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" रहम ज़रूरी है " ~~ " Reham zaruri hai " -
15th June 2010, 11:03 PM
मुश्किल है हर वक़्त ' रूबरू ऐ हक़ीकत ' रहना,
जीने के लिए कुछ वहम ज़रूरी हैं |
दुनिया है ज़ालिम ना देगी जीने,
' कूचा ऐ दिल ' में कुछ अहम् ज़रूरी है |
बेखौफ़ ना डर ' ताकत ऐ दुनिया ' से,
पर थोड़ा वालिद का सहम ज़रूरी है |
ना बन पत्थर इंसानियत के खातिर,
' अभिनव ' थोड़ा रहम ज़रूरी है |
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Mushkil hai har waqt ' Roobroo E Haqeekat ' rehna,
jeene ke liye kuch Veham zaruri hai.
Duniya hai zaalim na degi jeene,
' Koocha E Dil ' mein kuch Ahem zaruri hai.
Bekhauf na dar ' Taakat E Duniya ' se,
par thoda waalid ka Sehem zaruri hai.
Na ban Pathar insaaniyat ke khatir,
" ABHINAV " thoda Reham zaruri hai.
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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Bahot khoob -
15th June 2010, 11:12 PM
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Originally Posted by abhinav
मुश्किल है हर वक़्त ' रूबरू ऐ हक़ीकत ' रहना,
जीने के लिए कुछ वहम ज़रूरी हैं |
दुनिया है ज़ालिम ना देगी जीने,
' कूचा ऐ दिल ' में कुछ अहम् ज़रूरी है |
बेखौफ़ ना डर ' ताकत ऐ दुनिया ' से,
पर थोड़ा वालिद का सहम ज़रूरी है |
ना बन पत्थर इंसानियत के खातिर,
' अभिनव ' थोड़ा रहम ज़रूरी है |
English --
Mushkil hai har waqt ' Roobroo E Haqeekat ' rehna,
jeene ke liye kuch Veham zaruri hai.
Duniya hai zaalim na degi jeene,
' Koocha E Dil ' mein kuch Ahem zaruri hai.
Bekhauf na dar ' Taakat E Duniya ' se,
par thoda waalid ka Sehem zaruri hai.
Na ban Pathar insaaniyat ke khatir,
" ABHINAV " thoda Reham zaruri hai.
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Abinav ji bahot hi achchha likha hai aapne ... very nice. Aap yunhi likhate rahiye ..
uuummmm ... isme ek shabd hume samajh nahi aaya ..so sorry about it.... par what does "Sahem" means... ???
Bhagwaan ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe,
Aapki Dost: Gudia
Jay Ambe.
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Ek Aaina Jiski Tasveer Dhundhla Gai,
Ek Dil Jiski Dhadkan Ruksi Gai,
Ek Zindagi Jiski Manzil Ka Koi Pata Hi Nahi,
Ek Daaman Jahaan Se Khushiyaan Galti Se Bhi Guzarti Nahi.
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15th June 2010, 11:15 PM
bht khoob abhinav ji...shi kha aapne jeene ke liye kuch vehm jruri hai............aise hi likhte rhe aur khush rhen........
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15th June 2010, 11:43 PM
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Originally Posted by loveforgudia
Abinav ji bahot hi achchha likha hai aapne ... very nice. Aap yunhi likhate rahiye ..
uuummmm ... isme ek shabd hume samajh nahi aaya ..so sorry about it.... par what does "Sahem" means... ???
Bhagwaan ji aapko hammesha khush rakhe,
Aapki Dost: Gudia
Jay Ambe.
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gudiya ji bht acha laga aapka comment padh ke, aap jaise sarahne wale ho to likhne ka bhi jazbaa badhta hai !! aur " SAHEM " ka matlab hota hai " DARR "
Bekhauf na dar ' Taakat E Duniya ' se,
par thoda waalid ka Sehem zaruri hai.
Matlab " PITA JI KA DARR ZARURI HAI "
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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15th June 2010, 11:47 PM
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Originally Posted by loveleen
bht khoob abhinav ji...shi kha aapne jeene ke liye kuch vehm jruri hai............aise hi likhte rhe aur khush rhen........
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Shukriya loveleen ji !!
aap bhi aise hi honsla badhaate raho !!
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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16th June 2010, 12:31 AM
अभीनव आपकी रचना अच्छी है! और बहोत साची है! ह्मे अच्छी लगी! हम ने भी ऐसा कुछ लीखा था!
मेरी हर दुआ में ज़ीक्र उसका या ईलाही
गुबार ए गम ए दील का आह भरना ज़रूरी है!
Faisle taqdeer ke lakeere badal nahi sakti
Eh insaan teri uske aage hargiz chal nahi sakti
Aaj tu zameen par hai kal zameen mein hoga
Maut tujhe aani hai har roz tal nahi sakti
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16th June 2010, 01:04 AM
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Originally Posted by Parwaazz
अभीनव आपकी रचना अच्छी है! और बहोत साची है! ह्मे अच्छी लगी! हम ने भी ऐसा कुछ लीखा था!
मेरी हर दुआ में ज़ीक्र उसका या ईलाही
गुबार ए गम ए दील का आह भरना ज़रूरी है!
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parvaaz ji bht acha laga aapse sunkar !!
aur mujhe aapka likha bhi behad pasand aya !! shukriya !!
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
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16th June 2010, 01:45 AM
mujhe bhi parwaajj aur abhinav ji dono ka ek doosre ke lie likha bahot accha laga,khuda kasam bhot maza (swad,not cold drink) aya:
Choom loon main in likhne walon ke haath bazar sre,
magar chaar hath ikathe nahin choom sakta e pappu kya kare.
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16th June 2010, 04:16 PM
Quote:
Originally Posted by abhinav
मुश्किल है हर वक़्त ' रूबरू ऐ हक़ीकत ' रहना,
जीने के लिए कुछ वहम ज़रूरी हैं |
दुनिया है ज़ालिम ना देगी जीने,
' कूचा ऐ दिल ' में कुछ अहम् ज़रूरी है |
बेखौफ़ ना डर ' ताकत ऐ दुनिया ' से,
पर थोड़ा वालिद का सहम ज़रूरी है |
ना बन पत्थर इंसानियत के खातिर,
' अभिनव ' थोड़ा रहम ज़रूरी है |
English --
Mushkil hai har waqt ' Roobroo E Haqeekat ' rehna,
jeene ke liye kuch Veham zaruri hai.
Duniya hai zaalim na degi jeene,
' Koocha E Dil ' mein kuch Ahem zaruri hai.
Bekhauf na dar ' Taakat E Duniya ' se,
par thoda waalid ka Sehem zaruri hai.
Na ban Pathar insaaniyat ke khatir,
" ABHINAV " thoda Reham zaruri hai.
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Very true & nicely written........
God Bless You
"Life laughs at you when you are unhappy...
Life smiles at you when you are happy..
But,
Life salutes you when you make others happy!!"
# Feel The Difference #
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16th June 2010, 08:11 PM
Mujhe to sirf Matla sahi laga aur pasand aaya........keep writing.
Baki har sher har lihaz se galat hai...............agar aap khud thodi kare mehnat to galtiyaa.N aapko khud nazar aayegi.
Logho ki daad se kabhi aap confuse mat hona.........hamesha yeh koshish karna ke aapke kalam ki sahi islah ho aur aapko aapki galtiyaa.N batayee jaye wah wah karna to bohat aasan hai lekin isse aapki shayri ko nuksaan hi hoga fayda nahi.
Take care.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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17th June 2010, 10:02 AM
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Originally Posted by Ritu18525
Very true & nicely written........
God Bless You
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Shukriya Ritu ji !!
keep giving me ur valuable feed backs !!
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
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17th June 2010, 10:06 AM
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Mujhe to sirf Matla sahi laga aur pasand aaya........keep writing.
Baki har sher har lihaz se galat hai...............agar aap khud thodi kare mehnat to galtiyaa.N aapko khud nazar aayegi.
Logho ki daad se kabhi aap confuse mat hona.........hamesha yeh koshish karna ke aapke kalam ki sahi islah ho aur aapko aapki galtiyaa.N batayee jaye wah wah karna to bohat aasan hai lekin isse aapki shayri ko nuksaan hi hoga fayda nahi.
Take care.
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Ghayal ji aapne bilkul sahi kaha ke WAH WAH karna asaan hai !!
ummeed hai aap meri kalam ko aise hi sahi karte rahenge !!
par mujhe ek baat samajh nhi aayi ' Har sher galat kaise hota hai har lihaz se ? ye to likhne waale ki kalpana aur dil ki bhawna hoti hai .. jo ke likhne wale ko pata hota hai ki kitni sahi hai aur agar us bhawna ko koi samajh paye to kabhi kuch galat nhi lagta ! agar main galat hoon to marg darshan kijiye !! '
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
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18th June 2010, 01:43 AM
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Ghayal ji aapne bilkul sahi kaha ke WAH WAH karna asaan hai !!
ummeed hai aap meri kalam ko aise hi sahi karte rahenge !!
par mujhe ek baat samajh nhi aayi ' Har sher galat kaise hota hai har lihaz se ? ye to likhne waale ki kalpana aur dil ki bhawna hoti hai .. jo ke likhne wale ko pata hota hai ki kitni sahi hai aur agar us bhawna ko koi samajh paye to kabhi kuch galat nhi lagta ! agar main galat hoon to marg darshan kijiye !! '
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Abhinav saheb agar aapne seedhe seedhe poocha hota to shayed main koshish karta ke aapki kamiya aapko bata saku, lekin aapne saf taur par keh diya ke
"ye to likhne waale ki kalpana aur dil ki bhawna hoti hai .. jo ke likhne wale ko pata hota hai ki kitni sahi hai aur agar us bhawna ko koi samajh paye to kabhi kuch galat nhi lagta"
Aapki kalpana ko aur aapki bhavnao ko jo sahi lagta hai aap likhe main kaun hota hu aapki kalpana ke beech me aane wala.........plz keep writing and take care.
Jhoot kehdu yeh meri fitrat me nahi shamil
Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta...
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18th June 2010, 05:50 AM
Abhinav ji...............abhinav ji
kya kahuN..........................
aisi gazal par daad jaroori hai...........
keep it up ...............abhinav ji
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18th June 2010, 09:53 AM
मुश्किल है हर वक़्त ' रूबरू ऐ हक़ीकत ' रहना,
जीने के लिए कुछ वहम ज़रूरी हैं |
Its Too Good...........Abhinav Ji ! Koshish acchi hai......dil se daad ! aur bhi behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen...khush rahen...
apn khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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18th June 2010, 10:36 AM
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मुश्किल है हर वक़्त ' रूबरू ऐ हक़ीकत ' रहना,
जीने के लिए कुछ वहम ज़रूरी हैं |
Its Too Good...........Abhinav Ji ! Koshish acchi hai......dil se daad ! aur bhi behtar koshish ke saath aate rahen...khush rahen...
apn khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath....
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Shukriya Naresh ji daad dene ke liye !!
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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18th June 2010, 10:37 AM
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Originally Posted by rajinderseep
Abhinav ji...............abhinav ji
kya kahuN..........................
aisi gazal par daad jaroori hai...........
keep it up ...............abhinav ji
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seep sahib shukriya aapka .. .......
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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18th June 2010, 10:40 AM
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Abhinav saheb agar aapne seedhe seedhe poocha hota to shayed main koshish karta ke aapki kamiya aapko bata saku, lekin aapne saf taur par keh diya ke
"ye to likhne waale ki kalpana aur dil ki bhawna hoti hai .. jo ke likhne wale ko pata hota hai ki kitni sahi hai aur agar us bhawna ko koi samajh paye to kabhi kuch galat nhi lagta"
Aapki kalpana ko aur aapki bhavnao ko jo sahi lagta hai aap likhe main kaun hota hu aapki kalpana ke beech me aane wala.........plz keep writing and take care.
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Ghayal sahib mera kehne ka matlab vo nahi tha jo shayad aap samajh rahe ho !! beshak mujhe acha laga aapka mujhe sahi karna !! aur aap SDC ke member hone ke naate mere bhayi hue to is lihaaz se aap ka pura hak hai mujhe sahi krne ka !!
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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18th June 2010, 02:01 PM
abhinav ji ..namaskaar .. bahut achcha likha hai aapne.........
daad swikaar kijiye..
aapka dost......... prem anjana
anjana prem sab meri muskurahat se jalte hai, mai sabko hasata chala gaya. pasand thi jamane ko meri barbadi, mai unpe dil-o-jaan lutata chala gaya.
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18th June 2010, 09:45 PM
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abhinav ji ..namaskaar .. bahut achcha likha hai aapne.........
daad swikaar kijiye..
aapka dost......... prem anjana
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shukriyaa Prem ji ... ........
" Mushkil Bahut hai har waqt 'Rubru-e-Haqeeqat' rehna
Jeene ke liye kuch 'VEHAM' zaruri hain ! "
~ A B H I N A V ~
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