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18th January 2012, 12:15 PM
mehfil-e-dard ko mera salaam, ek adna si koshish aapki nazar kar raha huN...apni rae se zaroor nawaaziyega...kahiN koi kami lage to bila jhijhak mujhe bata dijiyega...aapki rae ka muntazir....
aaj aaNkhoN se meri phir bah gaya ye namak haal dil ka mere saara kah gaya ye namak husn ke bin ishq ki auqaat kya hai bata muskura ke ishq ko phir kah gaya ye namak talkh hai meri zabaaN, maiN jaanta huN, zara jhooth ka chhoota shahad to rah gaya ye namak tha nahiN manzoor mujh ko harf tujh par koi aur lut'ta maiN raha, sab sah gaya ye namak chhoo ke saahil, haiN dafan ab, maujeN daryaa sabhi 'mast', yaadeN aur baaqi rah gaya ye namak आज आँखों से मेरी फिर बह गया ये नमक हाल दिल का मेरे सारा कह गया ये नमक हुस्न के बिन इश्क की औकात है क्या बता मुस्कुरा के इश्क को फिर कह गया ये नमक तल्ख़ है मेरी ज़बान, मैं जानता हूँ, ज़रा झूठ का छूटा शहद तो रह गया ये नमक था नहीं मंज़ूर मुझ को हर्फ़ तुझ पर कोई और लुटता मैं रहा, सब सह गया ये नमक छू के साहिल, हैं दफ़न अब, मौजें दरया सभी 'मस्त', यादें और बाक़ी रह गया ये नमक Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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18th January 2012, 01:09 PM
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Namak Radeef Kaa IstemaaL Asar Angez Raha .... Umdaa Ghazal Huii ! तल्ख़ है मेरी ज़बान, मैं जानता हूँ, ज़रा झूठ का छूटा शहद तो रह गया ये नमक Iss Sher Liye Khaas Daad Haazir Hai ... Mubaaraqbaad !!!   YuuN Besabab Aansoo Aate NahiN Lag Zaroor Koii Baat Dil Ko Rahii Hai ... Fareb Kaa ChaDhtaa Bazaar Dekh Insaaf Se Bastii Khaalii Ho Rahii Hai ... ---Naresh Mehra---- |
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18th January 2012, 02:05 PM
aaj aaNkhoN se meri phir bah gaya ye namak
haal dil ka mere saara kah gaya ye namak Vikram Ji ……. Aap Ne Boht Munfarid Radeef Chuna Hai Is Ghazal Me……Or Acha Laga Parh Kr…..Acha Matla Hai…. Or Soch Bhi Khubsurat Hai……. Magar Itna Kahun Ga Ke ….Agar Aap Radeef Sirf "NAMAK" Len…. To Parhnay Me Ziada Rawaani Aa Jaye Gi…. Ye Me Ne Mehsoos Kia Hai….. Aap bhi Aik Baar "YE" Nikaal Kr Parh Ke Dekhen….. Aaj Phir Aankhon Se Meri Beh Gaya Namak Haal Dil Ka Mere Sara Keh Gaya Namak husn ke bin ishq ki auqaat kya hai bata muskura ke ishq ko phir kah gaya ye namak Wahhh Is Sher Me Aap Ka Andaz-e-Bayaan Boht Bhaya ……. Us Ke Liye Daaad... Magar Is Sher Se Hatt Ke Aik Baat Kahun Ga…. ISHQ Husn Ko Nahi Dekhta……. Haan ISHQ Bin Husn Ki Auqaat Shayad Kuch Na Rahay………Aap Ne Laila Majnu Ke Baray me Kuch Parha Ho ga…….? Kia Aap Ko Maloom Hai Ke Laila Kaisi Thi….? Is Me Kirdaar Ya Seerat Nahi Dekhi Jati ISHQ Ho Jaye To SURAT Nahi Dekhi Jati Is Sher Ki Abhi Abhi Aamad Hui Hai……… Baton Baton Me Ho Gaya…….. talkh hai meri zabaaN, maiN jaanta huN, zara jhooth ka chhoota shahad to rah gaya ye namak Ye Sher Meri Naqas Samajh Se Baala-Tar Raha Hai……. Meri Mehdood Aql Isay Samajhnay Se Qaasir Rahi….. Agar Ho Sakay To Thori Wazahat Farma Den…….. tha nahiN manzoor mujh ko harf tujh par koi aur lut'ta maiN raha, sab sah gaya ye namak Vikram Ji……..Mujhay Yuun Mehsoos Hota Hai Jaisay Asl Lafz… Haraf Aana…….Hota Hai... Akelay Harf Kehnay Se Maani Wo Nahi Raha Jo Aap Kehna Chah Rahay Hain….Aap Isay Dobara Dekh Len……… chhoo ke saahil, haiN dafan ab, maujeN daryaa sabhi 'mast', yaadeN aur baaqi rah gaya ye namak Wahhhhhhh…….Khubsurat Maqta …….. Khubsurat Andaaaz…… Dheron Daad Is Sher Ke Liye….. Vikram Ji…… Is Ghazal me Bhi Aap Ke Takhayyul Ki Parwaaz Boht Buland Mili…. Magar MuJhy yuun Dikhta Hai Jaisay Aap Is Se Boht Ziaaada Acha Likh Saktay Hain…… Aap Se Sirf Itni Guzaarish Karun Ga … Aap Mujh Se Naraaz Na Hoiye Ga…..Agar Aap Koo Meri Koi Bhi Baat Buri Lagay To Aap Zaruur Bata Dijiye Ga……. Me Bhi Talib-e-Ilm Hun… OrLazim Nahi Ke Meri Hr Baat Hee Theak Ho…. Bs Is Tarha Mujjhay Bhi Kuch Na Kuch Naya Seekhnay Ko Milta Hai…… MUKHLIS: AHMAD ALI SHKIL Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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18th January 2012, 03:17 PM
तल्ख़ है मेरी ज़बान, मैं जानता हूँ, ज़रा
झूठ का छूटा शहद तो रह गया ये नमक waaa......haaaa...........kya baat hai.bahut khoob. bahut acchhee.waaa......haaaaaaaa vikram sahab, ghazal bahut raas aayee mujhe. radeef khaas rahaa.aapko is khoobsurat peshqash par dili daad o mubaraqbaad. |
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aaapka Qalam padhkar Kisi se Churaayi huyii Baaat meri zabaan par aaa Gayiii.. Gaur Pharmaayiyegaa.. "Aaarzunoon Nei, Har Kisi Dil ko Dard Diye Hai, Kitne Ghaayal hai, Kitne Bismil hai, Is khudaayee mein EK tuuu Kyaaa Hai.." |
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19th January 2012, 02:14 PM
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Radhika  Seene Me Zakham Utarey Chale Gaye Jo Humpe Guzari Guzarey Chale Gaye Woh Aayega Ek Din Milne Humse Naam Uska Hi Pukarey Chale Gaye E-mail : radhika.nm2@gmail.com |
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Points mein Baat Karunga.. 1) Mai Thik Tarique Se Samajh nahi Payaa ki Aaap Kehnaa Kyaa Chahte hai.. 2) Mai to Adnaa saa mahefil-E-Awaam hoon, Lekin Bachpan se lekar Aaaj tak Yeh Samajh paya hoon, " When Ever you listen to any 'Shair or Ghazal', One need to just have receiptive Mode" i.e. Sunne Wale koo Kyaa Kahte haaii kii "How do we call recipetive Mode"  as in Bas Sunkar Sweekaaar kar lena Chahiye..3) Vikramji ne koi General Statement nahi paaas kiyaa Hai, balki ek case study bayaan ki hai.. Jahan par Ek Shayar ke saamne koi Situation aaayi to Unhone use kaise React kiyaa.. Hope u understand..  I mean.. Mai aaap sabki Izaat kartaa hoon, Agaar kuch Ghalat bhi nikal gaya ho mujhse to, Bandaa Kaabil-E-Maafi bhi Hai... |
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19th January 2012, 02:48 PM
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Points mein Baat Karunga.. 1) Mai Thik Tarique Se Samajh nahi Payaa ki Aaap Kehnaa Kyaa Chahte hai.. 2) Mai to Adnaa saa mahefil-E-Awaam hoon, Lekin Bachpan se lekar Aaaj tak Yeh Samajh paya hoon, " When Ever you listen to any 'Shair or Ghazal', One need to just have receiptive Mode" i.e. Sunne Wale koo Kyaa Kahte haaii kii "How do we call recipetive Mode" as in Bas Sunkar Sweekaaar kar lena Chahiye..3) Vikramji ne koi General Statement nahi paaas kiyaa Hai, balki ek case study bayaan ki hai.. Jahan par Ek Shayar ke saamne koi Situation aaayi to Unhone use kaise React kiyaa.. Hope u understand..  I mean.. Mai aaap sabki Izaat kartaa hoon, Agaar kuch Ghalat bhi nikal gaya ho mujhse to, Bandaa Kaabil-E-Maafi bhi Hai... |
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19th January 2012, 02:59 PM
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saheb inaayat hai jo is qadar zarra nawaaz hue...aapki daad aur mubaaraqbaad sar aaNkhoN par.... reps ke liye bhi shukriya janaab... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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19th January 2012, 03:52 PM
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radeef meN 'ye' ke babat aapka kahna galat nahi hai, maiN bhi zara pashopash meN tha lekin phir hataaya nahi...darasal hua yuN ke pahle maine is ghazal ke liye bahar chuni thi 2122 2122 2122 212 aur radeef baaNdha tha 'gaya hai ye namak' lekin baad meN mujhe 'hai' atakta hua sa mehsoos hua to ise hata diya...phir kayee baar alag alag tariqe se ise gunguna ke dekha to jis lay meN mujhe ye pasaNd aaya usme 'ye' tha isliye maine ise rahne diya... husn ke bin ishq ki auqaat kya hai bata muskura ke ishq ko phir kah gaya ye namak aapne ishq ke baare meN jo kaha hai vo 101% sahi hai janaab...aur maiN bhi us se muttafiq huN...lekin ye to sirf ek pahlu hi hai sikke ka...agar aap gaur karenge to aap dekhenge ki maine 'muskura kar' ka istemaal kiya hai jo ki husn ke guroor aur gumaaN ki aur ishaara karta hai...aur asal ziNdagi meN bhi aksar aisa hi hota hai ki husn aur jawaani apne hosh kho dete haiN, unhe sab rangeen deekhaayee deta hai...aur sab kuchh qaabil-e-haasil hi dikhta hai...josh hota hai to magroor hona bhi kuchh had tak lazim sa ho jaata hai..aur apne isi guroor meN husn aksar ishq ko samjh hi nahi paata....use lagta hai ki vo hai tabhi to ishq hai...bas husn ke isi guroor ko apne sher meN bataane ki jasaarat ki hai....ishq to kabhi bhi husn ka mohtaaj nahi hota..bas sikke ka ek pahlu hai jo maine kaha hai...aapne jo sher kaha hai vo bilkul sahi hai... Is Me Kirdaar Ya Seerat Nahi Dekhi Jati ISHQ Ho Jaye To SURAT Nahi Dekhi Jati bahut khoob saheb...daad haazir hai is khoobsurat khayal par...qubuul kijiyega... talkh hai meri zabaaN, maiN jaanta huN, zara jhooth ka chhoota shahad to rah gaya ye namak jahaN tak is sher ki baat hai janaab to mujhe lagta hai ki ye bahut seedha aur saaf hai lekin maine to likha hi hai to zahir hai mujhe aisa hi lagega...hahaa... isme ye kahne ki koshish ki hai ki mera bolne ka aNdaaz talkh hai yani kadva hai...aur ye maiN jaanta bhi huN...lekin ye talkh hua kyuN...kyuN ki jhooth bolna chhod diya aur sach ko kabhi bhi chaashni ki zaroorta nahi hoti...vo to ek fact hai aap maane ya na maane...to is liye jhooth ka shahad chhota baqi namak hi rah gaya... aisa nahi hai ki aap agar sach boleN to zaroori hi hai ki aap kadva hi boleN, sach bhi meethe alfaaz meN kaha ja sakta hai...lekin phir se vahi baat kahuNga ki ye bhi sikke ka ek pahlu hai...jise jaisa raas aa jaaye vasia hi sahi hai... aapki harf wali baat mujhe sahi nahi lagi... harf ek arbi lafz hai jise 'harf' ya 'haraf' dono tareeqoN se kaha ja sakta hai... iske alag alag matlab haiN maslan....akshar, talwaar ki dhaar, dosh, kinaara...to mujhe nahi lagta ki ise sirf 'harf aana' ke lihaaz se hi istemaal kiya jaana chaahiye...yahaN maiN galat bhi ho sakta huN to agar aapko yaqeenan pata ho ki ise kaise istemaal kiya jaana chaahiye to zuroor bata dijiyega....mujhe behad khushi hogi.... ab sabse khaas baat....janaab aap muafi maaNgkar sharminda na kijiye...aur hamaari gutgu se is lafz ko nikal hi dijiye to bahut khushi hogi...jab aapki neeyat achhi ho to muafi kis baat ki...aap mujhe kuchh samjhaana hi chaah rahe haiN...balqi mujhe behad khushi hai ki aapne itna waqt diya mere likhe ko...ek guzaarish ke saath aapse ijaazat chaahta huN, aur guzaarish hai ki aap hamaare is silsile ko barqaraar rakhen...kabhi maiN to kabhi aap kuchh na kuchh zuroor seekhenge is guftgu se...mujhe ummeed hai ki maiN apni baat aur apne khayaalaat aap tak pahuNchaane me kaamyaab hua hunga... aapka bahut bahut shukriya... mukhlis, vikram 'mast' Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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20th January 2012, 12:53 PM
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ALLAH Paak Aap Ko Khush Rakhay……… 1- Aap Ne Radeef Ke Baaray Me Jo Kaha,Ke Aap Ko Kafi Dair Parakhnay Ke Baad Yehi Theak Laga To Phir Yehi Theak Hai…Me Ne Bhi Bs Ye Kaha Tha Ke Mujhy "YE" Nikaal Kr Parhna Ziaada Acha Laga…. Aap Ko Ghalat Nahi Kaha Tha…. 2- Ishq Ke Baray Me Jo Soch Kr Aap Ne Sher Kaha Hai, Us Lehaaz Se Ye Bilkul Theek Hai……… 3-talkh hai meri zabaaN, maiN jaanta huN, zara jhooth ka chhoota shahad to rah gaya ye namak Vikram Ji Aap Ne Is Sher Ka Jo Matlab Samjhaya, Us Ke Liye Aap Ka Mashkoor Hun….Or Yaqin Maniye Ke Ab Ye Sher Mujhy Hasil-e-Kalaam Dikhaayi De Raha Hai……. 4- tha nahiN manzoor mujh ko harf tujh par koi aur lut'ta maiN raha, sab sah gaya ye namak Vikram Ji……. HARF" Ke Mukhtalif Maani Hain…. Jaisay… Baat… Sukhan … Kalaam….Nuqs…Aib ….Aitraaz….Nukta-cheeni…Shak….Shuba….Kalaam ki Gunjaaish Waghaira………..Magar Ye Sb Mukhtalif Mawaqon Pr Mukhtalif Tareeqon Se Adaa Kiye Jatay Hain…. Jaisay Likhnay Pe Us Ke Kis Ki Zubaan Pr Hai Jaye Harf Shikwa Karen Abs Hain Jo Loh-e-Qalam Se Hum…. Yahan "HARF" Aitraaz, Nukta-Cheeni Or Aib Waghaira Ke Taur Pr Istemaal Hua Hai…. Isi Tarha… Kaheen Payam-e-Zubani Khaton Se Behtar Hai Ye Harf Kaan Me Qaasid Ke Main Ne Daal Dia... Yahan "HARF" Ke Maani …Kalaam…Baat Or Sukhan Ke Hain…. Isi Tarha Aagay Dekhiye… Hai Harf Kaamiyabi-e-Dushman Me Hamnasheen Mat Keh Darust Weham,Ghalat-kaar Hai Ghalat Yahan "HARF" Shak, Shuba Ke Maani De Raha Hai…..Isi Tarha Ye Sirf Hamari Adaayigi Hai , Jis Ki Bina Pr Alfaaz Ke Mafhoom Badal Jatay Hain….. In Tamam Aitbaar Se Dekha Jaaye To Mujhay Ab Aap KA Ye Sher Bilkul Theak Dikhaayi De Raha Hai…..Jo Baat Me Ne Kahi Thi Wo Kisi Or Mafhoom Me Thi…….. Aakhir Me Aap Ka Shukar-Guzaar Hun Jo Aap Ne Mujhy Boht Kuch Seekhnay Pr Ubhaara….. Or Meri Adnaa Raaye Ko Waqt Dia… INSHALLAH Koshish Ho Gi Ke Ye Silsila Barqarar Rahay……. MUKHLIS: AHMAD ALI SHAKIL Ay Chaara-Saaz Dil Pe M're Daal Ik Nazar Mujhko Bas Aik Jism Ka Aazaar Hee Nahi AHMAD ALI SHAKIL |
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23rd January 2012, 06:22 PM
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is kholoos bhari tareef se aapka manmoon huN... bahut bahut shukriya janaab aapka... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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27th January 2012, 10:24 AM
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bahut bahut shukriya... yuNhi hausalaa afzaayee karte rahiyega... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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27th January 2012, 10:54 AM
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aapne mere khayaalaat ko tawajo di mujhe behad khushi hui... bahut bahut shukriya aapka.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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2nd February 2012, 12:21 PM
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zindagi ji, mujhe yaqeen hai ki sdc se aur is pariwaar ke logoN se aapko bahut kuchh seekhne ko mil raha hoga...aur maiN dil se dua karta huN ki aap jald hi apne khayaaloN ko khoobsurat alfaazoN ka jama pahnaane lageNge... I appreciate all that, that you have mentioned in points above and beyond any doubt a listener can cherish a ghazal while being in receptive mode...but there are many other aspects too...personally I feel that who ever reads you has a right to question if something has gone beyond his understanding, also if the reader is your friend he can suggest you something for your betterment...and on the other hand the writer should make it a point to clear other person's doubt. It is not necessary that the writer and the reader have same mind set...I am saying all this just because you have just begun your journey in this world of adab...Ahmad saheb is a dear friend and what ever he has said is just because of our chemistry and our endless zest to learn... I hope that now you understand what I really meant to say... Thanks a lot... Vikram 'mast' Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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2nd February 2012, 12:28 PM
Hi Vikramji,
Ji Samajh gaya.. Shwweeet and thanks. Ke Sirf Ghaalib ko hai pata, Radeef, Kafiya, Matla, Maktaa....!! Yeh Teer-E-Ishq kyaa 'Zindagi' se Ziyada, Kya Ghaalib ko hai Chubhata....!!!!! |
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2nd February 2012, 05:22 PM
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Ayk bayhad aalaatareen pur lutf ghazal kee inaayat par dili shukriaa! Khaaksaar ki jaanib say daad paysh e nazat hayr qabool farmayayn! Mayn aapko aur Janab Ahmad Shakil saahab ko buhat buhat shokriaa kehna chahoongaa hamaaray ilm mayn izaafa kernay kay liyay! Haq ta'aala aap donao kay ilm mayn aur bhee barkat ataa karay! Duagoh Ahmad |
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3rd February 2012, 10:23 AM
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4th February 2012, 10:03 AM
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Itni sanjii'da baat is khoobsurati se bayaan ki hai ki hum kayal ho gaye... Yun to har sher munazib sa laga lekin ek sher jo dil chuu gaya hai था नहीं मंज़ूर मुझ को हर्फ़ तुझ पर कोई और लुटता मैं रहा, सब सह गया ये नमक isi tarah mehfil ko abaad rakhiYeGaa aapka apnaa Qasid ___________________________________________ नाम-ए-वफ़ा की जफ़ा बताएं क्या है ज़हन में क्या बोल जाएँ रफ़्तार-ए-दिल अब थम सी गयी है 'क़ासिद' पर अब है टिकी निगाहें |
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4th February 2012, 02:23 PM
talkh hai meri zabaaN, maiN jaanta huN, zara
jhooth ka chhoota shahad to rah gaya ye namak Wahhhhhhhh mere bhai kya kamaal ka lafzo ka twist hai hairaan kar diya tumhare is sher ne...... Par tujhe bevafa bhi kehna achcha nahi lagta... Mob.: +971 501297654
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5th February 2012, 04:20 PM
Wah Vikram ji. Apka kalaam bahaut hi asardaar laga. Ek dum nayi aur fresh approach nazar aayee ismein. Ehsaas gehre aur sateek lage. Apko daad aur mubarakbaad.
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9th February 2012, 12:31 PM
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hausala afzaai aur tareef ke liye aapka bahut shukarguzaar huN... bahut bahut shukriya... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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9th February 2012, 12:37 PM
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bahut bahut shukriya janaab... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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13th February 2012, 03:15 PM
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bahut bahut shukriya.... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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13th February 2012, 04:11 PM
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Naulekahe par tere khoon ki boond hai, Motiyo ki jagah par jada kaun hai, Jiski khatir daga chandini se kare, Puch suraj ki woh dilruba kaun hai? |
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15th February 2012, 09:33 AM
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aapki daad aur mubaaraqbaad sar aaNkhoN par saheb... Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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15th February 2012, 09:48 AM
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29th March 2012, 04:43 PM
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Uss Rizk Se Tau Maut Bhali Jis Rizk Se Aatee Ho Tere Parwaaz MeiN Kotaahi.... vikramjethi@gmail.com |
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28th April 2012, 07:32 PM
Vikram Ji,
Apki Ye Rachna Thodi Ajeeb Hai Per Acchi Hai... Ya Yun Keh Lijiye K Mujhe Itna Gyan nahi Hai Shayri ka... Good One... Keep Writing... |
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29th April 2012, 01:08 AM
vikram ji Namaste
aapki yeh gazal muje behad pasand aai aur khas karke aapke aur ahmad ji ki is gazal ko le kar ko charha hui usse yeh gazal saaf samaj me bhi aai aur is charch ki wajah se saare sher behad sundar lage aur bahot kuch sikhne ko bhi milla yunh hi likhte rahiye aapka dost nihar Kitne mare kitne aabhi rahoo.N me hai Kuch aa.Nsoo baki nigahoo.N me hai |
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29th April 2012, 07:04 PM
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kya khoob sher kahe haen ... asardaar ghazal dilee daad .... likhte rahiye .... radhe radhe ............... Aapka Apna Ishk 'इश्क' के बदले इश्क चाहना तिजारत है इज़हार किससे करें महबूब तो दिल में है email: rkm179@gmail.com 
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