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27th February 2011, 04:40 PM
aadaab aur namaste!
ek saadaa ghazal aapke zauq e nazar!
tiraa ik mo.D tak hee saath degee ilmiyat,
wahaaN se aage teraa rahnumaa hai dil faqat!
muhabbat khel bachchoN kaa naheeN! lekin miyaaN!
bahut laazim hai ismeN bachchoN see maasoomiyat!
sitam koee karam, sholaa koee shabnam lage,
baDee taqdeer se miltee hai aisee kaifiyat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
ilaahee! kyaa tire dil meN thaa, jab toone kiyaa,
miree taqdeer ke saf'he pe apne dast'khat!
katar kar par kisee ne khol rakkhaa hoN qafas,
khushee kaise chiDhaatee hai mujhe? bas poochh mat!
nazar ke saamne hai, par nazar aatee naheeN!
koee saadaa libaas oDhe hue hai asliyat!
shukriya
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27th February 2011, 04:46 PM
Waah, Dheer Sahab...!
Kya khoob likhaa hai aapne...! Ghazal ka har lafz tareef-e-kaabil hai...!
Tah-e-dil se daad qabul kareiN aur yuNhi likhaa kareiN
Duaaon ke saath
Jeene ke liye mujhe ek sapna dedo
Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai
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27th February 2011, 04:50 PM
muhabbat khel bachchoN kaa naheeN! lekin miyaaN!
bahut laazim hai ismeN bachchoN see maasoomiyat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
katar kar par kisee ne khol rakkhaa hoN qafas,
khushee kaise chiDhaatee hai mujhe? bas poochh mat!
Dheer bhai aadaab,... aaj itne dino ke baad aapki taazatareen ghazal padhne ka naseeb mila mujhe.. poori ghazal hi kaabile tareef hai bhai, lekin jin sheroN ko kai baar padh gaya wo maine upar mention kiye hain... Meri mubarakbaad kubool kareN is ummdah peshkash ke liye.. likhte rahen.. khussh rahen..
shaad...
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27th February 2011, 07:33 PM
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aadaab aur namaste!
ek saadaa ghazal aapke zauq e nazar!
tiraa ik mo.D tak hee saath degee ilmiyat,
wahaaN se aage teraa rahnumaa hai dil faqat!
muhabbat khel bachchoN kaa naheeN! lekin miyaaN!
bahut laazim hai ismeN bachchoN see maasoomiyat!
sitam koee karam, sholaa koee shabnam lage,
baDee taqdeer se miltee hai aisee kaifiyat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
ilaahee! kyaa tire dil meN thaa, jab toone kiyaa,
miree taqdeer ke saf'he pe apne dast'khat!
katar kar par kisee ne khol rakkhaa hoN qafas,
khushee kaise chiDhaatee hai mujhe? bas poochh mat!
nazar ke saamne hai, par nazar aatee naheeN!
koee saadaa libaas oDhe hue hai asliyat!
shukriya
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Aadab..Dear Dheer Jee.. **Umeed Hain Aap Khayriyat Se Honge.. **Hamesha Se Aapko Parhti Aayi Huun..Aapko Parhkar Dilko Achchha Laga.. **Likhte Rahiyega Yuun.. **Dilki Gehraaion Kee Gehraaion Se Duwaaye..Dher Dher Saare Phuul..Shukriya Aapka.. **
*Aapni Parwaaz-e-Takhayyull Hain Zamane Se Juda
Jiss Jagah Koyi Na Pahuncha Wahaan Tak Pahunche
Main Samajhta Huun Harr Dil Mein Khuda Rehta Hain
Mera Paigam Mohabbat Hain Jaahan Tak Pahunche**
*~~~Ahsan Sherazi Jee~~~**
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28th February 2011, 04:16 PM
Dheer bhaiya:
Pranaam
aapko jab bhee paDhtaa huuN dil ko baDaa sukooN miltaa haii.. laa-jawaab andaaz-e-bayaa.n.. dil se daad !
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bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
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yeh Sher sab se zyaadaa'h pasand aaya !
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
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1st March 2011, 11:57 AM
ji bhaut khoob.................... Aate Rahiye
tiraa ik mo.D tak hee saath degee ilmiyat,
wahaaN se aage teraa rahnumaa hai dil faqat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
Radhika
Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye
Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye
Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse
Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye
E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com
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2nd March 2011, 06:13 AM
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Waah, Dheer Sahab...!
Kya khoob likhaa hai aapne...! Ghazal ka har lafz tareef-e-kaabil hai...!
Tah-e-dil se daad qabul kareiN aur yuNhi likhaa kareiN
Duaaon ke saath
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bahut shukriya Danny saHeb,
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2nd March 2011, 06:15 AM
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muhabbat khel bachchoN kaa naheeN! lekin miyaaN!
bahut laazim hai ismeN bachchoN see maasoomiyat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
katar kar par kisee ne khol rakkhaa hoN qafas,
khushee kaise chiDhaatee hai mujhe? bas poochh mat!
Dheer bhai aadaab,... aaj itne dino ke baad aapki taazatareen ghazal padhne ka naseeb mila mujhe.. poori ghazal hi kaabile tareef hai bhai, lekin jin sheroN ko kai baar padh gaya wo maine upar mention kiye hain... Meri mubarakbaad kubool kareN is ummdah peshkash ke liye.. likhte rahen.. khussh rahen..
shaad...
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Sameer bhai!
aadaab aur namaste!
ghazal kee pazeraayee ke liye behad shukriyaa. sun kar dili masarrat huee ke darj sheroN se aapne lutf uThaayaa aur baar baar nigaah e karam farmaaya.
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2nd March 2011, 06:17 AM
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Aadab..Dear Dheer Jee.. **Umeed Hain Aap Khayriyat Se Honge.. **Hamesha Se Aapko Parhti Aayi Huun..Aapko Parhkar Dilko Achchha Laga.. **Likhte Rahiyega Yuun.. **Dilki Gehraaion Kee Gehraaion Se Duwaaye..Dher Dher Saare Phuul..Shukriya Aapka.. **
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Shimul ji!
namaste!
aap site kii puraane membaraan men se ek hai. dekh kar khushee hotee hai ke aap se dost hamesha saath dete hai. himmat_afzaayee ke liye behad shukriya.
apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa!
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2nd March 2011, 06:19 AM
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Dheer bhaiya:
Pranaam
aapko jab bhee paDhtaa huuN dil ko baDaa sukooN miltaa haii.. laa-jawaab andaaz-e-bayaa.n.. dil se daad!
yeh Sher sab se zyaadaa'h pasand aaya !
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~Dhaval
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Dhaval,
namaste! kaise hoN dost! tumhe post par dekh kar woh kahte haiN nah "baaNchhe khil uThanaa" saa ho jaataa hai.
khush rahoN , aabaad rahoN!
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2nd March 2011, 06:20 AM
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ji bhaut khoob.................... Aate Rahiye
tiraa ik mo.D tak hee saath degee ilmiyat,
wahaaN se aage teraa rahnumaa hai dil faqat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
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dhanyavaad Radika ji!
apnaa khayaal rakhiyegaa.
Dheer
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2nd March 2011, 08:40 AM
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
Yeh bahut umdaa khayaal lagaa hume aapka ... Dheer Ji !
har leehaaz se asardaar rahi ghazal .. ek purkashish peshkash ... !
tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhte rahen aur aate rahen aage bhi ... !
khush rahen ... !
duaaoN ke saath ... !
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
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2nd March 2011, 09:45 AM
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aadaab aur namaste!
ek saadaa ghazal aapke zauq e nazar!
tiraa ik mo.D tak hee saath degee ilmiyat,
wahaaN se aage teraa rahnumaa hai dil faqat!
muhabbat khel bachchoN kaa naheeN! lekin miyaaN!
bahut laazim hai ismeN bachchoN see maasoomiyat!
sitam koee karam, sholaa koee shabnam lage,
baDee taqdeer se miltee hai aisee kaifiyat!
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
ilaahee! kyaa tire dil meN thaa, jab toone kiyaa,
miree taqdeer ke saf'he pe apne dast'khat!
katar kar par kisee ne khol rakkhaa hoN qafas,
khushee kaise chiDhaatee hai mujhe? bas poochh mat!
nazar ke saamne hai, par nazar aatee naheeN!
koee saadaa libaas oDhe hue hai asliyat!
shukriya
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dheer sahab...pahle daad kabool kijiye mera ,apke is kalaam ke liye...
is kalaam me ek ajab maasumiyat dikhaii di hai mujhe....innocence of unawareness.
aam taur par is tarah ka maasum ,pure kalaam wahi likh pata hai jisne shayri bus shuru ki ho.jab patthar rough hai usme dhaar hoti hai,ek edge hoti hai....dheere dheere vo pattar ragad kar chikna ho jata hai...ya yu kahiye ki polish aa jaati hai...to sundar aur chamakta to hai...magar vo dhaar nahi baki.
aap itne saal baad apne is kalaam me vo dhaar laaye hai...jo pure hai.
phir se daad
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2nd March 2011, 10:34 AM
bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
ilaahee! kyaa tire dil meN thaa, jab toone kiyaa,
miree taqdeer ke saf'he pe apne dast'khat!
Bohat khoob dheer ji..................
Zainy
PalkoN ki baand ko tod ke daaman pe aa gira
Ek aaNsu mere zabt ki tauheen kar gaya...
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4th March 2011, 07:58 PM
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bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
Yeh bahut umdaa khayaal lagaa hume aapka ... Dheer Ji !
har leehaaz se asardaar rahi ghazal .. ek purkashish peshkash ... !
tahe dil se daad hazir hai ... aise hi likhte rahen aur aate rahen aage bhi ... !
khush rahen ... !
duaaoN ke saath ... !
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bahut shukriyaa Naresh ji! insha_allah phir mulaaqat hogee.
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4th March 2011, 08:01 PM
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dheer sahab...pahle daad kabool kijiye mera ,apke is kalaam ke liye...
is kalaam me ek ajab maasumiyat dikhaii di hai mujhe....innocence of unawareness.
aam taur par is tarah ka maasum ,pure kalaam wahi likh pata hai jisne shayri bus shuru ki ho.jab patthar rough hai usme dhaar hoti hai,ek edge hoti hai....dheere dheere vo pattar ragad kar chikna ho jata hai...ya yu kahiye ki polish aa jaati hai...to sundar aur chamakta to hai...magar vo dhaar nahi baki.
aap itne saal baad apne is kalaam me vo dhaar laaye hai...jo pure hai.
phir se daad
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Zid saHeb! namaste!
aapkee daad sar aaNkhoN par. aapko kalaam pasand aayaa, paise wasool .
aapkaa khairandesh
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4th March 2011, 08:03 PM
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bhalee see baat kaa aisaa buraa maanaa koee,
wo din aur aaj kaa din hai! khabar aayee nah khat!
ilaahee! kyaa tire dil meN thaa, jab toone kiyaa,
miree taqdeer ke saf'he pe apne dast'khat!
Bohat khoob dheer ji..................
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shukriya zainy sahiba.
dua go
Dheer
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