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Sad Kise????? - 6th May 2004, 01:33 PM

hi everyone...i am coming here after a really long time...i have missed some extremely good shayris and now its simply impossible for me to reply everyone but i must say everyone here is tooooooooooo good and fab..i am not that good but i am trying to learn and as a part of my learning i have written something ..hope u all like it...



Dard ki tadap kisko samjhaaye;
zakhmon ki peedha kisko dikhlaaye;
armaan to saare toot gaye hain,
ab ummeedon ki raakh kisko pakdaaye?

Sapnon ki chubhan kisko samjhaaye;
aankhon ki nami kisko dikhlaaye;
vaade to saare toot gaye hain,
ab kasamon ke tukde kisko pakdaaye?

Kaash ke samjha hota pehle;
Kaash ke dekha hota pehle;
dil to sabhi ke toot gaye hain,
ab apne dil ki asthiyaan kahan jaake bahayein????


koshish ko hamari please nakarna mat.........gar pasand aaye to likhna zaroor ek khat....

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9th May 2004, 05:30 PM

dear shivani
very nice,keep it up.

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Smile hi - 10th May 2004, 08:53 PM

hi dev.....thanx a lot...i am glad u liked it....and u have also written a damn good poem...i just came to this place and read ur poem..its cool....bye 4 now...take care!....and ya...keep replying !


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hi shivani.......... - 11th May 2004, 10:16 AM

Dard ki tadap hamen samjhaaye;
zakhmon ki peedha hamen dikhlaaye;
armaan to saare toot gaye hain,
ab ummeedon ki raakh hamen pakdaaye dikhlao....

ur poem was very nice ...........keep it up.hoe u'll remain happy..take care


With luv........
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Smile hi - 11th May 2004, 08:04 PM

hi javedji....i just replied to ur fab sher...thanx a lot for appreciating...i hope u also remain happy always....bye 4 now!.....take care!


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Bahut khubh - 11th May 2004, 10:58 PM

Dear Shivani,
Hi its nice that even after long u came n ur entry itself so nice with such heart touchng nazm that u cant be learner it shows,gud keep it up.
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Smile hi - 19th May 2004, 08:27 PM

hello mukeshji.....thanx a lot u have really honoured me by saying that i cant b a learner ...thank u so much....but i will keep learning u know every body learns here...thanx once again...bye 4 now...take care


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