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23rd April 2007, 01:47 PM
Na chhed mere jazbaaton ko,
Dil ka dard ruk na payega, Jo hui hulchul itefaak se bhi, To ghamon ka paimana chhalak jayega Mat de hawa dabi hui un chingaariyon ko, Warna tera bhi daaman is aag se jal jayega Kaid hai jo dariya in aankhon mein, Mat de usko aur ashko ke moti, Nahi to woh bhi bewajah beh jayega Kaise bhool pauga woh beete hue pal, Kaise mita pauga uski yaadein is dil se, Jab usi ka hi ehsaas meri har saans se ayega Yeh woh zakhm hai jo mile hai wafa ke badle, Yeh woh tohfe hai jo uski nishaniyan hai, Agar kahu usko bewafa to daag mohabbat pe lag jayega Chala jauga mehfilon se tanhai mein Aur phir dhoondhuga mehfilon ko hi tanhai mein, Shayad yehi ek aakhri mukaam zindagi mein ayega Kyun bichha ke baithu main nigaahe uski raahon mein, Kyun karoo aaj bhi intezaar uske aane ka “JASSI” Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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23rd April 2007, 02:22 PM
very nice yar. tumhari ye poem padh kar mujhe apni dasta yad aa gyi. very nice yar
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23rd April 2007, 03:07 PM
thanx dear
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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23rd April 2007, 03:40 PM
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bahut khoob likha hai aapne....har sher dil se hokar gujra...sahi kaha aapne...agar accha waqt jayada der nahi rukta...to bura waqt bhi hamesha nahi raheyga....bahut acchey vichaar hai.n....sadha kush raho. god bless u  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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24th April 2007, 10:03 AM
thank you so much sunita ji.
aapne hamesha mera hausla badaya hai aur yeh jaan kar bahut khushi hui ki aap ko har sher bahut achha laga.... aur blessings ke liye shukriya... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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24th April 2007, 04:38 PM
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25th April 2007, 08:55 AM
shukriya Eliays ji... hamein khushi hai ke apne hamare dard ko samjha.. umeed hai ke hamare baaki ehsaas bhi apko pasand ayenge
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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16th August 2007, 06:32 PM
Na chhed mere jazbaaton ko,
Dil ka dard ruk na payega, Jo hui hulchul itefaak se bhi, To ghamon ka paimana chhalak jayega Mat de hawa dabi hui un chingaariyon ko, Warna tera bhi daaman is aag se jal jayega yeh lines bas sab ki sacchai hain... Kaid hai jo dariya in aankhon mein, Mat de usko aur ashko ke moti, Nahi to woh bhi bewajah beh jayega Kaise bhool pauga woh beete hue pal, Kaise mita pauga uski yaadein is dil se, Jab usi ka hi ehsaas meri har saans se ayega very true......... Yeh woh zakhm hai jo mile hai wafa ke badle, Yeh woh tohfe hai jo uski nishaniyan hai, Agar kahu usko bewafa to daag mohabbat pe lag jayega jisse kabhi pyar kiya usse bewafa kaise keh de pyar kabhi to kiya tha woh kaise bhula de!!! Kyun bichha ke baithu main nigaahe uski raahon mein, Kyun karoo aaj bhi intezaar uske aane ka “JASSI” Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega bas ek aas pe to duniya kayam.................. JAsdeep G........ bahut hi achhe ehsaas se aapne upar ki nazm likhi hain.....aise hi is bazm ko mehkate rehna.... mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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16th August 2007, 06:39 PM
JASDEEP bhai ko mera sallam bhai bahut hi khoob likha hai apne ehsaas aur alfaz dono hi dil ko chuu gaye unhi likhtey rahiye dili daad kubool ho........khush rahiye.........aapka bhai kashif
Dunia ke sitam ki koi perwah nahi mujhko, wo kyoun mujhpe ungliya uthaye ja rahe hain. Jis shaks ko janta tha ek chehre se ''kashif'' Uske kitne chehre samne laye ja rahe hain.  |
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17th August 2007, 03:47 AM
ssa jasdeep ji,
kya haal hai? bahut sacha likha hai janab. har ek plz aur har ek line, bilkul sach. bahut gehra likha hai, rythm b bahut acha hai. yuhin likte rahein, aur khush rahen, aapka dost manish Life is filled with goodbyes, a million goodbyes, and it hurts every time....and every time my heart dies a little... Darkness falls on me like rain... just one drop at a time....  |
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20th August 2007, 08:30 AM
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Shukriya Mausam G hamein padhne ka aur tareef karne ka... aapko ehsaas pasand aaye hamein khushi hui jaan kar.. khush rahiye....... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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20th August 2007, 08:32 AM
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Kashif G Sallam tereef ke liye nacheez aapka teh-e-dil se shukarguzar hai. umeed hai ke hamari agli koshish bhi aapke dil ko dastak degi...... Khush rhaiye.............. Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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20th August 2007, 08:34 AM
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ssa Manish G aapke andaaz se laga ke aap punjabi ho??? hamein pasand karne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya... khush rahiye......... Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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20th August 2007, 10:23 AM
Bahut achchhe jasdeep ji
jasdeep ji kal aapki ek rachna se rubaru hue the aur aaj aapki ek aur behtareen rachna ko padhke dil khush hua, rachna mein aapne dil se nikle ehsaason ko achchhe se sajaya hai, har alfaaz mein kahi pyaar to kahi dard nazar aata hai, Kyun bichha ke baithu main nigaahe uski raahon mein, Kyun karoo aaj bhi intezaar uske aane ka “JASSI” Waqt woh bhi na raha to waqt yeh bhi chala jayega jasdeep bhai is ehsaas pe daad hazir hai. yuhi likhte rahiyega aapka dost Merul  Dhoka diya tha jab tumne mujhe, Tab dil se me naraz tha, Phir socha ki dil se tumhe nikal du, Magar woh kambakth dil bhi tumhare paas tha. Merul~~~~~~~~~~> |
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20th August 2007, 03:58 PM
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Yeh woh zakhm hai jo mile hai wafa ke badle, Yeh woh tohfe hai jo uski nishaniyan hai, Agar kahu usko bewafa to daag mohabbat pe lag jayega daad kabool karna........raj........ ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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21st August 2007, 08:27 AM
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Shukriya Merul G Aapne to hamein itni izzat baksh di hai jiske to shayad ham kaabil bhi nahi hai..... apko hamari dono nazmein achhi lagi yeh jaan kar bahut khushi hui.... aur jis baakhoobi se aapne is nazm mein chhipe pyaar aur dard ko samjha hai woh to sach mein kaabil-e-tareef hai... ham aapke aabahari hai...... Khush rahiye............ Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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21st August 2007, 08:29 AM
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je es nazm ne tuhaade dil nu chhu lia hai ta saada eh nazm likhana fizool wich nahi gya. es nazam di sahi pehchaan hoyi hai jo tuhaade warge uchh darze de shayaran ne is di tareef kiti hai..... Main bahut khushnaseeb haan ke is post te tuhaada reply aay hai..... tuhaadi daad saade sir mathhe......... Khush Rahoooooooo Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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