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19th October 2004, 10:21 AM
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din
aaho k tufaan se sehme khamosh lab
kab tak jiyegi udas u zindgi..
ankho ki nami kab tak chupogi tum..
koi daman bhi nahi..
jaker chhup jaye jo usme..
bhigo de anchal, nahi
koi seene se laga le ab..
sisakti raate aur jalte hua ham..
baichainiya deemak ban gayi hai..
chhatpataTa hai vyakul man..
akelepan ki jwaala..
khud ko jalati hai har dam..
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
UDAS
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ASHK AANKHO ME CHHUPA KER GAM PE MUSKURA LETI HOO
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19th October 2004, 11:22 AM
Priye Udaas...
yahan wo applaud karne wala yaahoo emoticon nahin nahin tau clapping karti...bahut hee khubsurat likha hai...dard se bharpoor...sachaa sa...saral saa ehsaas...yeh lines tau dil pe bahut asar kar gayin
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
Akelapan!
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
Khudgarz log!
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
Mayoosi...thakaan!
roz roz kee haqiqat...tumne yeh sab kitni aasaani se keh diya...share karne ke liye shukriyaa...yoonhi likhntee rahein...kabhi dard...tau kabhi khushi mein bhi...kabhi akele tau kabhi doston ke beech bhi
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Re: Sisakti Raate Aur Jalte Hua Ham -
19th October 2004, 11:40 AM
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Originally posted by UDAS
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din
aaho k tufaan se sehme khamosh lab
kab tak jiyegi udas u zindgi..
ankho ki nami kab tak chupogi tum..
koi daman bhi nahi..
jaker chhup jaye jo usme..
bhigo de anchal, nahi
koi seene se laga le ab..
sisakti raate aur jalte hua ham..
baichainiya deemak ban gayi hai..
chhatpataTa hai vyakul man..
akelepan ki jwaala..
khud ko jalati hai har dam..
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
UDAS
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di...
bohat khoob sacchai se sarbor is kalam pe toote foote kunal ki dad kabool kare ... doosra hath dekha kitna kaam aa raha hai... tod deti to daad kaise deta tell tell
KunaaL (Sifar).........
Hai 'sifar' bhi reyazi ka hissa..
Shayrii bhi hisaab ki hogi..
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19th October 2004, 02:25 PM
Meri Pyari Behna,
Kitna dard hai apne aap mein samete hue!! Hai, Phir humari aankh mein nami kara di aapne. Kitni naummeedi, kitna dard bas dil jhin jhord ke rakh diya hai. Bas u hi apna dard humare saath share karte rahiye.
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19th October 2004, 02:55 PM
SUNITA JI,
Itni udaasi itni bechaini , kyun zindagi se itni jaldi haar maan lete ho .
Gum na kar ke taqdeer bhi badlegi
Ek din hoga aisa ke gum ki tasveer badlegi
Hoga khushiyon se bhara tera daaman
Khuda ki rehmat tere daman mein khushi bhar degi
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Re: Sisakti Raate Aur Jalte Hua Ham -
19th October 2004, 09:23 PM
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Originally posted by UDAS
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din
aaho k tufaan se sehme khamosh lab
kab tak jiyegi udas u zindgi..
ankho ki nami kab tak chupogi tum..
koi daman bhi nahi..
jaker chhup jaye jo usme..
bhigo de anchal, nahi
koi seene se laga le ab..
sisakti raate aur jalte hua ham..
baichainiya deemak ban gayi hai..
chhatpataTa hai vyakul man..
akelepan ki jwaala..
khud ko jalati hai har dam..
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
UDAS
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udas ji ...
bohat khoob .... ek dum sahi hai ek ek bat tareef kabool kare
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Re: Sisakti Raate Aur Jalte Hua Ham -
20th October 2004, 03:53 PM
koi daman bhi nahi..
jaker chhup jaye jo usme..
bhigo de anchal, nahi
koi seene se laga le ab..
baichainiya deemak ban gayi hai..
chhatpataTa hai vyakul man..
akelepan ki jwaala..
khud ko jalati hai har dam..
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
PRIYE UDAS JI
waqai ...!! yeh kalaam ke jariye aapne jaise ek tasveer kheech daali hai ...gazal ko padhte hue yun laga jaise kisi jindagi ko pal bhar mein hi padh dala ho jaise...har sher sacha aur bejode hai...bahoot umda likhti hai aap...khuda se dua hai aapke is hunar ko aur tarakki mile..aur aapko sukoon.meri daad kubool kijiye...sada khush rahiye
-MANOJ
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26th October 2004, 02:25 PM
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Priye Udaas...
yahan wo applaud karne wala yaahoo emoticon nahin nahin tau clapping karti...bahut hee khubsurat likha hai...dard se bharpoor...sachaa sa...saral saa ehsaas...yeh lines tau dil pe bahut asar kar gayin
pyar ka pyasa bachpan..
aaj bhi tadafta hai..
rota hai rom rom kabhi, to
sulagti hai aatma akele me har dam..
Akelapan!
koi saathi, koi sahara na hua..
jisko bhi apnana chaha..
khud me hi simta sa mila.
Khudgarz log!
sisakti raate aur jalte hua din..
zindgi kat rahi hai..u hi..
kat jayegi tamam umr
'udas' u hi..u hi...ek din..!!
Mayoosi...thakaan!
roz roz kee haqiqat...tumne yeh sab kitni aasaani se keh diya...share karne ke liye shukriyaa...yoonhi likhntee rahein...kabhi dard...tau kabhi khushi mein bhi...kabhi akele tau kabhi doston ke beech bhi
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Paras such me ye roz roz ki baichainiya to hai...magar her roz hamari zindgi main aaker hame kis kadar tor jaati hai...hamare armaano ko chubhti si jalan de kar chali jaati hai..aur ham tadafte hi reh jaate hai..aur u hi hamari zindgi tamam umr katTi chali jaati hai..
paras acchha hua tumne clap nahi kiya...shayad mujhe aisa lagta ki mere dard per vyangye ho raha ho..anyways...filhaal itna hi kahungi...and ha.n thanx aapne aaker is koshish ko kamyabi ka paigam diya...
urs udas sonu
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26th October 2004, 02:27 PM
Thanx kunal...umeed karti hu ab aapka haath theek ho gaya hoga..
thanx for reply...tute haath se bhi koshish ki mere liye...chalti hu...izazet dena pls..
udas
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26th October 2004, 02:30 PM
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Meri Pyari Behna,
Kitna dard hai apne aap mein samete hue!! Hai, Phir humari aankh mein nami kara di aapne. Kitni naummeedi, kitna dard bas dil jhin jhord ke rakh diya hai. Bas u hi apna dard humare saath share karte rahiye.
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ha.n ji salim bhaiya...kaise ho..hope u will fine...
such me bhaiya...dard to hai...seene mai aur bahut hai...itna kagaz kaale karne k baad bhi kam hi nahi hota aur tees deta rehta hai...
koshish hi kar rahi hu bhai ise share karne ki...magar shayad kismat me kuchh aur hi likha hai..jitna share kar k ek dard kam karti hu ki dusra mil jaata hai...uf...anyways...shukriya...aap yaha aaye..aur ye kalaam aapko acchha laga...thanx...
udas
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26th October 2004, 02:33 PM
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SUNITA JI,
Itni udaasi itni bechaini , kyun zindagi se itni jaldi haar maan lete ho .
Gum na kar ke taqdeer bhi badlegi
Ek din hoga aisa ke gum ki tasveer badlegi
Hoga khushiyon se bhara tera daaman
Khuda ki rehmat tere daman mein khushi bhar degi
iminlovein@yahoo.com
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pyaasa ji...
har baar is udas ko himmat dene ki koshish....har baar hasane ki ek nayi koshish...kayi baar aapki koshishe kaamyaab ho jaati hai..lekin abhi abhi maine salim ko bataya k jaise jaise ek gam galat hota hai..dusra gam aur ghav dene ke liye taiyaar ho jata hai...afsos pyasa bhai apni kismat hi kuchh aisi hai...kanto se lipti hui....
thanx pyasa ji aap mera har kalaam parte hai aur mujhe himmat dete hai..bahut acchha lagta hai....per main reply dene me dair kar jaati hu...maaf karna...pls...
udas
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"Haale dil to dil me hi rakhte hai, in ankho ka kya karai.n
Jinse yaad main tumhari hardam aansu behte hai"
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26th October 2004, 02:34 PM
Raj ji...
bahut khushi hui aap ko yaha dekh kar...thanx aapko ye kalaam acchha laga..u hi aate rahiye...
thanx..
udas
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Jinse yaad main tumhari hardam aansu behte hai"
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26th October 2004, 02:40 PM
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PRIYE UDAS JI
waqai ...!! yeh kalaam ke jariye aapne jaise ek tasveer kheech daali hai ...gazal ko padhte hue yun laga jaise kisi jindagi ko pal bhar mein hi padh dala ho jaise...har sher sacha aur bejode hai...bahoot umda likhti hai aap...khuda se dua hai aapke is hunar ko aur tarakki mile..aur aapko sukoon.meri daad kubool kijiye...sada khush rahiye
-MANOJ
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Manoj ji...
sahi kaha aapne ek zindgi ki kahani ko hi isme nichorne ki koshish ki thi maine..lekin kya karu...jazbaat hai ki kagaz per utarne k baad bhi aag ki tapish liye hua hai..aur dil k daman ko jalaye jaate hai...yahi dard hai jo har baar...baar baar hamare armaano ko lahu luhaan kiye jaata hai..uff..uff..uff..kash kahin se sakoon mil paata...kahin is dard ko aaraam mil pata...ye bekhof dhooa ki tareh barta hi jaata hai..
Thanx manu ji aapne itni saraahna di is kalaam ko...such me aapki vazendaar tareef se to ek baar ko dil sakoon sa paa gaya..thanx u hi aate rahiye pls...
udas
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"Haale dil to dil me hi rakhte hai, in ankho ka kya karai.n
Jinse yaad main tumhari hardam aansu behte hai"
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27th October 2004, 02:09 PM
Sunita ji..
Kaisi haiN? Maaf karna.. Jyada kuch na kah paaunga.. Lekin ek sher yahaaN likh raha hooN..
Zindagi ki raahon mein aise mod bhi aate hain
Saawan ke saath-saath yehan Patjad bhi aate hain
Aasuwon ke saagar mein moti bhi milthe hain
Jo unhe doond lete hain, Wahi zindagi jee lete hain
Apna khayaal rakhiye..
Mayank
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27th October 2004, 07:08 PM
Udas ...aapki ye post parhi....mai samajh sakta hooN ye Peeda or ekanki pan bhi shaayad...per utne gehre se nahi...jitna use...jeene waala karta hai...
Bas shubhkaamnaaeiN hi de sakta hooN bhavishye ke liye...
or is geet ke mukhde jitna hausla....shaayad.
Samjhauta gamoN se karlo
Samjhauta gamoN se karlo
Jindgi me gam hi milte haiN..
Patjhad aate hi rehte haiN
Ye madhuban phir bhi khilte haiN...
Chaand
Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.
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27th October 2004, 11:40 PM
Dear Udasji,
classic...kya kahe yaar...koi words match nahi hota. daad kabul kijiyega.
pappu.
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29th October 2004, 11:06 AM
Mayank bhaiya...
aap yaha aaye...aur apni haaziri di mere liye yahi kaafi hai...aapne jo shair mere liye paish kiya bahut acchha laga...thanx u hi aate rahiye.aur mera hausla barate rahiye..
udas
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29th October 2004, 11:08 AM
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Udas ...aapki ye post parhi....mai samajh sakta hooN ye Peeda or ekanki pan bhi shaayad...per utne gehre se nahi...jitna use...jeene waala karta hai...
Bas shubhkaamnaaeiN hi de sakta hooN bhavishye ke liye...
or is geet ke mukhde jitna hausla....shaayad.
Samjhauta gamoN se karlo
Samjhauta gamoN se karlo
Jindgi me gam hi milte haiN..
Patjhad aate hi rehte haiN
Ye madhuban phir bhi khilte haiN...
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Chand ji thanx aapne is kalaam me chhipi peera aur ekakipan ko samjha..aur sahi kaha aapne ki jis per ye guzerte hai wahi jaan sakta hai..ha.n aap apni shubhkaamnaye denge to shayad ekakipan dar jaaye aur door bhag jaaye...u hi aate rahiye..thanx...
udas
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Jinse yaad main tumhari hardam aansu behte hai"
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29th October 2004, 11:10 AM
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Dear Udasji,
classic...kya kahe yaar...koi words match nahi hota. daad kabul kijiyega.
pappu.
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Areeee pappu ji aap yaha aaye...mere liye yahi kaafi hai...aur aapki daad bhi kabool hai..koi baat nahi words nahi milte kabhi kabhi aisa bhi hota hai bare bare shehro me ham jaise chhote chhote logo k saath... theek hai na...ok bye..take care & thanx again
udas
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