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ikkaThey dil ke TukDey kar rahe haiN -
4th November 2014, 01:50 AM
ek Ghazal raqm hui hai yaaro, suno
ikkaThey dil ke TukDey kar rahe haiN yeh jurmaana wafaa ka bhar rahe haiN voh de gaali bhi to mujhko lage hai laboN se phool jaise jhaR rahe haiN jo kehte the laDeNgey aaNdhiiyoN se hawaa ki aahaaToN se dar rahe haiN jhukaa paaya na jis sar ko zamaana teri chauKhaT pe jaanaaN dhar rahe haiN nahiiN mujhko ijaazat bolney ki! to mujhse baat hi kyoN kar rahe haiN? puraane zakhm "maikash" bhar chale haiN ya phir ehsaas dil ke mar rahe haiN maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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4th November 2014, 08:21 AM
hameshaa hee lajwab ho aaj bhee padh ke bahut achhaa lagaa
kho gaye hain woh log ab un kee justzoo hai |
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4th November 2014, 02:04 PM
ikkaThey dil ke TukDey kar rahe haiN
yeh jurmaana wafaa ka bhar rahe haiN voh de gaali bhi to mujhko lage hai laboN se phool jaise jhaR rahe haiN jo kehte the laDeNgey aaNdhiiyoN se hawaa ki aahaaToN se dar rahe haiN jhukaa paaya na jis sar ko zamaana teri chauKhaT pe jaanaaN dhar rahe haiN nahiiN mujhko ijaazat bolney ki! to mujhse baat hi kyoN kar rahe haiN? puraane zakhm "maikash" bhar chale haiN ya phir ehsaas dil ke mar rahe haiN Maikash bhai mahfil loot li aapne..... aaj ki mahfil aapke naam huii.... kamaal ki ghazal huii hai is baar bhii....... likhte raho bhai ahfil ki shaann badhaate raho..... Shaad.... |
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4th November 2014, 06:56 PM
Waah, Maikash Ji, waah, kya khoob likhaa hai aapne...!
Hamare bhi daad qabool kareiN Maqta hameiN khaas pasand hai...! Apna khayaal rakheiN, ok...? DuaaoN ke saath  Haqeekat meri jaaN liye jaa rahi hai 
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4th November 2014, 07:44 PM
Maikash bhaiya
SSA ...pranaam Umdaah Ghazal aapki...dil mein Ghar kar gaye Ghazal ke har ik sher...khaas mujhe matla aur maqta behad pasand aaya Dil se daad.. Duaaon ke saath ijaazat..jsk Aapka Dhaval |
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4th November 2014, 08:47 PM
बहुत अच्छी ग़ज़ल .. आखिरी दो अशआर दिल में उतर गए
मौला आपकी कलम को और हुनर बख्शे दाद कुबूल फरमाएं अपना ख्याल रखें |
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4th November 2014, 10:18 PM
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aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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5th November 2014, 02:15 AM
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bohat shukriya aapka bhai , yooN hi saath banaaye rakhiyega is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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wah -
5th November 2014, 11:44 AM
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ab mujhe bewafa kahiye ya bawafa kahiye...(Raj) |
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5th November 2014, 03:14 PM
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Apne ehsaasoN se ru-b-ru hone ka mokka diya aapne...Shukriya .....Sunita Thakur..... यह कह कर मेरा दुश्मन मुझे हँसते हुए छोड़ गया ....के तेरे अपने ही बहुत हैं तुझे रुलाने के लिए... 
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5th November 2014, 05:55 PM
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khaaN miyaaN yeh to aapki husn-e-nazar hai jo hauNslaa baDhaati hai Ghazal ki paziraaii ke liye behadd mashkoor hooN aapka bhai rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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5th November 2014, 05:56 PM
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Namaste Danny bhai, aapse ek taveel arseyt be baad mukhaatib hote hue bohat khushi ho rahi hai aapki daad sar aaNkhoN par, duaaoN ke liye shukriya qabool kijiye aate raha kijiye rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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5th November 2014, 05:58 PM
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Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke liye shukriya Dhaval miyaaN daad ke liye shukriya alag se qabool farmaaiye rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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5th November 2014, 06:10 PM
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namaskaar kshitiz miyaaN, daad ke liye iNtehaayi shukurguzaar hooN aapka uupar waala aapko taNdrustiyaaN baKshe rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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5th November 2014, 06:11 PM
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rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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5th November 2014, 06:40 PM
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bohat shukriya Raj bhai aapne do-ek aitraaz uThaaye haiN to maiN unki wajaahat karne ki koshish kar raha hooN voh de gaali bhi to mujhko lage hai laboN se phool jaise jhaR rahe haiN Janaab gustaakhi maaf lafz voh hota hai ya.n wo hota hai? Agar voh hoga to ye bahu vachan hoga wo ek vachan hoga..agar voh hai to de nahi aiyega de.N aiyega..baaki aap khud dekhiye ga.. gustaakhi ki koi baat nahiiN hai bhai, sawaal-o-aitraaz aapka haq hai peshagii muaafi maaNgte hue arz kar raha hooN ke aapko koi Ghalatfehmii hui hai, "voh" or "wo" urdu meiN ek hi lafz hai...aapne shayad hindi ke "veh" shabd ko tasleem kar liya hai jiski wajah se aapko yeh theek nahiiN laga lafz-e-"voh" ki nisbat "de" or "deiN" se ban'ti agar "de" istemaal kareN to lehja ek hai aur agar "deiN" istemaal kareN to lehja duuja ho jaata hai, is meiN ek vachan aur bahuvachan ki guNzaayish nahiiN uTh sakti jo kehte the laDeNgey aaNdhiiyoN se hawaa ki aahaaToN se dar rahe haiN Doosra misra hawaa ki aahat hona chahiye ya phir hawaao.N ki aahaato.N hona chahiye...meri soch ke mutabik...share acha hai daad.. nahiiN bhai yahaaN bhi aapko mugaalta lagaa hai, hawaa ki "aahaT" aur "aahaTeiN" dono ho sakti hai ba-sharte usey kaise istemaal meiN laaya gaya hai, yahaaN seedhe seedhe bina lapeTey hue bartaa gaya hai aur mujhe is meiN koi aib nazar nahiiN aaya, ek misaal deta hooN : maiN uski aahaTein chun looN , maiN usko bol kar dekhuuN gali meiN kaun phirtaa hai, dareecha khol kar dekhuuN yahaaN bhi mujhe lagta hai aapko singular aur plural ki confusion ho gayi hai nahiiN mujhko ijaazat bolney ki! to mujhse baat hi kyoN kar rahe haiN? Pehle misre mei.N koii kamii hai isme 'gar' lafz kahin fit hona chahiye..nahi mujhko ijajat gar bolne kii... Raj bhai misra-e-oola meiN yahaaN lafz-e-"gar" kahiiN bhi aur kisi bhi tareeqey se fit nahiiN ho sakta, agar karte haiN to misra wazan se gir jaayega Ghazal pasaNd farmaane ke liye aapka mashkoor wa mamnoon hooN, aapse guzaarish hai ke yooN hi hauNsla badhaate rahiyega rab raakha maikash is tarhe teri yaad meiN har shaam dhaley hai goyaa koyi nagin si kalejey pe chaley hai maikash ............................... |
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6th November 2014, 12:25 AM
Bahut khoob gazal..maikash ji..har sher ek se badkar ek....daad kubool kijiye.
अर्ज मेरी एे खुदा क्या सुन सकेगा तू कभी आसमां को बस इसी इक आस में तकते रहे madhu.. |
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9th November 2014, 03:09 AM
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10th November 2014, 08:40 AM
Bahut hi umdha (bariya)ghazal lagi mujhe aapki maikash bhai ...Aap ka likha ek ek alfaz
dil pe asar karta hai ... MaiN aap se bahut inspire hota hun aur ek jazba dil me uth.tha hai ki kash kabhi maiN bhi aisa likh paunga Dil se daad kabool lareiN. Sanjay Sehgal khone Pane ki daur mein yun uljha hai har bashar , Isee kashmeqash mein kat raha Zindagee ka safar. |
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