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26th April 2009, 05:54 AM
tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui,
zindagiki jo kami thi ab pata hui. basrneko to basar jayegi zindagi, din-ratki ginati ab yaksa hui, katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua, ai ranj ab to thmb ja, kafi barakha hui. jise samazte the tum chotisi bat, mere liye voh baat do jaha hui. ai mere khuda to khafa na hona, tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui. dilke damanpe hazaro paiband lage hai, use bachaneki tarkebe jasata hui. mautki dua karana CHHod diya hamne, ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui. sapana cHHod duniyake ranjogamko, tere ek isharepe fir zinda hui. Sapana |
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26th April 2009, 02:13 PM
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kiya galti ho jaye to ek bhai samajh maaf kar dena. tumse milkar or bhi yakta hui, zindagi ki jo kami thi ab pata hui. gujarne ko to gujar jayegi zindagi, din-rat ki ginati ab yaksa hui, katra katra mlaake dariya ravaM hua, ai ranj ab to tham ja, kafi barakha hui. jise samazte the tum choti si bat, mere liye voh baat do jaha hui. ai mere khuda to khafa na hona, tujse pehle unki yaad baraha hui. dil ke daman pe hazaro paiband lage hai, use bachane ki tarkebe jasata hui. maut ki dua karana CHHod diya hamne, ju ju duaki umar aur izafa hui. sapana cHHod duniya ke ranjo gam ko, tere ek ishare pe fir zinda hui. |
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26th April 2009, 07:53 PM
Thanks a lot for your reply. If you don't mind can I change it to Gujarne?
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26th April 2009, 11:39 PM
thanks Anant. I will change it. It sounds better.
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27th April 2009, 02:58 AM
bahut khub sapna ji, behad sunder likha hai apne.......... awesome piece of poetry. keep up the good work
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Nalin Uski Har "Uff" pe hum apni jaan lutate rahe, Uski Shaqsiyat ko karke buland hum khudko mitate rahe, Raahe-e-mohobbat me hamne kuch yun paya sila wafa ka, woh dete rahe zakhm pe zakhm aur ham muskurate rahe  Please Honor me and my creative writing by visitng my website @ www.nalin-mehra.blogspot.com |
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27th April 2009, 06:01 PM
Dear Nalin Mehra,
Thanks so much for the comment.Shukriya! Sapana Quote:
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5th May 2009, 03:57 PM
wah kya khoob likha hai apne,magar ye language jara samjh maai nahi aye.........maf kijjeyega,
ki ab to sukr mana mujh jese maikhano ka........ |
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