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~*Shayad wo mere shahar mein aa gaye haiN*~ -
22nd November 2008, 09:56 PM
DostoN aadab,
Ek arse ke baad aaj jab kisi ke khyaal main dil dooba to fir bus dil ke khyaalon ne ek gazal ki shakl akhtiyaar kal lii… baar baar mere zehan main ye sher khoundhne laga… Jab kabhii chhaa jate hain badloN ki tarah tumhaare khyaal Kahan tak samhaaloon khud ko ki main aakash to nahi…….. Uske hii khyalon kii aahat per maine kuch likhne ki koshish kii hai Mu’lahiza farmaiyega………… Shukriya Aapka Dilip Fir tadap utha dil fir wo yaad aa gaye haiN Uske hi khayaal fir dil par chhaa gaye haiN Kal se kaleje mein ek hook sii uthne lagi Shayad wo mere shahar mein aa gaye haiN Dard jo uth raha hai use main kya naam doon Wo khud hi to mujhe begana bana gaye haiN Ajeeb sii khamoshii hai mere in Labo.n par dil ka haal mere aansoo deekha gaye haiN Ab aur kis baat ka intzaar hai tere dil ko sare khaab 'Dilip', tum par luta gaye haiN - Dilip  " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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23rd November 2008, 11:55 AM
A nice write dear....
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23rd November 2008, 09:29 PM
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hmmmm..............dilip bhai, kaya khoob sixer mara hai, par yeh to batao ki kiske khayaal mein doob kar yeh ahsaas paida hue haiN  umda likha hai aapne, sabhi sher pasand aaye hume, par yeh ek sher to....... subhan-allah ! dil par lag gaya.....behad pasand aaya yeh wala sher.....! Kal se kaleje mein ek hook sii uthne lagi Shayad wo mere shahar mein aa gaye haiN yoon hi likhtey rahiye, aur haan ek baat, woh yeh ki etna jayada gap mat daliye likhne mein, hume aapki shayri routine meiN chahiye. kush rahiye. duao.n ke saath aapki didi  .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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23rd November 2008, 11:10 PM
Dilip bhaa'ii:
namaskaaR!! aapki yeh koShiSh umdaah rahee... aSh'aar dil ko chhu gaye.. darKhaast aapse yahee haii ki YuuNhi bazm ko sajaate raheN...! daad!! aur haaN aapse bhee meraa sawaal wahii hai jo sister ne aapko poochaa haii .. yeh Ghazal kiN ke KhayaaloN meiN Doob ke liKhi haii aapne  KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaaal raKheN duaaoN ke saath ijaazat aapka ~ Dhaval |
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24th November 2008, 09:26 AM
Kal se kaleje mein ek hook sii uthne lagi
Shayad wo mere shahar mein aa gaye haiN Ab aur kis baat ka intzaar hai tere dil ko sare khaab 'Dilip', tum par luta gaye haiN - BAHUT KHOOB DILIP JEE......................... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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24th November 2008, 05:35 PM
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sath dene ke liye aapka bahut bahu shkriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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24th November 2008, 11:01 PM
Dilip Ji
kaise ho aap .... bahot hi Umda Ghazal likhe hain aap ... Fir tadap utha dil fir wo yaad aa gaye haiN Uske hi khayaal fir dil par chhaa gaye haiN kya khoob kaha hai .......... Younhi likhte rahiye mayusi se humesha dur rahiye Diya  Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz. Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai Goodbye SDC Diya |
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25th November 2008, 06:39 PM
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 aap bhii mazak karne lagin manta hoon aapko accha bhii laga per aapke bina kahan sambhab ho pata... aru kis ke liye likha hai aapko to khud hi maloom hai... mujhe batane ki jaroorat hai kya......... aap ne hamesha ki tarah mera sath diya accha laga ese hi sath milta rahega ye ummid hai ... apna khyaal rakhiyega..... dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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25th November 2008, 08:44 PM
Kal se kaleje mein ek hook sii uthne lagi Shayad wo mere shahar mein aa gaye haiN Dard jo uth raha hai use main kya naam doon Wo khud hi to mujhe begana bana gaye haiN bahut khoob dilip ji...ye do aashaar muje behad pasand aaye..kisi ki yaad ka ye tufaan to kamaal kar gaya...bahut aasan lafzon me aap ne apne dil ke haal ko zaahir kiya hai..be-shaq ye ehsaas hamare dil me utar gaya...bas u hi mehfil ki shaan badhate rahiyega...  "LAMHA"mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko’ii hamnaam teraa , ko’ii tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe.... |
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26th November 2008, 12:46 AM
dilip ji
bahut dino baad apko pada//gujra hua jamana kuch arse pahle ka yaad aaya...khair gazal bhaut dard bharai lagi...ye yaade kitna dard deke jati hai hai na??? magara kya kare..nizat na mile inse to kya ho??? apna khyaal rakhna ok bye tc शब्दों में पिरोना है , जिससे वो हमारी यादों में महकते रहे |
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26th November 2008, 02:16 PM
assalam,
dilip bahi, bhot khub likha hai apne, har ek baat dil se nikal kar dil tak pahonch rahi hai, likhte rahiye, apna khayal rakhiye, Allah hafiz koi doulat chahe to koi shaan chahe, hum to jindagi ke sataye huwe hai, ‘Eliyas’ to khudase do gaaz zameen aur kafan chahe - ELIYAS SHAIKH |
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26th November 2008, 07:23 PM
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aapkii tang kheechne kii aadat abhii bhii gayi nahi.... raha sawal aapkii daad ka to wo mujhe dil se kabool hai aap bhii apna khyaal rakhiyega shukriya dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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27th November 2008, 06:11 PM
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merii shayrii ko itna maan dene ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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27th November 2008, 06:43 PM
Dard jo uth raha hai use main kya naam doon
Wo khud hi to mujhe begana bana gaye haiN Ajeeb sii khamoshii hai mere in Labo.n par dil ka haal mere aansoo deekha gaye haiN bahut khub dilipje...........kuch waqt ke baad hi sahin..aap yaha ab dikhte to hain......yunhi is mehfil ki ronak badhate rahe............... mausam Jaane kya samjhi main useN Faasla nazar aaya....Kuch kadmon ke saath se |
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1st December 2008, 04:46 PM
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hummmmm sabse ahle to aaka bahut bahut shukriyaa ise pasand karne ke liye. raha sawal mayusii se door rahane ka to ek sher kahta hoon. Andhere jis aangan ki taqdeer hain ujala jugnuon ka kya rang layega toonth sii ho gayi jindgii abto ko.nplon ka khyal ab kahan se aayega......... apna khyal rakhna... dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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1st December 2008, 04:48 PM
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ab aapko kya batayen lamha ji ki kisi ki yadon ka toofaan kya kya rang lata hai... wo to bus ......................... aapko sher pasand aaye. aapka bahut bahut shukriya ese hi sath dete rahiyega shukriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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2nd December 2008, 06:44 PM
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sahi kaha aapne inse kaise bhala nizat mile.. aap bhii apna khyal rakhiyega shurkiaya dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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2nd December 2008, 06:45 PM
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shukriyaa daad dene ke liye ese hi sath nibhate rahna mere dost shukriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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2nd December 2008, 06:46 PM
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main to dikhaayii dene laga per aap kahan hain sath dene ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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2nd January 2009, 03:09 PM
Namaskaar dilip bhai,
Aapka doosra sher haasil-e-ghazal raha, bahut kareeb se guzra dil ke ye, baaNki sher uski barabari nahin kar paaye isiliye ghazal thodi feeNki ho chali, par us ek sher ne fir v samaa baandh diya...!! umeed karta huN aage jald hin aapko padhne ke aur v mauke mileNge...!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ http://alfaaz-e-taish.blogspot.in/ Ishq hota tha, ishq karte haiN, Vo zamana tha, ye zamana hai... ----Taish ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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5th January 2009, 10:36 AM
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namaskaar main aapki baat se shahmat hoon. gazal ka jo doosra sher hai poori gazal ki rooprekha hi gazal per bani hai.. gazal ka khyaal hi is sher se aaya. to gazal likhne ki koshish maine isii sher se kii hai... isii karan ho sakta hai gazal main bo baat nahi jo us sher main hai... mujhe bhii wo sher khasa pasand hai.... aapne sath diya accha laga ese hi sath dete rahiyega// shukriyaa dilip " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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SDC par aapki kami hai Dilip Bhai |
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SDC par aapki kami hai Dilip Bhai -
4th August 2015, 09:30 AM
Dilip bhai....aaj aapki yeh gazal pad rhi thi to socha kyun na esko highlight kiya jaaye, taaki baaki member bhi aapko pad sakeN.
.....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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5th August 2015, 09:50 AM
bahut hi khoob likhaa hai Dilip bhai... hame acchaa lagaa apko padhnaa.. likhte rahiye
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22nd March 2016, 01:01 PM
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thnx Didi " Dilip " -Ek Adhoora khwab Dard bantne se ab darr lagta hai mere gamo ka usnane falsafa bana diya |
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22nd March 2016, 01:32 PM
Aapko padhna bahut achcha laga dilip ji.. .
Aate rahiyega aage bhi... Madhu.. अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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