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11th March 2012, 10:31 PM
Do pal ki zindagi mayn, kya roothnaa manaanaa, Jhapki jo palak daykho, guzra haye ik zamaanaa! Na poocho yaaro hamsay visl_o_hijar ki baatayn, Haye visl ayk naghmaa aur hijr ik fasaanaa! Hasb_o_nasab pay apnay, thaa naaz jinko kaltak, Mittee mayn mil chukay hayn,ab qabr haye thikaanaa! Yay zindageee safar haye, aasaan kabhee mushkil, Aasaan ko yaad rakhnaa, mushkil ko bhooljaanaa! Karnay say pahlay kuch bhee, Maan kay dil ki soancho, Khudgharz bankay hargiz, uskaa na dil dukhaanaa! Ahmad yay dunya walay baatayn badee karay hayn, Aasaan haye baat kahna, mushkil haye kar dikhaanaa! .................................................. .................................................. ......................................... Ahmad Hyderabadi |
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12th March 2012, 11:27 AM
Do pal ki zindagi mayn, kya roothnaa manaanaa, Jhapki jo palak daykho, guzra haye ik zamaanaa! Boht Khooob…… Oola Ziaada Pasand Aaya Na poocho yaaro hamsay visl_o_hijar ki baatayn, Haye visl ayk naghmaa aur hijr ik fasaanaa! Ahmad Sb…. Ye Sher BHi Acha Kaha Hai…. Magar Darust Lafz “Wasl” Hota Hai….. Wisl Nahi Hota…. Hasb_o_nasab pay apnay, thaa naaz jinko kaltak, Mittee mayn mil chukay hayn,ab qabr haye thikaanaa! Wah Wah Wah…Kia Kehnay..Boht KHoob Kaha…Daad Qabool Farmaiye Yay zindageee safar haye, aasaan kabhee mushkil, Aasaan ko yaad rakhnaa, mushkil ko bhool jaanaa! Hmmmm….. Karnay say pahlay kuch bhee, Maan kay dil ki soancho, Khudgharz bankay hargiz, uskaa na dil dukhaanaa! Akha Takhayyul Hai….. Daad Ahmad yay dunya walay baatayn badee karay hayn, Aasaan haye baat kahna, mushkil haye kar dikhaanaa! Wah Wah Maqta Ki Fikr BHi Achi Hai Or Andaaz Bhi Khoob Hai….. DAAD Janab AHMAD Sb…. Kafi Dino Baad Aap Ne Is Bazm Me Kuch Share Kia Hai…. Majmoi Taur Par Achi Ghazal Hui Hai…. Daad Qabool Farmaiye….. Likhtay Rahiye………. Khush Rahiye………… Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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12th March 2012, 03:25 PM
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Aasaan ko yaad rakhnaa, mushkil ko bhooljaanaa! Ahmad yay dunya walay baatayn badee karay hayn, Aasaan haye baat kahna, mushkil haye kar dikhaanaa! bahut khoob sher kahe hai ahmad sahab..... bahut khoob ..... bahut mutacir kiyaa .... zouk sahab ka lahjaa laga |
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12th March 2012, 07:32 PM
i m highly impressed.....................keep on
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13th March 2012, 09:55 AM
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Khushaamdeed! Aap ki aamad, purkhuloos islaah wa rehnumaayee wa nawaazish e daad ka tahay dil say shukriaa! Badee masarrat haasil huee aapko is bazmay khaaksaar mayn daykh! Ilteja haye aapsay yoonhee saath daytay rahayn aur apnay ilm ki roshnee say in andharay koanaon ko isee tarha raushan kertay rahayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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13th March 2012, 10:00 AM
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WAllah badee masarrat huee apki aamad par! Janab aapki daad tahay dil say qaboul haye laykin Janaab Zauq sahab kay kalaam ki shabahat ki baat keh aapnay hamayn sharmindaa kerdiaa! Yay aapki zarranawazee haye! Ilteja haye aap say yoonhee saath banaye rakhiye! Duagoh Ahmad |
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13th March 2012, 10:03 AM
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Khushaamdeed! Aap jaysay umdah shayar say aysay kalimaat sun dil baagn baagh ho gaya! Dili shukria aapki aamad wa nawaazish a daad ka! Ilteja haye aapsay yoonhee saath banaye rakhayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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13th March 2012, 10:28 AM
bahut khoobsoorat likha aapne... pd kar acha lga....
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14th March 2012, 06:10 PM
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23rd March 2012, 03:50 PM
bahat hi khubsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne
khas kar ye sher hume behat achha laga Na poocho yaaro hamsay visl_o_hijar ki baatayn, Haye visl ayk naghmaa aur hijr ik fasaanaa! :-ek bujhaa hua dhumil palak jhapakte hi jo aankh se hu'aa ojhal woh lauT kar nahiiN aayaa gaye dinoN ki taraH
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23rd March 2012, 06:05 PM
Yay zindageee safar haye, aasaan kabhee mushkil,
Aasaan ko yaad rakhnaa, mushkil ko bhooljaanaa! WaaH ! Ahmad Ji ! Kyaa Khoob Sher Nikaale HaiN ... Asar Angez ! Khoobsurat BayaaNi ... Umdaa Ghazal Huii Janaab ! Dilee Mubaaraqbaad !!!   YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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2nd April 2012, 09:32 AM
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Aapko ghazal pasand aayee jaankar dili khushee mehsoos huee. Bazm mayn tashreef laane aur daad inayat fermaanay ka buhat buhat shukriaa! Duagoh Ahmad |
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2nd April 2012, 09:36 AM
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Mehra saahab aapki aamad he kaafi haye khaaksaar k dil ko baagh baagh karnay kay liyay aur aapki daad wa haunslafzaai paaker aysa mahsoos hota haye ki koshish kaamyaab hogayee! Maazrat chaahoonga aapsay jo shukr adaa karnay mayn dayree hogayee! Bas ilteja haye aapsay kay yoon hee apna shafqat bhara saath banaaye rakhayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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2nd April 2012, 12:03 PM
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Hello.. Its really nice. Every line is so awesome.. specially Na poocho yaaro hamsay visl_o_hijar ki baatayn, Haye visl ayk naghmaa aur hijr ik fasaanaa! Hasb_o_nasab pay apnay, thaa naaz jinko kaltak, Mittee mayn mil chukay hayn,ab qabr haye thikaanaa! harf e taaza naii khushboo mein likha chahta hai baab ik aur mohabbat ka khula chahta hai- Parveen Shakir |
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2nd April 2012, 10:11 PM
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Assalamoalaikum Ahmad saab... takheer se bazm me dastak dene ke liye muaafi ka arzmand hoon.. aaj aapki ye ghazal padhkar yaqbayaq Muh se nikal gaya waahhh... bahot aala takhayyul, bahot rawaan dwaaan alfaaz, bahot uunchi parwaaz... naaz hota hai aap jaise shoraaoN ke sath bazm me waqt bitaaane pe.... bhai har ek sher taareef ke qaabil raha hai Masha Allah... magar ek sher zara dekh leyn.. Pahla misre me shayad typo ki wajah se bher se khaariz maloom hota hai... Yay zindageee safar haye, aasaan kabhee mushkil, Aasaan ko yaad rakhnaa, mushkil ko bhooljaanaa! ya to shayad ye misra yoon raha ho.. " Yay zindageee safar haye, aasaaN kabhee to mushkil" khair baaki ghazal ne to mahfil me chaar chaand laga diye hain, main ise "ghazal of the day" ke khitaab se bhi nawaaz deta gar ye mumkin hota aur mere bas me hota... Khair Allah kare Zore qalam aur bhi ziyaadah.. bas yoonhi likhte rahen... Shukriyaa... |
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3rd April 2012, 11:00 AM
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Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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3rd April 2012, 09:56 PM
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Shukriya buhat buhat for visiting and appreciating my effort. Dili khushee huyee jaanker! Thanks Again Ahmad |
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3rd April 2012, 10:10 PM
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Bhaee ismayn muafi ki koyee wajeh nazar nai aatee, apnaon say yay lafz achcha nahee! Aapki inaayat wa nawaazish nay khaaksaar ko ayk lamhay maghroor kerdiya laykin usee pal sharmindaa bhee, ki aap jaysa shaayar aysay kalimaat ik adnaa say kalam per bayaan ker raha haye. Rahee baat us shayr kee jisper aapnay raoshnee daalee, janaab mujhse ghalatee huee jo roman urdu mayn sahee terha say noon e ghunna denote nahee ker paayaa, ya'nee yay oola mayn Aasmaan(with Nuun e Ghunna as in Kaarwaan) haye aur Thaanee mayn Aaasmaan( with normal Nuun as in Ahsan)! Bas apni kaahaylee kay liye maazratkhwaah hoon! Ilteja haye aapsay yoonhee saath banaye rakhayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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3rd April 2012, 10:17 PM
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Khushaamdeed! I will take it personally... ya'nee kee aapnay mujhe kaha achchee makhlookh! Thank You so much! kyunkee iska koyee aur muaynay mayray kalaam ko suit nahee kerta! Ilteja haye aapsay yoonhee saath banaye rakhayn! Duagoh Ahmad |
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