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Pahli Ghazal - 14th February 2012, 11:16 PM
Humari pahli Ghazal hai ye ,kamiyaan khamiyaan hazaroN hongi
dilse isse apnayiyega ,hindi kacha hai humara ,
bhul chuk hui to muaaf kar dijiyega.
koshish kar rahe hai aap logon ke saath rahte rahte kuchh seekhein




vahi karvaan vohi rasta yahaan dekh rahi hun
aapki aankhon mein dono jahaan dekh rahi hun

thak gayi hun karte karte, izhaar-e-musarrat
Gam-e-hastii kaa mafar, kahaan dekh rahi hun

gum_raahii-e-dil mein, teri yaad kaa paratau
kahaan kho gaya yahaan, wahaan dekh rahi hun

yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun


izhaar-e-musarrat=show off happiness
mafar=hiding place

gum-raahii-e-dil=lost heart

paratau=shadow

:-ek bujhaa hua dhumil

palak jhapakte hi jo aankh se hu'aa ojhal
woh lauT kar nahiiN aayaa gaye dinoN ki taraH
   
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14th February 2012, 11:58 PM
yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun



Waah waahh... bahot khoob Lilly jee... kya kamaal ki pahli Ghazal likhi aapne.... U know what?? its superbb n Awesome.... very nice... Yoonhi khoobsurat se kalaam likhti raheN..
Khush raheN...

Shaad..

Shaad...
   
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kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun


Bahut Hii UmdaaH !

Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!



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15th February 2012, 09:01 AM
Welcome to sdc Jiya ji...


yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun

aapki pahli koshish behad kaamyaab huii, bahut khoob...yuNhi likhti rahiye...

'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....



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15th February 2012, 09:29 AM
most welcome to sdc..........................

vahi karvaan vohi rasta yahaan dekh rahi hun
aapki aankhon mein dono jahaan dekh rahi hun

very -2 nice.............hope to read u more.......................reps+++++++++++++++
   
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15th February 2012, 09:52 AM
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Humari pahli Ghazal hai ye ,kamiyaan khamiyaan hazaroN hongi
dilse isse apnayiyega ,hindi kacha hai humara ,
bhul chuk hui to muaaf kar dijiyega.
koshish kar rahe hai aap logon ke saath rahte rahte kuchh seekhein




vahi karvaan vohi rasta yahaan dekh rahi hun
aapki aankhon mein dono jahaan dekh rahi hun

thak gayi hun karte karte, izhaar-e-musarrat
Gam-e-hastii kaa mafar, kahaan dekh rahi hun

gum_raahii-e-dil mein, teri yaad kaa paratau
kahaan kho gaya yahaan, wahaan dekh rahi hun

yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun


izhaar-e-musarrat=show off happiness
mafar=hiding place

gum-raahii-e-dil=lost heart

paratau=shadow
Very nice
very well written...................

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15th February 2012, 04:22 PM
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yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun



Waah waahh... bahot khoob Lilly jee... kya kamaal ki pahli Ghazal likhi aapne.... U know what?? its superbb n Awesome.... very nice... Yoonhi khoobsurat se kalaam likhti raheN..
Khush raheN...

Shaad..

aapka bahut bahut sukriya Shaad ji
hum itne tareef ke qabil nahin hai fir bhi aapne izaat baksha
ehi humare liye badi baat hai

take care

:-ek bujhaa hua dhumil

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SDC MeN AapKaa SwaaghaT Hai ... Jiya Ji !!!

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun


Bahut Hii UmdaaH !

Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!
naresh ji ,
SDC pe aana yaahan aap jaise shayar ke ghazal padhna
badi soubhagya ki baat hai ...

aapko Qalaam pasanad aaya
dilse sukriya

take care

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Welcome to sdc Jiya ji...


yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun

aapki pahli koshish behad kaamyaab huii, bahut khoob...yuNhi likhti rahiye...

Vikram ji,
itne achhe welcome karne keliye thanx
chhoti si koshish ko kaamyaab ka khitab dena koi aapse seekhe
SDC hum sirf ghazal padhne aate hain aapki qalaam ke saamne humari auqaat hi kya hai . saath rahte rahte kuchh to seekh jayenge ...

likhne ki koshish ab karte rahenge

take care

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Welcome to SDC dear!..........................



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16th February 2012, 12:27 AM
apka meri or se bhi swagat hai jiya ji. jab apki pehli ghazal hi itni umda aur khoobsurat hai, to andaza hi lagaya ja sakta hai ki aaney waaley waqt mein aap kin oonchaaiyon ko chhuengeen. daad aur mubarakbaad.
   
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[QUOTE=benuro_jiya;436864]Humari pahli Ghazal hai ye ,kamiyaan khamiyaan hazaroN hongi
dilse isse apnayiyega ,hindi kacha hai humara ,



bahut achi ghazal hai.... pata ni aapne ye kyun likhaa aapki hindi kachi hai.... bahut achi urdu hai aapki ............ aur har khyaal ko achy se nibhayaa hai... girah bhi bahut achi lagaye haiN..


thak gayi hun karte karte, izhaar-e-musarrat
Gam-e-hastii kaa mafar, kahaan dekh rahi hun

kyaa khoob sher hai.......

sahib, aapka yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kya hi khoob saani hai..... radeef bhi bahut achi nibhayee hai....

matlaa bhi bahut hi acha lagaa......

likhte raheN
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vahi karvaan vohi rasta yahaan dekh rahi hun
aapki aankhon mein dono jahaan dekh rahi hun

very -2 nice.............hope to read u more.......................reps+++++++++++++++
uff-ak ji,
humari rachna ko pasand karne keliye sukriya
achhi ghazal kahne ko hum koshish karenge

take care

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18th February 2012, 11:44 AM
SDC ke es pyaare se privaar meiN aapka dil se swaagat hai

Jiya ji aapki ye koshish dil ko bhaa lene wali hai
bus yuN hi chaa jaaiyeGa
maa sarswati aapki kalam ko aur zyada himmt de


ye sher bahut hi accha laga
dil se daad qabool farmaaiyega


kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

maNzil pr nazar rakhtaa huN
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20th February 2012, 08:46 AM
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Humari pahli Ghazal hai ye ,kamiyaan khamiyaan hazaroN hongi
dilse isse apnayiyega ,hindi kacha hai humara ,
bhul chuk hui to muaaf kar dijiyega.
koshish kar rahe hai aap logon ke saath rahte rahte kuchh seekhein




vahi karvaan vohi rasta yahaan dekh rahi hun
aapki aankhon mein dono jahaan dekh rahi hun

thak gayi hun karte karte, izhaar-e-musarrat
Gam-e-hastii kaa mafar, kahaan dekh rahi hun

gum_raahii-e-dil mein, teri yaad kaa paratau
kahaan kho gaya yahaan, wahaan dekh rahi hun

yun labzon kee teer se dil ko chhalni karnaa
sahib, aapki yeh ,tarz-e-bayaan dekh rahi hun

kadam pe kadam milaa kar saath, chalne waale
zameen pe teri paon kii nishaan dekh rahi hun

khusiyon kaa ho rang, jis ghar ke deewaron pe
khwabon me vo khubsoorat makaan dekh rahi hun


izhaar-e-musarrat=show off happiness
mafar=hiding place

gum-raahii-e-dil=lost heart

paratau=shadow
Waahhh....kitni khoobsoorat ghazal likhi hai aapne. Aapke ehsaas behad lajawaab hain. Aap ke har ehsaas ne dil mein jagah banayee hai. You have something in you. I'll love to read you again. God bless you.

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