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9th December 2009, 10:28 PM
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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10th December 2009, 06:04 AM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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Lamha,
Bahut khoob likha hai tumne...sare ash'aar hi khayal afreen haiN....
Mujhe be had pasand aayee aapki yeh Ghazal...
Aise hi iss mehfil ki shama roshan rakhiye aur Yuoo'n hi likhti rahiye......
Achha laga padh ke...
Vikram
'E Taahire Laahuti!!!
Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali
Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho
Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi....
vikramjethi@gmail.com
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10th December 2009, 09:28 AM
Lamha JI....Bahut umda rahi aapki yeh ghazal...sabhi sher bahut ache lage mujhe....tamam ghazal taarif ke kaabil bani hai....kisi ek sher ko khaas batana mushkil ho raha hai....phir bhi ek sher mere zehn se utar hi nahi raha.....
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
dil se daad hazir hai...kabul farmaaye....
yuhi likhte rahiye....
apna khayal rakhiyega...
duaaon ke saath....
YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN
Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ...
Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh
Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ...
---Naresh Mehra----
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10th December 2009, 09:29 AM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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accha Lga aPka haal-e-dil JaaN kr......
aisa lga jaise apne mera haaL-e-Dil byaaN kr dia ho
AApki GhazaL huMe kaaFI PasaNd aYi.....
aise hi Likhte rahiYe ga.......
Take care.....
Darbadar bhatakte phirte hain....
manzil nhi milti...
shayad ye hamari hi galtiyon ki sza hai....
pehle woh humein dhundte the...
ab wo humein nhi milti....
ApKA ApNA KuNaL...
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10th December 2009, 10:22 AM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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fantastic lamha Jee,................ hume aapki ghazal me jo ehsaas hai wo behad pasand aaye....wahhh maja gaya ....... umeed hai aage bhi mujhe apki aisi beautiful ghazals read karne ko milti rahengi............
next ghazal ke intezar me
(๏̯͡๏) (๏̯͡๏)
Hasratein dilo ki chupaye nahi chupti hai,
dard juba par bankar bayan sab karti hai.....
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Dard ki mehfil me ek sher hum bhi aarz kiya karte hai..
Na kisi se marham Na duaon ki Ummed kiya karte hai..
kayi chehre lekar log yaha jiya karte hai.......
hum in aasunao ko ek chehre ke liye peeya karte hai....
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10th December 2009, 12:26 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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bahut khoob lamha ji,
har sher bahut khoobsurat h
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10th December 2009, 03:07 PM
Lamha Dear.........
Sach mein bahut khoob ahsaasoN ko bayan kiya hai tumne, har ek ahsaas har ek sher tumhare bare mein bahut kuch batata chala gaya ke kya kya khayal aaye dil mein aur kya kya tumne socha........ Bahut achche dear.........
Keep it Up.............. Tumne mujhe Pm karke bulaya but main ab sharminda ho gaya ke meri khud hi is kalam per nazar kaise nahi gayi.......
Humare Dil mein koi khayal phir aisa aaya naa hota
Ae kash hum khud hi aajate tumne hume bulaya na hota.......
Khush raho,
Khuda Hafez.....
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10th December 2009, 09:13 PM
Lamha Jii,,
Yeh to acha hua aap ne thread pharne ko bula liya...
Warna humari nazaroon ko aik achi tehreer pharn'e ka moqa nahi mil pata.....
Kia kehne janab....
An out-standing creation,,
Keep up
write better and better,,
Regardz,,,
*hSn* : parStaar
tumhara shoq dekha to ghazal hum ne nazar kar di!
kabhi fursat meiN sun lena, bohat ashaar baqi haiN... ("Asad")
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10th December 2009, 09:51 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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Good one Lamha
Nice use of simile here
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
ता उम्र रहा इक रोज़-ए -मुकम्मल का इंतज़ार
किसी में शाम न मिली तो किसी में सहर नहीं
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11th December 2009, 11:03 AM
Hi Lamha,
how r u? hope u r doin good..pls find my comments below..gar kuch galat keh dun to mauf kar dena..
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
good one..d feelings r clearly visible..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
i dnt see a link between d first stanza nd d second one..
koi ilzaam? kaun se ilzaam ki baat karr rahe ho aap?
ek sirf tujko hi to ta-umr tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere bikhre dil ko tune thukraaya naa hota..
aap fark dekhiye.
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
use nahi aap ko maalum tha magar phir bhi....den it makes sense
mujhe maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko maine khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
lagi hai is present tense..dubaaya naa hota is past tense...lagi thi is more apt...
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
first line is beautiful..again i see no link betwn d lines..."bewafai ka yakeen" -> means what?
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, har pal saath jeene ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
good one..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
bahot khoob..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
"usse uske haal ke baad"..i did nt understand..can u let me knw wht it means?
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
very good.awesome..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
hmmm...aapne yeh likha tab aappe kya guzri hogi yeh to saaf ho raha hai aapki ghazal se..khush rahiye..likhte rahiye..god bless..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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gore ghareeban hai ye 'bismil', kyun tu naashaad nazar aata hai?
musht-e-khaak hai basi yahan, bata kahan fuwaad nazar aata hai?
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11th December 2009, 04:10 PM
lamha sweety,
bahot achhi koshish hai ....yun hi koshish karte rahna apne ehesaas ko sabse share karte rahna
DuaoN ke saath
Diya
Mohabbat ke baad mohabbat mumkin hai faraz.
Magar toot ke chahna sirf ek baar hota hai
Goodbye SDC
Diya
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13th December 2009, 12:48 PM
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Originally Posted by LAMHA
Doston,
aur ek adna si koshish kar rahi hu kuch likhne ki... umeed hai har baar ki tarah is baar bhi aap mere in ehsaason pe ek nazar zaroor dalenge.... aapki raay ki muntazir hu.....
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
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lamha sahiba...bahut accha likha hai..........
yun hi likhte rahiye...........
har sher accha laga........daad kabool kijiye
regards
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14th December 2009, 08:25 PM
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Lamha,
Bahut khoob likha hai tumne...sare ash'aar hi khayal afreen haiN....
Mujhe be had pasand aayee aapki yeh Ghazal...
Aise hi iss mehfil ki shama roshan rakhiye aur Yuoo'n hi likhti rahiye......
Achha laga padh ke...
Vikram
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Vikram,
aapka bahut bahut shukriya...aapko mere ye ehsaas pasand aaye ye mere liye bahut badi baat hai...aap yuhi apna saath barkaraar rakhiyega.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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16th December 2009, 07:13 PM
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Lamha JI....Bahut umda rahi aapki yeh ghazal...sabhi sher bahut ache lage mujhe....tamam ghazal taarif ke kaabil bani hai....kisi ek sher ko khaas batana mushkil ho raha hai....phir bhi ek sher mere zehn se utar hi nahi raha.....
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
dil se daad hazir hai...kabul farmaaye....
yuhi likhte rahiye....
apna khayal rakhiyega...
duaaon ke saath....
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Naresh ji,
aapke saath aur aapki Duaon ke liye aapka shukriya adaa karne ke liye lafz nahi mere pass.... aapne hamesha apna saath banaye rakha hai... aap jaise doston ke comments hi to hai jinse housla badhta hai is na-cheez ka... yuhi saath nibhate rahiyega...khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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18th December 2009, 11:19 AM
Lamha:
namaste!
aaj yahaaN aaya aur aapki ees koShiSh ko paRhaa.. bahot hi beHteriN aur umdaah rahiiN koShiSh aapki.. har Sher seedhe dil se nikle hoN! ees naGhz koShiSh par mere dil se DheroN saari daad aur duaaeN! yuuNhi bazm ko sajaate raheN aage bhee! liKhate raheN aise hi!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
~ Dhaval
*~*Dhaval*~*....Ek Ehsaas...
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18th December 2009, 07:48 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
ko段i tujhsaa ho to phir naam bhii tujhsaa rakhe....
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18th December 2009, 07:51 PM
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fantastic lamha Jee,................ hume aapki ghazal me jo ehsaas hai wo behad pasand aaye....wahhh maja gaya ....... umeed hai aage bhi mujhe apki aisi beautiful ghazals read karne ko milti rahengi............
next ghazal ke intezar me
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Hasrat ,
shukriya.... aapne meri itni hausla afzai ki uske liye mai tahe dil se aapki shukra guzaar hu... aap jaise doston ka saath raha to aisi koshishen baar baar karti rahungi...apna saath banaye rakhiyega.... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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18th December 2009, 07:53 PM
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bahut khoob lamha ji,
har sher bahut khoobsurat h
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Shipra,
aap ka bahut bahut shukriya ke aapne apna kimati waqt meri is adna si koshish ko diya... pasand karne ka shukriya.... keep coming dear.... god bless u....
"LAMHA"
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23rd December 2009, 07:47 PM
Sameer,
bahut bahut shukriya dear... yuhi apna saath hamesha banaye rakhna... khush raho....
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23rd December 2009, 07:49 PM
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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23rd December 2009, 07:51 PM
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Good one Lamha
Nice use of simile here
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
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aapka bahut bahut shukriya Mayoos ji... yuhi aate rahiyega ... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
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23rd December 2009, 07:57 PM
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Hi Lamha,
how r u? hope u r doin good..pls find my comments below..gar kuch galat keh dun to mauf kar dena..
ae kaash, teri yaad ne pal pal dil ko sataya naa hota,
ae kaash, humne tanhaiyon ka jahan aazmaya naa hota..
good one..d feelings r clearly visible..
ek sirf tujko hi to tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere sar koi ilzaam tumne lagaya naa hota..
i dnt see a link between d first stanza nd d second one..
koi ilzaam? kaun se ilzaam ki baat karr rahe ho aap?
ek sirf tujko hi to ta-umr tut ke chaha tha humne,
ae kaash, mere bikhre dil ko tune thukraaya naa hota..
aap fark dekhiye.
use maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko humne khaak banaya naa hota..
use nahi aap ko maalum tha magar phir bhi....den it makes sense
mujhe maloom tha uske chhute hi mai bikhar jaungi,
ae kaash, apni hasti ko maine khaak banaya naa hota..
teri yaadon ke samander me mauj uthne lagi hai,
ae kaash, apne dil ke jazeere ko usme dubaya naa hota..
lagi hai is present tense..dubaaya naa hota is past tense...lagi thi is more apt...
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, khud usne bewafai ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
first line is beautiful..again i see no link betwn d lines..."bewafai ka yakeen" -> means what?
mere dil ki kisi sadaa pe wo ruka hi kab tha,
ae kaash, har pal saath jeene ka yakeen dilaya naa hota..
uske ghum me har shab hum par kayamat si guzri,
ae kaash, itni shiddat se usne dil ko tadpaya naa hota..
good one..
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
bahot khoob..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota..
"usse uske haal ke baad"..i did nt understand..can u let me knw wht it means?
andhero me duba hai ab to meri umeed ka aaftaab,
ae kaash, humne muhabbat ka diya jalaya naa hota..
very good.awesome..
sunana tha use par raaz hi raha haal-e-dil mera "Lamha",
ae kaash, Khuda ne meri zindagi ka suraj bujhaya naa hota..
hmmm...aapne yeh likha tab aappe kya guzri hogi yeh to saaf ho raha hai aapki ghazal se..khush rahiye..likhte rahiye..god bless..
aapka dost,
Pradhyuman
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Pradhyuman,
aapke sare comments mere sar aankho par... aapne yaha jitni bhi baatein kahi hai mai un sab baaton se sehmat hu...mai aapki paarkhi nazar ki kaayal ho gayi... be-shaq aap bahut achche shayar ho... aapki raay se bahut kuch sikhne mila hai... umeed karti hu isitarah aap apni raay aur comments se meri madad karte rahenge... mere is adna si tehreer ko apna kimati waqt dene ka bahut bahut shukriya... mai aapki umeed par khari utarne ki puri koshish karungi... aap plz apna saath yuhi banaye rakhiyega.... khush rahiye......keep coming dear....
"LAMHA"
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25th December 2009, 04:02 PM
mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota
Kya baat hai bahut he umda.
khuda kare aap yuhi likhte rahe.
maana ki aap ki nazaro mein kuch nahi hai hum
par unse jakar puchiye jinhe hasil nahi hai hum
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28th December 2009, 07:27 PM
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lamha sweety,
bahot achhi koshish hai ....yun hi koshish karte rahna apne ehesaas ko sabse share karte rahna
DuaoN ke saath
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thanx a lot sweetie.... keep coming...take care.....
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28th December 2009, 07:28 PM
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lamha sahiba...bahut accha likha hai..........
yun hi likhte rahiye...........
har sher accha laga........daad kabool kijiye
regards
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Zidd,
aapki daad sar aankho par.... yuhi apna saath banaye rakhiyega... khush rahiye....
"LAMHA"
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28th December 2009, 07:30 PM
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Lamha:
namaste!
aaj yahaaN aaya aur aapki ees koShiSh ko paRhaa.. bahot hi beHteriN aur umdaah rahiiN koShiSh aapki.. har Sher seedhe dil se nikle hoN! ees naGhz koShiSh par mere dil se DheroN saari daad aur duaaeN! yuuNhi bazm ko sajaate raheN aage bhee! liKhate raheN aise hi!
KhuSh raheN... apnaa Khayaal raKheN
duaaoN ke saath ijaazat
aapka
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Bhaiyya,
aapka bahut bahut shukriya ... aap yaha aaye aur mera hausla badhaya ye mere liye bahut badi baat hai... apna saath aur pyaar yuhi banaye rakhiyega.......khush rahiye....
aapki bahen
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28th December 2009, 07:32 PM
Naaz,
kaisi ho tum yaar ?? kaha gayab ho gayi thi??... missed u sooooooo much... thanx for ur support....
ya i wasn't well... but i m ok now.... tum sunao?
keep coming sweetie.....take care dear....
"LAMHA"
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28th December 2009, 07:34 PM
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mere sirf ek sawaal pe uske sare lafz hi kho gaye,
ae kaash, uski khamoshi se humne jawaab paya naa hota..
ab ki baar kuch naa puch payi usse uske haal ke baad,
ae kaash, is takalluf se wo milne aaya naa hota
Kya baat hai bahut he umda.
khuda kare aap yuhi likhte rahe.
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Jinn,
aapka bahut bahut shukriya.... aap jaise doston ka yuhi saath raha to hum yuhi likhte rahenge.... khush rahiye.....
"LAMHA"
mujhko acchaa nahiiN lagtaa ko段i hamnaam teraa ,
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