ehashas

[chandni_jain]

agar asak na hote inme to aankhe itni kubsurat nahi hoti
jo gum na diye hote jamane ne to kushi ki kimat pata na hoti
jo bebafai na ki hoti yaaro ne to vafa ki chaht hi na hoti
jo thanyiyo ka ehasas na hota to mahafilo me ronak nahi hoti
jo mage se mil jati har murad to kuda ki jarurt hi nahi hoti

[humnashi]

hello friend

bahut khoob likha hai aapne....sach mein ....

zindgi saath de ya na de mohabbat saath nibhayegi
chal deinge haath mein haath daal ke maut jab aawaaz lagayegi.


aapka dost
tarun

[sushil_sagar]

Chandani ji,
kore kagaj pe kaise likhate agar lekhani na hoti,
hum shayri kaise padate agar likhane walo me chandani na hoti.
realy aapane kuch alfajon me kisake na hone ya hone ki baat aapni bhawan ke anusaar likha hai ..ummid hai aage bhi likhati rahengi. EK SHER AAPKE LIYE.........

ABHI YE NA PUCHO KI MANJIL KAHA HAI.
ABHI TO SAFAR KA IRADA KIYA HAI.
NA HARUNGI (AAP) HAUSALA MAIN JINDAGI BHAR,
KISI SE NAHI KHUD SE WADA KIYA HAI.

[KunaaL]

Originally posted by chandni_jain
agar asak na hote inme to aankhe itni kubsurat nahi hoti
jo gum na diye hote jamane ne to kushi ki kimat pata na hoti
jo bebafai na ki hoti yaaro ne to vafa ki chaht hi na hoti
jo thanyiyo ka ehasas na hota to mahafilo me ronak nahi hoti
jo mage se mil jati har murad to kuda ki jarurt hi nahi hoti

dekha chandni ,...

ek bar phir tumhari 4 lino ne mere muh pe tala laga diya hai ... jawab dun to kya samajh nahi aa raha ... waise bhi jyada nahi likh sakta ... tumhe to maloom hai ... dil se daad kabool karo meri ....

[chandni_jain]

hi humnashi ji
aapka bhut bhut sukriya ki aapne humari ye kalam pasnd aayi tnx 4 reaply ke liye
bye

[pyaasa]

Originally posted by chandni_jain
agar asak na hote inme to aankhe itni kubsurat nahi hoti
jo gum na diye hote jamane ne to kushi ki kimat pata na hoti
jo bebafai na ki hoti yaaro ne to vafa ki chaht hi na hoti
jo thanyiyo ka ehasas na hota to mahafilo me ronak nahi hoti
jo mage se mil jati har murad to kuda ki jarurt hi nahi hoti

Ashkon ka kya hai yeh to yun hi behte rehte hain
Dard e dil aur Dard e judaai hi sehte rehte hain
Dil ha haal kya hai tere bina yeh na pucho
Dil ki baat hum apne dil se hi karte rehte hain

ZINDAGI RAHI TO FIR MILENGE

BYE FOR NOW & TAKE CARE

iminlovein@yahoo.com

[Mayank]

agar asak na hote inme to aankhe itni kubsurat nahi hoti
jo gum na diye hote jamane ne to kushi ki kimat pata na hoti

Chandni ji..

Bahoot hi asardaar likha hai aur suchchaii ko apne khoobsoorat lafzoN se saza kar yahaaN pesh kiya hai.. Behad pasand aaya aap ka yah qalam.. YuN hi likhte rahiye..

Daad qabul kijiye..

MayanK

[chandni_jain]

hi sushil ji
tnx alot jo aap humari mhafil me aaye or humari is shayri ko pada vase aapka likha hua kalam bhi hume bhaut pasnd aaya or haa aap jase dosto ka saat milega to hum uhi lkhte rhege
bye

[chandni_jain]

hi
kunalji ye to aapka badpan hai jo aap itne ache shyr hoker hum jaso ki shayriya padte hai or unhe jawab bhi dete hai hume bhut kushi hui b



bye

[yjm]

I like your shair very much.

[chandni_jain]

hi
h r u chetan ji bade dino baad aap nazar aaye shayri priwar me hume acha laga aapka ye sher aap ase hi likhte rhega
bye

[chandni_jain]

hi mayank ji aapka bhut bhaut sukariya ki aapne humare kalm ko pada or use sharya lekin such to ye hai ki hum aapki thar ache shayr nahi hai aap bhut acha likhte hai
bye

[amandeep_saini]

HELLO,

Bahut khoob likha hai.... ki


jo thanyiyo ka ehasas na hota to mahafilo me ronak nahi hoti

kuch kahne ko baaki hi nahi raha...

unhi likhte rahiye...

[nawabzaveed]

Hi

Har cheez jo inaan karta hai uski ehmiyat batane ke liye bohut shukria.
Likhte rahiye.

[UDAS]

Chandni ji bahut khoob....bahut asardaar..aur bahut steek seedha likha hai...iske liye tareef kabool kare pls..

agar pyar na hota to mohobat na hoti..
mohobat na hoti to dard na hota..
dard na hota to ham-tum na tadafte..
ham-tum na tadafte to koi
shayri-e-dard.com na hota.
shayri.com na hota to ham tum na milte..
ham tum mile to dekho dard thora door bhaga..

kyu theek hai na...

udas

[amaan7am]

wakaee achcha mara hua sher hai kyu ki mera is sher kuch 4 saal purana rishta hai ......aur tumne ise apna bana liya ...achcha nahin kiya kam se kam shayr ka naam hi likh deti ,,,,nahin pata tha to anonymous hi likh deti han....

khair achcha mara

[chandni_jain]

hi udas ji haa aapne bikul thik kha hai yadi ye shayri pariwar nahi hota to hum log shayd kabi nahi mil pate tnx
bye

[chandni_jain]

hi aman ji hume nahi pata ki ye sher kisi ka likha hua hai ya nahi or na hi humne aaj tak ise khi pada hai ye to maine ase hi lkh diya hai yadi muje malum hota to main jarur likhti unka naam lekin aapki ye likhne ki istayl se pata chalta hi ki aapme baat karne ki tamiz bilkul nahi hai isliye plzzzzzzzzzzzz

[amaan7am]

tum shayad pahli bar yahan aaye ho ....isliye tumhe ye nahin pata hai ke haqeeqat mein shayri kis shai ka naam hai ...........yahan s eyahan se kuch utah ke likh diya bus ..aur kyuki tum ladaki ho to tumhe reply dene wale bahut se ladake bhi mil hi jayenge ......magar janti ho isse koi fark nahin padata kyu ki ek shayar ya insaan ke taur par tum sifar hi rahogi .....kabhi khud kisi sher ko apni mahanat se compose karna phir dekhna .......

waqee is duniya mein ladaki hone ke apne bahut se faide hai...replyes bahut milta hai.....magar janti ho .....kuch shayara bahut achcha sochati hai aur utna hi achcha likhti bhi hai....
wajeeda tabasuum ne "apni kalam" se likha hai ...
kaise kaise hadse sahte rahe
phir bhi ham jite rahe haste rahe...kahin se chura ya nahin ...ya iska credit nahin liya ...tumhari tarah....
parween shakir kato naam bhi tumne nahin suna hoga..
abhi se suraj ko jamaal kaise aagaya
abhi to kiran roz-e-ne kafas se milon duur thi...

jab aisa kuch likho mujhe post karna daad ke liye ...

aur han tumne mere "andaaz" ke bare mein ...meri darasal tareef ki th....

haq{sach } kahane se kab darte hai
jo kahte hai karte hai

hum waide ke apne pakke hai
jo kuch bhi kaha hai kar sakte hai....


ok?

[Pulkit_gupta]

Hi,

really well written.. I like every word of it.... Doo keep it up... keep writing n TC