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~*Khaamoshiyon ke shor...*~ -
9th February 2015, 11:18 AM
Raat bhar khaamoshiyon ke shor se Darte rahe, khud hi ghabraate rahe aur khud sambhal jaate rahe. jab unhe dekhaa, to bas dekhaa kiye pahroN talak, jaane kyuN ek daastaa.n aansoo mere kahte rahe. main akelaa yaad me uske nahi thaa mubtilaa ye daro deewaar us kaa tazkiraa karte rahe. ham ne ek hi shaks pe qurbaan kar dii zindagee, aur hazaaro.n humsafar unki galee milte rahe. jabse vaade lout kar aane ke usne kar diye, kuch charaagoN se merii palkoN tale jalte rahe. hamne shaad apnii kahaani hi sunaa daali unhe, aur wo kisse samajh kar taa-sahar sunte rahe. रात भर खामोशियों के शोर से डरते रहे, खुद ही घबराते रहे और खुद संभल जाते रहे. जब उन्हे देखा, तो बस देखा किए पहरों तलक, जाने क्यूं एक दास्तां आंसू मेरे कहते रहे. मैं अकेला याद मे उसके नही था मुब्तिला ये दर ओ दीवार उस का तज़किरा करते रहे. हम ने एक ही शख्स पे क़ुर्बान कर दी ज़िन्दगी, और हज़ारों हमसफ़र उनकी गली मिलते रहे. जबसे वादे लौट कर आने के उसने कर दिये, कुछ चरागों से मेरी पलकों तले जलते रहे. हमने शाद अपनी कहानी ही सुना डाली उन्हें, और वो किस्से समझ कर ता-सहर सुनते रहे. |
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9th February 2015, 11:50 AM
bahut khoob Shaad Saheb..
lekin eimaandaari se kahu to is peskash m utna maja naa aa paya jitna aapki pehle wali gazalo m aaya tha.. maaf kijiye ager meri baat se bura laga ho to.. lafzo ki gazal m piroone ka aapka andaaz oro se ek dum juda hai.. aapki kalam oro se alag h aap kisi dard ko ek alag hi andaaz m bayaa'n karte hai jisse dil se apne aap "Aah" nikal aati hai.. aapki gazale oro se alag hoti h but ye waali thodi comman lagi isliye aisa kaha... kush rahe.. or mere chote muh se kuch badi baat nikal gayi ho to Maaf kare.. mujhe Lafzo ne maar dala hai...nm |
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9th February 2015, 02:53 PM
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Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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9th February 2015, 08:44 PM
Waah ji waah....fir se kamaal..
 Har sher ek kahani kahta hai...bahut pasand aayi mujhe aapki gazal hamesha ki tarah... हमने शाद अपनी कहानी ही सुना डाली उन्हें, और वो किस्से समझ कर ता-सहर सुनते रहे bahut bahut bahut khoob.... अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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9th February 2015, 10:16 PM
Shad bhai ...apka title khamoshioN ka shor per ker ek kick si lagi bheeter meiN aur ehsaas hua ki kuch khas baat milegi parne ko,,
Aur hasta e mamool aapne canvas per rang bikherna shuru kiya aur sher d sher aap nikherte rahe apne ehsaason mein ... Aur makta tau kamal kar diya aapne ..Jaisa ki mast bhai ne apne remakrs meiN likha ki aap ki peshkash pe khud b khud wah wah nikal jati hai .. YuN hi aate raho aur mehfil sajate raho. Sanjay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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10th February 2015, 11:11 AM
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tabaah saahab... sabse pahle to bazm me main aapka swaagat karta hoon, aur dhanyawaad dena chahungaa jo aapne saaf man se seedhi tarah se apne dil ki baat kahi... main behad shukrguzaar hoon aapka... kisii shaayar ya lekhak ke safal hone ke peeche unke chaahnewalon ke saath saath critics ka bhi kaafii aham role hotaa hai..... aap ne jis baareeki se apni baat kahii hai usse ye lagta hai ke aap hame kaafi gahraai se aur kaafii man se padhte hain.. ek shaayar ke liye isse badh kar koi baat ho hi nahi saktii..... jahaan tak mera khayaal hai is kavita ke baare me to ho sakta hai koi bhool chook ho gayee ho likhne me magar main aapse sirf yahi ek baat kahna chahunga ke ye sab nazariya ka fer hai.. ho sakta hai aapko jo cheez bahot pasand ho wo kisii aur ko naa ho ya jo aapko pasand nahii ho wo kisii aur ko bahot ajeez ho to to ye human tendency hai, isme koi buraa lagne waali baat nahi hai..... main tahe dil se aap sab ke sawaalon aur sujhaawon ka aadar karta hoon aur intzaar bhi karta rahta hoon... ummeed hai aage bhi aapka saath pyaar aur sneh bana rahegaa.... aate rahiyega........ Duaaon ke saath..... Shaad.... |
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10th February 2015, 11:18 AM
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aapne jis darja nacheeez ke ek adna se kalaam ki pazeeraai farmaaai hai aur jis tarah se mujhe palkon pe bithaaya hai wo yaqeenan mere liye bahot hi zyaada fakhr ki baat hai.... main us kaabil nahi jis tarah se aapne meraa maan badhaaya hai..... aur yaqeenan aapki is darja daad aur muhabbat haasil huii hai to beshaq kuch theek thaak likh gaya hounga........ aap sab doston ki duaaen hi hain jo khaaksaar ko kuch likhne ka hauslaa detii hain.. merii iltija hai ke aage bhi aapka yoonhii sath banaa rahegaa... aap apni duaaon se hame nawaazte rahenge... isi ummeed ke saath ijaazat lete hain, fir haazir hoenge..... aap bhi apna khayaal rakhiyegaa.... shukriyaa Shaad... |
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10th February 2015, 08:22 PM
Shaad bhai adaab !
Samajh nahi aaraha kahan se shuru karooN. Aapka yeh kalaam mere qalb-o-zehen mein bastey ehsaas ki aqsii kar raha hai. Khud ko iske saath iss qadar munsalik mehsoos kar raha hooN jaise aapne mere mann ki keh daali ho. Nacheez ki taraf se dheroN daad aur duayein aapke iss kalaam keliye. Ghazab ka kuchh likh daala hai aapne. Shaad rahein, abaad rahein ! **************** Qaul thae ke 'Sagar' milengae kal magar Taareeki musalsal hai, savera nahii hota |
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11th February 2015, 09:13 AM
Shaad Bhai aadab
Bohot hi khoobsurat gazal kahi aapne......jasbaat aur alfazo ki behad umdah jugalbandi karte hai aap...... Daad kubul frmayen Aapki kalam ka talabgaar Bhushan Bhushan Joshi |
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12th February 2015, 08:52 AM
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Allah aapke Noor me or izafa kare.. kush rahe or dua hai aap hamesha apne naam ki tarah "SHAAD" rahe .. or anjaane me is nachij ki baat chubhe to maaf kare.. aapki agli peshkash ke intzaar main.. mujhe Lafzo ne maar dala hai...nm |
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12th February 2015, 11:54 AM
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Masha Allah kyaa kahne aapke andaaze guftagoo ke , jis anddaaz me aapne adna se alfaazon ki pazeeraai farmaai hai woo kaabile tareef hai.... aapki daad mere sar maathe pe Madhu saahiba... aapne jis darja khuloos aur muhabbat ke saath is kalaam ko saraaha hai wo mere liye bahot badii baat hai.... aage bhi aapke aane ka intzaar rahega..... shukriyaa Shaad.... |
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12th February 2015, 11:57 AM
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Sanjay saahab tak nacheez ka salaam pahoche...... aapkee daad ne yakeen maaniye yoon laga goyaa murda jism me kisii ne zindagee ki chaahat fir se paidaa kar dii ho.... ksii ne fir se banjar zamee ko baarish ki boondon se haraa kar diyaa ho..... aapka hausla-afzaai karna mere liye bahot badee baat hai, aapki duaaen miltii rahen to hame bas aur kya chahiye... ye kalam bhi chaltii rahegii Insha Allah.... aap sab ke saath aur pyar ki ummeed ke saath filhal ijaazat....... fir milenege kisii aur bazm me..... khayaal rakhiyegaa apna |
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13th February 2015, 11:20 AM
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aapka khat padhaa yaqeen maaniye masarrat aur zahnii sukooN ka wo aalam hai ke bayaani ke baahar ho jaise..... aapne jis darja muhabaaton se hame nawaazaa hai wo waaqai hamaari auqaat ke baahar ka hai.... ham is qaabil nahi jo shukriyaa kahke is daad ko qubool kar paate... bas aapka ehsaan samajh kar sar pe lagaa rakhnege...... aage bhi aapke aane ke ummeed me baithe hain... aate rahiyega aur yunhii duaaon se nawaazte rahiyegaa... bahot shukriyaa Shaad..... |
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19th February 2015, 12:59 PM
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aapki daad, tareefen aur duaaen mere liye bahot aham hain mere bhai, aap doston ki muhabbat hi hai jo yahaan kheench laatiii hai..... aur main kuch likhne ke liye protsaahit hota hoon..... aap sab ka saath aur pyaar bana rahe main yunhi likhta raahungaa....... duaaon me yaad rakhiyega bhai... Shaad... |
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19th February 2015, 01:00 PM
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aate rahyiegaa... Shaad.... |
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19th February 2015, 01:36 PM
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Iiye Mere paas . Bohut khoob. Aise hi likhte rahiye. Bohut Bohut sundar. Sarika |
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20th February 2015, 09:59 AM
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Saarika jee aadaab.... behad inaayat huii hai aapki mujh par jo aap ne is darja kalaam ki pazeeraaii farmaai haii...... aapko kalaam pasand aayaa mere liye saubhaagya ki baat hai..... aati rahiye, padhtii rahiye.. khush rahiye Shukriyaa............. |
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22nd February 2015, 06:41 PM
shoiab bhai .....kya kahu is kalaam ke baare mein......bahut hee umda likha hai.......daad kubul karein.....
एक हाथ में दिल उनके एक हाथ में खंजर था चेहरे पे दोस्त का मुखौटा अजीब सा मंजर था Arvind Saxena Ph. No. 7905856220 |
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23rd February 2015, 02:59 PM
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behad shukriyaa aapka Aru ji.... aap aaye mahfil me bahaar aayee...... aage bhi aate rahiyega,, padhte rahiyegaa.... shukriyaa Shaad...... |
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2nd March 2015, 12:40 AM
Sameer ji bohat hi allaa ghazal paish ki aap ne bht hi zaberdast bs aik cheez ki nishandahi kerna chahungi is sher main >>
Raat bhar khaamoshiyon ke shor se Darte rahe, khud hi ghabraate rahe aur khud sambhal jaate rahe. sambhal jaate rahe ki jaga sambhalte rahe lafz use karain to ziada behter lage umeed hai apko bura nahi lagega apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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5th March 2015, 10:11 AM
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Aadaab mohtarmaa...... aapko pahlii dafaa dekhaa hai apnii mahfil me aurr yaqeen maaniye behad khushii mahsooos huuii ye dekh kar ke aapne hamaare jazbaaton me utar kar usko itnii gharaai se padhne ki zahmat kii hai...... aapkaa kahnaa ekdam durust hai, agar main dil ki suntaa to yaqeenan ise sambhalte hi rahne detaa... magar zamaane ki aur tahzeeb ki bandishin me badh kar bas sambhal jaaate rahe to jaate rahe........ ummeed hai merii baaton ki rabt ko aapne mahsoos kiyaa hogaa...... jazaaq Allah.... tashreef laatii rahiyegaa...... Shaad.... |
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