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ghazal --bhool gaye -
12th January 2006, 01:59 PM
ek ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai....arbaab-e-bazm se iltemaas hai ke paRHeN...aur azaadana izhaar-e-khayaal farmayeN:
GHAZAL
ik aisa t'alluq-e-khaatir tha sab hosh ke saamaaN bhool gaye
bas zulf-e-pareshaN yaad rahi, ham jeb-o-garebaaN bhool gaye
(t'alluq-e-khaatir=faarsi aur urdu meiN dil ke t'alluq ko kahte haiN, jeb-o-garebaaN=robes)
umeed ka toofaN seene meiN aur lamha-e-rukhsat aankhoN meiN
kya sach hai, kya hai fareb-e-nazar sab ai shab-e-hijraaN bhool
gaye
(lamha-e-rukhsat=moment of parting, (unke) jaane ka ya bichhadne ka lamha, fareb-e-nazar=nazar ka dhoka, shab-e-hijraaN= shaam-e-judaai,)
tark-e-wafa ka woh lamha, woh gardish-e-dauraaN ka rukna
phir hum par jo kuchh guzri hai, hum ai gham-e-jaanaN bhool
gaye
(tark-e-wafa=bichhadna, gardish-e-dauraaN=duniya ka chalna)
sarsabz bahaaroN ki yaadeiN, shaadab zamane ki baateiN
yak laqt khizaaN jo aayi thi, hum rang-e-gulistaaN bhool gaye
sarsabz, =harabhara, green, shaadab=harabhara, khush haal,
yak laqt=suddenly)
t'ameer-e-nasheman bhi ai dil, ik kaavish-e-laahasil hi to hai
jo barq-e-ghazab thi sholafishaaN kya Daanish-e-nadaan bhool
gaye
(t'ameer-e-nasheman=nasheman banana, kaavish-e-laahasil=bekar koshish, fruitless effort, barq-e-ghazab=deadly,fearful lightning, sholafishaaN=, sholay barsaata hua, spewing fire, Daanish=intellect, wisdom,also taqallus here)
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Re: ghazal --bhool gaye -
12th January 2006, 03:31 PM
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Originally posted by Daanish_ Hyd
ek ghazal pesh-e-khidmat hai....arbaab-e-bazm se iltemaas hai ke paRHeN...aur azaadana izhaar-e-khayaal farmayeN:
GHAZAL
ik aisa t'alluq-e-khaatir tha sab hosh ke saamaaN bhool gaye
bas zulf-e-pareshaN yaad rahi, ham jeb-o-garebaaN bhool gaye
(t'alluq-e-khaatir=faarsi aur urdu meiN dil ke t'alluq ko kahte haiN, jeb-o-garebaaN=robes)
umeed ka toofaN seene meiN aur lamha-e-rukhsat aankhoN meiN
kya sach hai, kya hai fareb-e-nazar sab ai shab-e-hijraaN bhool
gaye
(lamha-e-rukhsat=moment of parting, (unke) jaane ka ya bichhadne ka lamha, fareb-e-nazar=nazar ka dhoka, shab-e-hijraaN= shaam-e-judaai,)
tark-e-wafa ka woh lamha, woh gardish-e-dauraaN ka rukna
phir hum par jo kuchh guzri hai, hum ai gham-e-jaanaN bhool
gaye
(tark-e-wafa=bichhadna, gardish-e-dauraaN=duniya ka chalna)
sarsabz bahaaroN ki yaadeiN, shaadab zamane ki baateiN
yak laqt khizaaN jo aayi thi, hum rang-e-gulistaaN bhool gaye
sarsabz, =harabhara, green, shaadab=harabhara, khush haal,
yak laqt=suddenly)
t'ameer-e-nasheman bhi ai dil, ik kaavish-e-laahasil hi to hai
jo barq-e-ghazab thi sholafishaaN kya Daanish-e-nadaan bhool
gaye
(t'ameer-e-nasheman=nasheman banana, kaavish-e-laahasil=bekar koshish, fruitless effort, barq-e-ghazab=deadly,fearful lightning, sholafishaaN=, sholay barsaata hua, spewing fire, Daanish=intellect, wisdom,also taqallus here)
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Bohat hi umda likha hai aapne
Jo bhi padhega use jaroor pasand aayegi
Sukriya
Diggaj Dave
Navard-e-ishq mein kya hua kya bataye hum
kabhi humne yu khud ko harata naa dekha
Kaise Samjhau Dil-e-hasarat-nasiib Ko Apne
K Sab Kuch Milta Nahi Chah Lene Se Ish Zamane Mein..... "Diggaj"
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12th January 2006, 05:26 PM
Bahut khoob Daanish saahab, aapki ye ghazal bhi bahut pasand aayi.
ik aisa t'alluq-e-khaatir tha sab hosh ke saamaaN bhool gaye
bas zulf-e-pareshaN yaad rahi, ham jeb-o-garebaaN bhool gaye
Waah..!
YooNhi likhte rahiyega..
Chaand
Sachh bolne ka hausla to, hum bhi rakhte haiN lekin
Anjaam sochkar, aksar khaamosh hi reh jaate haiN.
- Chaand
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12th January 2006, 06:48 PM
aapko kya padha hum to kalam uthana hi bhool gaye.danish sahab ek aur bahut hi umda kalaam pesh kiya hai aapne hum sabhi ke saamne padh kar behad khushi hui.umeed hai aap yunhi likhte rahenge aur hum jaise nausakhiye kuch seekh sakenge aapse.
GHAYAL
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12th January 2006, 07:06 PM
daanish ji apki gazal mujhe acchi lagi
haan urdu kam samajh aati hai per unka meaning aapne likkha us say kaafi madad milli padne mein... yu hin likhte rahiye or mehfil sajaate rahiye
dilli daad kabool kijiye
SHWETA
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai
uth jati hai kalam likhne ko
wo pyar deewana hota hai
kar deti hai haal-e-dil bayaan
wo kalaam shayraana hota hai
jab yaad karte hai kisi ko
wo waqt suhana hota hai...
~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
duniya mein kitna gam hai
apna gam phir bhi kam hai
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shukriya -
12th January 2006, 08:25 PM
aap sab ka bahut bahut shukrguzaar huN...umeed hai ke aap isi tarah apne hosla-afza kalmaath se nawazenge...haaN, jahaN koi nuqs ya kami nazar aaye zaroor tanqeed kijiye.
aap sab ka mamnoon-o-ehsaanmand huN
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13th January 2006, 02:37 AM
daanishji nuqs uthaana to duur ki baat rahi
is kalam pe hum alfaaz--e-tareef bhul gayee....
marane kii duaaye.n kyuu.N maa.Nguu.N jiine kii tamaannaa kaun kare
ye duniyaa ho yaa vo duniyaa ab Khvaahish-e-duniyaa kaun kare
jo aag lagaaii thii tum ne us ko to bujhaayaa ashko.n ne
jo ashko.n ke bha.Dakaaii hai us aag ko Tha.nDaa kaun kare
jab kashtii saabit-o-saalib thii, saahil kii tamannaa kisako thii
ab aisii shikastaa kashtii me.n saahil kii tamannaa kaun kare
duniyaa ne hame.n chho.Daa ai dil, ham chho.D na de kyo.n duniyaa ko
duniyaa ko samajh kar baiThe hai.n ab duniyaa duniyaa kaun kare
-Moen Ahsan Jazbi
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13th January 2006, 02:54 AM
uff.. one of the easiest flowing ghazal I have ever read!!
kamaal...
varinder
kyon zindagi ki raah mein akele chalta hai dost
chal waha chal jahan tere jaise aur bhi hai...
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shukriya -
13th January 2006, 09:38 AM
nawazish....
koshish jaari rakhunga
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13th January 2006, 08:35 PM
pahlay to varinder tumahra shukria... tumhari oongli pakad kar yaha tak aa gayi...
daanish,
lajawaab......
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Re: ghazal --bhool gaye -
13th January 2006, 08:52 PM
Janab Daanish Sahab
aadaab
Is mayari kavish se bazm ko nawaazne ka bohat shukria.
Sabse umda baat aapne ye ki ke mushkil alfaaz ke ma'ani bhi yahaN saath hi de diye takeh ahbaab is dil paziir Ghazal ka poora lutf le sakeN.
Aapki tamaam Ghazal bohat Khoobsoorat hai. Khusuusan maqtaa behad ziadah pasand aaya. Daad haazir hai.
Aate rahiye aur sunate rahiye
Khaaksaar
Praveen
raah meiN hi manziloN ka zikr mat chedo Praveen
manziloN ne sun liya toh aur woh badh jaayeNgi
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bahut,bahut shukriya -
13th January 2006, 10:07 PM
aap sab ka bahut bahut shukriya...........
isi tarah apne himmatafza taasurat se nawazte rahiye
khair andesh
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16th January 2006, 11:31 AM
bahoot khoob likha hai aapne..
Anant se bhi aage... itni si khwahish hai :)
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17th January 2006, 09:11 AM
shukriya Garima, zarranawazi ka,kalaam meiN koi khaas khoobi nahiN hai..........yeh sab aap logoN ka husn-e-nazar hai...
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20th January 2006, 11:32 AM
janab daanish saheb
behad khoobsurat kalam hai yeh aap ka.
In dilkash ahaar ne mujhe apne asaatidaa ki yaad dila di hai.
lafzi takraar aur behad pur asr alfaaz ne is ghazel ko shahkaar bana diya hai.
sab se ziayada khushi mujhe is baat ki hai ke aap ke is bazm mein aane is forum mein miyaari kalam ka izaafa ho gaa aur yahan aur behter likha aur parha jaaye gaa.
dua go hoon aap ki kaamiyaabiyon ke liye, khushiyon ke liye.
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20th January 2006, 09:13 PM
Tasleem janab
Musharraf Hussain saheb, aap ke in hoslaafza kalmaat ka behad shukrguzaar huN agarche ke in ka qata" mustahiq nahiN.
khaaksaar mubtadi aur nau amoz hai. aitaraaf-e-haqeeqat se gurez na karte hu'e aap ko ik baat batana chaahta huN,--yeh ke khaaknashin ki yeh pehli ghazal hai jo aaj se ek saal pehle hui.
haaN, rahi yahaN par kalaam ke mayaar ki baat, tau ek hi baat faqat zehan meiN aati hai ke yahaN asaatzaa ka bhi kalaam kam paRHa jaata hai... hamare ehbaab-e-bazm na jaane kyoN ravayaat se adamdilchaspi ka muzahera kar rahe haiN...
aur rahi hum logoN ki baat...tau hum khaak-e-paa-e-asaatzaa bhi nahiN....
ehsaanmand
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22nd January 2006, 01:35 PM
aadab,
hum,aap ki bazm main naye hai! lekin daad diye bagair nahi reh sakte......bahot khoob kikhaa hai....
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22nd January 2006, 05:14 PM
tasleem
zarra ki zarranawazi ka khaaksaar ehsaanmand hai.
Jamal-e-humnasheeN dar man asar kard
wagarna man hama khaakam ke hastam--Shaikh Saadi
(mere humnasheen ke jamal ne mujh par asar kiya/warna maiN tau khaak hi khaak huN jis ka bana hua thha)
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