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याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें -
21st June 2009, 09:08 AM
याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें
वो गीले शिकवे, वो सरगिरानी बातें
हर शख्स तो है शामील इस शोर में
मगर मुद्दत हुई मुझे सुने इंसानी बातें
जो भी होता है अच्छे के लिए होता है
ज़माने से सुनता आया ये नादानी बातें
मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें
फिर क्यों ना चीखूं, ना करूँ हाय हाय
कौन सुनता है अब यहाँ बेज़ुबानी बातें
चुप ही रहो तुम तो अच्छा है 'मायूस'
दीवाने हो तुम, और तुम्हारी दीवानी बातें
In Roman Hindi
yaad aati hai mujhe kai puraani baateN
vo gile shikwe, vo sargiraani baateN
har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN
jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN
mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani baateN
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21st June 2009, 01:02 PM
har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN
jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN
chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani baateN
bohat khoob mayoos saheb...........
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
Nm
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21st June 2009, 01:11 PM
mayoos bhai....aapki nazm padhi....kuch purani baate mere zehn bhi taza ho aai...bahut khub likha hai aapne.......kuch sher nazm ke bahut ache lage...aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye.....humse milty rahiye.....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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22nd June 2009, 07:33 PM
Thanks Zainy and Naresh................................
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22nd June 2009, 07:37 PM
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Originally Posted by m.mayoos
याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें
वो गीले शिकवे, वो सरगिरानी बातें
हर शख्स तो है शामील इस शोर में
मगर मुद्दत हुई मुझे सुने इंसानी बातें
जो भी होता है अच्छे के लिए होता है
ज़माने से सुनता आया ये नादानी बातें
मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें
फिर क्यों ना चीखूं, ना करूँ हाय हाय
कौन सुनता है अब यहाँ बेज़ुबानी बातें
चुप ही रहो तुम तो अच्छा है 'मायूस'
दीवाने हो तुम, और तुम्हारी दीवानी बातें
In Roman Hindi
yaad aati hai mujhe kai puraani baateN
vo gile shikwe, vo sargiraani baateN
har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN
jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN
mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani baateN
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Mayoos ji,
I have liked most of d stuff u have posted here..but dis one did not touch me..ho sakta hai aapse maY bahot zyaada ummid rakhta hun.. ek sher acha hai:
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
regards,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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22nd June 2009, 07:47 PM
Thanks Pradhyuman for your feedback. Normally I write when the thoughts come to my mind and finish the stuff in about 30 minutes. Sometimes I just like to play with words when I write. Not too much serious thinking going around in the background for me, so obviously many of my writings would suffer. But I am not getting paid for it , so it is just pure fun - as long as it lasts. But it comes as a pleasant surprise to me when people like some of what I write and that encourages me to write more. I appreciate what you write yourself, so I consider your f/b important.
regards
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Mayoos ji,
I have liked most of d stuff u have posted here..but dis one did not touch me..ho sakta hai aapse maY bahot zyaada ummid rakhta hun.. ek sher acha hai:
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
regards,
Pradhyuman
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22nd June 2009, 07:56 PM
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Originally Posted by m.mayoos
Thanks Pradhyuman for your feedback. Normally I write when the thoughts come to my mind and finish the stuff in about 30 minutes. Sometimes I just like to play with words when I write. Not too much serious thinking going around in the background for me, so obviously many of my writings would suffer. But I am not getting paid for it , so it is just pure fun - as long as it lasts. But it comes as a pleasant surprise to me when people like some of what I write and that encourages me to write more. I appreciate what you write yourself, so I consider your f/b important.
regards
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not getting paid for it..dats a master stroke..
i m thinkin of gettn my material copyrighted atleast...hu knws.. i mite find a buyer in u oneday..given d fact dat u appreciate all dat i write
Colors of desire on the canvass of life.. I paint my dreams with a brush of conviction...
my suggestion is play nd all is ok..but u shld b convinced bout ur thots nd all dat u write..it shld nt be people-driven (i mean not if people like it..but r u convinced???)..but den u can conveniently ignore my suggestions..i m no great writer myself..
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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22nd June 2009, 08:06 PM
If i had the money, i would buy ur stuff
i just started writing 2 months back. i don't know urdu (as u can very well make out), though i have learnt to read and write urdu in last couple of months. but still i do not know meaning of about 99.99% of urdu words. i am having fun most of the time with my life, nothing depressing going around here
i never was a poet, never will be. but still wanted to put down my thoughts somewhere (maybe because i thought my way of thinking was a bit different ). and obviously my thoughts are mine alone i.e. not people driven else they would not be mine at all.
I do not paint my dreams, I just splash around the colors and hope the result would come out right, if they don't - I still have more colors
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not getting paid for it..dats a master stroke..
i m thinkin of gettn my material copyrighted atleast...hu knws.. i mite find a buyer in u oneday..given d fact dat u appreciate all dat i write
Colors of desire on the canvass of life.. I paint my dreams with a brush of conviction...
my suggestion is play nd all is ok..but u shld b convinced bout ur thots nd all dat u write..it shld nt be people-driven (i mean not if people like it..but r u convinced???)..but den u can conveniently ignore my suggestions..i m no great writer myself..
Pradhyuman
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23rd June 2009, 11:50 AM
Hello Mayoos G.
Bahut hi acchhe ehsaas lage hain aapke.
Umeed hai ke aap aage bhi aise hi likhte rahe.
Khush rahiye hamesha.
Badnaseeb bhi nahi par mera naseeb bhi nahi Maana ke main ameer nahi par gareeb bhi nahi Dil ki gehraaiyon mein chhipaya hai jise Woh door bhi nahi mujhse par kareeb bhi nahi Chahta to hoon dena usko khushiyan saare jahan ki par mil jaayein unke gham "Jasdeep" itna khushnaseeb bhi nahi
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23rd June 2009, 08:42 PM
Thanks Jasdeep...............
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Hello Mayoos G.
Bahut hi acchhe ehsaas lage hain aapke.
Umeed hai ke aap aage bhi aise hi likhte rahe.
Khush rahiye hamesha.
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23rd June 2009, 09:41 PM
AadaaB mayoos sahab.......
aapki yeh gazal ne mere dil ko khangal dala........ kya baat hai bahut hi umda rahe sabhi sher aur ekdum naye se hai.........
Bhai aapke abtak ke sabhi post ahcche hai aur yeh bhi bahut achchi gazal hai.........
Mujhe yeh kuch sher to behad achche aur sachche lage......
Yunhi likhate rahiye Bhai
Khush rahiye.........
Duaon ke saath daad kabool kijiye.......
jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN
mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
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24th June 2009, 03:42 AM
thanks Khwahish...
kuch nayaa nahin likhaa aapne?
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AadaaB mayoos sahab.......
aapki yeh gazal ne mere dil ko khangal dala........ kya baat hai bahut hi umda rahe sabhi sher aur ekdum naye se hai.........
Bhai aapke abtak ke sabhi post ahcche hai aur yeh bhi bahut achchi gazal hai.........
Mujhe yeh kuch sher to behad achche aur sachche lage......
Yunhi likhate rahiye Bhai
Khush rahiye.........
Duaon ke saath daad kabool kijiye.......
jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN
mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN
fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
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24th June 2009, 12:51 PM
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If i had the money, i would buy ur stuff
i just started writing 2 months back. i don't know urdu (as u can very well make out), though i have learnt to read and write urdu in last couple of months. but still i do not know meaning of about 99.99% of urdu words. i am having fun most of the time with my life, nothing depressing going around here
i never was a poet, never will be. but still wanted to put down my thoughts somewhere (maybe because i thought my way of thinking was a bit different ). and obviously my thoughts are mine alone i.e. not people driven else they would not be mine at all.
I do not paint my dreams, I just splash around the colors and hope the result would come out right, if they don't - I still have more colors
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your way of thinkin is surely different...nd u r a gud poet...take my words..m never comfortable whn i praise someone...
dnt b humble nd modest now..i knw d alter ego of urs wants to scream nd say dat u r a poet nd an accomplished one at dat..
so my suggestion is stand on the roof top nd shout it out
god bless
cheers,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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25th June 2009, 07:52 PM
Thanks Pradhyuman for appreciating my writing. I consider you a very good writer so your praise means a lot more.
Who know, maybe I am using Shayri.com as a rooftop
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Originally Posted by Pradhyuman
your way of thinkin is surely different...nd u r a gud poet...take my words..m never comfortable whn i praise someone...
dnt b humble nd modest now..i knw d alter ego of urs wants to scream nd say dat u r a poet nd an accomplished one at dat..
so my suggestion is stand on the roof top nd shout it out
god bless
cheers,
Pradhyuman
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26th June 2009, 12:40 PM
Janaab,
Bahut hi khoobsoorat bayaani hai aapki... Is ghazal ki ravaani khaas kar bahut hi acchi lagi mujhe...
मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें
Aah... So many of us can relate to this... beautifully expressed...
Meri daad kubool kijiyega... likhte rahiye...apna khayal rakhiye...
Kab sochaa thha milegaa humsafar "Shweta" jaisaa
Lagta hai is baar "Pulkit", kismat teri bhi rang laayii hai
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12th October 2009, 09:06 PM
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Janaab,
Bahut hi khoobsoorat bayaani hai aapki... Is ghazal ki ravaani khaas kar bahut hi acchi lagi mujhe...
मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें
Aah... So many of us can relate to this... beautifully expressed...
Meri daad kubool kijiyega... likhte rahiye...apna khayal rakhiye...
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Thanks Pulkit.......... Sorry did not reply earlier, was looking at my old posts today and saw i had missed this one.
ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं
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