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याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें - 21st June 2009, 09:08 AM

याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें
वो गीले शिकवे, वो सरगिरानी बातें

हर शख्स तो है शामील इस शोर में
मगर मुद्दत हुई मुझे सुने इंसानी बातें

जो भी होता है अच्छे के लिए होता है
ज़माने से सुनता आया ये नादानी बातें

मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें

फिर क्यों ना चीखूं, ना करूँ हाय हाय
कौन सुनता है अब यहाँ बेज़ुबानी बातें

चुप ही रहो तुम तो अच्छा है 'मायूस'
दीवाने हो तुम, और तुम्हारी दीवानी बातें


In Roman Hindi

yaad aati hai mujhe kai puraani baateN
vo gile shikwe, vo sargiraani
baateN

har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN

jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani
baateN

mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani
baateN

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN

chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani
baateN
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21st June 2009, 01:02 PM

har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN

jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani
baateN

chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani
baateN


bohat khoob mayoos saheb...........




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mayoos bhai....aapki nazm padhi....kuch purani baate mere zehn bhi taza ho aai...bahut khub likha hai aapne.......kuch sher nazm ke bahut ache lage...aise hi likhte rahiye....khush rahiye.....humse milty rahiye.....




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याद आती है मुझे कई पुरानी बातें
वो गीले शिकवे, वो सरगिरानी बातें

हर शख्स तो है शामील इस शोर में
मगर मुद्दत हुई मुझे सुने इंसानी बातें

जो भी होता है अच्छे के लिए होता है
ज़माने से सुनता आया ये नादानी बातें

मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें

फिर क्यों ना चीखूं, ना करूँ हाय हाय
कौन सुनता है अब यहाँ बेज़ुबानी बातें

चुप ही रहो तुम तो अच्छा है 'मायूस'
दीवाने हो तुम, और तुम्हारी दीवानी बातें


In Roman Hindi

yaad aati hai mujhe kai puraani baateN
vo gile shikwe, vo sargiraani
baateN

har shakhs to hai shaameel is shor mein
magar muddat hui mujhe sune insaani baateN

jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani
baateN

mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani
baateN

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN

chup hi raho tum to achchha hai 'mayoos'
deewane ho tum, aur tumhaari deewani
baateN
Mayoos ji,

I have liked most of d stuff u have posted here..but dis one did not touch me..ho sakta hai aapse maY bahot zyaada ummid rakhta hun.. ek sher acha hai:

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN


regards,
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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Thanks Pradhyuman for your feedback. Normally I write when the thoughts come to my mind and finish the stuff in about 30 minutes. Sometimes I just like to play with words when I write. Not too much serious thinking going around in the background for me, so obviously many of my writings would suffer. But I am not getting paid for it , so it is just pure fun - as long as it lasts. But it comes as a pleasant surprise to me when people like some of what I write and that encourages me to write more. I appreciate what you write yourself, so I consider your f/b important.

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Mayoos ji,

I have liked most of d stuff u have posted here..but dis one did not touch me..ho sakta hai aapse maY bahot zyaada ummid rakhta hun.. ek sher acha hai:

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN


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Thanks Pradhyuman for your feedback. Normally I write when the thoughts come to my mind and finish the stuff in about 30 minutes. Sometimes I just like to play with words when I write. Not too much serious thinking going around in the background for me, so obviously many of my writings would suffer. But I am not getting paid for it , so it is just pure fun - as long as it lasts. But it comes as a pleasant surprise to me when people like some of what I write and that encourages me to write more. I appreciate what you write yourself, so I consider your f/b important.

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not getting paid for it..dats a master stroke..

i m thinkin of gettn my material copyrighted atleast...hu knws.. i mite find a buyer in u oneday..given d fact dat u appreciate all dat i write

Colors of desire on the canvass of life.. I paint my dreams with a brush of conviction...

my suggestion is play nd all is ok..but u shld b convinced bout ur thots nd all dat u write..it shld nt be people-driven (i mean not if people like it..but r u convinced???)..but den u can conveniently ignore my suggestions..i m no great writer myself..

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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
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If i had the money, i would buy ur stuff
i just started writing 2 months back. i don't know urdu (as u can very well make out), though i have learnt to read and write urdu in last couple of months. but still i do not know meaning of about 99.99% of urdu words. i am having fun most of the time with my life, nothing depressing going around here
i never was a poet, never will be. but still wanted to put down my thoughts somewhere (maybe because i thought my way of thinking was a bit different ). and obviously my thoughts are mine alone i.e. not people driven else they would not be mine at all.

I do not paint my dreams, I just splash around the colors and hope the result would come out right, if they don't - I still have more colors


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not getting paid for it..dats a master stroke..

i m thinkin of gettn my material copyrighted atleast...hu knws.. i mite find a buyer in u oneday..given d fact dat u appreciate all dat i write

Colors of desire on the canvass of life.. I paint my dreams with a brush of conviction...

my suggestion is play nd all is ok..but u shld b convinced bout ur thots nd all dat u write..it shld nt be people-driven (i mean not if people like it..but r u convinced???)..but den u can conveniently ignore my suggestions..i m no great writer myself..

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Hello Mayoos G.

Bahut hi acchhe ehsaas lage hain aapke.
Umeed hai ke aap aage bhi aise hi likhte rahe.

Khush rahiye hamesha.



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Thanks Jasdeep...............

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Bahut hi acchhe ehsaas lage hain aapke.
Umeed hai ke aap aage bhi aise hi likhte rahe.

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AadaaB mayoos sahab.......

aapki yeh gazal ne mere dil ko khangal dala........ kya baat hai bahut hi umda rahe sabhi sher aur ekdum naye se hai.........

Bhai aapke abtak ke sabhi post ahcche hai aur yeh bhi bahut achchi gazal hai.........

Mujhe yeh kuch sher to behad achche aur sachche lage......

Yunhi likhate rahiye Bhai
Khush rahiye.........
Duaon ke saath daad kabool kijiye.......

jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN

mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
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thanks Khwahish...

kuch nayaa nahin likhaa aapne?

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AadaaB mayoos sahab.......

aapki yeh gazal ne mere dil ko khangal dala........ kya baat hai bahut hi umda rahe sabhi sher aur ekdum naye se hai.........

Bhai aapke abtak ke sabhi post ahcche hai aur yeh bhi bahut achchi gazal hai.........

Mujhe yeh kuch sher to behad achche aur sachche lage......

Yunhi likhate rahiye Bhai
Khush rahiye.........
Duaon ke saath daad kabool kijiye.......

jo bhi hotaa hai achchhe ke liye hotaa hai
zamaane se suntaa aayaa ye naadaani baateN

mayn jo chaahun vo khudaa ko ho namanzoor
mujhe samajh na aaye ye aasmaani baateN

fir kyon na cheekhun, na karun haay haay
kaun suntaa hai ab yahaan bezubaani baateN
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If i had the money, i would buy ur stuff
i just started writing 2 months back. i don't know urdu (as u can very well make out), though i have learnt to read and write urdu in last couple of months. but still i do not know meaning of about 99.99% of urdu words. i am having fun most of the time with my life, nothing depressing going around here
i never was a poet, never will be. but still wanted to put down my thoughts somewhere (maybe because i thought my way of thinking was a bit different ). and obviously my thoughts are mine alone i.e. not people driven else they would not be mine at all.

I do not paint my dreams, I just splash around the colors and hope the result would come out right, if they don't - I still have more colors
your way of thinkin is surely different...nd u r a gud poet...take my words..m never comfortable whn i praise someone...

dnt b humble nd modest now..i knw d alter ego of urs wants to scream nd say dat u r a poet nd an accomplished one at dat..

so my suggestion is stand on the roof top nd shout it out

god bless
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Thanks Pradhyuman for appreciating my writing. I consider you a very good writer so your praise means a lot more.

Who know, maybe I am using Shayri.com as a rooftop



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your way of thinkin is surely different...nd u r a gud poet...take my words..m never comfortable whn i praise someone...

dnt b humble nd modest now..i knw d alter ego of urs wants to scream nd say dat u r a poet nd an accomplished one at dat..

so my suggestion is stand on the roof top nd shout it out

god bless
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Janaab,

Bahut hi khoobsoorat bayaani hai aapki... Is ghazal ki ravaani khaas kar bahut hi acchi lagi mujhe...

मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें

Aah... So many of us can relate to this... beautifully expressed...

Meri daad kubool kijiyega... likhte rahiye...apna khayal rakhiye...


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Janaab,

Bahut hi khoobsoorat bayaani hai aapki... Is ghazal ki ravaani khaas kar bahut hi acchi lagi mujhe...

मैं जो चाहूं वो हो खुदा को नामंज़ूर
मुझे समझ ना आए ये आसमानी बातें
Aah... So many of us can relate to this... beautifully expressed...

Meri daad kubool kijiyega... likhte rahiye...apna khayal rakhiye...

Thanks Pulkit.......... Sorry did not reply earlier, was looking at my old posts today and saw i had missed this one.


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