ashko le jhariye baha hee do tum

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dear dhaval poori ghazal kaabil-e-tariif hai, magar kyaa yeh tumane behr main likha hai, agar haa to meri iltijaa hai mujhe pm kar ke batana yeh kaun see behr hai...........

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19th November 2007, 02:58 PM

...waise to tumne bahut baar dard pe likha hain...par is ghazal mein kuch jyada hi dard nazar aa raha hain....har ashaar apne aap mein ek chubhan liye huve hain.........aur dard pe wah wah kaise kare..ghazal ki nazar se bahut khubsurti se likha hain......Is ghazal ko padhke ek baat zehan mein aayi...par isse yaha nahin likhti tumse kisi aur din baat kar lungi.........Ek sher kehna chahungi is ghazal ko leke..

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."




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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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hello ji
Dhaval ji
kaise hai aap? umeed hai acche se honge or rehna bhi chahiye....hai na
sacch apki yeh dard bhari ghazal seedhey mere dimaag mein uttar gayi hai...or mere bite lamhe mujhe yaad kara gayi.... beete lamhe to bhuln ahi behtarr hai kyunki wo acche nahi thae..lekin apki is ghazal mein pyar ki cchhott khakar phir usi pyar ko bhulaane ka ik hausla sa nazar aaya hai...jo ki sahi bhi hai..



[B]naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke
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yeh do sher mujhe bahut........ bahut....... bahut..... bahut........ bahut........ pasand aaye hai

bas aap yu hin likhte rahiye...baki hausla to hum sab badhaate hi rahenge



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19th November 2007, 03:25 PM

Aadaab Dhaval bhai.........................
Janaab ke mijaaz ?
Waah bhai kya umda gazal pesh ki hai aapne mehfil ko chaar chaand laga diye aapke is kalaam ne har ek sher dilazeez aur bahut umda laga kai baar pada aur dil ko chugai yeh gazal dili daad kubool ho............khush rahiye


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19th November 2007, 03:40 PM

asslam malekum dhaval miyaa.n

aaj kya baat hai dil ke jani bada dard ikTTha kare fir rahe ho...........

maine kitni baar kaha hai tumhe.........

Log MuTthiyo.n main namak liye firte haiN
Yu.N apne Zakhm Har kisi ko dikhaya na karo
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bahut sundar dard se bharii or behad apni si dil ke kareeb lagne wali gazal likhi hai aaj aapne....... har ek sher kafi apna sa lagta hai...
poori gazal main kahin mujhe kuch kami si nazar nahi aayii per is word per jara sa dhyan chala gaya..........

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

is word ki jagah agar aap koi doosra word use karte to meri raai main shayad accha lagata. hunar mand shayar ho yaar doond ke dekho urdu main koi word mil hi jayega....... haan ek ishara kar sakta hoon "DAFAN" ab apni jaroorat ka aap doond lo..............

shuru se hi aapki shayri ka kayal raha hoon..... to aaj to fir aapne ek kamal ki umda gazzl likhi hai.......

dil se nikli huyii daad kabool farmaiyega..........

shukriyaa........

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19th November 2007, 05:48 PM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."



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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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hello dhaval,

dhaval, ateet bhoola nahi jaata, zindagi me kabhi kabhi aise mod aate hain, jahan naa chaahate hue bhi chalna par jaata hai, or vaapsi ka raasta nahi hota....bahot kuch kahana hai, kabhi or din aapki post pe fir reply karungi......baaki kuch jo likh nahi sakti vo baad me kahungi......

aapki shayri bahot rula rahi hai dil ko aaj....guzre pal nazro se hat nahi rahe...

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."



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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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hey DHAVAL,
kya khub likha hai aap ne...ek ek sher, jaise dil-o-dimag par cha gaya ho....mere dost, chahe jitni bhi koshish kar lo muhobbat ko kabhi bhula na paoge....bahut pasand aayi aap ki ye ghazal....uhi likhte rahiye,aur hum uhi padhte rahenge...god bless u....take care....

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mere pyarey chottu..........bahut khoob likha hai har sher pasand aaya....par agar yeh mahaz shayri hai to behad khoobsurat hai, par agar es meiN kuch dil ki judi baat hai to behad dard bhari hai..........aur kaya kahuN....aise kushi ke mahol mein mujhe aise dard bhari shayri ki umeed nahi thi tujse...shayad meri baat ko tu samaj sakta hai...ki mera kahne ka kaya matlab hai...!

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aapko apnii koShiSh pe deKh ke mujHe bahot hi KhuShii hoti hay.. Sister jaise kii maine aapko kahaa hay kii yeH sirf aik Ghazal hay.. ees meiN mere ehsaas nahiiN hay.. ab ees Ghazal meiN mere Khud ke ehsaas hote to Ghazal comedy ban jaati... kyaa kaurN Shaitaan dimaaGh jo huuN.. .. Sister aapko pataa hay kii maiN kis taraH aur kitani had tak liKh skataa huuN.. kyuuNki maine aapkaa haath thaam ke hi to ees safar meiN pehalaa kadam baRhaayaa tha.. to bhalaa maiN aap sey kuch chhupaa saktaa huuN kyaa?? maiN aisaa soch bhee nahiiN saktaa.. fir bhee Gar mere aise liKhane sey aapke dil ko TheNs pahuNchi ho to maiN m'waafi maaNgtaa huuN.. aur koShiSh karuNgaa kii aage sey aapko maiN maayus na karuN.. aap hay to maiN bhee huuN yahaaN.. bas apnaa aaShirwaad YuuNhi banaaye raKHiyeNgaa mujH pe..

apnaa Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."



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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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Aadab Dhaval ji...

Agar jo likha woh mehaz shayri hai to Dili daad kuubul kare agar Dil ka payaam hai to daad ka lihaaz na kare.... Alfaaz nahi kuch kehne ke liye yahan Alfaaz chun kar fir maujood hota hun... Duaon ke saath Ijazat....

Abrar....




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20th November 2007, 10:02 PM

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

****par dhavl ji yaisa nahi hota hai...muhabat ko kahtam karna aasan anhi hai. ye woh shay hai jo hamesha hamare andar hai...sher bahut khub likha hai***

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke

jindagi ko jahannum karna asan nahi hota hai par jab sab khushiya chali jaye to ye jahunnum hi hai na.

bahut khub gazal laye ho
meri dili daad

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achchhaa likha hai dost!!! you are improving day by day!!
do aik jagah meter me ghalatii hai aur makte kaa dusra misra qafiye me baiThta nahii! inhe zaraa door karne ki koshish karo, ghazal aur sundar ho jayegi!

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bahut khoob - 21st November 2007, 09:03 AM

dhaval tumhre kadam bahut achee tarah aage badh rahe hain bahut achee tahreer hai

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dear dhaval poori ghazal kaabil-e-tariif hai, magar kyaa yeh tumane behr main likha hai, agar haa to meri iltijaa hai mujhe pm kar ke batana yeh kaun see behr hai...........

bahut j mast,adbhoot ane sundar ghazal chhe tari
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it is wonderful to read u

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dil-azeez manu BHaa'ii:

aadaab-o-taSleemaat..

Ghazal kii pazeerA'ii ke liYe maiN aapka be-Had mamnuun huuN.. aapne ees Ghazal kii baareekiYoN ko samjHaa aor dil sey paRhaa bahot hi KhuShii hu'ii.. aur har Sher par aapne jo apne Khayaalaat peSh kiYe usske liYe maiN aapka SHuKra-Guzaar huuN.. aapne yahaaN aakar ees Ghazal ki raunaq afzaa'ii ki hay.. koShiSh karuNgaa kii aage aur bhee behtar liKhuN taa.K aapka saath YuuNhi miltaa raheN..

apnaa Khayaal rakheN.. KhuSh raheN..

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."




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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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dhaval aesi poetry kab se likhne lage ho tum ye mayoosi tum per suit nahi kerti isliye wesi hi likha karo ankhain band ker ke muskurate howe hahahaha .....hmm ab aati hoon poetry ki taraf to shayri ke lihaaz se bohat hi khubsurat koshish rahi tumhari aur dhaval ye faraham word jo hai na ye yahan theek nahi rahega ise change kerlo to acha hai.... faraaham ka matlab hota hai muhaiyaa kerna jahan tak mujhe maloom hai ikatha nahi banta is ka matlab totum koi aur acha sa word choose karo to ye sher theek lage ga ok na dear agar kuch bura laga ho to maaf kerna apna bohat khayal rakhna aur ayenda se woh muskurati tehreerain honi chahiye khush raho chottu humesha..


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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."



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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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Dhaval JSK

sryyyyyyyyyyy bhai bahut dino baad aayi hoon, aapki ghazal par nazaar padhi toh padhe bina raha hi nahi gaya.
bahut achi likhi hai, har baar app itni dil ko choo gaye aisi ghazal likhte ho, ki daad ke liye shabd kan padh jate hain. God bless u yunhi likhte rahnaaaaaaaaa.
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dhaval aesi poetry kab se likhne lage ho tum ye mayoosi tum per suit nahi kerti isliye wesi hi likha karo ankhain band ker ke muskurate howe hahahaha .....hmm ab aati hoon poetry ki taraf to shayri ke lihaaz se bohat hi khubsurat koshish rahi tumhari aur dhaval ye faraham word jo hai na ye yahan theek nahi rahega ise change kerlo to acha hai.... faraaham ka matlab hota hai muhaiyaa kerna jahan tak mujhe maloom hai ikatha nahi banta is ka matlab totum koi aur acha sa word choose karo to ye sher theek lage ga ok na dear agar kuch bura laga ho to maaf kerna apna bohat khayal rakhna aur ayenda se woh muskurati tehreerain honi chahiye khush raho chottu humesha..


Maanii didi :

aadaab..

jee haaN kabhee kabaar liKh letaa huuN didi aisii koShiSheN.. didi maiN urdu bhaasaa ka itanaa jaankaar to nahiiN.. chuuNki maiN abhee urdu lafzoN ko seeKh rahaa huuN.. aur maiN jiss meiN sey seeKh rahaa huuN uss meiN faraaham lafz jo asal me Faarasi bhaasaa kaa lafz hai.. aur ba'taur viSheShan [adjective] ees kaa istemaal kiYaa jaataa hay aur uss meiN faraaham lafz ka hiNdi meiN do anuvaad diYe the aik to i'kaTTHaa aor doosaraa saNgrahit.. didi aapne kahaa booraa mat lagaanaa..aapko bhee aur sab ko pataa hay kii maiN yahaaN tak apnii GhaltiYoN sey hii seeKh seeKh ke hi pahuNchaa huuN to aaj bhalaa kyuuN booraa lagaauNgaa.. aur aapki baat kaa kabhee yeH Shaitaan boraa lagaayeNgaa kyaa.. fir bhee Ghalti merii hay.. maiN koShiSh karuNgaa kii aage sey aise Ghalat lafz koShiSh meiN na aaYeN.. ees Ghazal ko pasaNd karne ke liye maiN aapka be-had mamnuun huuN..

apnaa Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka chhoTu

~ Dhaval


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Smile frnd 4 ever - 29th November 2007, 10:55 AM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."



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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke


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Aadab dhaval ji,
kaise hain aap?

dhaval ji,
kya kahe hum?

hamare paas aapki tarif k liye Alfaz nahi hain,
dhaval ji mafi chahte hain,k aapki itni umda,or dil ko chhu jane wali ghazal ko humne itne dino k baad padha.

sach bohot hi khoob likha hai aapne,

khush rahiye,
apna khayal rakhiye,
ALLAH HAFIZ


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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

Kyaa baat hai... khoob likha hai dost...


bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

Nice words...


tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke

Hmmmmm...

Dear Dhaval,

Humesha ki tarah baht khoob likha hai... ek udaasi dikhi tmhaari ghazal me... mere bhai aajkal zyada emotional hone se kucch nahi milta... Ladkiyan baht chant hoti hain Thou most here won't agree magar yehi sach hai...

Likhte raho khush raho


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30th November 2007, 06:17 AM

Dhaval,

pehle paRhi thee aapki yeh rachna, lekin reply nahin kar saki...

bahut achcha likha hai aapne,

regards
aarya


khwaabo.n ke par kabhii kaTne na denaa
inke sahaaron me raahai.n rahe.ngii

lage.nge ye lejaa rahe alag raste
un raston pe bhii kai seekhai.n to ho.ngii

ye seekhai.n hameshaa sameTe rakhnaa
inhii.n se to sabko manzil milai.ngii


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is kadar koi yaad aa rahein hai,

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Well expressed Mr Dhaval... very touchy..
Daad hazir hai ....
kabul kijiyega..


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Dard ka ehsas janna hai to pyar kar ke dekho

Apni aankhon main kisi ko utar kar dekho

Chot un ko lage gi aansoo tumhein aa jayein ge

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Pyaar ki aanch se to patthar bhi pighal jata hai,


sache dil se sath de to naseeb bhi badal jata hai,


Pyaar ki rahon par mil jaye sacha hamsafar,


To kitna bhi gira hua insaan bhi sambhal jata hai.


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6th December 2007, 09:26 PM

jsk dhaval bhaii,

humesha ki tarah, yeh ghazal b bahut pasand ayyi. lekin janab, itna dard aap laye kahan se? aur har sher mein dard aur mayusshi jalakati hai. hum to yehi dhua karenge k app khush rahein. dil se nikli daad ko kabul kijiye.

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bhut khub - 7th December 2007, 05:52 PM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."




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hum rote nahiN tere jaane kaa Ghum kar ke
baiThe rehte nahiN apnii aaNkhoN ko nam kar ke

naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

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...waise to tumne bahut baar dard pe likha hain...par is ghazal mein kuch jyada hi dard nazar aa raha hain....har ashaar apne aap mein ek chubhan liye huve hain.........aur dard pe wah wah kaise kare..ghazal ki nazar se bahut khubsurti se likha hain......Is ghazal ko padhke ek baat zehan mein aayi...par isse yaha nahin likhti tumse kisi aur din baat kar lungi.........Ek sher kehna chahungi is ghazal ko leke..

Bewafa na hum the na woh.
YunhiN raaste juda ho gaye

Apna khyal rakhna...
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Jai mata di..

didi jaisaa kii maine aapko pehle bhee kahaa kii yeh sirf aik Ghazal hi hay mere liYe.. maine to bas dard bhare ehsaaSoN ko peSh karne kii ik chhoTi sii koShiSh ki hay ees Ghazal ke Zar'iiYe.. aur haaN aage sey maiN aapki baatoN kaa Khayaal raKHuNgaa jo aapne kahi thi kii aage jab bhee dard par maiN liKhuN to Ghazal ke ooper liKh duN kii yeH sirf aik Ghazal hay na ki mere ehsaas.. aur rahi baat dard kii to ees Shaitaan sey to dard bhee door bhaagtaa haii.. aapne Ghazal ko pasaNd kiYaa. be-Had KhuShii hu'ii.. bas YuuNhi saath dete rahiYe..!

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hello ji
Dhaval ji
kaise hai aap? umeed hai acche se honge or rehna bhi chahiye....hai na
sacch apki yeh dard bhari ghazal seedhey mere dimaag mein uttar gayi hai...or mere bite lamhe mujhe yaad kara gayi.... beete lamhe to bhuln ahi behtarr hai kyunki wo acche nahi thae..lekin apki is ghazal mein pyar ki cchhott khakar phir usi pyar ko bhulaane ka ik hausla sa nazar aaya hai...jo ki sahi bhi hai..



[B]naam mi'TaaYeNge teraa dil kii har dhaRkan par sey
tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke
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yeh do sher mujhe bahut........ bahut....... bahut..... bahut........ bahut........ pasand aaye hai

bas aap yu hin likhte rahiye...baki hausla to hum sab badhaate hi rahenge



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namaskaaR..

aap sab dostoN ki duaaoN sey maiN bilkul Theek huuN.. aapne ees Ghazal ko samjHaa bahot hi achchhaa lagaa jaan.K.. bas YuuNhi paRhte rahiYeNgaa aage bhee.. duaa hay Khudaa aapko haMeShaa KhuSh raKheN aur dard sey door hi raKheN.. apnaa achchhe sey Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN

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Aadaab Dhaval bhai.........................
Janaab ke mijaaz ?
Waah bhai kya umda gazal pesh ki hai aapne mehfil ko chaar chaand laga diye aapke is kalaam ne har ek sher dilazeez aur bahut umda laga kai baar pada aur dil ko chugai yeh gazal dili daad kubool ho............khush rahiye
Kashif BHaa'ii :

mijaaz to BHaa'ii Theek Thaak hai..

janaab aap merii Ghazal par aake Ghazal kii raunaq afzA'ii karte haiN.. mujhe baRii hi KhuShii hotii hai ees baat kii k merii Ghazal paRhne waaloN ke dil pe dastak detii hay.. aapkii daad sar'aaNkhoN par.. ummid kartaa huuN aapkaa saath YuuNhi miltaa raheNgaa aage bhee..! ShuKriyaaH BHaaijaan !

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bhaiya namaskaar

aapko bahut padha hai but sabse jya daa dar laga muje isme....aapne bahu aahchi tarah se pesh kiye he aapne ehsaso ko....aise hi likhete rahna....aage bhi aapki post ka intzar rahe ga...dilse nilki daad kubul kijiye

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asslam malekum dhaval miyaa.n
w'asalaam saaheb..!

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aaj kya baat hai dil ke jani bada dard ikTTha kare fir rahe ho...........
arre BHaa'ii maiN kahaaN dard ko ikaTTHaa kar rahaa huuN.. yeh dard to saaloN sey meraa saath detaa aayaa hay huZuur..!

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maine kitni baar kaha hai tumhe.........

Log MuTthiyo.n main namak liye firte haiN
Yu.N apne Zakhm Har kisi ko dikhaya na karo
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baat to sahi kii hay aapne..

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bahut sundar dard se bharii or behad apni si dil ke kareeb lagne wali gazal likhi hai aaj aapne....... har ek sher kafi apna sa lagta hai...
poori gazal main kahin mujhe kuch kami si nazar nahi aayii per is word per jara sa dhyan chala gaya..........

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

is word ki jagah agar aap koi doosra word use karte to meri raai main shayad accha lagata. hunar mand shayar ho yaar doond ke dekho urdu main koi word mil hi jayega....... haan ek ishara kar sakta hoon "DAFAN" ab apni jaroorat ka aap doond lo..............
BHaa'ii saaHeb ek to aap bazm ke eid ke chaaNd hay.. yeh merii KhuShkismatii hay kii aapne mere liYe apnaa qeemtee waQt nikaalaa.. aur muHabbat ko Khatam karo ya DAFAN baat aik hi hay mere liYe to.. ab dafan karke bhee Khatam karni hay to seedhe seeDhe Khatam hi kyuuN na kar deN..: kyuuN sahi kahaa na maiNe..??

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dil se nikli huyii daad kabool farmaiyega..........
kamaal to BHaa'ii aapne kar diYaa.. yahaaN taShreef jo laaYeN.. aapki daad to dil sey qabUl hay..
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shukriyaa........
ShuKriyaaH.. ShuKriyaaH.. ShuKriyaaH..!

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aapke dil ke behad kareeb ka dost
Dilip (begana)
waah..! dil ke qareeb to samjH aayaa par yeh begaanaa samjh nahiN aaYaa..

Dilip Bhaa'ii:

namaskaaR..!

sach me be-Had KhuShii hu'ii aapko merii chhotii sii koShiSh pe deKh ke.. pooraane sey din yaad aa gaYe.. aapsey bas yahi kahuNgaa jo maiN aapko roz kehtaa huuN.. ki bazm ke liye bhee thoRaa waQt nikaal deejiYe.. aur jaise kii maine kahaa thaa aapki naYii aur taazaah Ghazal ka mujhe iNtezaar raheNgaa.. Ghazal ki pazeerA'ii ke liye maiN aapka be-Had mamnuun huuN.. yuuNhi saath dete raheN.. ShuKriyaaH..!

apnaa Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN

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Thumbs up Salam - 9th January 2008, 07:59 AM

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Mere pyaare dostoN:

aadaab aur namaskaaR..

" aaj kaafi dinoN baad liKhane kaa man hu'aa.. aur aaj dil ne bhee saath diYaa.. bazm meiN fir sey haaZir huuN maiN apnii aik naYii taazaah Ghazal ko lekar.. ummid kartaa huuN aapko merii yeH chhoTii sii koShiSh pasaNd aaYeNgii.. aapki qeemtee raa'eY aur sujHaav kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa.. mulaa'iizaa farmaaYeN.."




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tujH sey juRi hu'i yaadoN ko dil sey kam kar ke

bhoolaa duuN tujH ko achchhaa'ii ee'sii meN hay
karuN kyaa guzre laMhoN ko dil meiN faraaham kar ke

faraaham : i'kaTThaa

naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
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Aaj bahut din baat mujhe aane ka waqt mila or aapke khubsurat andaaz ne mujhe padhne ko majboor kiya.. Aap ki post per har baar daad dene ko dil karta hai. bas aap yu hi likhte rahe.
Hamesha haste or muskurate rahe.....

Aapka Dost
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hello dhaval,

dhaval, ateet bhoola nahi jaata, zindagi me kabhi kabhi aise mod aate hain, jahan naa chaahate hue bhi chalna par jaata hai, or vaapsi ka raasta nahi hota....bahot kuch kahana hai, kabhi or din aapki post pe fir reply karungi......baaki kuch jo likh nahi sakti vo baad me kahungi......

aapki shayri bahot rula rahi hai dil ko aaj....guzre pal nazro se hat nahi rahe...

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hey DHAVAL,
kya khub likha hai aap ne...ek ek sher, jaise dil-o-dimag par cha gaya ho....mere dost, chahe jitni bhi koshish kar lo muhobbat ko kabhi bhula na paoge....bahut pasand aayi aap ki ye ghazal....uhi likhte rahiye,aur hum uhi padhte rahenge...god bless u....take care....

AAP KI DOST,
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namaskaaR..!

Ghazal ki pasaNdagee ke liYe maiN aapka be-had mamnuun huuN.. ummid kartaa huuN aap kaa saath YuuNhi miltaa raheNgaa..!

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Aadab Dhaval ji...

Agar jo likha woh mehaz shayri hai to Dili daad kuubul kare agar Dil ka payaam hai to daad ka lihaaz na kare.... Alfaaz nahi kuch kehne ke liye yahan Alfaaz chun kar fir maujood hota hun... Duaon ke saath Ijazat....

Abrar....
Aadaab abraar BHaa'ii:

kaise haiN aap??

dost.. aapkii daad dil sey qabUl haii.. maiN aapka ShuKraGuzaar huuN kii aapne merii ees Ghazal ko pasaNd kiYaa.. aur dil sey paRhaa.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN.. KhuSh raheN


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very nice awasome.
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Teri yaad jab bhi aye, tujhe bhula bhula ke roye.
Ek teri he naam tha jise hazar bar likha,
Jise se khush hue the likh kar, mita-mita kar roye.


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naa aaYeNge terii raah meiN kabhi bhi sanam ab
door chale jaaYeNge muHabbat yahiN pe Khatam kar ke

****par dhavl ji yaisa nahi hota hai...muhabat ko kahtam karna aasan anhi hai. ye woh shay hai jo hamesha hamare andar hai...sher bahut khub likha hai***

tumne hii banaayi thi ZiNdagi jannat si "Dhaval" kii
KhuSh ho aaj u.sii ziNdagi ko jahannam kar ke

jindagi ko jahannum karna asan nahi hota hai par jab sab khushiya chali jaye to ye jahunnum hi hai na.

bahut khub gazal laye ho
meri dili daad

sakhi
saKhi jee:

namaskaaR

mujHe baRii hi KhuShii hu'ii merii koShiSh pe aapki raa'ey ko paRh ke.. bas YuuNhi saath dete rahiYeNgaa aage bhee.. maiN aapka tah-e-dil se ShuKraGuzaar huuN..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

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6th March 2008, 05:10 PM

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achchhaa likha hai dost!!! you are improving day by day!!
do aik jagah meter me ghalatii hai aur makte kaa dusra misra qafiye me baiThta nahii! inhe zaraa door karne ki koshish karo, ghazal aur sundar ho jayegi!

likhte raho!

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Dheer BHaiya:

namskaaR..!

pehle to aapko Shaadii ke liye bahot bahot baDhaa'iiYaaN..!

jee maiN apnii taraf sey poorii koShiSh karuNgaa kii aage sey apnii GhaltiYoN ko kam karuN aur ees safar meiN aage baRhuN.. maiN aapka ShuKraGuzaar huuN..!

bas YuuNhi saath dete rahiYe..!

KhuSh raheN.. apnaa Khayaal raKheN

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat..!

aapka

~ Dhaval


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Kuch Masoom Say Jazbey Hain,
Kuch Un-dekhay Sapney Hain,
Mager Woh Naheen Janta Shayad...!!!
Meri bhi Zindagi To .............Hai..!!!!!!

Tufan mein kashti ko kinare bhi milte hain
jahaan mein logon ko sahare bhi milte hain
duniya mein sabse pyari hai zindagi
kuch log zindagi se pyare bhi milte hain.

Har kadam pe imtihaan leti hai Zindagi
Her waqt naye sadme deti hai Zindagi
Hum Zindagi se shikwa kaise kare?
Aap Jaise Pyaare Dost Bi tho deti hai Zindagi.

Zindagi mein hamesha naye log milenge
Kahi Zyaada tho kahi kam milenge
Aitbaar zara sochkar karna
Mumkin nahi her jagah tumhe DANY jaisey milengay.
   
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