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muskrana hi tha -
19th September 2008, 10:28 AM
dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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19th September 2008, 11:07 AM
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Originally Posted by vaishali
dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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bahut khoob vaishali ji......acche ehsaas hain....keep sharing..
zainy
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19th September 2008, 05:33 PM
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dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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Vaishali.....aapne bahut acche se apne dil ke ahsaas bayaan kiye haiN....vaise to sabhi sher acche lage, par last wale 2 sher bahut jayada acche lage, yoon hi likhti rahiye.
kush rahiye
duao.n ke saath
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.....Sunita Thakur.....
यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया
....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए...
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shukriya -
19th September 2008, 07:05 PM
shukriya aap ka zainy sahab aur sunita ji , jo aap ko mere ye sher bhi pasand aaye , ek shyar ke dil ki bat samjhne ke liye uske alfaz sun na jayda jaruri hai aisa mera manna hai , sunita ji aapne bilkul sahi kaha hai .
bahut khushi hui ki aapne meri ye peshkash bhi pasand ki .
Thanks
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19th September 2008, 08:14 PM
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Originally Posted by vaishali
dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna hi tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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vaishali jee !
behad khoobsorat ghazal likhi hai aapne !
padh ke bahhut achha laga !
matle ke doosre misre meiN kaafia milaane meiN kuch kasar rah gayi thi usse durust kiya gaya hai ! nazar kar lijiyega !
aise hi likhti rahiye
daad ke sath !
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19th September 2008, 09:42 PM
hiie vaishalii nice thots very appreciable nad heart touchyy so keep wrting...
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19th September 2008, 11:42 PM
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hiie vaishalii nice thots very appreciable nad heart touchyy so keep wrting...
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assalamu alaikum, mehreen mein aapki likhi gazal ka intizaar ker raha hu, ummedd hain, aap meri baat ka bura nahi manengi, or jald se jald aapki khudki likhi gazal humse sab se share karengi, mujhe aapki gazal ka intizaar rahenga,
TAHIR KKKHANN
FE AMAAN ALLAH
shayer mit jaate hain jahaa se magar unka qall fanaah nahi hota,
Tanhaai bhie tanha hoti hain magar,TAHIR tanha nahi hota................./
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21st September 2008, 02:09 AM
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Originally Posted by vaishali
dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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Vaishali ji,
Bahot din ke baad fir aapke Qalam padhne ko mila....achha laga .
Daad dilse kabool kijiye ......Younhi likhte rahiye .....
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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21st September 2008, 01:16 PM
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dil tuta,use tut hi jana tha
kasoor mera ,tujhe chahna tha
khud ko dard dene ka shauk hai
mujhe,ye zakham to khana hi tha
parayon se ummid kar rahe the hum
unhe to duniya main kho jana hi tha
kaise koi dabaye apne dil ke dard ko
banake ansoo use chalak jana hi tha
kisko fursat hai sune koi meri dastan
wo to ek fasana hai use chupana hi tha
shayad mit gaya khushi aur gum ka fasla
apne gum ke liye hume, muskrana hi tha.
...................................vaishali
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ahsas me bahut pakijgi hai achha laga padkar. pata nahi kiyu laga ki ye shayri apki jindgi ke kisi pahlu ka ek katra hai. apne isse itni shiddat se likha hai ki ise padkar mujhe ek apnapan sa laga. apki agli post ka intjar. best wishes keep writing.
dard ka dard se rishta bahut purana hai, isiliye apno me dard hi sirf begana hai.
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bahut khoob -
21st September 2008, 06:33 PM
vaishali ji aapne bahut achchha likha hai.
Chaand
Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.
- Chaand
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