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Jane Kyu Yeh Zulum Ka Silsila Rukta Nahi -
11th May 2010, 03:33 PM
achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
sahte rahe unke diye hue hum sare zakham
jane kyun ye zulum ka silsila rukta nahi
kaash mere anchal mein simat jate sare dard
khaa kar nayi chot har baar dil dukhta nahi
aye khuda kaisi himmat bakshi tune 'pari' ko
bewafai paa kar bhi pyaar uska jhukta nahi
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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11th May 2010, 03:37 PM
Dukhi Aatmaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.............
You are the Queen of that lot (DA- lot)...hahaha
Toooooooooooooooo Good
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11th May 2010, 03:42 PM
Seems like i need to visit Fiji and cruise to Fraser with u...
What do u say...?
DA ka load kuch ziyada nahi hogaya.....??
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11th May 2010, 03:44 PM
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Dukhi Aatmaaaaaaaaaaaaaa.............
You are the Queen of that lot (DA- lot)...hahaha
Toooooooooooooooo Good
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Baqtiar
Seems like i need to visit Fiji and cruise to Fraser with u...
What do u say...?
DA ka load kuch ziyada nahi hogaya.....??
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Thanks mate
Cheers
Its my style of writing
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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11th May 2010, 05:38 PM
achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
Too Good .........Praneeta Ji......maqtaa bhi khaas raha........ !
Dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen.... !
khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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11th May 2010, 05:38 PM
achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
Too Good .........Praneeta Ji......maqtaa bhi khaas raha........ !
Dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen.... !
khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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14th May 2010, 07:43 PM
Nice work Praneeta Jee.........specially first 2 shers.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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14th May 2010, 08:39 PM
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Originally Posted by Praneeta
achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
sahte rahe unke diye hue hum sare zakham
jane kyun ye zulum ka silsila rukta nahi
kaash mere anchal mein simat jate sare dard
khaa kar nayi chot har baar dil dukhta nahi
aye khuda kaisi himmat bakshi tune 'pari' ko
bewafai paa kar bhi pyaar uska jhukta nahi
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praneeta jee
radhe radhe
bahut khoob saare ashar achhe lage khaastaur par doosra aur chautha ashar bahut pasand aaye
aise hi likhti rahe
duaon ke saath
Aapka Apna Ishk
'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है
इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है
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14th May 2010, 08:43 PM
Pari....................accha likha hai par etne dard par daad dene ki himmat nahi hai. likhti raho, bhagwaaN tumhe sakoon bhari zindgi deN.......ameeN
bahut sare pyar aur duaoN ke saath
dii
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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28th May 2010, 02:55 PM
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achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
Too Good .........Praneeta Ji......maqtaa bhi khaas raha........ !
Dil se daad hazir hai....qubuul farmaayen.... !
khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath.....
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shukriya Naresh ji...................................
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_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
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28th May 2010, 04:13 PM
tera jawab nahi di. tu hamesha dard bhara hi likhti hai aur itna dard bhara ki padhne wale ko bhi dard ka ehshash ho jata hai.
tera ye line bahut acha laga aur bahut dard bhara bhi laga.
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
khush rehna hamesha duaaon ke sath
tera bhai dinu
AankheN khuleeN to jaag uTheeN hasrateN tamaam Uss ko bhi kho diyaa jissay paya thaa khwaab mein
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28th May 2010, 05:54 PM
aapka u muskurake ro jana bura lagta hai.
aapka u milkar bichad jana bura lagta hai.
u to roj he beheti hai hawa.................
par uska tere tan ko chu kar guajar jana
................bura lagta hai.....................
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28th May 2010, 05:56 PM
Last nite I tryd 2 rite u a letter bt I cud rite "noh ss!w" Read it upside down
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3rd June 2010, 01:12 PM
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Nice work Praneeta Jee.........specially first 2 shers.
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shukriya sajid sahab
thnx 4 ur response
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3rd June 2010, 01:41 PM
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achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
sahte rahe unke diye hue hum sare zakham
jane kyun ye zulum ka silsila rukta nahi
kaash mere anchal mein simat jate sare dard
khaa kar nayi chot har baar dil dukhta nahi
aye khuda kaisi himmat bakshi tune 'pari' ko
bewafai paa kar bhi pyaar uska jhukta nahi
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Dear Praneeta,
hows u? good work...
doosra sher acha laga mujhe...koshish karo aap, ki koi aur topic pe socho..
"uske zakhm sehna" yeh kaafi padha hai maine aapke lekhan mein...
yeh meri raey hai..aap please bura matt lagaana..aap bahot acha likhti ho.
i m nobody..so dnt tk things i say to heart...tk cr..keep writing..god bless..
yours,
Pradhyuamn
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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4th June 2010, 08:36 AM
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achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
sahte rahe unke diye hue hum sare zakham
jane kyun ye zulum ka silsila rukta nahi
kaash mere anchal mein simat jate sare dard
khaa kar nayi chot har baar dil dukhta nahi
aye khuda kaisi himmat bakshi tune 'pari' ko
bewafai paa kar bhi pyaar uska jhukta nahi
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pari ji
ek shandar gazal se nawaza hai aapne mahfil ko.
yakeenan aap apni koshish me safal rahin hain.
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
shandar gazal per merii badhaaii
dilip
" Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab
Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai
mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya
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15th June 2010, 11:26 AM
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achcha lamha mere chaukhat par tikta nahi
dukhon ko shayad koi aur darwaza dikhta nahi
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
sahte rahe unke diye hue hum sare zakham
jane kyun ye zulum ka silsila rukta nahi
kaash mere anchal mein simat jate sare dard
khaa kar nayi chot har baar dil dukhta nahi
aye khuda kaisi himmat bakshi tune 'pari' ko
bewafai paa kar bhi pyaar uska jhukta nahi
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ji dard bhare ehssao ko badhi khubi se shabdo me piroya aapne......very nice.
Radhika
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
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praneeta jee
radhe radhe
bahut khoob saare ashar achhe lage khaastaur par doosra aur chautha ashar bahut pasand aaye
aise hi likhti rahe
duaon ke saath
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Ishk sahab
radhe radhe
shukriya aap ke response ke liye
yuhi saath banaye rakhiyen
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_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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30th December 2011, 07:12 AM
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Pari....................accha likha hai par etne dard par daad dene ki himmat nahi hai. likhti raho, bhagwaaN tumhe sakoon bhari zindgi deN.......ameeN
bahut sare pyar aur duaoN ke saath
dii
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shukriya dii
aap ke pyaar aur duaon ke liye shukriya
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
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tera jawab nahi di. tu hamesha dard bhara hi likhti hai aur itna dard bhara ki padhne wale ko bhi dard ka ehshash ho jata hai.
tera ye line bahut acha laga aur bahut dard bhara bhi laga.
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
khush rehna hamesha duaaon ke sath
tera bhai dinu
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shukriya bhai
achcha laga aap ko yaha dekh kar
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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30th December 2011, 07:15 AM
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Originally Posted by rajandsohani
aapka u muskurake ro jana bura lagta hai.
aapka u milkar bichad jana bura lagta hai.
u to roj he beheti hai hawa.................
par uska tere tan ko chu kar guajar jana
................bura lagta hai.....................
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Quote:
Originally Posted by rajandsohani
Last nite I tryd 2 rite u a letter bt I cud rite "noh ss!w" Read it upside down
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galat jagah post kiya hai aapne
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Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
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30th December 2011, 07:18 AM
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Dear Praneeta,
hows u? good work...
doosra sher acha laga mujhe...koshish karo aap, ki koi aur topic pe socho..
"uske zakhm sehna" yeh kaafi padha hai maine aapke lekhan mein...
yeh meri raey hai..aap please bura matt lagaana..aap bahot acha likhti ho.
i m nobody..so dnt tk things i say to heart...tk cr..keep writing..god bless..
yours,
Pradhyuamn
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shukriya Pradhyuman ji
ye meri favourite topic hai...isi topic ki wajah se hi toh main likh rahi hun
shukriya padhne ke liye
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_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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30th December 2011, 07:27 AM
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Originally Posted by dilip200
pari ji
ek shandar gazal se nawaza hai aapne mahfil ko.
yakeenan aap apni koshish me safal rahin hain.
khairaat kar dete hum apni saari kamaayi
afsos sachcha pyar bazaron mein bikta nahi
shandar gazal per merii badhaaii
dilip
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shukriya Dilip ji
mujhe khushi hui ki aap ko ye ghazal shaandaar lagi
Regards
_______________________________________________ PRANEETA
Kaash k khamoshi bhi ek zabaaN hoti
Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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30th December 2011, 07:28 AM
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ji dard bhare ehssao ko badhi khubi se shabdo me piroya aapne......very nice.
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Regards
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Main dekta rehta unhe aur haal-e-dil bayaaN hota
Ananthpak
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