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' Raat Ko Aasmaan Ke Taare Dekh Lena ' Amanush ' -
5th September 2010, 08:39 PM
Aur kyaa dekhne ko baaqii hai
Aap se dil lagaa ke dekh liyaa Faiz Ahmed Faiz Ji Apni wafaa ke tukDon par mein pal raha hoon Tere saaluus ke kaDwe ghuNt nigal raha hoon Koshish baar baar houi aap ko badalne ke liye Kuch ban na paDa so khud ko badal raha hoon Paigaam aaya hai mehbuuba ka mahinon baad Dil kehta hai bahut khushi se ucchal raha hoon Aajkal ghusse main bhi khaana khaa leta hoon Gharwali kahe sHukr hai ki sambhal raha hoon Zanjeer-e-shaayri se bandhaa musawwir hoon Kaise kahuun teri iss mehfil se nikal raha hoon Kad o khaal par gumaan kar liya jawaani main LaaThi lekar ab kamar jhuka ke chal raha hoon Raat ko aasmaan ke taare dekh lena ‘Amanush ’ Ab dekho lo, shaam ke suraj sa dHal raha hoon Saaluus : Hypocrisy Musawwir : Artist  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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5th September 2010, 10:24 PM
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radhe radhe bahut khoob.....dil se daad.....likhte rahiye duaon ke saath Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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5th September 2010, 10:35 PM
anjeer-e-shaayri se bandhaa musawwir hoon
Kaise kahuun teri iss mehfil se nikal raha hoon Kad o khaal par gumaan kar liya jawaani main LaaThi lekar ab kamar jhuka ke chal raha hoon Raat ko aasmaan ke taare dekh lena ‘Amanush ’ Ab dekho lo, shaam ke suraj sa dHal raha hoon Very Impressive ......... Danny Bahi ! Bahut Khoob ! Sabhi Ashaar MeN Nayapan aur Taazgi Hai... Saath Hi Ek Naye Roop MeN Dikhaai Diye Aap Mujhe .... Very Nice Creation ... Dil se daad hazir hai....aise hi umdaa Qalaam ke saath aate rahen aage bhi ... khush rahen... DuaaoN Ke Saath....  YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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6th September 2010, 03:04 AM
Danny saheb yeh sher pasandeeda raha.......
Zanjeer-e-shaayri se bandhaa musawwir hoon Kaise kahuun teri iss mehfil se nikal raha hoon Lekin yeh 2 sher aapki shaksiyat ke mutabik nahi lage.... Paigaam aaya hai mehbuuba ka mahinon baad Dil kehta hai bahut khushi se ucchal raha hoon Aajkal ghusse main bhi khaana khaa leta hoon Gharwali kahe sHukr hai ki sambhal raha hoon Aur is misre me Gumaan lafz ne thoda pareshaan kiya......gumaan ke mayne hai.. gumaan - doubt/suspicion/distrust [n. mas. Persian] Shayed aap ghamand jaisa kuch kehne ki koshish kar rahe the.....aap khud wazahat kar dete to behtar hota misra samajh me nahi aaya. Ek baat aur musawwir ke mayne shayed Shaper ya Fashioner hai. Aur Artist ko Fankaar kehte hai. Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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6th September 2010, 05:00 AM
Danny Bhaiyaa AadaaB!
Kaise hai...... ? Ummid hai sakushal mangal hai...... Aur meri gustaqi se naraaz bhi nahi hoNge yehi ummid... Aapki kalaam padhi achchi lagi sabhi sher ek se badhker ek hai .... achchi koshish per dil se daad kabool kijiye...... Likhate rahiye...... Khush rahiye...... khuda Hafez..... 
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6th September 2010, 08:02 AM
Koshish baar baar houi aap ko badalne ke liye
Kuch ban na paDa so khud ko badal raha hoon Ji ... bhuut sahi kaha aapne ... sacchi baat ... nice creation ... dil se daad ! Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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8th September 2010, 02:56 AM
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Daad sar ankhon par...! Duaaon ke saath Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th September 2010, 03:46 AM
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Apna khayaal thik se rakheiN, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th September 2010, 04:20 AM
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Ummed karta houn ki aapko apne prashnon ka sahi uttar mila hai, Sajid Bhaai...! Jab bhi koyi shaNka ho to bejhijhak puuch lijiyegaa...! Accha lagta hai jab aap hamari shaayri itne gaur se paDHte heiN...! YuNhi aate raheiN aur prashna puuchte raheiN, ok...? Keep yourself well, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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8th September 2010, 05:40 AM
Hmmmmm Danny bhai yeh aapki mohabbat aur badappan hai ke aapne meri bato ka itni khoobsurti se jawab diya......waise aapne bohat mushkil sawaal pooch liya hai mujhse. Ab jawab to dena hi hai, agar mera jawab aapki naraazgi ka sabab banega to isme 100% meri nasamjhi hi wajah hogi.
Paigaam aaya hai mehbuuba ka mahinon baad Dil kehta hai bahut khushi se ucchal raha hoon Aap poori Ghazal ko dekhiye aur is sher ko dekhiye.........aisa lagta hai mano achanak biryani ke niwale me kali mirch ka dana aa gaya. Main aapko zati taur par to nahi jaanta aapki jo shaksiyat se main wabasta hu woh aapke kalam ke zariye hai........aur mujhe achanak yeh mehsoos hua arey yeh kya likh diya aapne. Aajkal ghusse main bhi khaana khaa leta hoon Gharwali kahe sHukr hai ki sambhal raha hoon Jaha tak is sher ki baat hai aapne ek msg zarur dena chaha hai, jaise pehle ladaiee hoti thi to khana peena hi badh ho jata tha ab kam se kam woh halaat to nahi hai, lekin phir yeh ek badi mamuli si baat lagi jise kaha gaya jabki Ghazal ek alag khoobsurat mood liye huye thi jise thoda sa bemaza kiya in do shero ne. Danny saheb aap yaqeen kare main kisi bhi member ka kalam ho pure dil se padhta hu, baki sab membaro me apne aapko sabse bada lailm samajh kar hi chalta hu. Lekin jo bhi kehta hu dil se kehta hu. Meri bato ka kabhi yeh maqsad nahi hota ke main kisi kalam ya shayer ki tauheen ka sabab banu. Aap mujhse lakh guna achche shayer hai aur aapse har guftugu mujhe kuch nayee seekh deti hai. Aapne Gumaan lafz ka bohat khoobi se saboot pesh kiya aur maine us famous gane ke bhi khoob maze liye......hahahahahahah. Lekin Pride meaning se abhi bhi mutmaeen nahi hua hai dil, ha Over Confidence kuch hadd tak theek lagta hai. Lekin yaha bhi meri zidd kahi jayegi agar main aapki daleel ko na manu qke aapne dictionary ka bhi wasta diya hai jo galat nahi ho sakta so the matter is closed for this word. Aur jaha tak Musawwir ke mane Artist hone ki baat hai to maine check karne ke baad hi apni baat kahi thi.....ya yu ho sakta hai maine waha check nahi kiya jaha iske mane Artist bhi hai. Jaha tak maine check kiya Fankaar ke mane Artist kahe gaye hai. Aapse baat karke bohat achcha laga, maine agar koi gustakhi ki ho to chota samajh kar maaf kar de. Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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19th September 2010, 04:57 PM
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Aur ye gustaqi waali baat kahaan se utpan houi...? Nothing as such result to me...! Aap ko kalaam accha lagaa so hum behad khush houe aur aapke daad sar ankhoN par...! Apna acchi tarah se khayaal rakhna, ok...? With blessings Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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19th September 2010, 06:26 PM
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path par kaante bahut hain tere par manjil par jaana too.ne dar na jatilata se jeewan ki isko saral banana too.ne pasat na hone paye honsle khud ka sahas khud hi juta le 
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20th September 2010, 05:57 PM
Koshish baar baar houi aap ko badalne ke liye
Kuch ban na paDa so khud ko badal raha hoon this one is tooooo good.............. Aajkal ghusse main bhi khaana khaa leta hoon Gharwali kahe sHukr hai ki sambhal raha hoon hahahaha...................... Bohat khoob Danny ji......keep writing......... Zainy PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya... Nm |
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5th November 2010, 07:25 PM
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Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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5th November 2010, 09:10 PM
Bohat khub danny ji bohat achi lagi apki paishkash yunhi likhte rahiyega
apne ander se pash pash hoon main zaaat hai aetbaar e zaaat nahin ab to main khud bhi apne saath nahin |
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6th November 2010, 01:01 AM
Aajkal ghusse main bhi khaana khaa leta hoon
Gharwali kahe sHukr hai ki sambhal raha hoon Very true.... Danny Boss, Very beautiful creation, as always.... Tareef k liye lafz nahi miltay jab aap ka likha kuch phadta hooN.... Aise hi mehfil roshan karte rahiye, DuaooN k saath ijaazat, tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di! kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad") |
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