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"Khamosh rahi KUDHA ki tarah" - 6th November 2006, 08:53 AM

es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


aapki dost


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6th November 2006, 09:09 AM

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


aapki dost


sister pranaam

aaj subha subha aapki ye peshka wakehi me dil ko chhu gayi
jaise ek tadapta hua dil apne ehsas ko bayan kar raha hai aisa laga mujhe is peshkas ko padhke

aap jaisa likhne me mujhe shayd bahot saal lag jayenge bas aapne jaise dil nikal ke rakh diya jo kisi ke liye tadap raha hai aaj aisa mehsus hua

bas yehi kahunga

dua karta hu main ke aaye khusiyan bahot jald,
pas aa jaye wo jise chaha hai aapne khuda ki tarha........

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bhut khub - 6th November 2006, 11:16 AM

sunita ji apki gazal ko maine hindi mein likhne ki gustakhi ki hai umeed hai app muaaf kar dogi or main kush kaant chhant bhee ki hai.....uske liye bhee muaffi chhahta hoon....

'ख़ामोश रही खुदा की तरह'

ज़िंदगी में कुछ ना था तन्हाईओं के सिवा,
ऐसे में उसका प्यार मिला एक दुआ की तरह

प्यार की ख़ुशबू से महका था दिल का चमन
वो सांसो में समाया था बहकी हवा की तरह .....

उसकी उम्मीद पे मैने ठुकरा दिया था सबको,
काश वो भी निभाता वफ़ा बा-वफ़ा की तरह .....

वो मेरा नही था पर था मुझे सबसे अज़ीज़
उसको चाहा था मैने अपने खुदा की तरह .......

राहे-मोहब्बत में वो अकेला छोड़ गया मुझे
कहता था जो पूजता हूँ तुझे खुदा की तरह .....

'सुनीता' को लाखो ग़म थमा दिए महबूब ने
मगर मैं ख़ामोश रही संग-ए-बू तां की तरह .....

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bhut pyari gazal kahi hai appne har ashaar bhut pyara bana hai parte waqt main kho sa gyaga appke lafzon me kitna dard hai appke kalaam me...mere hee kisi dard se chhehra milta sa lagaa appke bhee dard ka....meri dili daad kabool karna or yu hee likhti rehna or hume parne ka moka deti rehna....appke naye kalaam ke intzaar me....take care...........raj...........


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“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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didi bhut achio lagi apki gazal.
khuda ki tarah khamosh rahi wah kya baat hai.
sakhi ki daad kubul kare.
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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


aapki dost
usko chaha tha maine apne khuda ki tarah
kya baat hai didi kya likha hai aapne. ek ek sher ka ehsas bada pyara hai.
har sher apne aap main mukkamal hai ek gazal ki tarah. ...............
aapki is mukkmal gazal per meri badhai sweekar kare.n

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Hey Meri Soni Diiiiiiiiiii - 6th November 2006, 05:04 PM

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


aapki dost

pranaam di,

ek baat kahati hu ji...........HAYE!!!! DIL KADD KE LAYE GAI SONI DIDI DI SONI SHAYRI..........aji apka to har kalaam bahot hi pyaara banta hai lekin aap itna dard kyu likhti hai........ab dard likhne ki prerna mujhe aap hi se to milti hai.;waise di last ke sher me ek baat bahot achhi lagi ki..."thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…" ye line bahot pyaari lagi....di meri dil se daad kabuul kijiye ji.aur aap humesha khush rahiye bas............

grazie

aapki gudiya raani
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Aaap ki Gazal - 6th November 2006, 05:58 PM

Hello Sunita
Aap ki Gazal mujhee bahut achee lage aap ne jis andaaz ke saath ye gazal pesh ki hai mere dil ko isne choo liya hai. Is baat per mujhe apnee ye gazal yaad aa rahi hai
wo mujhe tanah choor gaya to yah yakeen hua,
koi shaksh zaroori nahi kisi ke liye.------------

or saath me ye shair bhi yaad aata hai jo ki hamara nahi hai

Laila majno ke hon kisse ya shiri faraht ki mahobat,
Zara se zurrat jo dikhate tumbhe to hambhi apna naam ker lete


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sunita di sabse pahele aap zahid ka salaam qubool karlijiye
waqai aap ne baot achhi aur umdah gazal pesh ki hai "likho to kuch ayesa likho ke kalam rone pe majboor ho jaye..har lafz mai wo dard payeda karo ki gazal banne pe majboor ho jaye" aapne shayad aaj kalam ko rula diya bahot hi achha hai.bahot achha.sach mai
   
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aaj subha subha aapki ye peshka wakehi me dil ko chhu gayi
jaise ek tadapta hua dil apne ehsas ko bayan kar raha hai aisa laga mujhe is peshkas ko padhke

aap jaisa likhne me mujhe shayd bahot saal lag jayenge bas aapne jaise dil nikal ke rakh diya jo kisi ke liye tadap raha hai aaj aisa mehsus hua

bas yehi kahunga

dua karta hu main ke aaye khusiyan bahot jald,
pas aa jaye wo jise chaha hai aapne khuda ki tarha........

apna kahayal rakhiyenga sister

khus rahiye hamesha

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sunita ji apki gazal ko maine hindi mein likhne ki gustakhi ki hai umeed hai app muaaf kar dogi or main kush kaant chhant bhee ki hai.....uske liye bhee muaffi chhahta hoon....

'ख़ामोश रही खुदा की तरह'

ज़िंदगी में कुछ ना था तन्हाईओं के सिवा,
ऐसे में उसका प्यार मिला एक दुआ की तरह

प्यार की ख़ुशबू से महका था दिल का चमन
वो सांसो में समाया था बहकी हवा की तरह .....

उसकी उम्मीद पे मैने ठुकरा दिया था सबको,
काश वो भी निभाता वफ़ा बा-वफ़ा की तरह .....

वो मेरा नही था पर था मुझे सबसे अज़ीज़
उसको चाहा था मैने अपने खुदा की तरह .......

राहे-मोहब्बत में वो अकेला छोड़ गया मुझे
कहता था जो पूजता हूँ तुझे खुदा की तरह .....

'सुनीता' को लाखो ग़म थमा दिए महबूब ने
मगर मैं ख़ामोश रही संग-ए-बू तां की तरह .....

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सुनीता वीरेंदर सिंघ
bhut pyari gazal kahi hai appne har ashaar bhut pyara bana hai parte waqt main kho sa gyaga appke lafzon me kitna dard hai appke kalaam me...mere hee kisi dard se chhehra milta sa lagaa appke bhee dard ka....meri dili daad kabool karna or yu hee likhti rehna or hume parne ka moka deti rehna....appke naye kalaam ke intzaar me....take care...........raj...........
Rajveer ji namaskaar........!

sabse phele aapko thanks kahna chahungi ki aapne meri gazal ko hindi mai.n translate kiya, aapna keemti samey nikaal kar. aur aapne meri gazal ko gaur se padkar kuch changes kiye, bahut bahut shukriya. yu saath detey rahiyega, to hum shayad kuch badiya likh sakeygey.

yu hi aatey rahiyega, thanks again.

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didi bhut achio lagi apki gazal.
khuda ki tarah khamosh rahi wah kya baat hai.
sakhi ki daad kubul kare.
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dear sakhi

mujhe padney aur pasand karne ke liye bahut bahut shukriya.

tumhari daad humey dil se kabool hai, yu aati rahna.

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aapki ghazal ka shirshak parhkar aaya tow ghazal ko uss-se bhi behtar paaya. Bahaut accha laga aapko, behtareen lafzon ka sangam hai yeh.

" 'Sunita' ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne / thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah….."


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helo sunita ji.....namaskaar....hope u wil fine...

sorry resp. dene me late ho gaye.....aap k kalaam to hamari daad se kahi.n unche hote hai...ham sochte hai...hamari daad kahi.n unki chamak ko feeka na kar de....waise bahut umda likha hai aisa lagta hai...puri zindgi ka nichor daal diya ho isme....i can understand.....but thora bura b laga jo aap use be-wafa ka naam de rahi hai.....do lines me kuchh kehna chhenge...samajhne ki koshis kijiyega pls...aur agar bura lage to maaf karna....

hamne tere liye sab gam jhele the...
e-jaan tumne ye kya keh diya...
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sabr-e-hayaat ki mallika ho tum...
be-wafa naam mujhko kyu de diya...

sorry sunita ji....shayed kuchh jyada tarafdaari kardi hamne unki
so pls...sorry...

aur dil se hamaari daad kabool kare...

ok bye...t.c...

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wah wah

kya baat hai

aap ne dili jazbaat(feelings) ko nichord kar usse nikli budon ko ghazal me sajaya hai.

dil ke qareeb se ho guzar ti hai eh ghazal ek thandi hawa ke jhonke ki tarah.
likhna jari rakhiye.

mer kalam bhi "shayri-e-ishq" aur "Ghazal section" men posted hain.
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well said sunita ji.kya khoob likha hai aapne.bahut acha laga.yunhin likhti rahen.
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kya baat hai didi kya likha hai aapne. ek ek sher ka ehsas bada pyara hai.
har sher apne aap main mukkamal hai ek gazal ki tarah. ...............
aapki is mukkmal gazal per meri badhai sweekar kare.n

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pranaam di,

ek baat kahati hu ji...........HAYE!!!! DIL KADD KE LAYE GAI SONI DIDI DI SONI SHAYRI..........aji apka to har kalaam bahot hi pyaara banta hai lekin aap itna dard kyu likhti hai........ab dard likhne ki prerna mujhe aap hi se to milti hai.;waise di last ke sher me ek baat bahot achhi lagi ki..."thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…" ye line bahot pyaari lagi....di meri dil se daad kabuul kijiye ji.aur aap humesha khush rahiye bas............

grazie

aapki gudiya raani
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eh meri gudiya rani,

tera punjabi mai.n likhna maar gaya mujhko. majja aa gaya padkar.

ab kaya kahu dard hai to likha jata hai, koshish karti hu ki na likhu par jab likhney lagti hu to dard ke sibha kuch likha nahi jata. koshish karungi ishq par bhi kuch likhu.

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Hello Sunita
Aap ki Gazal mujhee bahut achee lage aap ne jis andaaz ke saath ye gazal pesh ki hai mere dil ko isne choo liya hai. Is baat per mujhe apnee ye gazal yaad aa rahi hai
wo mujhe tanah choor gaya to yah yakeen hua,
koi shaksh zaroori nahi kisi ke liye.------------

or saath me ye shair bhi yaad aata hai jo ki hamara nahi hai

Laila majno ke hon kisse ya shiri faraht ki mahobat,
Zara se zurrat jo dikhate tumbhe to hambhi apna naam ker lete


Aap isee tarah likhete rahe or mujhe aap ke jawaab ka intezaar rahega

Aapka Dost Shaan

Shaan ji NamaskaaR....!

bahut kushi hue aapka reply padkar, aapka sher bhi bahut pasand aaya, yu hi aatey rahiye aur housla badatey rahiye.

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sunita di sabse pahele aap zahid ka salaam qubool karlijiye
waqai aap ne baot achhi aur umdah gazal pesh ki hai "likho to kuch ayesa likho ke kalam rone pe majboor ho jaye..har lafz mai wo dard payeda karo ki gazal banne pe majboor ho jaye" aapne shayad aaj kalam ko rula diya bahot hi achha hai.bahot achha.sach mai
Zahid bhai jaan namaskaaR....!
aji aapne to es tarah tareef ki hai ki mujhe aapne likhe par fakhar mahsoos hone lagga hai, bhai jaan yu hi saath detey rahna, meri post par aane ke liye aapka bahut bahut shukriya.

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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Sunita jii,

aap kii yeh Nazm achchhi hai.. par manzil abhii bohat duur hai,KoShiSh zaari raKhiye..aap ko mujh se kuchh bhii puuchna ho beShak puuch sakti haiN..

LiKhati raheN..

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aapki ghazal ka shirshak parhkar aaya tow ghazal ko uss-se bhi behtar paaya. Bahaut accha laga aapko, behtareen lafzon ka sangam hai yeh.

" 'Sunita' ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne / thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah….."


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aapko aapni post par dekh kar bahut accha lag raha hai, aap phele baar meri post par aaye hai.n, bahut bahut shukriya.

aapne meri gazal ko saraha, tahe-dil se shukargujar hoon, yu hi aatey rahna.

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helo sunita ji.....namaskaar....hope u wil fine...

sorry resp. dene me late ho gaye.....aap k kalaam to hamari daad se kahi.n unche hote hai...ham sochte hai...hamari daad kahi.n unki chamak ko feeka na kar de....waise bahut umda likha hai aisa lagta hai...puri zindgi ka nichor daal diya ho isme....i can understand.....but thora bura b laga jo aap use be-wafa ka naam de rahi hai.....do lines me kuchh kehna chhenge...samajhne ki koshis kijiyega pls...aur agar bura lage to maaf karna....

hamne tere liye sab gam jhele the...
e-jaan tumne ye kya keh diya...
duriya (bandishe) agar thi samaaj ki...
man se to door na tumko hamne kiya...
sabr-e-hayaat ki mallika ho tum...
be-wafa naam mujhko kyu de diya...

sorry sunita ji....shayed kuchh jyada tarafdaari kardi hamne unki
so pls...sorry...

aur dil se hamaari daad kabool kare...

ok bye...t.c...

urs

dost, sorry ki koi baat nahi, tum aaye to sahi. aur dekho kalaam ki kadar padney wallo se hoti hai, yeh unchey kalaam walo baat mujhe acchi nahi laggi. aur aapke aane se es mai.n char chand lagtey hai.n, feeka nahi hota. samji kuch....

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wah wah

kya baat hai

aap ne dili jazbaat(feelings) ko nichord kar usse nikli budon ko ghazal me sajaya hai.

dil ke qareeb se ho guzar ti hai eh ghazal ek thandi hawa ke jhonke ki tarah.
likhna jari rakhiye.

mer kalam bhi "shayri-e-ishq" aur "Ghazal section" men posted hain.
unhen zaroor padhen aur apni daad se nawazan.

aap ka dost
mujeeb parwaaz.
parwaaz ji namaskaaR...!

aapka housla afjaei karne ka tareeka humey bahut pasand aaya.

dost agar aap sab yu hi saath dengey to hum hamesha likhtey rahengey. humne aapki ek-do post padi hai.n bahut acchi laggi thi.

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aap kii yeh Nazm achchhi hai.. par manzil abhii bohat duur hai,KoShiSh zaari raKhiye..aap ko mujh se kuchh bhii puuchna ho beShak puuch sakti haiN..

LiKhati raheN..

Mayank

Mayank ji NamaskaaR...!

aapko meri nazam aachi laggi, bahut kushi hue yeh padkar. aap yu hi housla detey rahey to hamari koshish bhi jarri reheygi. thanks jo aapne mujhe etna samja ki aapse kuch bhi pooch sakti hoon. to jaroor poochungi, jab bhi sawaal hua. shukriya, aapka jaha aana bahut accha lagga.

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khuda hafiz.........
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Sunita ji Adab

kesi hain? apki ye betreen peshkash mujhe behad pasand ayi he apke kalam har sher apne ap main mukammal he wese to apke sare hi kalam behtreen hi hote hain magar mujhe ye kalam behad achha laga iske liye dad pesh he qubool farmayeN.

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


kya baat he sunita ji apke is sher ne to ghayal hi kar diya really amaizing

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Sunita ji Adab

kesi hain? apki ye betreen peshkash mujhe behad pasand ayi he apke kalam har sher apne ap main mukammal he wese to apke sare hi kalam behtreen hi hote hain magar mujhe ye kalam behad achha laga iske liye dad pesh he qubool farmayeN.

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


kya baat he sunita ji apke is sher ne to ghayal hi kar diya really amaizing

keep writing
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rubeena ji shukriya, aap jaha aaye aur hamari yeh gazal paddi, vaise bahut dino baad aana hua aapka, kaha busy rahti hai.n aap

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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aapki gazal bahut achi hai, kya kahu bas dil ko chu gayi


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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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Really, Sunita Ji...! It's very beautiful ! Aap ne dard ko bahut hi khubsurat banaaya hai...! Apne ehsaason ko aap ne iss tarah piroyaa hai ki lafz kam hai daad dene ke liye...!

Thanks for sharing



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aapki gazal bahut achi hai, kya kahu bas dil ko chu gayi
Rajni ji namaskaaR....!

aapko kuch kahne ki jaroorat nahi hai, aapko jaha dekh kar hamara bhi dil kush ho gaya.

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Really, Sunita Ji...! It's very beautiful ! Aap ne dard ko bahut hi khubsurat banaaya hai...! Apne ehsaason ko aap ne iss tarah piroyaa hai ki lafz kam hai daad dene ke liye...!

Thanks for sharing


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aap phele baar meri post par aaye hai.n bahut accha lag raha hai. aapne muje padda, saraha aur housla afjaei ki, aapka tahe-dil se shukriya adda karti hoon. yu hi saath banaye rakhna.

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


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namskar sunita ji
aapki gazal bahut achi lagi...
Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…
sach me shayd log aisi baat kar dete hai jo niba nahi sakte..
aur ek sher kehna chugi
MAINE DEKHA HAI WAHI KARTE HAI RUSWA ISKO,
JO SARE WAZAM MOHHBAT KO KHUD KEHTE HAI...
RAJNI........


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Hi Sunita ji

kesi hai aap ? hamesha ki terh ek hi sewal aaj bhi aaj behot deeno baad aaya is liye aap ki aakhri kuch post padh nehi paaya abhi tak mager is kalaam ki bhi ek alag hi jageh benai hai aapne is dard ke sahar mey behot khub sunita ji aap ka ka likha lajewab hai tahe dil se daad kabul kijiye


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namskar sunita ji
aapki gazal bahut achi lagi...
Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…
sach me shayd log aisi baat kar dete hai jo niba nahi sakte..
aur ek sher kehna chugi
MAINE DEKHA HAI WAHI KARTE HAI RUSWA ISKO,
JO SARE WAZAM MOHHBAT KO KHUD KEHTE HAI...
RAJNI........
Rajni ji namaskaaR...!

meri gazal pasand karne ke liye mai.n tahe-dil se aapka shukriya adda karti hoon. aur jo aapne kaha maine highlight liya hai, bilkul sahi kaha hai aapne.
ek sher saath mai.n likh kar aapne char chad lagga diye meri gazal ko, yu hi aati rahiye.

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kesi hai aap ? hamesha ki terh ek hi sewal aaj bhi aaj behot deeno baad aaya is liye aap ki aakhri kuch post padh nehi paaya abhi tak mager is kalaam ki bhi ek alag hi jageh benai hai aapne is dard ke sahar mey behot khub sunita ji aap ka ka likha lajewab hai tahe dil se daad kabul kijiye


chalta hu take care

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benaam dost namaskaaR...!

bahut dino baad aapko jaha dekh kar accha lagga. aapne meri gazal ko padda, samja aur saraha, es ke liye tahe-dil se aapka shukriya adda karti hoon. yu hi aatey rahiye.

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22nd November 2006, 04:27 AM

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es bazm ke sabhi dosto ko mera namaskaaR.........!

bahut dino baad aaj phir aapse mukhatib hu, ek gazal aapki khidmat mai.n pesh karne ja rahi hu, umeed hai ki aap sab esko aapne keemti waqt ka kuch hissa jaroor dengey, aur mujhe aapne views jaroor dijiyega.



“Khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah”

Zindgi mai.N kuch na tha tanhayeo ke sibha,
Aise mai.N uska pyar milla tha ek dua ki tarah…..

Pyar ki kushboo se mehka tha dil ka chaman,
Woh saanso. mai.N samaya tha behki hawa ki tarah…..

Uski umeed par maine thukra diya tha sabko,
Kaash woh bhi nibhata waffa ba-waffa ki tarah…..

Woh mera nahi tha par tha mujhe sabse aziz,
Usko chaha tha maine aapne kudha ki tarah…..

Raahey-mohabat mai.n akela chhorr gaya mujko,
Jo kehta tha tujhe poojta hu aapne kudha ki tarah…..

“Sunita” ko lakho gum thama diye mahboob ne,
thi ensaaN par khamosh rahi kudha ki tarah…..


aapki dost
Di...

Aap nahi sudhar sakte... lol..

Itne dino baad kuch aapka likha padha hai maine.. aur phir vahi ek samandure + 4 baalti extra dukh...

Khair!!

Humesha ki tarah is baar bhi aapne bahut hi khoobsoorti se apne ehsaas pesh kiye hain.... hats offf!!!

Take Care di...

And always keep smiling..

Aapki..

~Priii



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Kaise chalka doo yeh aansoon, In mein bhi To rehTe ho Tum.."

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