तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है

[dilip200]

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है


Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

[Dhaval]

mere dost dilip namskaar

yaar aaj bahot dino bad padhne ka mauka diya aapne sach me dil ko chhu gaya aaj aapka ye kalaam har lafz bahot hi gehrayi bayan karte hai jisme aapke ehsas base hai bahot hi behtrin se andaz me aapne asaar bayan kiyae hai bas yuhi aap hamesa likhte rahiye aur hamesa khus rahiye

daad hazir hai dost kubul kijiyenga

apna khayal rakhiye

aapka dost
dhaval

[dheer]

[QUOTE=dilip200;221131]*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है
Wah !!

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है
kya baat kahi hai!!!

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है
Fantastic!!

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है
Gud one!!!!

[b]
Really liked it!!!

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by dhavalrami4you

mere dost dilip namskaar

yaar aaj bahot dino bad padhne ka mauka diya aapne sach me dil ko chhu gaya aaj aapka ye kalaam har lafz bahot hi gehrayi bayan karte hai jisme aapke ehsas base hai bahot hi behtrin se andaz me aapne asaar bayan kiyae hai bas yuhi aap hamesa likhte rahiye aur hamesa khus rahiye

daad hazir hai dost kubul kijiyenga

apna khayal rakhiye

aapka dost
dhaval

dhaval yaar
namaskar
kaisa hai yaar
tu ek esa shaksh hai jise main har baar meri har ek post per dekhta hoon. opr har bar teri likhi tariff mera housla buland karti hai.
ese hi sath dete rahan mere dost

tumhara dost
dilip

[koi to ho]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है


Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

bohat khoob dilip sahib acha likha hai aik sher samajh nahi aye mujhay sorry


Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

ye wala aur baqi sab bohat acha laga khas tor per ye

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

[Vipinbox]

Dilip JI , Kaise hain aap?....dua hai hamesha khush rahein.

aapko parhkar, aapka har ek shabd parhkar dil ko bahaut khushi mili hai. Lajawaab likha hai aapne.

"पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं / हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है"

bahaut khoob Dilipi Ji

aabhaar
vipin

[Mayank]

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Daad!

Dilip jee:

Kya baat hai, bohat khuub! YuuN hee liKhate rahen to aage aur behtar liKh sakeNge.. koShiSh zaari raKhiye.. aur ess Sher ke liye mere jaanib se daad qabuul kareN.

Mayank

[dilip200]

[QUOTE=dheer;221134]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है
Wah !!

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है
kya baat kahi hai!!!

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है
Fantastic!!

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है
Gud one!!!!

[b]
Really liked it!!!

dheer ji aapka bahut bahut shukriya ise pasand karne ke liye
ese hi sath dete rahiyega.....
shukriya...

dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by koi to ho

bohat khoob dilip sahib acha likha hai aik sher samajh nahi aye mujhay sorry


Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

ye wala aur baqi sab bohat acha laga khas tor per ye

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

ji pahle to aapka shukriya is ese pasand karne ka.....

raha sawal to sher na pasand aane ka to main samjhta hoon

ye sher aajke mahoul ko dhyan main rakhkar likha hai maine...
jaise aam tour per pariwaro main dekhne ko milta hai ki ek bhai hi doosre bhai se nahi bolta. pariwar ka ek member doosre se kata kata sa rahta hai....

to likha hai
ghar main mere ye thzeeb kahan se aayi........( mean maine to esa nahi sikhaya tha maine to sikahya tha sab se pyar karo )

ghar ke aangan main ek aahata sa khincha rahta hai

mean ek deewar ( Partition) sa khincha hua hai... jiske dono or ke log ek doosre se baat nahi karte.....

ummid hai aapko samajh aa gaya hoga.......

aapne ise pasand kiye iske liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya...
ese hi sath dete rahiyega

bye
dilip

[rajveeer]

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

dilip ji sabse pehle to deri ke liye muaffi chhahta hoon.....itne khub surat kalaam par itni late aa raha hoon mujhe bhut bura mehsoos ho raha hai.....agaaz bhut khub surat hai....

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

wah janaab kaya baat hai bhut khub......

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

dono hee share bemisaal bhut khub......

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

wah janaab kaya khyaal hain aap sahi kehte hain parkhi nazron se kush bhee chhipa nahi rehta......

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

poori gazal lajawaab hai ....lakin beech mein aap kafiya bhatak gaye ho magar ehsaas itne khub haib ki kafiye par nazar hee nahi jaati....yu hee mehfile sajate rehna .....take care.......raj........

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by Vipinbox

Dilip JI , Kaise hain aap?....dua hai hamesha khush rahein.

aapko parhkar, aapka har ek shabd parhkar dil ko bahaut khushi mili hai. Lajawaab likha hai aapne.

"पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं / हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है"

bahaut khoob Dilipi Ji

aabhaar
vipin

vipin sir ise pasand karne ke liye shukriya
aap jab jab meri post per aate hain chaar chand lag jate hain.
ese hi sat dete rahiyega janab
shukriya

dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by Mayank

Daad!

Dilip jee:

Kya baat hai, bohat khuub! YuuN hee liKhate rahen to aage aur behtar liKh sakeNge.. koShiSh zaari raKhiye.. aur ess Sher ke liye mere jaanib se daad qabuul kareN.

Mayank

mayank sir namaste
aap or meri post per
" aap aaye hamare ghar khuda ki nemat hai
kabhi hum khud ko kabhi apne ghar ko dekhte hain"

such kah raha hoon bhaiya. agar aap ese hi aashirwad denge to main jaroor kuch behtar likh paunga......
aapki daad mere sar aankho per hai. ese hi margdarshan dete rahiyega.
shukriya

dilip

[pooja_d]

aslaam walekum dost,

kya haal hain ji, sorry bhai late aai. padha apko bahot achha laga. iss baar to kuch der se samajh aaya....hehehe meri urdu apko to pata hi hai ke kaisi hai. samjhne me deri hu.......hahaa......bahot khuub likha hai sir ji apne....ynhi likhte rahiye.meri daad kabuul kijiyega.....

be happy all'ways

grazie

ur chhui'muui.
pooja

[sunita thakur]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है


Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

dear dilip

bahut accha likha hai, ek alag theme liya hai tumne, bahut accha lagga yu hi likhtey raho..........!

tumhari dii

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by rajveeer

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

dilip ji sabse pehle to deri ke liye muaffi chhahta hoon.....itne khub surat kalaam par itni late aa raha hoon mujhe bhut bura mehsoos ho raha hai.....agaaz bhut khub surat hai....

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

wah janaab kaya baat hai bhut khub......

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

dono hee share bemisaal bhut khub......

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

wah janaab kaya khyaal hain aap sahi kehte hain parkhi nazron se kush bhee chhipa nahi rehta......

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

poori gazal lajawaab hai ....lakin beech mein aap kafiya bhatak gaye ho magar ehsaas itne khub haib ki kafiye par nazar hee nahi jaati....yu hee mehfile sajate rehna .....take care.......raj........

rajveer sahab namaskar
kaise hian janab
hazoor aapka bahut bahut shukriya yahan aane ar ise pasand karne ke liye.
ab janab main kya batau aapko ki esa ky un hua wo kya hai ki jab mane kaifiya ko pakadne ki koshish ki to ehsas kahin dam todte se dikhii diye to maine ise ese hi pst kar diya. haan ek galti jaroor mujhse huyi. ki maine rediff ke taraf dhyan nahi de paya sorry sir..... pata nahi kaise khyal hi nahi raha.
but aage se main is baat ka dhyan rakhoonga sir
bye
dilip

[Pulkit_gupta]

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

Kya baat hai....


दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

hmmm.... well expressed...


पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

sahi baat...


उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है

hmmmmm.....

Dilip,

Accha likha hai aapne... yun hi likhte raha kijiye.... take care..

[Harash Mahajan]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है


Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

bahoot khoob dilip saheb...aapke kalaam mein her baar eknaya jazba dastyaab rehta hai......umeed hai aage bhi parne ko milta rahega..


Harash

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by pooja4588

aslaam walekum dost,

kya haal hain ji, sorry bhai late aai. padha apko bahot achha laga. iss baar to kuch der se samajh aaya....hehehe meri urdu apko to pata hi hai ke kaisi hai. samjhne me deri hu.......hahaa......bahot khuub likha hai sir ji apne....ynhi likhte rahiye.meri daad kabuul kijiyega.....

be happy all'ways

grazie

ur chhui'muui.
pooja

malekum asslaam gudiya rani
kaisi ho yaar
aaj bade dino main dikhaii diye
aapko urdu samajh nahi aata isi liye to maine ye hindi main likhi hai
or aage bhi hindi main hi likhte rahenge. )
badhai dene ke liye shukriya.. yaar

bye apne khyal rakhna
bye
dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by sunita virender

dear dilip

bahut accha likha hai, ek alag theme liya hai tumne, bahut accha lagga yu hi likhtey raho..........!

tumhari dii

hi didi
har baar ki tarah aapko yaha.n dekhakar bahut accha laga.
ese hi sath dete rahiyega apne baaiyaa ka hamesha
bye
dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by Pulkit_gupta

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

Kya baat hai....


दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

hmmm.... well expressed...


पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

sahi baat...


उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है

hmmmmm.....

Dilip,

Accha likha hai aapne... yun hi likhte raha kijiye.... take care..

pulkit bhaiyaa.
aaj pahli baar aapko yaha.n dekhar yakeen maniye dil bag bag ho gaya......
bahut accha laga post per aapka reply dekakar......
aap ka sath raha to yakeenan main kuch accha likh paunga.
aate rahiyega u.n hi
bye
dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by Harash Mahajan

bahoot khoob dilip saheb...aapke kalaam mein her baar eknaya jazba dastyaab rehta hai......umeed hai aage bhi parne ko milta rahega..


Harash

sir ji namaskar
kaise hain aap
aapne reply kar ke is kalam ko jo izzt afzai ki hai uske liye main aapka shukrguzar hoon. bus aapke aashirwad ki jaroorat hai ........ sanse.n is jeevan ki agar u.n hi chalti rahi.n to inshaallah u.n hi likta rahane ki koshish karoonga...

pasand karne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya....

dilip

[kasak]

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

bahut badhiya....

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

bahut khoob....

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

mmmmmmm....yahaan...kaafiyaa gadbadaa gaya!

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

isme bhii wahii...

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

sher bahut hii khoob....

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai



hmmmmmmm.........
dilip sahab...adaab!
kaise hain?
main bilkul theek hoon.....
ab kyaa bataaun....aajkal kuttoN ki tarah kaam karnaa padta hai..hahahaha....

khair...ghazal to waakayi bahut achchi hai,......agar...agar...agar..
sirf ehsaas dekhe jaayeiN....
peshevaraana andaaz me dekhaa jaaye...to thodaa sa rules se hatke hai...

agar aap ghazal keh rahe hain..to kaafiya ek hii rehna chahiye....
like...pehle 'rehta' tha...phir 'hota' ho gaya....isse ghazal ki khoobsurti kharaab ho jaati hai...
doosri baat ye....ki aap beher ki thodii sii practise kijiye.....isliye nahi ki is ghazal me beher nahi.....beher se aur khoobsoortii dikhaayi padtii hai..aur padhne ka apnaa alag mazaa aataa hai.....
main bhii pehle bilkul beher me nahii likhtii thi....daant bhii bahut padtii thi badoN se yahaan pe.....
magar dheere dheere seekh gayi......
aap bhiii likhiyegaa.....
kyunkii shayri sabhii se ho jaati hai....magar ghazal kehnaa bahut mushkil hai...wo bhi rules ke andar...
ummeed hai aap mere mashvare pe gaur karenge....
baaki bhut hii badhiyaa hai sab.....likhte rahiye...mashk-e-sukhan jaari rakhiye...aur dekhiye ek alag shayri ki duniyaa apka intezaar kar rahii hai...
khush rahiyega..

dua go,
KasaK......

[Taish]

dilip sahaab tak mera salaam pahunche,
janab yakeen maaniye ek naya khayaal pesh kiya hai aapne, aur ye apne aap me bahut mushkil kaam hai, aaj ke aapke kalaam ne yakeenan bahut aage jaane ke aapke raashte pe roshani dikhai hai...! aur yakeen maaniye aapne ek bahut hi khoobsurat matla pesh kiya hai bazm me...!

waise kasak ji baaton dhyaan rakhiyega,main v shayad wahi baaten kehne waala tha aapko jo wo keh gayin,yakeen maaniye,aapne kabhi itne kam umar me itni ahchi shayra nahi dekhi hogi, humne v unhi se bahut kuch seekha hai, kyun muhtarma,hehehe..! chaliye leave it, waise main aapko nahi kahunga ki beher ki practice kijiye, kyunki mera maan.na hai ki jab hum ghazal me apna haath saaf kar len,aur ghazal likhna seekh jaayen ahchi tarah se, uske baad beher ki taraf rukh karna chahiye, jar kadam itminaan se uthana chahiye, aur abhi mere khayaal se aap sirf ghazal pe dhyaan dijiye, beher ko darkinaar karte hue...! aur yunhi nikharte rahiye...! ek aur baat ka dhyaan rakhiyega, aapko jis cheez ko kasak ji ne kaafiya keh kar samjhaya hai, use darasal radeef kehte hain...! shayad jaldi baazi me wo galti kar gayin, aur matle ke dono sheron me, aur har sher ke doosre misre me iska samaan hona jaroori hai, waise bina radeef ki v ghazalen hoti hai(gair muddaraf ghazal) par aapne radeef istemaal kiya hai matle me,aur ek baat humesha yaad rahiye, ghazal humesha matle ke hisaab se hi chalti hai...!

[Taish]

hmmmmmmm.........
dilip sahab...adaab!
kaise hain?
main bilkul theek hoon.....
ab kyaa bataaun....aajkal kuttoN ki tarah kaam karnaa padta hai..hahahaha....

khair...ghazal to waakayi bahut achchi hai,......agar...agar...agar..
sirf ehsaas dekhe jaayeiN....
peshevaraana andaaz me dekhaa jaaye...to thodaa sa rules se hatke hai...

agar aap ghazal keh rahe hain..to kaafiya ek hii rehna chahiye....
like...pehle 'rehta' tha...phir 'hota' ho gaya....isse ghazal ki khoobsurti kharaab ho jaati hai...
doosri baat ye....ki aap beher ki thodii sii practise kijiye.....isliye nahi ki is ghazal me beher nahi.....beher se aur khoobsoortii dikhaayi padtii hai..aur padhne ka apnaa alag mazaa aataa hai.....
main bhii pehle bilkul beher me nahii likhtii thi....daant bhii bahut padtii thi badoN se yahaan pe.....
magar dheere dheere seekh gayi......
aap bhiii likhiyegaa.....
kyunkii shayri sabhii se ho jaati hai....magar ghazal kehnaa bahut mushkil hai...wo bhi rules ke andar...
ummeed hai aap mere mashvare pe gaur karenge....
baaki bhut hii badhiyaa hai sab.....likhte rahiye...mashk-e-sukhan jaari rakhiye...aur dekhiye ek alag shayri ki duniyaa apka intezaar kar rahii hai...
khush rahiyega..

dua go,
KasaK......

kasak ji tak humara salaam pahunche,

dil ko behad tasalli mili, aapko yun islaah dete dekh kar, aur laga aaj pehli baar ki aap senior member ho...!
waise agli baar se plz aisi galti mat karna aap, radeef ko kaafiya kehne ki, aur beher seekhne ke liye time dijiye thoda bandon ko, seedhe beher ke saagar me mat jhonkiye unhe...!

waise ek baat aur v thi, apni berukhi thoda kam kijiye, na contact me...! yaar hadd kar di hai aapne...! umeed hai aap mera matlab bakhoobi samajh gayin hongi...! to yunhi aati rahiye aap bazk ko aur sanjeeda aur behtareen banane ke liye...!


aapka LUCKY

[kasak]

waise kasak ji baaton dhyaan rakhiyega,main v shayad wahi baaten kehne waala tha aapko jo wo keh gayin,yakeen maaniye,aapne kabhi itne kam umar me itni ahchi shayra nahi dekhi hogi, humne v unhi se bahut kuch seekha hai, kyun muhtarma,hehehe..! chaliye leave it, waise main aapko nahi kahunga ki beher ki practice kijiye, kyunki mera maan.na hai ki jab hum ghazal me apna haath saaf kar len,aur ghazal likhna seekh jaayen ahchi tarah se, uske baad beher ki taraf rukh karna chahiye, jar kadam itminaan se uthana chahiye, aur abhi mere khayaal se aap sirf ghazal pe dhyaan dijiye, beher ko darkinaar karte hue...! aur yunhi nikharte rahiye...! ek aur baat ka dhyaan rakhiyega, aapko jis cheez ko kasak ji ne kaafiya keh kar samjhaya hai, use darasal radeef kehte hain...! shayad jaldi baazi me wo galti kar gayin, aur matle ke dono sheron me, aur har sher ke doosre misre me iska samaan hona jaroori hai, waise bina radeef ki v ghazalen hoti hai(gair muddaraf ghazal) par aapne radeef istemaal kiya hai matle me,aur ek baat humesha yaad rahiye, ghazal humesha matle ke hisaab se hi chalti hai...!--------------------------------------------------------------------------------


m really sorry ghayal sahab.....
actually itnii jaldii me itnaa sab likh gayii ki .....

khair...aap kuchh zyada hi nahi keh gaye?/
senior member....seekh rahe hain.....
itnaa badaa mat banaao mujhe....

m really sorry...wo radeef hii tha main jaanti thi..magar post kar diyaa aur jab padhaa to .....
ab jahaan tak beher kii baat thi to maine dilip jee ka potential dekh ke baat kii.......ghazal ka bahut badaa hissa uskii beher hotaa hai....maine ye kahaa tha ki likhte likhte practise khud ba khud ho jaayegii....
hum bhii likhte hain...aur jahaan tak aap kehte hain..itnaa buraa nahi....hume bhi pataa hai kab kya karnaa hai.....kis cheez pe kab dhyaan denaa hai....

khair...aap apne nazariye se dekh rahe hain....main apne se....
isliye shayad....


muafi chaahungii agar kuchh galat kahaa ho....

-----------------------------------------------------------------

dilip sahab.......
dariye mat hum log aise hiii baat karte hain...isse aur bhi bure tareeke se....
yahaan tameez se bol rahi hoon isse....
lucky!
m outa bhopal.....1st ko waapis aaungi!

then will talk.....

theek hai dilip sahab..
likhte rahiye......

dua go,
KasaK........

[Taish]

k no problems...! waise v aaj tak humare sochne ka nazariya kabhi mila thode hai jo aaj mile...! dilip bhai sahi kaha unhone dariyega nahi, humari shayrana behas is site pe shayad sabse jyada ho rakhi hai...! aur yunhi nikharte rahiye, ek baat to kasak ji ne behad gaur farmaane layak kahi hai, aur wo ye ki potential aap me koot kar bhara hai, bas use niukhariye, aur bekaar ki wah wahi me kabhi na aaiye...! bas yunhi likhte rahiye dil se....!

[KunaaL]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*


उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है
[/b]

Dilip mere Dost...

Kavish ki jaandaari ka ehsaas pehle hi sher maiN ho jaata hai .. jo apne bakhoobi likh ke .. dil ko manmooniyat ka sikhar diya ... ehsaas kahaN nahi hote .. pa runki bayaani aur gehra ban hi unhe aledha banate hai .. mujhe to in do sheroN maiN wo dikha .. ki gazal naa bhi likhte to maiN pehchaan leta poori .. duniya daari ki kasoti pe khari baateN .. dil ko aaina sa dikhati si lagi ... bade khaloos ke sath aapka iteqbaal karte hue aapko badhai deta huN janaab ... jaate jaate aapke sur maiN hi do ashaar aapke liye ..

MaiN na jaanu shayri ke kaaide mere yaar..
bas naata dil ka lafzoN me bayaaN hota hai...

likhte raho ...

aapka apna

kunaal

[akelijaan]

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

hello dilip ji,
badi der se nazar padi aapke is haseen kalaam par.bahut bahut acha likha hai aapne.her sher apneaap mai mukammal .bahut khoob.upar diye ashaar bahut pasand aaye.likhte rahiye yunhin.

[chaahat]

Originally Posted by dilip200

*~*~*तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है*~*~*

तेरा मेरा क्या हर दिल मैं खुदा रह्ता है
कौन है क्या है, उसे हर दिल का पता रह्ता है

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

दिल के दर्द की तामील कर आंखों मैं
बडी मासूमियत से आंसू सज़ा होता है

उस ही शाख पे ठहरते हैं परिन्दे अक्सर
साया जिस पेड़ का गुलशन मे घना होता है

पारखी नज़रों से क्या छुपा है इस जहां मैं
हर लिफ़ाफ़े पे खत का मजमून लिखा होता है

लाख कोशिशें करो कुछ भी यहां चाहे “दिलीप”
होता है बहि जो मुकद्दर मैं लिखा होता है

उनका जीना भी तो दुस्वार बना रहता है
ज़ो बशर गैर के अह्सान से दवा रह्ता है


Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

Dilip ji..

Bahut hi gehre aur khoobsoorat ehsaas hain..

Daad kubool keejiye..

Take Care..

~Priya

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by kasak

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

bahut badhiya....

Ghar main mere ye tahjeev kahan se aayii
Ghar ke aangan main ahata sa khincha rahta hai

bahut khoob....

Dil ke dard ki tamil kara aankhon main
Badi masoomiyat se aanshu saza hota hai

mmmmmmm....yahaan...kaafiyaa gadbadaa gaya!

Us hi shakh per thaharte hain parinde akshar
Saya jis ped ka gulshan me Ghana hota hai

isme bhii wahii...

Parkhi nazaro se kya chupa hai is jahan main
Har lifafe per khat ka majmoon likha hota hai

sher bahut hii khoob....

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai



hmmmmmmm.........
dilip sahab...adaab!
kaise hain?
main bilkul theek hoon.....
ab kyaa bataaun....aajkal kuttoN ki tarah kaam karnaa padta hai..hahahaha....

khair...ghazal to waakayi bahut achchi hai,......agar...agar...agar..
sirf ehsaas dekhe jaayeiN....
peshevaraana andaaz me dekhaa jaaye...to thodaa sa rules se hatke hai...

agar aap ghazal keh rahe hain..to kaafiya ek hii rehna chahiye....
like...pehle 'rehta' tha...phir 'hota' ho gaya....isse ghazal ki khoobsurti kharaab ho jaati hai...
doosri baat ye....ki aap beher ki thodii sii practise kijiye.....isliye nahi ki is ghazal me beher nahi.....beher se aur khoobsoortii dikhaayi padtii hai..aur padhne ka apnaa alag mazaa aataa hai.....
main bhii pehle bilkul beher me nahii likhtii thi....daant bhii bahut padtii thi badoN se yahaan pe.....
magar dheere dheere seekh gayi......
aap bhiii likhiyegaa.....
kyunkii shayri sabhii se ho jaati hai....magar ghazal kehnaa bahut mushkil hai...wo bhi rules ke andar...
ummeed hai aap mere mashvare pe gaur karenge....
baaki bhut hii badhiyaa hai sab.....likhte rahiye...mashk-e-sukhan jaari rakhiye...aur dekhiye ek alag shayri ki duniyaa apka intezaar kar rahii hai...
khush rahiyega..

dua go,
KasaK......

kasak ji
aapko mera namaskar
sabse pahle to aapka bahut bahut shukriya
ki aapne apne kiimati waqt main se samay nikal kar yahaa.n aayii.n or is nachiz ke shers ko saraha...
wanki main aapki bato se purntah sahmat hoon ki isme rediff or kaifya ko kayam nahi rakha ja saka isi liye to maine ise kahiin bhi gazal ka naam nahi diya..... raha sawal behar ka to wo mujhe nahi aata.
wanki bate.n to aapse pm ke dwara pahle hi ho chuki hain.
aap mera shukriya kabool farmaiyega
shukriya

dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by ghayal_shayar

dilip sahaab tak mera salaam pahunche,
janab yakeen maaniye ek naya khayaal pesh kiya hai aapne, aur ye apne aap me bahut mushkil kaam hai, aaj ke aapke kalaam ne yakeenan bahut aage jaane ke aapke raashte pe roshani dikhai hai...! aur yakeen maaniye aapne ek bahut hi khoobsurat matla pesh kiya hai bazm me...!

waise kasak ji baaton dhyaan rakhiyega,main v shayad wahi baaten kehne waala tha aapko jo wo keh gayin,yakeen maaniye,aapne kabhi itne kam umar me itni ahchi shayra nahi dekhi hogi, humne v unhi se bahut kuch seekha hai, kyun muhtarma,hehehe..! chaliye leave it, waise main aapko nahi kahunga ki beher ki practice kijiye, kyunki mera maan.na hai ki jab hum ghazal me apna haath saaf kar len,aur ghazal likhna seekh jaayen ahchi tarah se, uske baad beher ki taraf rukh karna chahiye, jar kadam itminaan se uthana chahiye, aur abhi mere khayaal se aap sirf ghazal pe dhyaan dijiye, beher ko darkinaar karte hue...! aur yunhi nikharte rahiye...! ek aur baat ka dhyaan rakhiyega, aapko jis cheez ko kasak ji ne kaafiya keh kar samjhaya hai, use darasal radeef kehte hain...! shayad jaldi baazi me wo galti kar gayin, aur matle ke dono sheron me, aur har sher ke doosre misre me iska samaan hona jaroori hai, waise bina radeef ki v ghazalen hoti hai(gair muddaraf ghazal) par aapne radeef istemaal kiya hai matle me,aur ek baat humesha yaad rahiye, ghazal humesha matle ke hisaab se hi chalti hai...!

lucky ji
har ek baat ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriaya...
accha laga dili khushii masoos huyii mujhe ki aap yaha.n aaye or mujhe saraha
shukriya.

dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by sacccha_pyar

Dilip mere Dost...

Kavish ki jaandaari ka ehsaas pehle hi sher maiN ho jaata hai .. jo apne bakhoobi likh ke .. dil ko manmooniyat ka sikhar diya ... ehsaas kahaN nahi hote .. pa runki bayaani aur gehra ban hi unhe aledha banate hai .. mujhe to in do sheroN maiN wo dikha .. ki gazal naa bhi likhte to maiN pehchaan leta poori .. duniya daari ki kasoti pe khari baateN .. dil ko aaina sa dikhati si lagi ... bade khaloos ke sath aapka iteqbaal karte hue aapko badhai deta huN janaab ... jaate jaate aapke sur maiN hi do ashaar aapke liye ..

MaiN na jaanu shayri ke kaaide mere yaar..
bas naata dil ka lafzoN me bayaaN hota hai...

likhte raho ...

aapka apna

kunaal

kunal bhaiyaa.

yakeen maniye mujhe behad khushi ho rahi hai aap sab ko aaj yaha.an dekh kar. mujhe to maloom hi nahi tha ki main jise yaaha.n post kar raha hoon ki wo aap sanko itna pasand aayegi.......
aap ka bahut bahut shukriya yahaa.n aane ke liye or ise sarahane ke liye.
ese hi sath dete rahiyega dost
shukriya
dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by akelijaan

Tera mera kya har dil main khuda rahta hai
Koun hai kya hai, use har dil ka pata rahta hai

Lakh koshishe.n karo kuch bhi chahe “dilip”
Hota hai bahi jo mukddar main likha hota hai

Unka jeena bhi to duswar bana rahata hai
Jo bashar gair ke ahshan se dawa rahta hai

hello dilip ji,
badi der se nazar padi aapke is haseen kalaam par.bahut bahut acha likha hai aapne.her sher apneaap mai mukammal .bahut khoob.upar diye ashaar bahut pasand aaye.likhte rahiye yunhin.

sara ji
namaskar
kaisi hain aap
sorry main kuch der se aapko reply de pa raha hoon.
kya karoon main bahut samay se idhar aaya hi nahi. kher
aapne is kalam ko pasand kiya aapka bahut bahut shukriya
ese hi sath dete rahiyega
shukriya

dilip

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by chaahat123

Dilip ji..

Bahut hi gehre aur khoobsoorat ehsaas hain..

Daad kubool keejiye..

Take Care..

~Priya

shukriya priya ji ise pasand karne ke liye
ummid hai aage bhi sath milta rahega

shukriya

dilip

[dilip200]

Ek aaina sa uskii aankhon main nazar aata hai mujhe......
mera khud ka bazood rah rah ke Daraata hai mujhe....

-Dilip

[kshitiz]

dilip sahib !

aapki buzm me tashreef laane meiN lage waQt ke liye muaafi chaahta huN !

wakeyi bahut khoobsorat ghazal likhi hai !

yoon to tamaam ashaar kabil e taareef the !

par ..

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

wah huzoor iss ek sher ne zamaane ki sachhai se ru b ru kara diya !

tareef ki hadoN se baahar hai .. fir bhi

daad Qabool farmaaiye ..

apna khyaal rakhiye !

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by kshitiz

dilip sahib !

aapki buzm me tashreef laane meiN lage waQt ke liye muaafi chaahta huN !

wakeyi bahut khoobsorat ghazal likhi hai !

yoon to tamaam ashaar kabil e taareef the !

par ..

घर में मेरे ये तह्जीव कहां से आयी
घर के आंगन मैं आहता सा खिंचा रह्ता है

wah huzoor iss ek sher ne zamaane ki sachhai se ru b ru kara diya !

tareef ki hadoN se baahar hai .. fir bhi

daad Qabool farmaaiye ..

apna khyaal rakhiye !

janab kshitiz ji
namaskaar
dil khush ho gaya aapko is post per dekh kar
aur deri ki to baat hi kya karte hain janab ye post thi hi kahiin gumnamiyon ke andheron main
aaj aapne ise saraha to maniye ye safal ho gayii
tarif ke liye shukriya aapka

-Dilip

[Dhaval]

Dilip bhaa'ii:

namaste!

baRe dinoN baad aaj fir se yeh Ghazal merii aaNKhoN ke saamne aayiiN... aapki liKhi hu'ii sabhee koShiShoN meiN se yeh koShiSh merii sab se pasaNdeedaa hay.. baRii hi gehrA'ii se aapne ehsaasoN ko lafzoN ke Zar'iiYe peSh kiyaa hay.. aapne do radeef liye hain apni koShish meiN... rahtaa hai .. aur hotaa haii.. par aapne ehsaas kuch ees tarah se peSh kiye hai.n ki paRhne waala bas ees koShish ko paRhtaa hi rahen.. fir se aik baar DheroN saari daad!

bazm meiN aapki nayii koShiSh kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa..! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN!

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval

[dilip200]

Originally Posted by Dhaval

Dilip bhaa'ii:

namaste!

baRe dinoN baad aaj fir se yeh Ghazal merii aaNKhoN ke saamne aayiiN... aapki liKhi hu'ii sabhee koShiShoN meiN se yeh koShiSh merii sab se pasaNdeedaa hay.. baRii hi gehrA'ii se aapne ehsaasoN ko lafzoN ke Zar'iiYe peSh kiyaa hay.. aapne do radeef liye hain apni koShish meiN... rahtaa hai .. aur hotaa haii.. par aapne ehsaas kuch ees tarah se peSh kiye hai.n ki paRhne waala bas ees koShish ko paRhtaa hi rahen.. fir se aik baar DheroN saari daad!

bazm meiN aapki nayii koShiSh kaa iNtezaar raheNgaa..! KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN!

duaaoN ke saath ijaazat

aapka

~ Dhaval

dhaval ji namaskaar

aaj aapne is gazal ko yahan dubara se lakar merii bhii yaad taza kar dii,
ye merii bhii pasandida gazal hai,
aur aapne jo do do radeef ki baat ki hai wo ek dam sahi hai, kai baar socha bhii ki ise edit karoon per chahate huye bhii nahi kar paya, mujhe ye ese hi acchi lagi,....... per ab aapki baat per jaroor gaur farmaunga aur ise punh dubara se likhne ki koshish karunga.......

ek baar fir se sath dene ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriyaa


aapka dost

dilip

[sajid_ghayel]

Beautiful work Dilip Saheb.........Dad kabool kare.